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Abercrombie?!

Or paper-wights? Like the ones in Alcatraz 1.

But shards of a new kind of shattering, since the intents don't seem to fit with the present ones. Likely Illuvatar-self-induced. But guess what? There are fourteen known Valar + Melkor. Not that much of a stretch to assume a sixteenth somewhere. Probably some non-particaipation-oath guy. Likely you'll find traces of him or her all over the pages.

I am still convincecd that Tom Bombadil from LOTR ist Hoid after he decided to settle down. Adonalsium is Illuvatar, and Middle-Earth is some kind of Yolen restored.

Thorg. But let's make it only half of a point,since I had to look it up. Well. Had I guessed anything else I would make the description about the Dresden Files, since I am reading them currently. So... let's say this: Two guys involuntarily entangled in something they dislike end up saving one large-scale organisation, bringing down another and watching the internal destruction of a third - the third, while trying to shift the balance in a fourth.

The Dresden Files?

It's symmetrical regarding one dimension. But as I said, a gun with two stocks or two grips would be even more symmetrical.

I am not sure how this can fit, but the only thing I can think of is The Secrets of the Immortal Nicholas Flamel?

Rock's full name is Numuhukumakiaki'aiulunamor, you airsick Lowlander

That is one prettty good approach. I think I'll use it more often to prologues.

Somehow I doubt that "ironically" fridging anybody if the lead is a woman be the fridged male or female (or other) is better than fridging the wife of the male lead character. You're still killing somebody without a real point, just to create sympathy for the lead.

Sorry, but I honestly think that the prologue you submitted last month was better. In some points this here is better - there is more consistency, it seems much more real. The Army seems more competent, even if I still don't see how they managed to let an enemy army slide in the center of the city. On the other hand, not knowing what was happening in the first prologue I would have no Idea what is going on here. When you name angels angels, we have the Idea of Michael as the Frontline Commander Of Heaven's Armies With A Very Big And Very Flaming Sword. Marcus is an empty page to me. I have not the slightest Idea of his personality, be it right or wrong. Same goes for almost everybody else. Octavian (some sort of God's analogue? Also, is it of any significance that Octavian means "the eight"?) , Cronus and so on... They left me cold. I had no thought like "Whoa! betrayal!" or "It's Octravian himself fighting!". The only thing that stirred me is that Octavian is wingless. Probably that would make great as a flashback interlude, while in the prologue we see what happened before the assault. Like, Athena, drinking wine (or Nektar) somewhere, say with Cronus or one of his associates, who tried to seduce her into darkness in a non-obvious way; also making the angelic or semi-angelic nature of them clear. Or - I liked the first sentence of the former prologue, about lucifers heels making sounds on the bridge through the Void. I don't know, I don't have any real feelings about this prologue.

When you actually taught yourself raising an eyebrow and started to snort much more often because people in Sanderson books do that all the time.

Misunderstood you, sorry.

Sorry, but I meant not normal, but Divine/Returned Breath.

Inclinded to disagree: Divine-Breath-Awakening also requires a death of a certain individual to grant abilities to another.

Great sword series by Williams?

I would use only relatively small gums, anything else can be used for containing relatively small spikes.

I mean not an external sickness like the taint, but an internal problem: let's say (to stay in wot) we have some kind of an immunity reaction to the taint, but which does not work as intended (which is more or less the definition of allergic reactions). The effect is that magic, to protect you from the taint for example builfs some kind of a shield, which on one hand slightly helps you to fight the taint, on the other hand completely prevents you from using... I don't know, water magic, for example, and also gives you a permanent headache. It's usually not deadly, but very very annoying. Another example, magical cancer: in some forms of fantasy mages grow more powerful over time. Maybe this process can grow out of control: the theoretical power grows, even faster than usual, while the actually usable power declines, since more and more power is swallowed by the "cancer". To use magic starts to hurt, parts of the magic die away, which leads to even more problems and in the end it ends lethal if no countermeasures were taken. As I said, the concept is not very developed, this are two brainstormed examples And, an Infection is also one of countless possibilities, of which I did not think at the moment.

Something from warhammer 40000?

The only thing I really could help with is music - I used to compose for fun a couple of years ago and I found a program with which I could midis sound much better. Could upload some examples. Also I have or at least had score perfect, which is more or less Sibelius Not that much on the front of speach if you don't want a person which speaks with a heavy German and a light Russian accent at the same time.

I had an idea some time ago. I was thinking about the idea of Ashyn (The silence divine), where sickness grants magic. Than I thought about one alteration of that thought: What if magic itself will get sick? Almost everything about humans can get sick in a lot of different ways, it can get an allergy, cancer, it can break, be amputated, the nerves leading there can have strange signals and much more. What if the same would apply to magic? Let's say a basic "standard fantasy" hero like Rand from WoT would get an "allergy" in the magical "organ" that is responsible for casting fire. What would happen? In my limited medical knowledge it would mean the poor guy would spreading fire subconciously and against his will, making him dangerous to all people around. The Idea is not very well thought trough, so I give it to the 17th shard for brainstorming, adapting and using at will.

Granted. Guess where you get it. By the way, nobody will give you a lerasium bead afterwards. I wish my friend won't be sick anymore.

Do you use something like SynthFont to give the MIDIs "real" sound?