Young Bard

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This is going to be interesting... Isn't Charden going to die via Ven's weapon that can't be healed though? He would lose too much blood. We could have him set up the group, knowing he'd be incapacitated when the event occurred. I can start that off, if you like. P.S. I am writing it under the assumption that Charden is a full Mistborn. If he is Twinborn, or a Misting, please let me know and I'll have to alter it slightly.

The Path of Daggers by Robert Jordan. To be honest, I'm finding it slow an dull at the moment, about 150 pages in. People keep talking about how bad Winter's Heart and Crossroads of Twilight are, but if it goes to far downhill from here... Still, it seems to be almost universally agreed that it gets better at Knife of Dreams, and then when Brandon takes over in the Gathering Storm, so I remain hopeful.

It's a bit late now unfortunately. It was part of Brandon's newsletter which he sends out every few months or so. You can't get that particular sneak peek, but he does something new every newsletter, if you sign up here. Was it just me, or was the first thing that came into your mind the following line. Enter the Empire Strikes Back set. David: My mother is dead! Knighthawk: David... I. am. your. mother. (In a strangely Darth Vader-like tone.) David: Nooooooooooooooooooo!

I think Warbreaker's the only major component that you should probably know for Cosmere tidbits before WoR, but since it's the cosmere's connecting grounds, I would read it later. Of the 4, I would go Elantris, simply because it introduces the Cosmere and a few of it's aspects. WoA begins to discover more about Shards, their properties, and their limits. While not having a direct affect on Elantris, it still is nice to go in sort of ignorant. Also, the small thingo's (sorry, memory blank on the word) that precede each chapter may have some mention of Sel, I'm not sure.

I wouldn't mind submitting something for the 25th. I'm not sure exactly what I'll submit yet, as I haven't started any new novels recently. Maybe I'll start on that high fantasy/ post-apocalyptic/ lovecraftian story that has been tinkering in my head for a while. P.S. I'm new here. My name's Conor, a.k.a. The Young Bard. (I'm pretentious, so what?)

I'm just going to comment on the entire story so far. I think this story has great potential. It develops a human character that you can easily sympathise and relate with, then makes him a catalyst for change and discovery, which is a classic writer's tool. You have the grand epic scale of an entire new aerland in the sky, balanced with the smaller, yet still instrumental plot to kill the king, and finally the tiny subplot of Pen's lovelife, for variety and comparison. The one thing that I found confusing having just read the prologue through to Chapter 3 is the sheer information overload in characters. Maybe others found it easier, having read it spaced over 3/4 weeks, but you have introduced at least a dozen characters already, which we are expected to remember the name and role of. Pen and Dev I got pretty quickly. Lianye and Rend weren't too much trouble. But particularly in the dialogue between the masters, names were trotted out that went completely over my head. If we're expected to remember these names later, perhaps you should try making them more memorable. The other thing I might suggest about this issue is simply avoiding such a large, unmemorable group so early in the piece. I think it would suffice to have Pen's discovery, then Master Yvole saying that he'll call a meeting of the masters. I found very little new information in that scene. That being said, I do think every plotline, on it's own, looked interesting. Pen and Dev discovering a new world. Pen trying to get a girlfriend. Lianye and Rend on a mission to replace the king (although, they should probably be keeping a lower profile, if they don't want to get caught.) In short, I think the story has great potential, with the main thing being coherence - getting your readers to be able to take in all the information you want and need them to for the story.

Having read Chapter 1 & 2 together, I found a few slight clashes, but I presume that that was due to editing you made to the first chapter. I think you've done a great job with setting up the opening of the story. You have a clear internal an external conflict set up, ready to be set in motion. You have intrigue and mystery set up about the protagonist's past, and have me wanting to read more. One thing that I think was the biggest issue with the story so far was the bullies in the village. They seem to have no - originality to them. I do this myself sometimes, but you should try and find a way of giving some depth to those characters. Maybe you should give those characters some reason to hate the character, rather than something vague about not fitting in because she wasn't born in the village. Maybe some specific event that caused (I think the name was Violet?? I don't have the book in front of me) to stop being friends with Willow. But the rest I thought was absolutely great. You have a professional level writing style, a hint of an interesting story to come, and I would definitely buy this book if I had read a preview of it.

P.S. Maybe I should get an actual 'information' ring set up. You PM me with something that isn't publicly known, and I PM something back. However, I'm not sure whether this is within rules. Venture, this is your RP. Is that allowed? Also, yea or nay on the official group (as opposed to just pairs)?

