Yes! Something new of Nathrangking’s that I can read and critique! I love reading your stuff man, thanks for mentioning me.
So, I was going to say some of what Luna already said. I’m very confused, but I understand enough to want to keep reading. It’s a very interesting idea, and I’m excited to see what comes next. I also like the personification you’ve used.
Here are some questions that, as a reader, I want answers to as I continue reading. (Though I’m sure you’ve already thought of most if not all of these.)
I’m sure these questions will all be answered in their own time, but I just wanted to throw them out there.