Lindel he/him Posted December 24, 2020 Report Share Posted December 24, 2020 (edited) I wrote the first verse for a song/rap based around the opening song from Hamilton, Alexander Hamilton. I might come back and write some more verses. Let me know if you have any suggestions for improving this verse or what to do with the other verses! (I originally had the line corresponding to "What's your name, man?" as "What's your name, gon?" But it didn't rhyme with "Kaladin, Knight Radiant" or with "what little strength I haven't spent," so I decided to switch it for something that fit better, even though it was fun.) I'm not totally happy with the "Keep them safe," at the end, it doesn't sound quite right, but it's the best I could come up with in the middle of the night. Which is, of course, when it came to me to write this thing. Spoiler How does a darkeyed, bridgeman, son of a surgeon With depression, dropped in the middle of a forsaken spot In the Shattered Plains, by Amaram enslaved, left impotent, go on to be a hero and a Radiant? A Windrunner, this fighter’s load ain’t gettin’ lighter Got a lot farther by working a lot harder, And being a fearless charger, Never fallin’ to the archers. For months, he kept on running, thinkin’ he’d die like a martyr And while kings were being slaughtered by the Assassin in White Across the plains, he struggled and kept his guard up Inside, he was wishing all the pain and darkness would stop The brother was ready to jump, to end it forever. Then an Honorspren came, with an invitation to stay Our man saw a glimmer of hope, turning night to day With Stormlight like the old Knights, started fighting in a new way Swore an oath in the frey, a storming brilliant display. Well, the word got around, they said, here comes a Desolation Started speaking the Ideals, like Journey before Destination. Honor may be dead, but I’ll see what I can do. All of Roshar’s gonna know about you. When you gonna relent? I’m Kaladin, Knight Radiant That’s right, I’m Kaladin, Knight Radiant And with what little strength I haven't spent I’ll keep them safe, keep them safe. EDIT: This should be in Sanderson Fan Works, sorry. Not sure if there's a way to move it. I also tweaked a few words to make some stuff sound better, and correct a couple typos. (Also, @Cheyenne Sedai and @voidlightx created a completed version, which is pretty amazing! Click here to check it out.) Edited March 2, 2021 by Lindel 16 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aspiring Writer Posted December 24, 2020 Report Share Posted December 24, 2020 1 hour ago, Lindel said: EDIT: This should be in Sanderson Fan Works, sorry. Not sure if there's a way to move it. I also tweaked a few words to make some stuff sound better, and correct a couple typos. Got you covered. (I think) 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
+JesterLavorre he/him Posted December 24, 2020 Report Share Posted December 24, 2020 This is amazing 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lindel he/him Posted December 24, 2020 Author Report Share Posted December 24, 2020 3 hours ago, JesterLavorre said: This is amazing Thanks, glad you like it! 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AonEne he/him in an enby way Posted December 24, 2020 Report Share Posted December 24, 2020 Moved to Fan Works 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kingsdaughter613 she/her Posted December 24, 2020 Report Share Posted December 24, 2020 Nice! 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eugenides Posted December 24, 2020 Report Share Posted December 24, 2020 Love this! 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cheyenne Sedai she/her Posted February 18, 2021 Report Share Posted February 18, 2021 (edited) This is amazing. Its a coincidence I found this today since we were just discussing a Stormlight version of Hamilton on the Worldhoppers Discord. Edited February 18, 2021 by Cheyenne Sedai 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Windrunner Supreme he/him Posted February 20, 2021 Report Share Posted February 20, 2021 This is Amazing! 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lesser spren Posted February 20, 2021 Report Share Posted February 20, 2021 Alternative lyrics "Kaladin Stormblessed, my name is Kaladin Stormblessed, and I can't believe I'm under so much stess.... but just you wait, just you WAIT....." 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cheyenne Sedai she/her Posted February 22, 2021 Report Share Posted February 22, 2021 I've been thinking about this a while, and I want to try my hand at completing the lyrics. Is that all right @Lindel? 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moltin he/him Posted February 23, 2021 Report Share Posted February 23, 2021 Just watched Hamilton for the first time yesterday. Gotta say this is amazing, great work! 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Argus the Awful he/him Posted February 25, 2021 Report Share Posted February 25, 2021 I love Hamilton and Kaladin, so its the perfect crossover! Good job 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lindel he/him Posted March 2, 2021 Author Report Share Posted March 2, 2021 On 2/22/2021 at 0:06 PM, Cheyenne Sedai said: I've been thinking about this a while, and I want to try my hand at completing the lyrics. Is that all right @Lindel? Yeah for sure! Sorry, I've been real busy with midterms and haven't been checking in here but yeah, I'm excited to see what you come up with! 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cheyenne Sedai she/her Posted March 2, 2021 Report Share Posted March 2, 2021 On 12/24/2020 at 0:50 AM, Lindel said: I wrote the first verse for a song/rap based around the opening song from Hamilton, Alexander Hamilton. I might come back and write some more verses. Let me know if you have any suggestions for improving this verse or what to do with the other verses! (I originally had the line corresponding to "What's your name, man?" as "What's your name, gon?" But it didn't rhyme with "Kaladin, Knight Radiant" or with "what little strength I haven't spent," so I decided to switch it for something that fit better, even though it was fun.) I'm not totally happy with the "Keep them safe," at the end, it doesn't sound quite right, but it's the best I could come up with in the middle of the night. Which is, of course, when it came to me to write this thing. Reveal hidden contents How does a darkeyed, bridgeman, son of a surgeon With depression, dropped in the middle of a forsaken spot In the Shattered Plains, by Amaram enslaved, left impotent, go on to be a hero and a Radiant? A Windrunner, this fighter’s load ain’t gettin’ lighter Got a lot farther by working a lot harder, And being a fearless charger, Never fallin’ to the archers. For months, he kept on running, thinkin’ he’d die like a martyr And while kings were being slaughtered by the Assassin in White Across the plains, he struggled and kept his guard up Inside, he was wishing all the pain and darkness would stop The brother was ready to jump, to end it forever. Then an Honorspren came, with an invitation to stay Our man saw a glimmer of hope, turning night to day With Stormlight like the old Knights, started fighting in a new way Swore an oath in the frey, a storming brilliant display. Well, the word got around, they said, here comes a Desolation Started speaking the Ideals, like Journey before Destination. Honor may be dead, but I’ll see what I can do. All of Roshar’s gonna know about you. When you gonna relent? I’m Kaladin, Knight Radiant That’s right, I’m Kaladin, Knight Radiant And with what little strength I haven't spent I’ll keep them safe, keep them safe. EDIT: This should be in Sanderson Fan Works, sorry. Not sure if there's a way to move it. I also tweaked a few words to make some stuff sound better, and correct a couple typos. (Also, @Cheyenne Sedai and @voidlightx created a completed version, which is pretty amazing! Click here to check it out.) Aww, thanks! I'm glad you liked it 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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