If you want more of a coherent anti-crime organization going, you could have Kaythus set up an official group, as a lord. Each person would be in it for a different reason. The Bard would join as the 'favour' he owes (to Kaythus, if we do this). Turos would join for the adrenaline rush. Tusurker would join so he can stay in Cosmere City and away from Roshar a little longer. (Though he wouldn't admit it, of course). Resool would join because... he feels loyal to the cause??? (Is this wildly inaccurate, Lark?) Mist would join, so... I have no idea. Any suggestions? If we aren't doing this, that's fine too. I just think it might work. EDIT: Also, isn't Ven, a.k.a. Mistkiller the bad guy? Who is Arcus?

What time period is this set? What are the limitations of including other humanly-controlled characters in your story? Is it not allowed, or allowed with restrictions? Please answer in worldbuilding thread. EDIT: Added spoiler tags.

I've never even played an RP before, so I don't think I'll host one. I might play in a few RP's first, and then come back to it.

I really need to know your second name now. My first name's Conor, by the way. It's Irish, because of my father.

My character is a black sheep of the group. Very little is known about him, and is called simply 'the Bard'. He is an informant. He will exchange one piece of useful information in exchange for a piece of equally useful information. Money seems to be of no consequence to him. His regular sanctum in Ashe(in addition to numerous bolt-holes), are very easily defensible. He has a Perfect Life Sense from his Breath, making it almost impossible for people to catch him unawares. He has also been known to work as a fence, occasionally. He can easily tell whether a painting is fake with his his 3rd Heightening. There are no known people who have any sort of relationship with the Bard beyond the professional.

Megan was right. Most of these are similes. You are just as wrong as a tomato that thinks it's a suspension bridge.

Oh, him... I vaguely remember you. You're the annoying one.

This is from Mistborn, so I'm going to spoiler tag it. Don't read it unless you have at least read the Final Empire. And, this also seemed to cause something else, once I had gotten used to Sanderson. WoR spoiler. Wrong on both counts. Oh well.

I'm sorry if I'm necro-ing this topic, but is there anything like this now? It doesn't seem to have kept on. If not, could we have something organized?

Long disclaimer for a cookie... And, as a matter of fact, I have a compulsive fear of the cookies in question. Initial reports from the lab indicate a high level of sharp, foreign objects in the cookies. They appear to be metallic. As for Eerongal's statement, who can say. The upper leaders of our forums can hardly be trusted anymore. And, did anyone notice that Eerongal's statement seemed strangely defensive??? Just having a joke, not trying to offend anyone.

Just a question. I'd like to play, but I'm still not sure what the rules are, exactly. I checked, the Sanderson Elimination rules, but they don't seem to apply to this, seeing as we know who the bad guys are. Is there going to be a 'Rules thread' sometime in the future?

I wouldn't mind being a part of it. Because everyone else has done something other than Warbreaker, I'll be a 4th Heightening Awakener. Just saying, this will be my first RP, so bear with me, if a few of my questions seem a bit silly. But, what do we do? How do we 'fight crime'? Who are the bad guys that we're versing? (Except TheSilverDragon. I don't think 6 people will have too much trouble fighting 1 person.) And, how do we decide how the battle, if there is one, went? How are such events portrayed? If there's a list somewhere for standard, canon RP rules, then could you please forward me a link?

It has come to my attention that much of the food strewn around the 17th Shard is of substandard quality. The cookies, is of particular concern. It is worrying that at this critical time, it is revealed that there is currently no food safety inspector to be found anywhere in the 17th Shard. Are we to allow many more innocent Shardlets to be taken by these substandard foods. Many people seem to have suffered from it, from particularly... spiked shaped cookies. Furthermore, I can reveal to you, that these cookies are part of a malevolent ploy to gain the trust of unsuspecting Shardlets. Immediate measure needs to be taken. I propose a food safety inspectors commitee to be created at once, so we can better prevent such tragedies occuring. I fear that many of our highest ranking on the 17th Shard may be involved in this malevolent scheme. Indeed, there are whispers that an integral role in the criminal organization that calls itself 'The Dark Alley', is none other than the 3rd highest member on the 17th Shard. Voidus himself. Should we allow this terrorist organization to continue? I think not. I propose an immediate election of a 'food safety inspector' to determine what should be done with substandard foods such as cookies. If we do not, I fear that the lives of innocent Shardlets are at risk.