FatherTiempo

It bounced and rolled to a stop in front of FT.

I liked it. The story seemed original, I couldn't think of anything it reminded me of. I'm not sure about the name 'elumin'. It made me think of 'e' in the context of 'eBook', eBay, and 'eReader'. That could just be me though. You could capitalize it. I see fantasy authors doing that some of the time. I think Brandon Sanderson did that with his stuff like 'Soothing' and 'Breath'. I think it would add more importance to it. I liked the setting, I was thinking of The Hobbit: Battle of the Five Armies' on that icy, snowy, stone thing, where Thorin and Azog fight. Only, yours was sunny and smoky, which was cool. I definitely was hooked, and I wanted to find out how this was going to go down. Why was everyone dying? What is eluminessence? Why did the guy in the tree have the ability to get it back after it starting flowing out? Did he start this? Who was the woman? What's a Watcher? In the first paragraph, you said that '...He needs no name...' but the passage was in past tense. (you probably would have fixed that anyway, but I always have little things like that lying around in my stuff too. So, I thought I'd mention it) Some of your descriptions were a little wordy, but I end up going to opposite end and my descriptions are usually too vague, so I'm really not one to talk. I hope that this isn't too much, I just like giving out my opinions on random stuff . Again, it was really good. I definitely want to know how it turns out. @ChickenLiberty I like the idea of combining 'eluminessence' with 'Death of the World stuff'. 'The Light of the Dying' maybe?

Forced

They called it Hemawhiskey.

Attacked

Shocking

I'll definitely take Jasnah.

Victory!!! Hardy

FT brought the cake he pinched from SoT three pages ago.

Has anyone done Jasnah yet?

Allomancy

Alcatraz

Will the tournament have Rosharan's vs. Scardians in the roast battles? Then we total up the points to see if Roshar or Scadrial won?

Hlm was HIm's twin.

Drilling

FT patted HIm on the shoulder. "He's with me."

Professor

Car

Aircraft

Noooooo I've been found out.

Perspective

Point

Interesting Mammoth Nut Observation Tree Search, Under Returned Everlasting Wit, Hoid, Advancing To The Hearty Aftermath of That Last Acronym. Starting Tomorrow, Please Attack Red Tree Mammoths Anticipating Nut Sundaes. IDONTKNOWDIDTHATCOUNT

I had a streak of 17 years and now, it's just gone. sniff