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*Snatches Win* *Runs away cackling while eating butter*

Words by Me. Words on a page. A piece of the goal. Not a one can see. Their place in the whole. A moment of silence by Me. A moment of silence, In the midst of the noise A single choice In a world that destroys A minute of peace In the midst of this chaos A single voice When all else will cease. A single decision In the midst of distress A fathomless loss The source of such grief A cry left behind In the midst of the pain A heart that’s been broken By that awful red stain A broken decision In the midst of that lie A feeling of isolation That drove them to die Someone else's blood by Me. (Spoilered for length. Also lightly based on Kaladin.) A Haiku The song that I sing Nothing but a melody. Words long forgotten.

This is really cool, thanks for mentioning me. I personally don't think it's that confusing, though I do think you could pull back from the descriptions a bit. (As others have said though, it's a stylistic choice so it's up to you.) One thing I was slightly confused on was the perspective. I'm not bothered by the present tense, but is the story from the man's perspective? Or is it an omniscient narrator? I was confused because it seems like it's told from the man's perspective, but if it is then there shouldn't be as much (if any at all) visual description. Also, I don't know much about PTSD but isn't it usually triggered by something? It almost seems like the man's PTSD (if that's what that is) is coming on without prompting. Overall, I really like it. You've got some really intriguing mystery elements, as well as some seemingly magical/supernatural things going on. I look forward to reading more.

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I would imagine it would work similarly to Stormlight. It's based on the person's spiritweb and how they view themselves. If the person sees themselves without a certain mental illness then I would assume the divine breath would cure them. Edit: also I found this WOB and This one.

Fair enough. Edit: Oh Ark, I herby mention you! Come forth and show yourself to us.

Why are we mentioning Ark? *also I win

I will take it! I will take the win to Mordor!

You look tired, let me hold that win for you.

*points out that Hoid would just eat them as well*

Then Kelsier punched Moash in the face.

Even though they were related.

Which is like shipping, but smaller.

I'll watch too! *Grabs more popcorn*

It seemed like a good idea at the time.

He liked flaunting his money.

I have so many favorites. But here are a couple, “It's easy to believe in something when you win all the time...The losses are what define a man's faith.” “Mocking a woman is like drinking too much wine. It may be fun for a short time, but the hangover is hell.” “Sometimes the prize is not worth the costs. The means by which we achieve victory are as important as the victory itself.” “A journey will have pain and failure. It is not only the steps forward that we must accept. It is the stumbles. The trials. The knowledge that we will fail. That we will hurt those around us. But if we stop, if we accept the person we are when we fail, the journey ends. That failure becomes our destination.” “Sometimes a hypocrite is nothing more than a man in the process of changing.” EDIT: I also love this one, “Two blind men waited at the end of an era, contemplating beauty.” It's simple but something about it just hits me.

*Does ceremonial now I'm dancing with someone dance* There's a ceremonial dance for everything these days.

*Does ceremonial Luna got cheese dance*

*Does ceremonial my cheese was stolen dance*

*Does ceremonial cheese giving dance*

*Gives Luna some cheese*

*shrugs, reaches into pocket, brings out another block of cheese* *Eats it*

*eats a whole block of cheese*