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How's this draft of the summary looking? I added Typhon in. I'd still like confirmation from @Sazedezas whether the taller structures are necessary for Arachnerd's domain. There are some areas left in the city that do have those, so the territory can be moved. If you want some taller buildings, there's some good ones close to the MEC base that would probably work. Also need a base for Epoch eventually now that Typhon has South Edmonton Common, but we can probably start without that. Gotta go run get some vegetables now, but if I have time when I get back I'll see if I can do some work on the prologue.
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Does that area have enough tall buildings for the Webrynth? It looks like mostly single and two story buildings to me.
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Re: @Drake Marshall and @The Young Pyromancer: If there are any other errors like that in the summary please let me know. There was a lot of material to go through and I may have not understood all of the conversations properly.
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I am already working on that sequence and have it planned out, but I can review Borrower again after work and see if I can work something in. I think Typhon and their sector should be notable enough throughout Edmonton that this definitely good information for everyone to have at the beginning. In the summary, I'll put the secret stuff in spoilers, but people should know that if they are walking through or around South Common that an incredibly powerful and violent epic lives in that region and might come and destroy them. That sort of public knowledge is the kind of thing that can create inconsistencies or issues later on if it's not shared with co-content creators in my opinion, so thanks for sharing! For Typhon, I think we might need to do some thinking about how they fit into our set up plotlines, and if things need to be changed. For example, would Doubletake have actually tried to take over the entire city if she knew a sector of it was controlled by Typhon, an epic who could destroy her? Would she have tried to infiltrate Typhon's sector (as she had the others) and would she have been successful? Would Epoch put some kind of specialized timezone around Typhon to keep them contained? Not issues, per se, but things we should maybe work out as a group. The rest I'll put in spoilers since it wouldn't be public knowledge: Other than that, I do think this is a cool idea, and if we as a group can work out some of the kinks, I think it will be a very cool addition. I'm going to keep thinking and maybe give some more thoughts after work. I'll pick a spot for the statue on the map after work! No worries! We can't be expected to be online every day, especially on holidays. I'll take a look at the map after work, but at the moment I'm think the north or south-western parts of the city might work. I'll take a closer look and see if there are any good places for webs. What kind of features would you need or prefer to have?
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Sazedezas. I already tagged them in my last post, and they haven't been on for the last nine hours, so we should just be patient. Not everyone has a lot of time to be online, and there's no rush really.
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I like it too! A couple permutations just for fun: Edmolympus? Edmolympia? Edmolympus Major? Albertus Olympia? Albertal Olympus/ia? Edmonton is also the northernmost major city in North America, so we could do something "North" themed - Edmonia-Polaris, Olympia Polaris. A twist on Edmonton's linguistic roots: Eadhelm, Eadhelm-Polaris, Eadhelm-Olympia. Feel free to discard all of these if they are two weird, just throwing them out there. I'm fine with Olympus-Major. That and Arachnerd's location I think (since we should know how much of Edmonton is webbed).
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Which summary was that? The post you did about the epics and their public visibility? If so then for sure! I’ve been taking bits and pieces from various posts so a large portion of the summary is quotes from you guys. It was meant to be a consolidation rather than an original work.
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Thanks! I updated that, and gave her her own ** note. If there are any other inconsistencies please let me know.
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I am seeing your edits for the time border and Armageddon's base, I think. Is there something missing? New update. I took a few comedic liberties with the Pariah Statue description. Let me know if there are any problems, and where she should be placed on the map (keep in mind her repulsion effect makes the 50m around her un-enter-able). If I'm correct, the only blanks that remain are: (1) Pariah's location; (2) Arachnerd's Location, and the extent of her webs ( @Sazedezas ); and (3) A new name for Edmonton, if we want it, or confirmation that the city will still be called Edmonton. EDIT: And the Reckoner's Base, if there are any opinions on that. If not, I can pick somewhere.
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I think I got it. I carved out a bit passed 91 ST NW to include South Edmonton Common, since you had said at one point that's where Epoch was based. Let me know if you want changes. This is what I was recalling, but I didn't write much in Portland. @The Young Pyromancer and I have been talking, and Pyro pointed out we don't have a location for the Reckoners. I was not sure if we were putting someone specific in charge of the Reckoners or not. If we are fine with them mostly being NPCs moving behind the scenes, I'm fine to be 'responsible' for them if people want someone to be, but I'm also fine if someone else who has actual plans wants to take that up. I will need them briefly for the prologue, but other than that I have no plans. I'm fine to just pick a spot I think will work, but I'm also fine if anyone in the group has opinions and wants to decide. The only faction I was hoping to do a decent amount with was the Albertan Government, and I think the only other one that might need some direction (unless we NPC it) would be the remnants of Doubletake's faction, who might be trying to recover from their leader's death.
