HOID WANTS INSTANT NOODLES

"SCREECH"

6 hours ago, Frustration said:

Yes.

And I am more than willing to go on a three hour rant about how it's a Tolkien rip off.

I always thought it was more of a star wars rip off but yeah. To be fair The Eye Of the World is also a tolkien ripoff. The eragon movie tho....

2 hours ago, TheDwarfyOne said:

Hey! That's a nice poem. The topic in particular - which you sum up at the end - is poignant. The bird mourning its children through food.

An observation on language, though:

This reminds me of the first poem I wrote. Which, incidentally, was about a bird. I used 'unto' and 'thus' and so on. Essentially, the words common in the romantic poetry I was studying at school. The thing about poetry, though, is that each word must be chosen with conscious intent. Archaic words shouldn't be avoided, per se, but like any other words in a poem they require justification for their presence. In this poem, they add nothing and distract the reader from that main, poignant message - the grieving mother bird.

There's a similar issue with 'does take flight.' You are conforming to a rhythm, but using an unnatural sentence structure which (once more) distracts from your message. Don't be afraid to break rhythm - variety often makes the poem more interesting, and is a useful tool for highlighting important bits! Just be sure that, like with your words, you do it with intent.

Forgive me for tampering with your poem, it's just to highlight my point:

 

Within the bleakness of the night 

A lonely swallow takes flight

still searching

heart lurching

 

and as it rises it sings

throughout the darkness echoes ring

still soaring

exploring

 

The swallow dives to the ground

Its quarry it has found

Prey squirming

returning

 

The bird returns to empty nest,

food fetched for chicks at rest

still waiting

deflating

 

Predators killed her chicks

And left their empty bed of sticks

denying

still flying

 

Obviously I've changed this, so it no longer accurately reflects your style or intent - but in so doing I hope I've drawn some things to your attention. Archaic words were distracting from your message, and exclusively choosing words to fit rhythm/rhyme schemes was disrupting the flow and pacing of your poem.

 

I look forward to reading your next one!

 

Thank you so much! I really apreciate the feedback. I intentionally didnt include particularly archaic words. However I can see that the wording is a little bit clunky. My particular pattern in writing poetry is musical. For almost every poem I read or write, my head generates a tune that it could go along with. Because of this, I tend to go out of my way to make the verses rhyme. This poem was a combination of the bird that I had seen, and a particular mournful tune that my head had thought fit it. This wasnt something I heard, just a melody that seeing the bird had sparked. Part of why I see the world through such a music foucsed lens is my synesthesia. Images have sounds, tunes, songs. I actually found Brandon's portrayal of the singers and their tunes to be relatively accurate. It isnt that i hum like that when I talk or anything but moreso that my brain doesn't have the same block between sound and external factors many people do. I dont like hear music in my head when I see a painting but I do know what melody would fit it. The same applies to me for numbers, emotions, and events. They have a song, or color that can be found. I am experienced in writing songs to describe things that I see but am still pretty new to poetry. Thus when I started my poem I already had a tune, rhyming pattern, and sound in my head. This restricted me from leaving rhyming patterns as it felt wrong to leave them. Thanks for reading through my ramble and for critquing my poetry. I really appreciate it!

Within the bleakness of the night 

A lonley swallow does take flight

still searching

heart lurching

and as it rises it does sing

throughout the darkness echoes ring

still soaring

exploring

The swallow dives unto the ground

I know it's quarry it has found

Prey squirming

returning

The bird returns to empty nest

with food fetched at dead chicks behest

still waiting

deflating

For predators they killed her chicks

And left their empty bed of stick

denying

still flying

This is a poem I just composed about a bird by our house. A few weeks ago her chicks were killed by an owl. However, whenever she goes hunting, she leaves a worm like she used to. Food for her dead children

Myalaran burst into the screen"SCREEECH"

Here, just thought this might be fun. This is a thread for posting recommendations for board/video games that have mechanics or themes that might appeal to sanderfans. (they dont have to be cosmere themed games) and potentially brainstorming fan games.

