Elandera

Oh, I misunderstood you the first time. I thought you were still referencing Araris poisoning people last night. Could you elaborate a bit more? I have found PMs tend to be really suspicious because both parties can be hesitant to reveal the wrong kind of information for fear of the other person being elim.

It takes a day to take effect. So if someone was poisoned, they'd die tomorrow night. It's also possible, if they didn't pay attention to action order, they were attempting to keep Araris from being able to poison an inactive. It's possible then that they have an inactive/less active member.

Oh, I hadn't thought about that. It's also possible they were luring the vote away from Ornstein (the one Rath voted on intitially), if they weren't around in those last few hours (less likely). But good point. I agree, though, I'll probably still vote on Walin unless someone becomes more obvious.

Curious. Very curious. Someone wants Walin to live. It could be one of two things: - He's elim and the Hand of Sauron was protecting him.. - Or the Hand of Sauron was trying to make him look bad by protecting him. I find that second one less likely, simply because it would be easier to just let him die now than to set him up to die later. The other thing I take from that is Walin either has an important role or possibly item the elims don't want to lose. I also will take a closer look at Araris, since he seemed pretty keen D1 to protect Walin. I'll look into if there were any others, too.

I'm curious about the Walin thing. Sorry this is a little later of a vote than I had hoped. I got busy getting ready for work. EDIT: Oh, I have longer in the cycle than I thought. I was concerned I wouldn't have time to properly explain my vote and get the vote down before the cycle ended. I have time though, so here's my reasoning. I'm curious as to why there was an apparent last-minute effort to save both Walin and Xino. Is it possible they are both on a team? I understand saving Xino a bit more, because he had posted. But why the sudden votes to save Walin, who had been inactive that whole turn? I'd like to learn his alignment, and maybe learn about those who came to his defense.

Four hours to go, and we're tied at ones on votes. I'm not really keen on any of these lynches. My vote on Ornstein was mostly an effort to get them to show up. If they don't, however, they'll die to inactivity eventually, so I don't really want to waste a lynch on that. The same goes for Mafia, and potentially Bort if they don't start doing more. I don't really want to vote on Alvron, either, because as nonsensical as Zunn the Mad is, it's at least some level of activity (and entertainment ). And obviously, I don't want to vote on myself. So the vote count now stands: Mafia (1) - Rathmaskal Bort (1) - CadCom Elandera (1) - Dalinar Alvron (1) - Green Rover Anyone else have some options or suspicions?

I doubt an elim would make that kind of a slip this early (though it is possible). However, I phrased it that way because I've seen too many people get voted on/lynched because they used "we" and "us" while talking about village, because to some, it sounds too much like elim subtly trying to endear themselves to village. Part of why I said it in the first place was to remind Gondor they might want to be careful who they kill if they don't want to achieve Mordor's win-con for them. Since then, I've realized my mistake in role abilities. For some reason I thought Gondor had the ability to kill (I think I got that from something said in D1) and Mordor could only poison. Reviewing the roles, I now see it's the Assassin of Mordor who kills, and the Hand of Sauron that poisons.

Ah, I just realized CadCom posted. Have fun at Disneyland @Ornstein has yet to post, so Ornstein.

While I find Araris' vote switch slightly contradictory and odd, it's also pretty well an Araris move, no matter what team he's on. I'm not sure I'm willing to move forward with a lynch on them just yet. Also, a weird side note, every time I read the title of this thread, Death of a Bachelor pops into my head...

Six posts from four people (now seven posts) in nearly 24 hours. I hope things pick up eventually, because it's hard to get reads on people if now one talks. I'll throw a poke vote down on @Cadmium Compounder, CadCom. Want to join the party? --RP-- Elandera walked near the front of the company again, unnerved by the quiet, disturbed by the death from that morning. Her Prince had died. She hadn't known him well, but he was her prince. Someone who was supposed to do great things, to become a great leader. Instead, he had fallen to an assassin of Mordor. It shouldn't have happened. Elandera, usually calm, felt a boiling anger grow inside her. Her arrow would strike down the one who had killed her people's hope for a better future.

But Xeno wasn't really inactive. They'd only posted once before some of the votes on him, but a lot of people only posted once.

Fae who are exceptionally good lawyers and more than slightly corrupt business men

Hmm... That's an unfortunate start for the companions. The Agents of Mordor are one-third of the way to their win-con. Does anyone know how many people are Gondor Spies?

