Aspiring Writer

I legit get high of it. I can be brain dead, but get me started on my ideas for world-building, and I'll have the energy of a five-year-old after eating all the candy in his house.

*Spits drink* Oh boy, I'm morbidly curious what is in that book, But I just know I'll fall asleep from that one paragraph they showed. Yeesh.

... *Proceeds to laugh myself to death.* You misunderstand, I do more world-building than you realize, (If I start writing the fantasy series I'm planning, you might see what I mean) I just try and not give too much away, as is my instinct. I want them to feel natural. It's not I don't do it, I'm just trying to make sure the reader can't solve everything ten chapters in. legit, talk to my friend. I annoy him would the nitty-gritty world-building stuff.

damnation it, why? Put that is a storming spiler, I still haven' read the damnation book. Now i know Moash is going to do something even i can't say isn't wrong. BBAAAHAH

I think he heard Hoid is in Era four and decided he is the main character. He will be one of them, but there may be others with more attention. For the Odium thing, I believe that's his theory. I do think Odium will die or something similar by the end of SA two.

Hmm, very interesting way to view world-building. i tend to just get hyperactive when doing world building and trying to make everything fit together. Also, I like playing god.

I did not mean to press send. I am dumb. yeah, I'll see about that. It's kind of my challenge with fight scenes, one is making them clear and the other is making them engaging. Hmm. Yay. Also hey, @Snakenaps Wanna let you know I ended up adding an extra scene at the start of chapter four that's basically all Sullin world-building. You ask for world-building, you get world-building.

Good point. It's meant to be an inhaler, I had no idea people would see sucker and think lollipop thing, it's meant to be like a cigarette sort of thing. I made some changes to try and clear that up in earlier chapters, but I'll still try and add some things to remove any doubts. I have such a hard time seeing a lollipop drug. (I don't really do candy.) ... my god, I did. *Facepalm* I did? *Uses control F* I'll be damned. *Applause* Yeah... that's not the worst thing he does. Hmm, true Thanks Yeah, funny story, I ended up reading the submission one more time after I sent it and found the two times I missed a word after got. It was embarrassing, to say the least. My mind and fingers do not work in unison all the time. hmm, yeah, that looks bad. With this one, I didn't know what word to use and jump didn't really get my meaning across. I changed it to launched, which better describes the scene, and removed the italize. Yeah, the surprise would be more how close it got. He doesn't think much of the Royal Guard, so the but wouldn't fit. Thank you, I thought it was cliche, but effective. Ignore that, i forgot to remove it. hmm. Good suggestion. It is mentioned in a previous chapter. It's not completely explained what they can do, but they are mentioned. Ohhh, that's where the confusion was. sorry @Mandamon, I think I know why you made that final point. I was so confused about why you suggested that. I'll take that into account when revising. I'm sometimes distracted or just brain-fried, which is probably why that happens. Thx for pointing them out. Suggestions, please. I'm turning a blank for that. Well, there is actually a reason for that, but do you count Vamprah as a cool name? (I like her name, don't get me wrong, but... there's a reason I'm asking. All the other AoD have had non names except these two.)

I hate 99% of cookies, I am immune.

I always spell it and pronounce it like that. I don't know why.

Hmm, hard question actually. I am born on the 7th, and 7 is supposed to be a lucky number, and it starts with S, the superior letter, but for some reason I really like 5 for reasons I can't explain, so I 7 as my lucky number and 5 as my favorite. As for that, no idea. I have the hots for Fadran's PFP, Rev's PFP has a lot of purple, which makes me like it, Connie's fits so perfecting with her, AonEne actually has a really nice looking one, Like Ark's devil PFP (Which is also purple and probably why I like it), and the fact I helped Koloss on his their Halloween PFP makes me slightly biased.

Actually, I did. I've become better at predicting you.

The gunshot wasn't what spooked them, the bits of flesh flying off were. Plasma weaponry normally cauterizes wounds Nice suggestion. I see my love for Cad bane is showing. Also, funny thing, but one of my readers that I have in a PM actually liked Q and wanted more of him, which is currently confusing me as I'm trying to figure out why he likes him and you're all not very interested.

Alright, poetry is not my strong suit, so forgive me in advance. First one "and will it ever end?" I'd recommend changing this, it feels very abrupt in the wrong way. Overall, nice, I could envision some sailor saying this in front of a crowd like Hoid, and was quite enjoyable. Second one (Never mind, this is not something I feel confident judging. Not my forte.) Third one Very... unique. Certainly like the word play of the blue sections, and the start made me want to know where this was going.

I'd kill Elmo anyways.

unique good or unique bad?

I can't help but see your icon reading this wit that smile.

Because I'm stealing it. Behold my return to video memes.

Yep. Mulan was a garbage fire of the highest degree. How do you screw up a remake that badly? You had a roadmap to success, and you blew it, you rats.

This is very vague. One, I'm pretty sure if you can destroy matter, you can destroy life. Not sure how those are considered different or how they would work differently. Two, what is magic, cuz the lack of rules there concerns me. Remember, the softer your magic system, the more you want to avoid having it solve the plot. Three, what's to stop the gods from giving their powers to everyone? Yes, One of them can remove it, but... actually can the gods die? That's another thing. But back to what I was saying, they could try and kill him and give everyone powers. Yes, some of the gods may not like that, but there is a high likelihood that at least one would want to, like the personification of war.

Are your cookies like Hoid's instant noodles?

*Spits my drink* You watch Shad- oh, never mind. Also yeah, I could see your book becoming a kids show.