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  1. Welp. I apologize for the miscommunication.
  2. When I said I'd quote you on it I meant it. Lol. So there.
  3. "People take all the things they shouldn’t and leave all the things they should take." -@The Wandering Wizard
  4. HOI! I'm not sure what the point of this SU is. But I'm feeling restless.

    Spring fever has finally caught me--or have I caught it? Never mind. It doth not matter.

    I got some decent progress done on Harlow today, mostly editing the prologue and writing a few new paragraphs.

    I'll post the sketch(es) a little later.

    ALSO I GOT A FREE DQ ICE CREAM COUPON FROM THE ORTHODONTIST! AND IT WAS YUMMY (the ice cream, not the coupon).

    If any of you would like to read the updated prologue, honk twice.

     

    JOHNNY'S DISH SOAPS!

    -Kajsa --> out

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    2. The Wandering Wizard

      The Wandering Wizard

      *honks thrice*

      @Kajsa :) aka Classy Kitty

    3. Cinnamon

      Cinnamon

      *two honks*

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      ALSO I GOT A FREE DQ ICE CREAM COUPON FROM THE ORTHODONTIST! AND IT WAS YUMMY (the ice cream, not the coupon).

      Lucky! 

    4. kajsa ㅇㅅㅇ

      kajsa ㅇㅅㅇ

      Okay okay sorry had to eat some dinner and record a few covers just cuz :D I'll post them later in my corner along with the sketches.

      @Wittles of Shinovar @The Wandering Wizard (even though you've already seen most of it) @Cinnamon

      I need feedback! If you've got time, I'd love to get a "report" on anything down to the nittiest grittiest details for improvement. I wrote most of this in a brain fog and then took a nap and haven't reworked much of it yet. Feedback helps me get better, so if you've got the time I'd absolutely love some constructive criticism. 

       

      Prologue


       

      Late summer leaves rustled in emerald-shod trees, a stale wind combing its fingers through tall grasses that would soon dry out. Stray chickens roamed the plains, some chased by feral cats while others quested for food. The twilight burned golden as the sun fled from the battlefield that was the sky, bleeding lava as it disappeared over the Airedge mountains. Soon, a slice of moon stoically stepped up to shine in the sun’s place, watching the stars dance around it in their nightly ritual.

      Below it all, a young girl–barely 13–stared at the ceiling of her small Riesen home, hands fidgeting restlessly with her fluffy dark curls. Mira’s mattress was coarse and itchy, the blankets kicked to the foot of the bed in tangled heaps. Her heartbeat was heavy, her body hot with anxiety, yellow-orange eyes burning like hot coals. 

      It felt like a thousand years had passed since she’d lost control; it was impossible to believe that it had only been mere hours. Images flashed behind her eyes and her body groaned in protest as she sat up against the wall, trying to shake memories of the burning archives from her mind. Thousands of years’ worth of knowledge… gone. It was a crime like none that had ever been committed, even if it had been an accident. What would they do to her? And what were they doing with Arson? They wouldn’t just kill him; she knew that. They weren’t allowed to kill him. …Right?

      She was jolted from her thoughts as the door to her small bedroom slammed against the wall, and a tall, dark-haired woman with intense eyeliner and high cheekbones swept into the room. Her long robes tickled the floor, and the girl couldn’t decide whether the silk was black or purple. 

      “Get up, Mira,” the woman barked, eyes narrowing sternly. Her hand lashed forward and yanked the girl–Mira–up by the arm, her claw-like fingernails digging into Mira’s skin. 

      The girl yelped and tried to plant her feet on the cold stone floor. “Where’s Arson?”

      The woman clenched her jaw and dragged Mira down the hall, refusing to speak.

      “Where are we going?” Mira’s hawk-yellow eyes were wide, flickering from side to side nervously. She recognized the path they began on, but it seemed different now–at night, in the cold. The air was frigid for the summer, but as a chill skittered down Mira’s spine, she realized that maybe it wasn’t cold outside at all. Feverish sweat beaded on the back of her neck. Shivers forced goosebumps to pop up all over her body. Her heart pounded in her ears. Needles of numbness stabbed her fingertips as the woman’s fierce grip began to cut off her circulation.

