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https://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=DuBe1Xhv8NM#t=1611 I'm guessing this is the meaning.

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I believe this is it. "It leaned over. Vin knelt, feeling where it gestured. There, in the frost, she thought she made out the distinct impression of a footprint. But that was impossible. Did the Spirit make it? She wondered. But that was the print of a boot." http://brandonsanderson.com/mistborn-2-alternate-ending-part-two/ http://www.theoryland.com/intvmain.php?i=428#58 http://www.theoryland.com/intvmain.php?i=428#102

How awesome are ferrets? If a ferret somehow became an Epic, what would its powers be? If a Windrunner ferret were to fight a Mistborn cat, who would win?

Some comments: It's slow going, being ice. I think “having a body of ice” or some variant would fit better here. At least I am alive and sentient and still breathing I think this sentence would be stronger without “and sentient” Perhaps, more detail on his surroundings would be nice. For example, “then decide to move on” Where is he moving to or from? I think this is a pretty cool concept. Very ice job.

http://www.theoryland.com/intvmain.php?i=1108#19 Q: When Hoid was talking to Dalinar, he seemed to expect that Dalinar had heard of Adonalsium. Why would he think that? A: He thought that Dalinar was part of some of the secret societies on Roshar. And he had thought his way into thinking Dalinar was part of them and that was how Dalinar was knowing certain things. Which he really wasn't he was getting them from the storms and things like this. But he thought that Gavilar had confided things in Dalinar. That Dalinar would know more about this. So he was kind of testing to see. And he was wrong.

George is, of course, an awesome name. My favorites are Isaiah, Alexa, Aaron, and Aliyah. This post is brought to you by the letter A.

There's this: http://www.17thshard.com/forum/topic/2622-elantrians-as-shardholders/ From that thread: At the recent Idaho Falls book signing I asked Brandon if there was any difference between the magic that exists in Elantris and The Emperors Soul and the magic that existed before the shards on Sel were splintered. He said that "The things that they do in those books, couldn't have been done pre-splintering. They could do different things back then but not what is in the books."

Gemeti gave the name they had come up with… This line should probably be cut. Gemeti gives the name here and a few sentences down, she gives the name again. Kisare hoped Bel would recognize the name of the old slave who escaped every year. She wondered if Mulagun was still alive. Probably, now that Aricaba-Ata had traveled to the capital as well. Maybe he would escape for good without the old master watching over him. This should be its own paragraph. Gemeti paused, and Kisare almost bumped into her. "What is it?" The dialogue should be its own paragraph as well and maybe a tag could be added. At first I thought Gemeti said that. Kisare felt her face pale at how easily the woman uncovered her deception. This plan would never work--Mistress Arahuna was only one of the staff, not a powerful noble. They didn't even know where Hbelu was and she didn't dare ask without the woman figuring the plan out. This should be its own paragraph. "What is your intention in coming here, Gemeti?" Dialogue tag this for clarity Kisare blinked in surprise as her traveling companion wheeled around. Own paragraph Lychee for changing mass She thinks mass here, but says weight earlier. Olive for…what? She hadn't found that one out yet. I seem to remember that Gemeti told them all the powers. Did you change this or am I remembering wrong?

"Preservation, as a Shard, is about preserving life, people, and the like. Not about self. No more than Ruin is about destroying self, or Cultivation is about growing herself." http://www.reddit.com/r/Fantasy/comments/k0fp8/iama_professional_fantasy_novelist_named_brandon/c2gkc70 I don't believe Odium hates himself, based on this quote. It's likely that he hates everything else though.

I don't know if this counts, but it's awful and embarrassing. The cover of Mistborn re-imagined!: I'm going to write this book...someday. There will be bears and ferrets.

Kinda quiet today. Strange. Anyways… I think I need to reread the previous chapters. I almost forgot about Hbelu. Both Samsu-Iluna-Nur-Sibi and Samsu-Iluna-Nur-Ishta enjoy the presence of new flesh around the palace. This way they will not have to share." Sounds ominous. The palace sounds pretty cool. According to the rhyme, it 'increased the senses,' but which one for her? More importantly, would she have a choice? She had never actively tried choosing before. Her thumb absently rubbed the stump of her little finger. Best not to risk it. I’m not entirely sure what “She had never actively tried choosing before.” means. Is this in reference to the cherry or something else? The characterization is very good. I know I’ve mentioned before, the contrast between the sisters is well done.

