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  1. As this is not a class on the history of poetry forms or art appreciation I will not rant and rave on that front. Well done on the poem!! I put out three of these a week at a minimum so I can appreciate the skill that it takes to create one. Now on to my ramblings. There is something hopeful and invigorating about the images. The glowing lilies are a nice touch! What is it called? A name helps set expectations and balances the poem. It might also add clarity to that final line about faces being brightened. As a mentor once said there is something so cleansing about snow. You can feel nature taking its toll on the world. The images are solid! That said the first two lines seem to advance time faster than the last. Your last line delivers the emotional weight of the Haiku. Consider how events are playing out and see if the images work in the grand scheme of the punchline as it were. The premise is interesting. It's rather curious in its description and end goal. There is something curious about it that's hard to pin down. Though it could be tied together a little more tightly. The middle line is key to the poem and should be the pivot point of the poem. Therefore getting it to match with the rest is going effect how much of an impact the poem has. All in all well done! Tip #3 Lose yourself in the art it will help the words flow. Listen to music, sit in nature, put on noise canceling headphones etc... Challenge me and critique my work. Pick one element each that I should incorporate into a poem and I'll choose the poem type. I'll create it and then post it for your review.
  2. @DramaQueen What is your favorite musical role? Your greatest creative inspiration? Favorite flavor of ice cream and why?
  3. Yup, I'm up to date. Episode 1 was a bit slow, but it really ramps up in intensity!!
  4. *Hums to Thaidakar* The person below me is a son of honor.
  5. At this moment I feel the need to quickly rant. I feel like such a hack. I write and no matter what it is the most common response is that its too much and over the top. Criticism is not my issue. I know it's necessary, but I can't be something that I'm not. My voice and style are my own and yet it seems as though the world would have me toss it away. If I can't write my way then why don't I quit? I could stop writing and then no one would have to deal with my over the top ways. This always bothered me and it has only gotten worse in the past months. If not for a few who actually seem to like my work I might have hung up my pen. That my writing idol likes my work is just enough to keep me going. 

    Sorry for my rant. Carry on.

    1. Going_North_cal

      Going_North_cal

      *uses index finger to push glasses up*

      *cracks knuckles*

      alrighty.

      Nath, who's dumb mfing butt is telling you this, eh?

      who

      no one deserves criticism for their style and writing, unless they specifically ask for constructive criticism, and want to fix their writing.

      But if they are just blatantly criticising you're writing, then they do not deserve to be viewing it.

      You're style, although I don't think I've seen much of it (i would like to though, please direct me to it) is most certainly amazing, if it's anything like the way you organize you're speaking.

      You keep writing, and block the haters. They don't deserve you, or your writing.

    2. Szeth's Facepalm

      Szeth's Facepalm

      ^^^ all of the above, and: Everyone has a different writing style. If we all wrote the same way, reading would just be boring. Some people may not appreciate your style (although i think it's very elegant and beautiful) and that's their opinion, but they have no right to bring you down like that. Don't write for others, write for yourself! It's your writing, and it's goal should be to make you happy.

      And, i'm not necessarily saying they are, but what of they're right? What if your writing is over the top and dramatic? AWESOME. That's the way you write. Life would be boring if things weren't dramatic and over the top sometimes, and honestly that's some of my favorite kind of writing to read.

      You and your writing are amazing. Don't let people who can't see that bring you down.

  6. Here's to hoping that this thread picks up traction. @DramaQueen @Elf @Condensation this might be your speed. Tip #2 There is no wrong type of poetry. Don't let people fool you into thinking that you need to write sonnets like Shakespeare poems are informed by form, but that form is totally up to you. If anyone is interested here is a challenge Summer Vibrant lilies grow. A warm stillness hug tightly. Let's take a swim. This is one of my early haiku take a line and build your own haiku around it. Share it and we can discuss it.
  7. Wise advice indeed!!Perhaps this thread will attract some sharders and help them do just that. 11? Where did 11 come from? Also that's kind of why this exists to begin with.
  8. I agree with you there, but that first step can sometimes be daunting for those who want to write.
  9. There may already be a poetry corner, but I'm going for something different here @Channelknight Fadran has his writing tips so I decided to take a page out of his book so to speak. People have asked me about writing poetry in the past so here is where I make good on that. I can provide tip, offer challenges and prompts be challenged and have discussions, improve people's skills or just have a fun time! Tip #1 Let your passion be your muse.
  10. Finale Reality stirs. Songs fill the world with much light. The last summer blooms.
  11. The poetry is flowing here is three more for any interested parties.