      Mira examined the woman as they walked. Her eyes were empty and black; cold. Her sleek raven hair reached past her waist, straight as a board but soft as feathers. Her fingernails were long and filed into that of claws, painted the same inky purple of her dress, and the woman’s pale complexion sharply contrasted a poorly concealed tattoo that crept up the side of her neck. A tattoo… on her neck… why was that so familiar? 

      A sudden dagger of realization stabbed Mira’s chest, and she tried to scramble away, but to no avail. “You can’t Strip me!” Mira screamed, her voice high with hysteria. “You can’t make me go!” 

      The clawed woman–a Soulweaver, Mira knew now–snarled and prowled closer, her grip so tight that Mira’s tan arm was going blue, her claws nearly drawing blood. “You will remain silent, Dethridge, unless told otherwise. Do you understand?”

      Mira whimpered.

      “Speak up!”

      Mira nodded vigorously, the motion taking place of the beats her terrorized heart missed.

      “Good. Now shut your insolent mouth and do what you’re told.” The woman whose name Mira was terrified to ask yanked her farther down the gravel path.

      This woman, a Soulweaver–an Elysian Soulweaver, would Strip her, and Mira knew it. She couldn’t run, couldn’t hide. She could flamelash, maybe, but that would be yet another charge against her–or worse, against Arson. Then they wouldn’t just take her ability. They’d take her life, if the Elysian woman didn’t first.

      What would be worse? Death, or a life without purpose? Without a reason to live? Without warmth and comfort–and without fire? Surely death would be a better option. But what of Arson? Oh, what can I do? Please, Gods, if you exist, help me now. Kill me now, and kill Arson too. He won’t mind, not knowing the alternative. Please help me, Gods. We were born the same day; why can’t we die the same too? Save us. Silently, Mira continued her desperate prayer, her plea for death.

       

      That's all I've got so far. Thanks for reading it :D 

  5. I'll be busy until Sunday, but if you guys want to learn the rest of the stuff then I'll squeeze it in asap.
  6. I sketched a thing! I can't post it right now, but it's the first traditional sketch I've done in a while, and I really like how it turned out. Can't wait to share it with you guys!

    I also have a headache but I'm glad I have a free period so I can rest and maybe take a nap :P. I have a history test next period and a state test in Science 7th period, but I'm leaving 30 minutes early to go the orthodontist. Convenient, isn't it? xD I think I should also drink more water.

    Anyway, I'm glad it's finally Wednesday. The week is marching along at a steady pace, though slower than I'd like. But what can you do? I have musical practice again on Friday until six for "Full Disclosure" choreography and--(*jazz hands*) blocking!!! I love that song because I get to be a crazy lady.

    Anyways, Imma take a quick power nap. Love y'alls.

     

    You know dis taco boy's got his free taco--*trips over skateboard, drops taco, and breaks wrist*

     

    Fre Sha Voca DO!

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    2. Edema Rue

      Edema Rue

      Enjoy your nap Kajsa!

    3. Cinnamon

      Cinnamon

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       I have musical practice again on Friday until six for "Full Disclosure" choreography and--(*jazz hands*) blocking!!! I love that song because I get to be a crazy lady

      Wooo! The Addams Family is AWESOME! 

      good luck with life:) and have fun at the orthodontist lol

      FRE SHA VOCA DO

    4. kajsa ㅇㅅㅇ

      kajsa ㅇㅅㅇ

      How did I not see this reply???

