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    Because that's what she does. She is a killer. I just really don't like her character, man.
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    I think that's a really clever way to use them, Storm. I'll have to consider that one more carefully.
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    I read all but the last one when I got super bored. My favourite one in the series is still the Fifth one where the demons are introduced. I bet I could still read the language pretty decently.
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    The prologues in The Belgariad are info dumps that give histories that aren't in the rest of the book. They are setting setters, really. I liked how he did those. Maybe it's not super relevant.
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    I don't know about a split system. Maybe it can be done well, but there was a series I read called Adventures Wanted that almost had a hard system of magic, but it couldn't make up its mind. It kept switching back and forth between the two and it wasn't good. I am thinking until I get better, I am going to have to stick with one or the other.
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    You know what I was disappointed in? I was extremely disappointed with Adventures Wanted. Wow, that first book had a lot of potential. You know what he did with that potential? He killed it. I was so sad about that.
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    We just post about I to annoy you mods and admins who are already aware of the situation. Edit: what up with all the down votes? That seems random to me.
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    In his world though, Tolkien put the wizards in to do everything to do everything humans couldn't for themselves. It seems very odd to me that you argue for his being harder than it is as you seem to be. Maybe I don't understand your point, though.
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    As long as you know the limitations, it's good. Magic shouldn't be used like it was so often in LotR. P.S. You should probably read a Sanderson book or two. It actually amazes me that you have managed to get through a month in this writing group without doing so.
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    Okay, so what some of you are saying is that they shouldn't be necessary to the story and should just be behind the scenes things? The rest of you seem to be saying that it should be if it's included. The way I use them is to info dump and to help explain a thing that is going to happen later in the story. The Assassination Letters, as they are called in my book, give a character the inspiration he needs to set up the assassination of someone. He uses them as a justification. I can't have them in any other place in the story so far, so I put them in epigraphs.
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    Um.... Why? I get emotionally compelled, but legally obligated? Lol What makes you say that?
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    That is exactly the point I tried to make, but I didn't have the words! I'm so glad someone understands whalers I'm coming from when I say his voice is being immigrated. It's the style of story telling! Haha! Yes! Up vote for you, sir.
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    Kaladin and Vin would be more interesting to talk about. The general consensus here is that Vin would win, so what if she faced Kaladin?
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    Just so you know where I'm coming from with this post: I don't like Shallan. She is a brat that was given power to manipulate people. I hate what she did to her father father and I hate her rashness in going to steel from Jasnah. That being said, I think she will end up killing Adolin and at least one of her brothers.
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    Do you mean Ben Stiller is the Stormfather and Morgan Freeman is the Almighty?
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    This is because of someone remarking on the necessity of epigraphs in one of the critiques they did of one of my submissions. They pointed out that epigraphs might not be as necessary for the progression of storylines as we may think and it's an overused style here on the forum. I know for my novel I'm working on, it's a way for me to introduce information to the readers that would be awkward for me to otherwise, but for a lot of people it's different. Why do you use epigraphs? Why should you use epigraphs? Those are questions I want answers to when y'all get to it. Can you take epigraphs out of the story and have it still make sense without a whole ton of explaining? That's a question you should ask yourself before putting one in.
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    Why, thank you! What you are describing is the difference between a hard and soft magic system. A hard magic system has its rules clearly defined for the reader, while a soft one is a Deus ex Machiana (spelling?) feel to it. It can solve any problem because its parameters are infinity. A good example of this is Harry Potter. I hate Harry Potter's magic system so much because there are no clear rules on what can and can't be done. Every time some rules are set, they are contradicted. A good example of a hard magic system is, of course, Allomancy. It has limitations and the reader knows them. It also has loopholes that the author can exploit. It's super awesome that way.
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    All right. You are setting the same trap for yourself that the author of Adventures Wanted set for himself. You are building up a main character extremely quickly with all of these insanely powerful powers. When you are done setting her up with all of them, where does she go from there? How does she grow? In Mistborn, once Vin was a crazy good Mistborn she advanced to Godhood. Where will your main character advance to? Keep in mind the try/fail cycle. You've got to make this believable. Other than that, I'm really enjoying reading every submission. I want to get back to that one school thing you set up earlier. That was interesting Keep up the good work!
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    Granted. It is taken from your reputation points, casting you into the far negatives. I'm sorry it had to be this way. I wish for a letter. Preferably an "o" costing just a nickel.
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    When all you talk about is Brandon Sanderson. And Brandon Sanderson.
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    Yeah, sure. That works.
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    Thank you very much for even taking the time to go through this! I will go through some day and try to fix all the typos, but I am a Gardener. If I go back too often, I get stuck. I have to keep going with the story, or I will get bored out of my mind. The similarity to Mistborn is uncanny now that I step back and look at it. It's probably bbecause I was reading it at the time I wrote the chapter. Bellow is the reason for Jacks paying Kyd any attention. Look if you want. Edit: Thanks for the advice on the typo thing. I'll proofread my submissions for those after this week.
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    So, what's the bane? You only live in those worlds and can never get back to the real world. I wish for a nice hammer.
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    It means exactly what it says. Just think about having a cohesive form of a song between your toes. Granted, but they are all koloss and they kill your other life. I wish that I had a time machine.
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    Granted, but you now get songs stuck between your toes and you can't control them. I wish to hold the powers of Odium and Honor together.
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