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    The darkness befit Hypno. It shrouded him in its shadows, shying away sneaky eyes. He had watched the riot today with glee. Action in town meant more work for him, work he enjoyed. Usually death work. Sometimes pain. Knowing that Rainmaker was unlikely to ever provide a time until she arrived at the bridge, he had left his house as soon as the mess at the field had begun to clear up. He waited further down the river, three bodyguards around him. The other servants were locked in the house when he left, so that he could use his powers on others. One of the servants was Commanded to never let anyone leave until Hypno returned. He had never failed. Twice today, Hypno had sat on this bank. First for relaxation, second for recruitment. Both gave him pleasure. As he saw a dim glow land on the bridge he stood and Commanded his chair and body guards to follow. The chair stood and followed, back stiff. Hypno's mobile buzzed gently with Rainmaker's message. I'm here. You know how I feel about waiting. He stepped on the bridge."I do." Her "undercover" costume didn't stifle her glow too much; Hypno thought she enjoyed the attention. Glowing skin was too much. A simple purple cape was enough. Enough to distract from sleight of hand, but not too much that audiences would stare. "You have a job for me?" He asked.
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    Nope, just nope. If Frostfire ever gets abusive, she'll be out of there. Hypno post going up in 3...2...1.
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    You have to make an offering to the secret god of Photoshop.
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    There's a colored version?????
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    So could "Edgerunner."
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    No, I appreciate the opinions. It helps me keep from forcing Edgerunner into things that don't fit her character.
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    Double post, but here's a possible next paragraph. "Kahad walked away from the mask. Behind him, in the dark rain, it stared lifelessly into the sky. Raising his head, Kahad looked at the city of death. There had been a time when he had thought it was a city of dreams, but the illusion had vanished and now he saw the truth of Al-Sarim: darkness never fades. When the sun rises, darkness only retreats to more hidden corners, but still lingers, spreading again as the sun falls. Kahad had been the sun. He had struggled to penetrate the darkness, and once finished, he had learned that simple truth of darkness. As the sun fell, so now did Kahad."
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    Part of what I'm thinking is that Frostfire will be an example to her why she should choose Flashpoint once she meets him. She'll realize that not all men are angry and violent and require her to calm them down.
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    Yes, definitely. This relationship will be an interesting parallel to Emma's previous one. Now she can escape quickly if she needs to and is stronger mentally than she used to be.
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    Good. I think I'm still gunning for that one. But Lieutenant Frostfire adding some conflict might be fun too.
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    Neither are Aonar and I. Don't forget the Epic army plans after she goes to Portland.
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    Almost. Emma can calm him down. I highly doubt she can stop Obliteration. And there's that pesky age difference.
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    He's not a creepy old minister bent on world destruction though.
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    Plots? I didn't realize that was slang for anything... Thanks, guys. Any continued advice is welcome. I'll also be posting in the "Man of the Mask" topic with my current story if you would like to help me out there.
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    Thank you, Adamir! That means a lot. Thanks, and I see what you mean. I planned on only the first paragraph having this impersonal feel and with that last line transitioning into a close third person. I do need to clean up some of the sentence structures though. The voice would come into play much more in the next paragraph, which once I write, I'll put here as well to get your opinion. I wanted to try something different with the structure and tone of these first two paragraphs. Thanks, I'll check that out. Thanks, guys, for this feedback!
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    Yeah, they basically are more resistant, which fits with Brandon's answer in the AMA. He can't control as many people if he is controlling an Epic. Woah, nope. Edgerunner is not getting shipped with Obliteration.
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    So I decided today to begin a story that I have the inspiration for the main character. Here's the very first paragraph I've written. Tell me what you think, and I would appreciate pure honesty here. I need to work on my writing more. "The hand let fall the mask. The mask which had rarely parted with the face for years. Its resounding clunks rang out in the empty dark. Rain filled the scars gouged in the face of the mask, whose twins lined the face of the man. The face which now turned towards the ground. Wet, dark hair hung to curtain the face from the world. A feeble barrier. Years of blackness had shown that the world was darker than any night. The mask had been a shield as much as an empowerment. The man of the mask had fallen. Kahad was only a man, and now he accepted it." Edit 1: Second Paragraph: "Kahad walked away from the mask. Behind him, in the dark rain, it stared lifelessly into the sky. Raising his head, Kahad looked at the city of death. There had been a time when he had thought it was a city of dreams, but the illusion had vanished and now he saw the truth of Al-Sarim: darkness never fades. When the sun rises, darkness only retreats to more hidden corners, but still lingers, spreading again as the sun falls. Kahad had been the sun. He had struggled to penetrate the darkness, and once finished, he had learned that simple truth of darkness. As the sun fell, so now did Kahad." Edit 2: Current Version:
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    I get inspiration for characters' personalities or motivations or a bit of an arc all the time. It comes through songs or quotes or little things like that. But I have the hardest time coming up with original plots and that's the main reason I've never finished an original work or even got very far, for that matter. I don't know what it is, but I have huge mental lists of potential characters, just no stories to put them in. How do you guys come up with plots?
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    Honestly, it took me a second to notice the difference, but I'd say the one on the right.
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    I'm excited too! What a jerk, never telling Hypno a time and then mad because he's late. Eh, he deserves it.
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    Yeah, the basic version seems pretty...interesting. I mean, even the rule about who goes first is determined by "who pooped last".
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    Not Dalinar? I can never decide between him and Kaladin. Ooh, but Vin never has been and probably never will be one of my favorites. If you could be either a Mistborn, Awakener, an Elantrian, or a Radiant, which would you choose? If you finish, I'd love to read it! I think you gave me just about everything else you wrote at that point.
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    So, based on what I read, this looks similar to Apples to Apples. Is that correct? This looks awesome!
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    That angry one is one I've wanted often. XD would be nice too.
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