Thanks! The attitude was midnight!Szeth’s fault.
Plus: I forgot to mention in the OP that constructive criticism is very much encouraged. If you’ve got anything negative to say about the story (even “I didn’t like it”), by all means, say it! It’s very much a rough draft right now, apart from a few minor grammatical edits here and there.
Plus plus: If you somehow missed the tags and glaring “1” at the top of the chapter, this is the beginning of a much longer story. All of these characters are being set up for a reason, except maybe some of them who are just there.
Plus plus plus: The post title is the two titles that I’ve narrowed this story down to. I think I’m leaning towards the second, but it sounds kind of forgettable.