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  1. Not currently. The person below me has a song stuck in their head.
  2. Thanks! I do my best with the gifts that I have got. That's awesome!!
  3. *Takes a bow.* Feel free to use that line if you want. I surrender my claim to it.
  4. Your heart overflows with so subtle yet mighty a power that it quakes the very foundations of this fleeting plane?
  5. Poem # 31                                                            

          Premonition?

    From the east unforgiving tempests ascend to tower over and subjugate the fragile world of mortal flesh. Diana in her garb flees from glade to glade upon feet swift and yet in comparison to these winds hardly moving at all. The avenger is torn from the midst of battle and left broken in the depths of the dessicated sea where Chrybdis died. Jove on high calls the might of the heavens to hold fast this storm that no deity commanded. Its shackles shatter, sending forth shrapnel that spills golden blood. From below the dead tremble and cry out as though to mourn over the carnage that is even felt in the realm of those who have been damned. Plutus can hide nowhere when these storms pull his kingdom up from its very roots. Cities of humanity crumble and shout the most awful of dirges. Words that none hear spin about in air choked by the debris and ruination of every realm. Beasts who can run no further let out their final cries as they wait for this unnatural destruction to do its work. Minerva and Janus step into the heart of the splintered world as an honor guard and watch even the sisters that weave, measure, and cut the fate of all succumb to these wrathful voices. Shields form in their hands as war begins. Hypnos leans his hands out into the very soul of the spirit that struck even the most primordial beings. Everything slows for Justita. Her left hand clutches the fasces of her office and smites the destructive winds with blows that send uncontrolled tremors throughout all of reality. In her right a flame that pierces the body, mind, and spirit of time itself ignites the form of a horrific thing that has consumed the forms of both the divine and mundane. How it howls as it burns away in a maelstrom of never ending heat and eternal light. When it calms and the wreckage of so many broken realms settle the fog of divine slumber lifts from Jupiter. He wakes and gazes into the night that has just begun. 



     

     

  6. Well the BeaverLord Ruler is back!!
  7. Poem # 30

                                         Remembrance of  Hues

    Creatures shatter the walls of onyx that surround the halls of mortal thought and the hunting grounds of vengeful deities. Blazing pillars that bend in shadow bear bestial busts upon their crowns. They stare hungrily out upon the realm piercing city walls and invading the calm of the land of Hypnos. Mountains, forests, valleys, and glens branded with power beyond the skill of even the imaginations of terrestrial souls hide hunters that stalk the realm. Taut silence consumes any who would venture into this profanely sacred place. Boar legged men and women whose serpentine eyes and leonine heads carry the tools of rage that pacify worlds. Blades drip with the blood of fallen myriad and drown regions that are now forever fallow. Shattered armies who are prostrated before temples aflame speak no more forbidden blasphemies. Bread resides now in the realm of the divine and no longer in the realm of those who can end. Dawn approaches with its blinding light and instantly dispels the most vile of shrouds. Running shadows race with the winds pushing them across accursed and demanding earth. Primordials arise and are swept aside by the power of the chariot of the rising sun. Flame washes away scars that have penetrated the heart of the world and inflicted the most twisting of agonies. Into the day all step forward to see all that they were always denied. Hues so soft bring forth orchards of cherry and golden apples as the very sun itself. Groves of emerald bursting forth in ways previously regarded as legend fill the mouths of those whose chains glitter in ruins. From their throats erupt songs that drown their jailers as they fade from where they fell. Those monsters that first removed the manacles of night are lost in mystery. Pillars once bent ascend into the aether as eyes that once saw now truly see daylight once more.

