The Wind's Pleasure (Piano Solo) - Work In Progress

[Spockledorf he/him]

Hello! 

This is a Cosmere inspired work--a draft. And I'm looking for any feedback, tips or suggestions.

This piece tells the story of the ship "the winds pleasure", from "Words of Radiance". When you hear it, what do you see?

Thank you for listening and enjoy!

 

~ Spock

https://drive.google.com/open?id=1dZsaJgwtYWzDKvrm4O4hvl9HCMmQDWrr

or

The Wind's Pleasure (draft 1).wav

Edited March 20, 2020 by Spock

[NameIess]

This is AWESOME! Did you play it yourself? It makes me feel adventurous, I imagine a lighthearted ocean journey.

[Experience he/him]

I really like it! Do you have the sheet music for it?

[Spockledorf he/him]

@Nameless To me, it feels almost like a 'pirate' song--and I tried to make the music mimic waves! (you can see them if you try hard enough). And yes, I played it.  Thank you!

@EXPERIENCE This is still in my "rough draft" stage, so sorry--no music yet. But I'll try and write it down soon. I usually write it into Musescore (a sheet music program where you can make a share scores) while playing small sections on a piano, but I probably won't get that done until I have access to a piano again (sooner than later, hopefully). 

[Experience he/him]

So I really like the theme. A couple things I have to say.

-It seems a little repetitive

-I think that the start and end should be the same, but maybe add a little more crazyness in the middle for the high storm.(That is if you want that). I think that would make the song even better.

 

[King Aragorn of Gondor]

This is great!  I really like the flow of it, I took piano lessons for a few years, but could never write/play that.  Great job! @Spock

[Emily she/her]

Wow!!! That’s really good. I especially love the dotted rhythms: as you mentioned, it’s almost a pirate song. 

[Mat he/him]

I really enjoyed this, I have played piano for half my life (I'm 14 years old) and have attempted to write a few songs before, with minimal success. I can see the theme you went for well. You should go ahead and post the sheet music when it's done, I would definitely try it out.

[NJL he/him]

I see waves on a flowing (but not heavy) sea. The music takes me away from the green and lovely shore out to sea and into a deeper blue water. The swells increase in size and frequency, the light plays across the water as it reflects off the spray from the ship's bow. The ship handles the heavy sea well through the lower tone in the middle of the song, and as the voyage concludes with a lighter tone, I feel that more story awaits. The music is very nice. Light and cheery at the start, and while the lower octave work is nice, I would suggest that you explore some variance on the darker themes hinted at. The return to the earliest theme is a welcome and beautiful transition. All in all, I very much enjoyed it. As a rough draft, you should be proud. I hope you continue it.

[Truthwatch3r she/her]

Wow, I really like this! Great job!

Maybe this is a matter of personal preference, but I would probably add more support from the hand not playing the melody- more chording or a harmony line or something.

I'll second the request for sheet music when you finish it :-)

[BringerOfLight]

Wow, it's beautiful. I know everyone has a full plate, but have you thought of writing accompaniment to Hoid's storytelling? For instance, a flute piece for when he tells Kaladin about the Wandersail?

[Trentolio he/him]

Good to see more TSA inspired music! Super cool, very sailory. Post the music when you get it done up.

[GoWibble he/him]

This is amazing! Very nice! 

Keep at it so that I can get sheet music and a complete version!

 

[Cynicalwindmill]

I haven’t read Words of Radiance yet and I don’t know whether that makes my feedback more or less helpful, but somehow this song made me think of a flashback sequence? Like it starts out with someone (Tozbek?) in old age, looking at their ship wistfully and thinking about younger days when they went on adventures at sea. Then in the middle it flashes back to that youth, showing all the adventures and thrills they had. Then at the end it goes back to the present, where the person is now too old to go on adventures like that anymore, and they’re slightly sad but ultimately at peace with it.

I don’t know how much that actually matches with what’s in the book or what you were going for, but this was really beautiful! I’d definitely also be interested in sheet music.

[Death spren]

Come one man!

Thats to good to be heard by dark eyes like my self!

Though keep on working on it (;

[Augustine]

Beautiful.  Thank you for sharing it with us. 

[FriarFritz]

I like it. The theme is catchy, and has a nautical feel without just sounding like a rip-off of Pirates of the Caribbean.

Do you write a lot of music?

[Spockledorf he/him]

Hello everyone! Thank you for all the amazing feedback!  I haven't been to the shard in far too long a time...

Update for sheet music @FriarFritz @Cynicalwindmill @GoWibble @Trentolio @Truthwatch3r @Matrim's Dice @Experience, I typically start on it once I am finished, but it seems that many are interested in having it as soon as possible  so my goal is to post whatever I have for "The Wind's Pleasure" by this Saturday. (Meaning, I'm saying this so I get it done, so feel free to message me and hound me to get it done )  

@BringerOfLight yes, I've considered writing for Hoid's stories. What holds me back is that I don't want to create a piece that wouldn't match nor live up to the stories, I feel I'm not quite ready for that... As for the different instruments, I can play the piano but nothing else really. Though I currently have an electric keyboard, and I could make it a flute, I guess...  

@FriarFritz I written a lot of little things; a pattern here, a pattern there... (ignore the accidental pun) I post some of my work to the 17th shard, but not all of it  You can find me at @spockledorf.piano on Instagram

Edited July 22, 2020 by Spock

[Spockledorf he/him]

I've FINALLY started a musescore file @FriarFritz @Cynicalwindmill @GoWibble @Trentolio @Truthwatch3r @Matrim's Dice @Experience, here is the beginning. (Yay! :D)

The .mscz file is here if you're interested:The_Wind's_Pleasure.mscz

Edited July 28, 2020 by Spock

[Spockledorf he/him]

(I don't know why I made the rhythms so odd, it made it difficult to put it into a score... oh well)

[Channelknight Fadran]

13 hours ago, Spock said:

(I don't know why I made the rhythms so odd, it made it difficult to put it into a score... oh well)

(It's an old technique that doesn't have a name as far as I know. It's when you play your melody off-beat, which makes it catchy. Dunno how it works; they do it a lot in video game music)

[GoWibble he/him]

(you guys are talking in parentheses. weird.)

[Spockledorf he/him]

2 hours ago, GoWibble said:

(you guys are talking in parentheses. weird.)

(I know, right?)

[Mist she/her]

On 7/28/2020 at 9:35 AM, Channelknight Fadran said:

(It's an old technique that doesn't have a name as far as I know. It's when you play your melody off-beat, which makes it catchy. Dunno how it works; they do it a lot in video game music)

Syncopation? 

[Honorless he/him]

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