      YAY SOMEBODY WHO KNOWS THE MUSICAL IM IN!! I play Alice :D 

  7. Indeed. I could be a witch and none of you would ever know. That's trademark and copyrighted, by the way. HAHAHAHA I don't know if I'd stoop THAT low... Yeah, no, I'd stoop that low if it was the right person. xD I mean I'll take the pudding
  8. This is pretty good so far! Here's what I understand: 14 year old Nelt (love the name by the way, super creative and such a mood) is learning to be a Hunter, and Annete is his teacher. He belongs to the Wolf tribe, who have advanced senses of smell. He enjoys being in the forest that others consider dangerous, but he finds it a good place to rest. He possesses special daggers called Fangs that match exactly, down to the metal they're made of. He and Anette have a familiar relationship and have known each other for about four years. Questions I have that could be answered in the text: -Is he a form of werewolf? -What is a Rune, and how does it relate to their destinies/paths in life? -How old is Annete? Is she just his teacher? A friend? A love interest? I'd like to see their relationship a bit more clearly. -What does the forest look like? What makes it so dangerous? What do the trees look like--bare or not? What's the weather? You could probably hint at a lot of this in a few compound or complex sentences, and I think it would engage the reader a bit more. -What do the Fangs look like? Are they curved? -Nelt thinks about how his dad won't ever see how great of a Hunter he'll become. Did his father pass away? If so, I think that could be a bit clearer. A few other areas for improvement that I noticed mostly had to do with consistency (also redundancy) and punctuation. I noticed that you had a lot of simple sentences that could be swiftly reworked into more complex sentences. That might grasp the reader's attention better than having lots of smaller ones. There were also a few instances of comma and apostrophe misuse, and you used Nelt's and Annete's names a lot when they could have been subbed in for pronouns. I think those are the only grammatical errors I saw. Overall, especially for a first draft, this is very good! I'm really intrigued about this world and excited to know more. I'm already wondering about what adventures Nelt goes on and other characters he'll meet! The only pressing issues are grammatical, as most of my questions can be (and probably are) explained later on in the novel. I hope this feedback helps, and I hope to see more of Nelt and Annete in the future! Awesome work, Lord Gregorio. :high-five:
  9. Lol I agree. I am usually the one trying to prevent people from doing crazy things (as long as they're illogical).
  10. @The Wandering Wizard, @The Halcyon Girl (o7), @The Bookwyrm, @Ranryu, @The Aspiring Archivist, @Wittles of Shinovar, @Shining Silhouette
  11. Can I just say that this is literally us? xD
  12. Happy Tuesday peoples. I wish it was Friday but at least it's not Monday. Or Sunday. Speaking of, it's still kinda weird not going to church even though I'm used to it. What was REALLY weird, though, was not watching General Conference. 

    Currently, I'm running simulations to find a "cure" to malaria for Science class. Of course, it's all just part of the story, so I'm not actually finding a cure. It's interesting.

    During choir the other day, we were taking a quick break, and my director said my friend could play piano, and then she let me have a turn. So I started playing Break From The Line, our show choir opener, and he just kind of came out of his office with this confused/surprised look and when I finished, he came down and was like, "I've decided that you're auditioning for show band too," and I laughed and said, "Okay, sure." Don't know if I actually will. But that's relevant because today we were singing one of our songs (Baba Yetu) and he showed us this difficult arpeggio that's not technically an arpeggio because two of the keys are too far apart. He basically told us, "And now to try the hardest piano part ever written. My hands can't reach that far!" And the same friend I was talking about earlier asked if she could try and her hands were too small, so she was like, "What the heck" and so I tried and it was no problem and they both just looked at me like O.o xD So the point of this is just that I have big hands for my age I guess. My director told me afterwards, "Yeah, you really should be a piano player." That made me happy :D

    Anyways, that's it. How are you people???

    FRE SHA VOCA DO!!!!!!!

  13. How the scudding chasms did I miss this page?! Wittles, you're in trouble for not showing me it sooner. Okay first off I wanted to just point out something epic you did on the one you said the color palette was weird on--YOU USED THE BEST COMPLIMENTARY COLOR BLEND! Red and green are complimentary colors, as are purple and yellow and then blue and orange. Blue and orange is superior so epic job doing that. (*whispers with jazz hands* "COLOR THEORY!!!") Also his whole pose and air and outfit and the SWORD *squeals and dies* IT'S AMAZING!!!! You deserve way more love and validation for these drawings because they're very good. I also really liked the one of--*brain glitch* *struggles*uhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...... what was his name? The hollow knight character. The one that wants me to join his dance. THAT ONE WAS SO COOL AND EPIC AND ALL THE THINGS AND THE COLORS WERE SO CLEAN AND AHHHHHHHHHHHHH it is amazing :star-eyes: x7 I'm now following this thread so I can see more of your epic art Keep drawing!!!!!!!
  14. I just wasted three whole precious hours of my life learning choreography I won't ever be using. That includes overheating to death due to fleecy sweatpants and a room full of 60 stinky, sweaty, hyperventilating, dehydrated bodies. Though it was fun watching my director dance on top of a table :D And now I have "When You're An Addams" stuck in my head!