  8. @Trutharchivist lays the 13 ikkarim/principles of faith out very well. While the ikkarim exist in different variations the core roots are rather consistent. There is a lot to be said that these 13 are enshrined as the most well known set among Orthodox jews and are a part of the daily liturgy every day of the year. It so deeply ingrained that even children can name many of them from a young age. Their roots can really be broken down to a number of things 1) The infinity/uniqueness of the God. 2) The uniqueness of Moses who is called the father of all prophets. 3)This ties into the next point which is the uniqueness of the Torah. Reward and punishment and the ultimate redemption have all in many ways created a unique sense identity among the jewish people. The 12th of those Ikkarim kept hope alive through the centuries. There are stories of those who sang and danced while singing this ikkur when they were sent to the gas chambers during the Holocaust. It was a hope which never died. If I may expand this a bit. There are two words for faith in Hebrew Emunah and Bitachon. At the hear of emunah stands the same root as the word amen. It means to accept or affirm. The word amen which Jews pronounce at the end of blessings and which Christians know from a hymn/ benedictory context belief as affirmation. Bitachon has a root meaning to rely, lean, or be dependent on. Faith is by no means simple thing to nail down as it were. There are times when there is faith as acceptance or affirmation (based without a need for evidence.) Simple faith as one might call it. Where the faith is an acceptance based only on the affirmation itself. Then there is faith and belief as something which seeks one upon which one can lean. It is not simply acceptance it is a faith that views the one who is doing the support as one upon whom a person can lean. There are different levels of faith all of which are completely valid. In the same way there are different types of people. Some are on the level that they don't lean for support. Yet it is still a legitimate level to do so.
  9. My writing, my irl friends, and all of you awesome people!!
  10. Hello all! Happy mental health awareness month! As some of you know I'm Nathrangking or Nath as many of you have come to know me. I think that the most important thing for me as far as mental health is concerned is to admit that I'm not always fine. To this point I have not shared this with anyone, but I have in the past and even still struggled/struggle with episodes of depression. Thankfully, I have managed it, but at times they really do fill me with darkness. This was not helped in the past year by events that multiplied the darkness. I never acted on my pain, but I have suffered in silence. If not for the support of the shard and a few real world friends who likely suspect that my stoic attitude is a facade I would be so much worse than than I am now. There are too many of you to thank, but let me just say thank you to every friend I have made over the years thank you. You are all so awesome and helped me so much in simply dealing with my burdens. I could never repay you properly for all that you have done. As Hoid said I will be warm again. We all will be no matter what we go through. It is sometimes so hard to imagine and the isolation is so palpable, but it will happen. We must only take the next step at a time and look toward the horizon until the warmer day arrives.
  11. Nicely done Connie!! I would say tighten the images a bit more. For example where you write "And seems to glow, so he be ne’er forgot." And seems to burn, so he be ne’er forgot. Something like that might come off sharper. A burning visage as opposed to simply glowing. All in all well written!
  12. It accomplished its goal then.
  13. A likely story. Is that so?
  14. The images hold my attention. They are nice and sharp. Your couplet are a nice touch. There is a sharp contrast in image at the end of the first couplet. The image is much vaguer than the rest of the poem and I wonder about how it matches the poem's internal logic. If you can find a way to perhaps align the logic a bit more then the poem may well be flawless! It is well written. Let's start with the sonnet. It has an old world pre-modern feel to it. I like that! Some of the images are so vivid while others are simply not as effective. If you keep pounding away with the images then the journey that you are attempting to take us on will be much more interesting. Another thing which takes away from the power of the poem is the repeated use of a place. Take us there Queenie! We want to experience this place. However you have to let us in first. It's an interesting read for sure. There is however room to create an ever more vivid trip. The dinosaur poem is cute. It does not really grab my attention. I'll admit that I kind of rushed through it because there were no stakes. I'm not driven to feel anything by it. While the cuteness factor is something, but I was not sure what the poem was trying to accomplish. If you can give us more clarity then the poem will surely grab me more than it does currently. The last one is haunting. It touches me deeply. The melancholy and doubt is palpable throughout. There is a longing so mighty that reaches for my spirit as though to steal it. It's neither too long or repetitive though the last three lines were distracting and broke the magic. These images were very realistic. It was well done! Well on the bright side self awareness is good. On the other hand there were few images here and it feels forced in places. Let the emotions spill onto the page conjure images and show me weakness and strength. Reveal to me your longing and lack of description. That will bring these words to life. Otherwise what we have is a bit flat and 2 dimensional.
  15. This is not the sort of thing that I normally do, but I was inspired by @Silva to step outside my comfort zone this year. I owe him thanks for inspiring me and providing much food for thought.