    A song then sung

    Dread becomes pure joy.

    Singing by sapphire waters.

    Majestic marching.

     

    Enough?

    Feasts come from above. 

    There is no rest to follow.

    Most joyful feasting.

     

    Enough

    Resting most sublime.

    The greatest joy is absent.

    Still satisfaction.

  12. #29                                                          

                                                                  Truthful?

    Surging waters sing songs that rise and fall with a rhythm that even nature struggles to replicate without mocking this tune. Up above tears spill from the eyes of the divine as they are stricken by chords more sublime than anything else in the cosmos. Silk and velvet purer than anything that even gods can weave enshroud all worlds in a cloak more sinuous than all of the rivers that have ever existed. Emotions so inflammatory and yet peaceful fuse with the living soul of the ever running tributary of time itself. Everything is overcome by feelings that rise no matter how strongly they are pushed down. Birds weep as they fly high above the mortals that are bound to the lower realms. Even the greatest of beasts bawls in the most uncontrollable of ways and shamefully drowns the ground. Cities hum not dirges, but something so much mightier than even the screaming of the most feared warrior dying upon the field of battle. It rends the heart and stops the breathing of monsters that charge from the deep. Note after note inspires visions beyond any banal words. Describing the waves as they crash against the rocks of thought even as in the same instant it laps against the shore defies the power of the poet. His ink is formless as primordials sit in shadows too overcome to rule any longer. Where do these unnatural storms ascend to this place from? What source ruins cities whose foundations were laid in weathered steel by beings lost to myths long lost? Instead of growing weaker it swells with every passing moment becoming something so very alive. Forms immortal in every aspect sweeten the world more than even the heart of the most perfect honeycomb. No perfumer, artist, baker, vintner, or musician can reach so deeply and overwhelm all senses in a single supreme moment of clarity that lasts endless lifetimes even while it fades to silence.

  13. A nice thick split pea soup is my favorite hands down. Favorite is a rough thing to determine as I have not had many dealings with the mods. I guess I need to go with ENE. Might be Shai because art. Romance. I'm a sucker for a romance. Something quick and catchy. Apparently statistically. Power. We can DM more on this, but as my first piece of advice write about what compels you. Find your muse and allow it to fuel you.
  14. This is Nath your resident Poet here. It's been a long time since I made a AMA. My posts tend to vanish fairly quickly. Let's see how long this one lasts. Ask me your questions!
  15. #28                                                         

    Lost and Found

    Dancing spirits spin in the silver beams woven of cool flame that descend upon the mortal realm and bathe it in fire. Cities filled with carvers that take the ribs of the realm and sculpt them into temples to boastful deities face the oceans which approach alone. Forests blessed by neutral rulers fade beneath unforgiving ice. Pines create walls of frozen and jagged sand that rips across the surface of the land. None rise up with weapons or shield in hand when the natural world flees until it can go no further. Into the abyss they leap as citadel walls begin to buckle and break beneath the maw of an implacably hungry beast. The stars cry out when they are torn from on high and cast into the numbing destruction below. Bones creak while the most frigid monsters stalk the innocent where they sleep. Rooms secured behind locks of iron are havens for, but moments before nightmarish things claim their meals. Torches cast mocking shadows that only grow in their power and reach. On high once complacent gods see their slumbers shattered into an endless sea of prismatic shards. They rain down storms and even step out into the mortal plane, but they are pushed back by this power that even they cannot name. Armor splinters and seeds the ground with magic that calls woodlands into being. Spells flash across the night devastating the landscape and opening up a portal into a hellscape beyond imagining. From the depths a ringing rallying call comes forth. Weapons that burn with a silent subtle warmth lash out and set tbe land free from its chilly bondage. That which has no name flees into the darkness where it thinks that the light does not go. This day fire and ice meet in a clash that is born of siblings and old friends reuniting at long last. These spin and dance in harmony while those who have seen begin to reweave reality and carve anew.

  16. Ended this war is!! Bone Loom Swirling cotton falls. Enveloping softness glows. Warm hilltop garments.
  17. Yes. The person below me knows how to do textual close reads.
  18. We'll see. Listen Drifting in warm silk. Pattering ripples consume, Every sylvan sound.
  19. Funny you should mention poetry.... Natural Sovereignty Proud maples stand tall. Scents untainted by mortals, Float. Nature's realm.
  20. Not even sure what to say about that. Nature’s Veil Drifting avian tune. Path of verdant emerald. Wooded hideaway.
  21. Season of Confusion Cloak of silky light. Floating warmth wends with much grace. Summer day in Fall.
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