Elandera began to wake up after a long night that had followed an even longer day. It had confused her more thoroughly than she'd expexted, but hoped the rest would help. The first thing she did as she prepared for another day was to check her equipment. She re-strung the bow, and inspected each arrow. She cleaned her knives and made sure they remained sharp - which wasn't much of a problem because they were made by some of the best elven craftsmen. Elandera was ready. And hopefully would stay aware if what time of day it was. Though that could get difficult in the Mirkwood.

I want it to have a high fantasy feel, so I hesitate to go too far into traditional mythology (it's also why I'm staying far away from urban fantasy creatures like vampires and werewolves). However, I think I could definitely look into it to get ideas. Thanks! The difference in the world is that magic is part of normal society. The target audience would be more 20's-30's, people who would read both Sanderson/Tolkein and some Tom Clancy/Robert Ludlum.

Ahh! I'm so confused right now! For some reason I forgot there were nights in this game. I'm just going to go sit in a corner until I can get my ducks in a row.

I'm working on an idea currently that meshes fantasy with action/espionage. It's set in modern-day United States, the main character being an agent for MTFE (Magical Technology and Firearms Enforcement). My question to all of you fine people is what traditionally fantasy races (elves, halflings, etc.) would you like to see in that kind of book?

Welcome Walin! I'm glad we accidentally didn't lynch you. As for this cycle, I suppose I can get the voting started. @Mafia has yet to appear, so I'll throw a poke vote down on them, maybe give them a bit more incentive to join the party. Glieven (Mafia)

Welcome to the game GreenRover! --------- Elandera noticed a new face had joined near the front of the pack. She nodded toward him, acknowledging him. She was glad to have another sword with them as they travelled, but vowed to keep an eye on him. It would be easy for the enemy to have slipped spies in among the new faces.

We are less than three hours from end of cycle, and four votes have been cast. If anyone opposes a Walin lynch, it'd be best to speak up now. I'm not sure how dedicated to it I am, mostly because with him being inactive, it won't tell us much. However, there hasn't been much else said today that would give us any clues about alignment.

Elandera was among the leading edge of the company as it traveled through the woods. Woods she had known as a child to be bright and friendly, but were now overrun by forces of darkness. It saddened her to think of the glory that had been lost to ignorance and stubbornness. She hoped to restore her home. But there were rumors among them that concerned her greatly. Agents of Mordor within their company. She shot a glance toward Dorder, who had remained silent as she tried to draw him into a discussion. She determined to keep him in her sights and her bow never far from her hand. A snapping branch from within the shadowed woods drew her attention. Once again, she had her bow drawn and nocked before some had even registered a sound. ------------------------- Someone feel free to jump in with a suggestion on what we're battling next!

Well, that's an unfortunately small turnout for halfway through the day. Let's get the poke votes started, shall we? Walin. @Walin, I've become incredibly suspicious of you being too quiet.

With a smooth motion, so fast some wouldn't have seen it, Elandera had an arrow nocked and ready to fire as soon as she heard the cry for help. She hesitated as she saw Fade collapse onto the fairly large spider, effectively killing it. Elandera lowered her bow, releasing the tension slowly, and raised an eyebrow at the one now covered in spider guts. She sighed, and reached back over her shoulder to return the arrow back to the quiver. She felt at the fletching to make sure it was facing the right direction for quick knocking again. She needed to be ready.

I think you have something very interesting in works here. As has been said, the dialogue feels stiff. I understand you want it to feel like it's set in those old days when people's speech was more formal than what we use today, and I think that's a good idea. But imagine being the actor trying to recite it on stage. Say the words out loud as you write. How does it feel? Does it sound right out loud? Something to help with that would be to get a group of people together with a bit of stage experience to just read the play together. Each person would have a part and recite those lines. That would help you pick out what sounds right and what needs to be changed. Also, one thing I felt could be improved was the blocking. There was very little blocking overall. How would the people move on stage? What are their facial expressions? The tones of their voice? I know a lot of that is up to an actor and interpretation, but give them a place to start. Overall, I liked it! I'm not super familiar with bible history in general (something I should honestly work on), but this sets up an interesting story. See the spoiler tag for my edits: As I told DrakenShadow, I can get a little eager with my edits. Take or leave them as you wish. Mostly they are a way to point out what I think could improve. You may find your own way to improve it. I hope this helps!

Thank you for including me! I'll get to it soon (I still need to edit Nathrangking's first). I will warn you, however, I tend to get a little overambitious about suggested edits. Take only the ones that fit with your writing style.