    Haly and I have reached the momentous milestone of 250 pages of current roleplay (that doesn't count the stuff on the three different dump docs we have). I should send you guys some of the highlights!! Maybe I'll post some later if you guys feel like seeing it. 

    I didn't find my Mira drawi---*realizes I have my phone right beside me*

    *smirks mischeviously*

    *digs in photos and fishes out portrait*

    *emails to myself*

    PERFECTION!!!!

    I'll post both Hadley's and Mira's portraits (yes multiple--they both have two, a before and an after---though technically Hadley has three...) on my creative corner page thingimabobimajigger. 

    I just finished a REALLY good book---actually, I just finished TWO really good books. The first one is "I Have Lived A Thousand Years" by Livia Bitton-Jackson (also known as Elli Friedmann), a nonfiction about the Holocaust. She's a survivor, and the book follows her story. The other one I finished is a fantasy fiction (hehehe) called Red Queen. The world is kinda weird at first, but just think of it like Panem kind of but more... monarchy-y. The story is incredible though and I just got the second book.

    Anyway, I should go actually do homework (definitely not code for RP with Haly). I'll go post the pics in my creative corner now.

    FRE SHA VOCA DO!!!!!

  15. Hey guys! It's been a hot minute.

    Spring break was awesome, and I got a lot of drawing done. My anxiety was almost non-existent over break, and I haven't felt depressed for about two weeks now which is amazing! I really needed this :D

    So two of the drawings I did are of my OCs--one was a Mira redraw, and the other was a Hadley redraw. I know I have the Hadley one, but I'm not sure if I've got the Mira one on my laptop... *cannonballs into the archives to search for the lost artwork*

    I'll post them as soon as I can fish Mira out of my files. 

    What did I miss while I was away? Probably lots of important things. I should really scroll through my notifs :ph34r:

    I guess that's what I'll go do! Thanks for being awesome you guys!

  16. Wait a seconddd!! It was @Shining Silhouette who said ouchipouchie first! I merely stole it
  17. Okay, I know I just posted a status update like two seconds ago, but!!! I've been working a lot on my prologue and wanted to see what y'all thought. I think it's pretty jazzy (*cough cough* @Shining Silhouette *winkwinkwink*) so far. 

    OH! AND LISTEN TO LOFI!!!

     

    Prologue


     

    Late summer leaves rustled in emerald-shod trees, a stale wind combing its fingers through tall grasses that would soon dry out. Stray chickens roamed the plains, some chased by feral cats while others quested for food. The twilight burned golden as the sun fled from the battlefield that was the sky, bleeding lava as it disappeared over the Airedge mountains. Soon, a slice of moon stoically stepped up to shine in the sun’s place, watching the stars dance around it in their nightly ritual.

    Below it all, a young girl–barely 12–stared at the ceiling of her small Riesen home, hands fidgeting restlessly with her fluffy dark ringlets. Mira’s mattress was coarse and itchy, the blankets kicked to the foot of the bed in tangled heaps. Her heartbeat was heavy, her body hot with anxiety and anger, yellow-orange eyes burning like hot coals. 

    It felt like a thousand years had passed since she’d lost control; it was impossible to believe that it had only been mere hours. Images flashed behind her eyes and her body groaned in protest as she sat up against the wall, trying to shake memories of the burning archives from her mind. Millennias worth of knowledge… gone. It was a crime like none that had ever been committed, even if it had been an accident. What would they do to her? And what were they doing with Arson? They wouldn’t just kill him; she knew that. They weren’t allowed to kill him. …Right?

