Here’s another one I wrote, I’m…not sure how I feel about it. It says mostly what I want it to say, but it doesn’t feel very eloquent or beautiful. Editing will definitely be coming, and in the meantime any and all feedback is welcome!!
Prisoner:
Not quite, though. When he reaches the fountain, he finds it surrounded by a tall wall of twisting vines. If he wants to get through, he'll have to go through the vines first.
Bet, Mr. “I really really really don’t want her to win, so she has to get dead.”
…my phone is being so FRIDGING weird or I’d quote more and also summon you.
He can touch the bracers and use the stored health, but as soon as he stretches his arms out the tunnel seems to get even smaller, to the point where he can’t even pull them back.
It takes a long time, both because of the wound in his back, and because the tunnel seems to be getting steadily narrower, but eventually he reaches them.
That was cool!! Nice work, and good job sharing! It can be scary! I’m very intrigued, so you have to keep writing or you can join the club of “people Eddie’s going to hit on the head with a stick unless they write faster”
Fasting the day you get it is a good idea, and something I tried to do the week before was being super careful with what I read, what I watched, what music I listened to, just so that you can be completely focused on Him.
Proof: Brandon Sanderson likes killing the best characters in epic fight scenes; it's the only natural ending.
theory: investiture doesn't actually exist.
The spores are all in his lungs and stomach now, but don’t seem to be having any effect. There are portions of skin that are blackened from contact with the vines, but the water helps, and soon they return to a regular color.