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I think it makes sense if the factions were willing to cooperate. Did Portland have running water and electricity all over? I know Corvallis did because they were doing the whole Utopia thing, but I wasn’t sure about the other cities. I’m fine for them to have it or not have it. I just think having it makes things simpler. I would disagree on the “most people worked for Doubletake” point. While she had the largest faction, she never got the chance to unify Edmonton, so a decent number would be working for others. I’m guessing some private companies which are neutral might even still be functioning. I had originally left Armageddon without a strict border because his cult is relatively new and they aren’t securing territory. Their goal is to gain followers not rule the city so I don’t think they would have firm borders like some of the other factions do. Ultimately it’s up to @Kidpen though.
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Beautiful Destroyer: Depictions of Violence in the Cosmere
Comatose commented on Comatose's article in Columns and Features
Glad it was enjoyed . And @fractal, as the holder of an English BA, I guess my degree was good for something . -
I think there’s enough of a difference. Also @Drake Marshall I forgot to ask - do you want Epoch’s region to have strict borders? If so let me know where you want those set. If you are thinking it is more loose, I’ll leave the map as is. Also, unrelated, but how do people feel about shameless inserts or adaptations of existing characters from other media? Because I kind of want to make these gals as epics:
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Check the new summary above. Created by @Hemalurgic Headshot.
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Legacy is in my Epics of Oregon list (it’s in my signature and there’s a link in my epics of Edmonton profile). She and Peregrine never got used. It was interesting seeing Nicroburst come together knowing Updgrade was already around. I didn’t get to RP him much after he was adopted so I was hoping to do so in Edmonton. @Drake Marshall those explanations satisfy me I think. I did have an idea I’m already working on for how Doubletake gets killed already, but I will post the prologue here for approval first before opening the thread. I can probably work at least the common belief that a new epic did it (which will still add the tension you were thinking of). I will wait to hear your idea as well though. Do you know who leaked Epoch’s weakness? With her infiltration of other factions, I was thinking Doubletake might have uncovered it and used it as blackmail by setting it up so an underling leaked it in the event of her death? If you have other plans that’s fine though . We should probably also figure out alliances and diplomacy between the factions - who is aligned, friendly, neutral, unfriendly, enemies, etc. with whom.
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I agree with Voidus about Pariah's stasis. I'm fine with a stasis of some kind, but it shouldn't function as a form of immortality. Epics with PIs are invincible, not immortal. I'll wait for Drake to comment though. Cool. What do you mean by "source of power". Like electrical power? Is there a power station or power producing epic there? Also, I will say that in the past, we have been pretty transparent among writers about our characters (though we have kept plot pieces back for surprises at times). I don't think it's an issue that you are keeping information about the epic back, but I also don't think you have to worry about people knowing information, since for the most part people are pretty good at keeping what they know as writers and what their characters know separate. Okay, here is our next go at the summary with some more items filled in. I added some water and power centres I could find from google to the map. Water is the waves, power is the plug, and solar power is the sun. I figured these might be somewhat strategic locations.
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Okay so fairly different than I was imagining. Thanks for the quote and for the correct spelling. I’m thinking I may try to separate the ideas and try to make them not too similar to each other. I do like that she creates a dead zone around her. But what keeps her from starving to death?
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Cool! Thanks. Once again something I must have skimmed over in my review of 30+ pages last night. @Drake Marshall any chance we can add in emotional size manipulation to her powerset to make the living statue more intimidating/dramatic? Sorry if her powerset is out there somewhere. I haven’t found it and am just going off of the selection posted above. What do you think of her being Doubletake’s second in command? If you are intending on RPing her at some point feel free to reject these ideas. Alternatively we could have two living statues of different sorts. Also @Edgedancer I agree about Euphoria. Hopefully they don’t meet up if we go that route.
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That’s probably up to us. It would be nice if power and water were still there. Do the faction heads think there could be enough cooperation to facilitate that. According to google, I think a major water facility would be on the northeast side of the city. We could also make it so the city has implemented solar power now and has solar farms since the wider grid connecting the rest of the country is probably cut off. I’m guessing public transit no longer exists, or if it does it’s managed but Epoch. Oooo idea! How about this: For the prologue, I have an idea in the works for how Doubletake is defeated. What if Doubletake has a favoured lieutenant with the ability to grow or shrink in size based on the strength and type of their emotions. Their anger and pain when Doubletake dies is so great they are able to grow to a monumental size, but are subsequently turned to stone before they can crush anything (I have an idea for this as well). If so, I’m thinking that would be somewhere close to the legislature building. It’s on the map, with no hard border, because it doesn’t seem like he’s taking Territory yet.