Board game recomendation, Lotr Lcg

Video game reccomendation, Dwarf fortress(its free and what it lacks in graphics it makes up for in scale. It has extremely intracate systems and the like for your more mechanics foucused players, and some of the best story aspects for story players. It is a sandbox game and is free)

Board game idea. (some credit to manywar sanderson elimination) A card game with breaths as currency. So like how magic uses its currency you use breaths instead. You could discard a card to research something now avalible to all players. You all play as one of the 5 scholars and whoever makes nightblood first wins.

16 hours ago, Shining Silhouette said:

Galileo was actually an early conspiracy theorist???? 

Yep!

Just gonna drop this here. "meat fell from the sky"

https://blogs.scientificamerican.com/running-ponies/the-great-kentucky-meat-shower-mystery-unwound-by-projectile-vulture-vomit/

Punic war era( it was a war between republican rome and carthage, https://warfarehistorynetwork.com/hannibal-and-the-second-punic-war/ should be a decent starting point

in his time, Gallileo's theory was unfounded, and thus talking about it being repressed is stupid as there was no proof the world revolved around the sun. It's like somebody today saying "hey, what is asteroids were caused by aliens" It could theoretically be true but not necissarily. Also people knew the earth was round all the way back in Ancient Greece. Pretty much nobody in the middle ages thought the world was flat.

I do like historical rps and one of my favorites now is the mouse guard game

Im not a huge science guy but I do have a soft spot for neurology

Kentucky meat shower

https://blogs.scientificamerican.com/running-ponies/the-great-kentucky-meat-shower-mystery-unwound-by-projectile-vulture-vomit/

"meat fell from the sky"

I did once see a parent trying to fish her child out of the rubber ball area. Yknow, where they keep all of the sports balls, It was a big one and the kid decided to get in. Also onece saw somebody check out 20 cans of lard and nothing else. He said that it was healthy for him.

TUN kas makes a point

Welcome to the shard! Wait I have somebody who will appreciate your poll @SymphonianBookworm

My main fear in this would be the fandom being obliterated. It is pretty rare that a fandom this big is relatively wholesome and chill. I worry thousands of new people would have a negative effect on it. On top of this, I cant think of any adaptations where the intense fans like them. The cosmere is so big and complex and the magic so intracate that im afraid we would get something like the Wheel Of Time adaptation where all the money went into bad cgi. Mistborn sounds great but how could you effectively show what is going on with burning duralumin, pewter, tin, emotional allomancy. It is really hard to show a character having enhanced senses. I cant imagine a way to adapt these things that would leave all parties satisfied. On top of it all, there always seems to be a huge debaucle about the author and the movie starts representing a community. Film adaptations never work. They get us exited and then they either break our hearts for being bad or make a mess of the fandom.

Im not trying to be impolite but double posting is considered bad etiquette

2 hours ago, MyrmidonOfAchilles said:

I'm greatly amused by the similarities between Moash and a certain thieving crew leader's attitudes on the righteousness of violent revenge (even against those merely a part of the corrupt system to feed their families), and how often the exact same people can adore said crew leader and despise Moash simply because of how Brandon has written the PoV characters' relationships with the two of them and their levels of charisma. I have no doubt that if Moash had been a main character and people had to read about his grandparents' death from his perspective, that people would be clamoring for Elhokar's blood.

wait 10,000 was to big, I meant to say1000 besides I got lucky and was placed with the weaker players in most brackets. I thought I had lost but apperently they did tournaments differently and a question section on vikings won me a ton of points. I also had one opponent get sick so I really got an unfair advantage

I think Hoid might have a bit of a protective instinct towards shallan, almost fatherly. It isnt that he insults kaladin an unusual amount just that him not insulting Shallan is unusual

Wait.... Yknow when you just took something for granted and it sudenly turns out wrong...

