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    Huray. 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0 0
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    Any reasoning?
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    I still have no idea, but I said I'd vote this game, so tentative Devotary. The reasoning for their exe is sound although I don't have a gut on them, but I also don't have a gut in anyone.
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    Jerreth stood in the long line to the oathgate. A Radiant? Me? It has to be impossible, but... what if it isn't?
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    That's not what you said in my PM* *note for people who are reading too much into this, this is a joke, not a claim.
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    \/\/
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    Books in the devotary of reading?
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    "That's not you. Attin, remember our deal, or we will finally see which of us is stronger." He leaps from the ground, creating another crater, before transform into a black and red dragon. The dragon flew away before anyone could respond. @Fallapede
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    "Until we meet again." Borutan turned to Rawiya. "And until we meet again Lifted," he said with a sneer.
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    What about Illwei @ ing you? As far as we know she has voted on a elim every first cycle for a while now.
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    Do you have a grudge against me? This is your second vote on me across games . My point is second round we had two people who survived the kill, one of which was pretty much guaranteed to be mistborn (and one was, if not the one I suspected the most). Then in the third round someone once again survived the kill. Having encountered one thug already the chances of them being elim were very high, so we talked about killing them and went back and forth until they claimed elim, so we killed them. Then in the fourth round we picked up the loose threads of the last round. Now we are stuck with no threads, no candidates, and no discussion.
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    Who would we vote for? I have no suspicions because we've had a prime suspect every round until now. I probably won't vote this round unless good evidence is presented.
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    Borutan's eyes narrowed, "You would ask me to let the Lifted go?" He snorted. "When you are done with her, place this tracker on her, and I will fight you no longer." He makes a necklace a broken ruby at the end and tosses it to Brute.
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    Why is this? (note: I know next to nothing about battle shock)
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    Hello, I am here. Not much analysis other than that Highstorms should be used as the double event every event cycle (meaning series of events as Mat just explained).
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    I really don't know, I would like to be in the planning PM, but I don't know if I'll be able to keep up.
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    Good! I can actually submit.
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    He sat on the rooftop, watches the flames dance on his hand, no, not flames. Light, in the shape of flames, but in his mind, as good as flames. Flickering, red, orange, a very blue purple. Entrancing.
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    I would like to pinch-hit for Archer!
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    I don't know, I got too used to having conveniently obvious suspects, and now they're all dead.
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    Like a seeker saw her seek, and therefore voted for a powerful role.
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    @Channelknight Fadran @2EmLee2 @Random Bystander @Omi the Counselor
  24. The Unknown Character
    First of all, thanks for the feedback. Now I'll respond to most of it. I will, first person seems to be much easier, so I should be using that from here on out. Thank you, I feel that fights are my biggest strength, although I do have some problems that is will be correcting. That wasn't even meant to be a reveal, but on my rewrite I think I'll lean into that I little bit more. Thinking of my plan for the book, I don't think he really stops being proactive. I don't tend to have any problems with making them proactive, giving them good goals and motivations however, that I am not good at. Thanks, I'm pretty sure that was introduced in the thirdish mental draft of this book (this is the first physical draft, and the fourth mental draft). Also, if you have problems with soft magic systems, then I'll warn you that this has a soft magic system with lots of hard magic powers. That is my biggest weakness in my opinion. I already have some fixes in mind, but please point out whenever I start doing this because my mind has these places fully imagined, but the reader doesn't. Could you explain this one better? It seems like you're saying that there aren't really stakes? I'm not sure what this means. Also, I will be making some changes to make the skill levels of the two more obvious. No context to the Melee is definitely a problem, but I don't think the lack of explanation for the term "Null-Ranks" is too important. I might step it down to a normal noun because it's an equivalent to a army recruit in training. When I make the aforementioned changes to the fight, I'm planning on having him think about this to make that seem less abrupt. I'm not really sure how to explain that, in fact, I might remove it altogether and let the reader infer it. That's partially why I switched to first person. Thanks for pointing that out, even if I have no idea how to change it, but I doubt I'll have to use that sentence in the rewrite. Before I respond, one thing about chapter two. It isn't done yet, so the might be more problems later in the chapter. Thank you, I actually free wrote that story. Some quick history on most peasants having royal blood: During the early days of this kingdom, the royals had a tendency to marry anyone for alliance, no matter their social status, eventually there was quite a bit of royal blood within most people. As they spread about the land, the amount of royal blooded people ment that within a few generations, nearly everyone had royal blood. The concept of nobles grew from the habit of amount of royal blood deciding social status. Eventually, there grew to be a group of people who had consistantly married into the royal line. Due to the amount of royal blood these people had, they had immense social standing. Over time, these people gained so much power and wealth that they were becoming dangers to the royal family. The king at the time that made anyone with a sufficient amount of royal blood a "noble" therefore being unable to inherit and therefore having to pay taxes to the main royal family. I don't plan on them being important to the story, but a sword made by the swordsmith might appear at some point. Yep, worst problem here, nice to know it gets smoother. Thanks, I really enjoyed having some unbiased advice on the book.
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