    Today is Yom Hashoah or as it is called in English Israel's day of remembrance for the Holocaust. The Nazis YS"Z did many horrific things. One of these was stripping people of their names and attempting to reduce them to something so base as to be unrecognizable. They wanted them to lose something, but what was it that they wanted to achieve? 

     What are names? Some might view names as identity. This is who I am boiled down to a couple of syllables or words. Some might say a name is power. You can classify the world by way of this power. Yet others may claim a name is a burden as there tends to be a lot of baggage that comes with names. They can tell the history of a person and reveal so many hidden aspects. Perhaps then we should view names as a testament of history both personal and familial.

    However, I would like to propose something else entirely. I preface by saying this is no place to be judging or analyzing the truth behind religious customs. In Judaism there are many fascinating customs surrounding names. I would like to highlight two. Among the Jews who descend from many parts of Europe there is a custom that one of the ways that babies are named is to choose a name or a part of one that comes from a family member who had passed away. This is a form of memory that preserves the memory of those who are no longer with us and keeps their legacies alive long after they have gone. Is a name then tied to memory as well? A second is a wider custom among most religious Jews. When people fall ill or suffer some other terrible tragedy a name is added to them such as Chaim meaning life for a male or Chaya which is a derivative of Chaim for a female. There is the belief that a name impacts your reality. It defines who you are in a very real way. It might be said that your name could represent a certain reality or even life itself.

    It might be safe to say that names are complex and not to be taken lightly. If it is any of these things then the Nazis sought to take identity, power, history, memory, and life itself from millions of helpless victims. We too often lose sight of the significance and power of having a name. Maybe every now and then we can take a moment and reflect on how lucky we are and remember those who will not be. 

    At this moment I must again give credit to @Silva for informing me of that which I did not know. I now take from his post and defer to his powerful words. "Some time ago, a teacher introduced me a website called Illuminate (https://www.illuminatethepast.org/). Essentially, each Yom Hashoah, they have people around the world light virtual candles in honor of someone who died in the Holocaust. The website provides a name and a little about the person when possible. It doesn't capture all the nuances of a name, all the slight implications and meanings so innate to the person and those who lived around them. How can it? But it's something, a start, and that's worth something.
     

    If you feel comfortable doing so, take a minute, light a candle, remember a name for those who cannot. As the days go by and you hear of recent events, please pause for a moment and recognize the fortune of your own world and immediate surroundings; they might not be ideal, but they could be much, much worse. Recognize the power of the names in your life and never think it your right to deprive another person of their own. As many a fictional character has said, names have power; don't take it for granted."

    To bear a name is to bear something so powerfully precious. Let us never take that for granted and forget.

    1. Ixthos

      Ixthos

      I may be a day late, but thank you for this. I never knew about that website before, but thank you for spreading the word about it - this is a site to remember. Let us all honour the forgotten dead, and know that the God Who Sees will never forget them - HaShem, the Name will never forget their names.

  16. I see your sonnet and until I have time to read all of the poems thoroughly here is a string of three. enl 267 sonnets.pdf
  17. Amateur Fox? Really? As a mentor recently told me there is no such thing. Even Emily Dickinson could be considered amateur depending on the bar that one uses. I started with Haiku here as an example to start working with, but it does not have to be one. Between us I much prefer experimental or freestyle to Haiku. There is a subtlety to the start and a building anticipation which then breaks loose. I like that! The color and sound are grabbing! I especially like how the noise builds and then our expectations are broken. Well done Fox! I'm not particularly a fan of rhymes. The end rhymes work though in line three it feels a bit forced. The use of alliteration was nice, but I wonder how much more effective it might be if the use through the four lines were consistent. I'm curious about the first line how does the allure and awaiting fit with what you presented next? Overall it was an interesting and attention grabbing piece!
  18. He claimed to be the son of Amun. He fused Amun with Zeus thus keeping the greek flavor. Episode 5 was so dark and yet so satisfying.
  19. I approve. What it lacks in imagery it makes up for in pathos. Tip #4 Form can impact the emotions that the poem conveys.
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