AonEne he/him Posted May 24, 2019 Posted May 24, 2019 *switches topics abruptly* Dialogue makes writing so much easier...
Lunamor she/her Posted May 24, 2019 Posted May 24, 2019 Mostly just RPing for me. I stink at dialogue...
AonEne he/him Posted May 24, 2019 Posted May 24, 2019 Yeah, I haven't written something that's not RP in a while. Why do you think you're bad at it?
Lunamor she/her Posted May 24, 2019 Posted May 24, 2019 It just ends up sounding awkward and unnatural lots of the time.
AonEne he/him Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 Wanna practice with me? You seem to talk so naturally, I have trouble seeing how it doesn't translate over.
AonEne he/him Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 Ene cleared her throat. "Let's get this party started!"
Lunamor she/her Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 “Wait- we are having a party?” Lunamor asked.
AonEne he/him Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 Quote Would you mind if I gave tips? Just my own opinion?
Lunamor she/her Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 Quote Yes, please! (Sorry it took me so long to respond)
AonEne he/him Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 Quote It's cool! So, I'd probably change it to “Wait, we're having a party?” That flows better, and people are much more likely to use contractions in most situations. If you want to keep the dash, that implies a little more shock with the pause/hesitation; you could try emphasizing the word party to go along with it, as in, “Wait - we're having a party?” Of course, this is my opinion, gathered from reading tons of books, listening to people, and instinct, so it's not the law or anything. "WE ABSOLUTELY ARE," Ene said excitedly. "With food! And music! And people standing awkwardly to the sides of the room 'cause they don't wanna dance!" 1
BringerofShadows she/her Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 Wait, wait, wait. Aren’t I the second Ark?
BringerofShadows she/her Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 Apathetic, likes darkness, Chaotic Evil, etc.
Lunamor she/her Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 14 minutes ago, AonEne said: Quote Thanks, that’s really helpful! “Who all did you invite?” Luna asked apprehensively.
xinoehp512 he/him Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 A shimmering line of fire slashes down from the ceiling to the floor. From the flames, a man emerges. He carries a sword etched with runes and a crystalline red shield. His eyes glow with an inner fire. He grins. "How's it going, guys?" 1
BringerofShadows she/her Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 “OFF WITH HIS HEAD!!” Yelled BoS as she threw a hatchet. “And what are we celebrating?”
AonEne he/him Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 "Him," Ene says happily, pointing at Xino (or maybe not Xino). "Also her." Her hand swivels to BoS. "And we're celebrating Luna!"
Zephrun’s Imperium they/he Posted May 25, 2019 Posted May 25, 2019 Star walked in the room. "You guys are having a party without me?!"
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