    She was jolted from her thoughts as the door to her small bedroom slammed against the wall, and a tall, dark-haired woman with intense eyeliner and high cheekbones swept into the room. Her long robes tickled the floor, and Mira couldn’t decide whether the silk was black or purple. 

    “Get up,” the woman barked, eyes narrowing sternly. Her hand lashed forward and yanked Mira up by the arm, her claw-like fingernails digging into Mira’s skin. 

    The girl yelped and tried to plant her feet on the cold stone floor. “Where’s Arson?”

    The woman clenched her jaw and dragged Mira down the hall. A sudden dagger of realization stabbed her chest and she tried to scramble away, but to no avail.“You can’t Strip me!” Mira screamed, her voice high with hysteria. “You can’t make me go!” 

    The clawed woman snarled and prowled closer, her grip so tight that Mira’s tan arm was going blue. “You will remain silent, Dethridge, unless told otherwise. Do you understand?”

    She whimpered.

    “Speak up!”

    Mira nodded largely, the motion taking place of the beats her irrepressibly afraid heart missed.

    “Good. Now shut your insolent mouth and do what you’re told.” The woman whose name Mira was terrified to ask yanked her outside and down the gravel path.

    The night air was frigid for the summer. But as a chill skittered down Mira’s spine and shot through her whole body, she realized that maybe it wasn’t cold outside at all. Feverish sweat beaded on the back of her neck. Shivers forced goosebumps to pop up all over her body. She felt her heart pounding in her ears. Her fingers were tingling fiercely, on the verge of numbness.

    As they turned the corner, a sudden wave of nausea punched Mira’s gut when she saw what awaited her.

     

    Okay, I'm leaving now cuz I have to pee. o7

    FRE SHA VOCA DO! Kajsa --> out

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    2. Edema Rue

      Edema Rue

      Ah that was so good!! I want to read more as soon as you finish peeing! :P

    3. Thaidakar the Ghostblood
    4. Wittles

      Wittles

      I love it! I'm really excited to see where it goes!

  18. "Now I remember when you'd call me late at night
    And I gave you my hours and advice
    Just tryna fix you and all your daddy issues
    But now I don't even miss you anymore
    So I, I want all the tears back that I cried
    All the hours spent giving advice on how to write your songs
    All you did was prove me wrong
    When you said you love me
    Well, you must've had your fingers crossed.
     
    "Wish you said you loved me
    When you didn't have your fingers crossed..."
     
    I'm moving on, Tree Rat.
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    2. Wittles

      Wittles

      I'm probably just uncultured, and should probably know what song it is, but what song is that from? 

    3. Cinnamon

      Cinnamon

      Ayyyy my best friend was obsessed with that song for ages

    4. Cinnamon

      Cinnamon

      Fingers Crossed by Lauren Spencer Smith (I think that’s their name)

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      I'm probably just uncultured, and should probably know what song it is, but what song is that from?

  19. Hi people!

    One of my friends is setting up/running an Instagram account for all my art stuff. I'll post the information after it gets all set up :D 

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    2. The Wandering Wizard

      The Wandering Wizard

      But still don't forget to post it on here for those who don't have such social media!

      Like me :P and those who want to see your incredible art

    3. kajsa ㅇㅅㅇ

      kajsa ㅇㅅㅇ

      I won't forget!!!

      :)

    4. The Wandering Wizard
  20. Hehehe so I've been told
  21. Woah, okay you guys. xD Let's wait to settle this in court. *wink wink* I'll make sure to get the rest of the roles done by midnight on Friday.
  22. Haha alright I'll do it as soon as I get time. Which means probably the weekend... gah. I'll try and squeeze it in if I get my homework done fast today/tomorrow.
  23. well technically whenever they're talking in court they're on the witness stand which means it's their testimony so yes Also before we hold the trial I can go over the rest of the roles if you want Actually, testimony is whatever the witness says while being questioned, direct or cross
  24. 700 rep!!!! You guys are the best :D 

    Flowers by Lauren Spencer Smith is really good. There's a swear word in it, but it's still a very good song.

    Prologue is going well :) 

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