I know! At the same time tho the competition couldnt have had too many people(probably under 10000. National girls chess is a huge category and it is soo cool that you won it. We should do online chess sometime so you can whip me at it. (I havent played many really good players lately so I would be honored to loose to somebody so good)

3 hours ago, Oltux72 said:

 

No. Simply no. Moash is a man who fought for his revenge. Who fought slavers, who could just have ended him then and there. He is not weak. He may be beaten, but everybody can be beaten, if too many things go wrong. That does not make him weak.
There are things you can say like that he is treating a friend with a mental illness in an inexcuseable way, but he is neither weak nor a coward.

revenge. That's a word that you are using to explain why Moash isn't a coward. Revenge is cowardly, it means you arent strong enough to accept what has happened and move on.To let go of your hatred. Seeking justice is good, Seeking to save others by distributing justice is good, but that is not what Moash wants, Moash wants to hurt those who hurt him, it is a childish outake on life. I dont believe there should be no punishment, just that punishment should be distributed so that you prevent harm to others, not get your petty revenge. Do we ever really so Moash do something brave. He always chooses somebody who he knows he is stronger than. And then like a child, he refuses to take responsibility for what he has done and tries to get his friend to kill himself. Moash is as bad as any brightlord. He attacks those who cannot protect themselves. Has he really done much to help anyone? He only works because it helps him ignore his guilt.

2 hours ago, offer said:

It is possible to recombined splintered shard:

 

so it might be possible to also recpmbine adonalsium.

Thanks!

oh then I guess inheritance must just be different.

Within the bleakness of the night 

A lonley swallow does take flight

still searching

heart lurching

and as it rises it does sing

throughout the darkness echoes ring

still soaring

exploring

The swallow dives unto the ground

I know it's quarry it has found

Prey squirming

returning

The bird returns to empty nest

with food fetched at dead chicks behest

still waiting

deflating

For predators they killed her chicks

And left their empty bed of stick

denying

still flying

This is a poem I just composed about a bird by our house. A few weeks ago her chicks were killed by an owl. However, whenever she goes hunting, she leaves a worm like she used to. Food for her dead children

also

On 7/4/2022 at 5:21 PM, Luckspren said:

I can understand this argument... it's actually pretty compelling in some ways... but I would say that while lots of horrendous things have been done in the name of religion, all horrendous things that have ever been done were done by humans. Saying that humans have done lots of horrendous things in the name of religion means (to me) that: 1) Humans have the capacity to do horrendous things (and they will, with or without the involvement of religion), and 2) Religion is extremely powerful. To many people, it matters more than anything else in their lives. Which means, unfortunately, one of the easiest ways to get people to agree to horrible things is to tell them 'God approves! He told me so in a vision!'

A lot of horrible things have been done in the name of religion... but a lot of wonderful things too. And neither of those things are proof of whether believers are correct. 

I think one of the most significant quotes on this topic is from C.S Lewis'

“Three hundred years ago people in England were putting witches to death. Was that what you call the 'Rule of Human Nature or Right Conduct?’ But surely the reason we do not execute witches is that we do not believe there are such things. If we did—if we really thought that there were people going about who had sold themselves to the devil and received supernatural powers from him in return and were using these powers to kill their neighbours or drive them mad or bring bad weather—surely we would all agree that if anyone deserved the death penalty, then these filthy quislings did? There is no difference of moral principle here: the difference is simply about matter of fact. It may be a great advance in knowledge not to believe in witches: there is no moral advance in not executing them when you do not think they are there. You would not call a man humane for ceasing to set mousetraps if he did so because he believed there were no mice in the house.”  -  Mere Christianity, C.S Lewis

I picked mine because I just found out about the wob. And shallan stormblessed, run 

In most European primogeniture inheritance laws the mothers father would not inherit, obviously

In this system the current lords grandfather passes it on to his eldest. His eldest would usually pass it on to his eldest. It could be interpreted as Wayne not comprehending politics but that seems awfully sloppy for Wayne. It could also be that Waxillium would not have returned to the city if he thought somebody else could lead the house. He only came because he felt like he had to. I think that the last is the most likley answer