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If you have a specific character in mind, I’m totally fine with him being male, especially if you had plans for him. It was just a suggestion in the event he was more powerset than character at this point, and his gender wouldn’t matter much. Edit: Also, for the remaining bronies and pegasisters in the group, I will not lie that the idea of having an epic Queen Chrysalis did cross my mind, haha.
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Thanks! Sorry I missed that (there were a lot of profiles to go through. I will update accordingly. Do you know where Armageddon's cult will be based? This is perfect! I will add in tonight or maybe tomorrow (I have a dinner after work tonight). For now, I did add a border for Phyto's territory, so let me know if it looks correct. I prefer third person past tense personally, just to add my two cents. I like these, and I'm glad we are adding a woman leader, since we don't have enough of those in Edmonton right now. I'm assuming Chrysalis will be an NPC (if you want to RP him then let me know), and so I was wondering about changing him to female as well just to even things out a bit? Especially since our female epic leader in Edmonton is dead. Then again, the leader of the maple government will be female (I have an idea for her already I think - I'll slip her into the prologue), so maybe Chrysalis is fine as male, even if he is an NPC. *facepalm. I was zooming in on the northeast industrial area. I found it now. Is it four blocks wide and four blocks tall? I added the center point, but would like to add the borders as well. I think it's important this one has borders due to the force-field. Also, I'm assuming they'd want at least a section of the residential area directly south of the center point so their maples have a place to live? For the mystery epic, do you have any more notes that we can add in about their interaction with the rest of the city? What do the people who live there do? Do they basically just keep to themselves? Also, let me know how tall the forcefield is and what it's shaped like. We should likely add that as a landmark (also is it translucent, or just black? Can people see in or out?). Edit: I included a suggested area on the map for the forcefield. Let me know if it looks right or if it should be changed.
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Okay, here's what I came up with for a summary (prologue can follow once this is approved and filled in). With all the epics flying around, I tried to only include the major ones (epics with notable or unique powers or epics who seemed to be in charge or like they could be in charge in the future, plot drivers basically), and the ones who are being ported over from Oregon. Things that still need to fill in are emphasized. There was a lot of information to collect and comb through, so I'm expecting some revisions will be necessary. MAP LINK (Will put in Thread Once Done) - I can't quite find Nicroburst's location. Could you send me an address? A big part I need is locations. I don't think we should let anyone edit the map, but if you are interested, reply here, and I will set it up so multiple people can edit and then it's not just me (actually you will need to send me an email address, so maybe just PM me). NOTE: Not all of the stuff below actually would be in the knowledge of the Reckoners - writing it from their perspective was just a fun way to put this together. Edmonton Summary (DRAFT) Still Needed Before Prologue Can be Written - I think the main thing missing is an "inciting event". So far the four main things I can think of are the death of the major faction leader who was trying to take over the city, the leak of Epoch's weakness, the death of Steelheart, and the arrival of the Oregonians. Any ideas on how to put this together in a way that will drive the plot forward? I can probably come up with something, but I wanted to put this out there to see if there were any last minute thoughts first. EDIT : Also, it looks like our Oregonians will likely be entering Edmonton from the south, which means Epoch's faction will likely be the first one they run into.
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Comatose's Characters in Edmonton See brief summaries for updates, bios for Oregon Epics slightly out of date. Edmontonians: The Honourable Rachel Notley - Premier of Edmonton (or a purely fictional version of her, ten years later). 60+ and kind of a dictator. Still a fan of free health care though. Lethe Sapphire, Sangria, and Sable Link to Epics of Oregon Post Refugee Group Other Characters: Taylor Swift - a ship-shifting former pop super star. Her weakness has recently been discovered by the Reckoners, and a group of them are hunting her to Edmonton. Has a long list of epic dictators as ex-boyfriends. Has a grudge against her latest ex, a vanilla named Brandon. More detail below:
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Sorry guys. It’s Canada Day long weekend here so I’ve been busy with family and stuff. I’ll try to get a summary together today and highlight any areas that still need filling in before we start.
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Beautiful Destroyer: Depictions of Violence in the Cosmere
Comatose commented on Comatose's article in Columns and Features
Thanks for sharing your thoughts! I am glad some of what I wrote resonated. I think in the future if I do another one of these I might include some questions for discussion to help get more of a conversation going.
