8.9.21 - Moonsilver - Dreams of Devils Chapter 1 (2520 words) (D, V)

[Moonsilver]

Hey y'all, this is chapter 1 of the first draft of my first fantasy novel, Dreams of Devils. It's rough so let me know where it's in need of polishing.

Questions:

1. What do you think of Nimos? Is he a character you can ride with?

2. Does the world-building get info-dumpy at any point?

3. Is there anything you feel the chapter is lacking?

Edited August 10, 2021 by Moonsilver

[Appol PhD they/he]

Hi! I don't know if it's an issue on my end but I never got the email with the chapter and I was curious if others are having this problem. If it is just me I'm happy to DM you my email so you can resend it. Thanks! 

Edited August 12, 2021 by Ace of Hearts

[RedBlue]

Same here, @Moonsilver. I didn't receive the email. I suggest resending it to the group. Looking forward to reading it

[Silk she/her]

I can confirm that I also didn't get the submission. We've occasionally had issues with Gmail flagging RE emails as "promotional" but that doesn't seem to have been the case this time.