Words of Radiance is my favorite book by Brandon, the best he's written so far in my opinion. If you loved The Way of Kings I would suggest Words of Radiance next. If you want to take a break from massive thousand pagers, I would say Elantris then the Mistborn Trilogy. They're all great honestly.

Q: If atium isn’t a regular metal then why are there atium mistings? B: They were designed and created specifically to do what they did. Remember this is-- Preservation and Ruin were able to influence the world and rewrite people’s spiritual DNA. http://www.17thshard.com/forum/topic/5177-worldbuilders-streamed-writing/page-2#entry89033 Is that it?

Interesting beginning, I like the concept. 2 things: I had spoken before gravity slid my head free, breaking pertinent electrical impulses in my spinal cord. "Why are they called Otter Pops?" I think this would make more sense with the dialogue first.

"Kelsier froze. It was so subtle he almost missed it. Vin was Soothing his emotions." From chapter 11, page 212 of the paperback.

The pacing is a little off. Things happen too quickly with Khanni. I looked at chapter 13 and you have this line: Gemeti told them what the Fruit did for all five hair colors, and it sounded like the most powerful of the Fruits, at least to Kisare. Showing Gemeti telling them that, instead of summarizing it, could work to explain a lot.

Kisare and Belili are opposites in a lot of ways and I like how it’s shown. grounvbd I like the worldbuilding in this section. Abolitionists sound like fun. There are a few too many breaks. Some of the sections could probably be merged together. The sisters are a bit passive here. I’m hoping that will change when they get to Karduniash.

It took about a month for him to send it to me, so you might have to wait a bit.

.The way this starts it’s not very clear whose viewpoint this chapter is in. She was familiar with her hair being bleached, and dying wasn't too different. I know this is just a typo, but it made me laugh. Why did he have to get caught? He could have rescued either her or Bel, but no, he had to be self-sacrificing and let them go free. It was infuriating. This made me laugh too. I knew someone was going to discover them, comes from reading too much. Gemeti is interesting and very confusing. Looking forward to learning more about her. I like the contrast between Kisare and Bel. I think it works well with the switching viewpoints. Looking forward to finding out what happens nexta

I don't really have much more to add. I agree with rdpulfer about Belili. She doesn't seem to care about what they're doing. Anyways, I'm liking the story so far.

I’m not sure about Nidintu showing up, giving them their quest, and then disappearing. I think I’d prefer it if they came to a decision on their own. Also, it’s kind of weird that Nidintu would give them the more difficult job when she’s probably more qualified (I could be wrong). Anyways, that was the only thing that stood out for me. I really like the rest.

I don't think it's too complex. Did those comments mention specifically what wasn't working for them (too many powers, not enough explanation, etc.)? As far as I understand: A person with a certain hair color takes a bite out of a certain fruit and as long as the juice holds flavor (the more they use the power, the more the flavor fades) they gain a power that is determined by the hair color and type of fruit. 6 fruits and 5 hair colors (if I'm remembering correctly).

This part was great. A few things: She hardly paid attention to the landscape for the next while, she was so incensed, until she dabbed at her forehead and found her fingers wet with sweat. She wasn't just hot from anger. She loosened the leather vest the Asha-Urmana had given her, letting the cotton shirt underneath breathe. She had seen the fluffy plant it was made from around the troop's village, but didn’t think much of it before getting the shirt. It was a weed around the Aricaba plantation. All those seeds and gristle in it--how could anyone do anything with it? But the inventive Asha-Urmana had a little hand-cranked machine that rolled the plant fiber into usable strips. The seeds popped right out the back. If she had to pick something she missed about their brief new home, it was all the curious machinery the Asha-Urmana owned. So much more…civilized than the nobles. I think it would flow better if this paragraph was cut. I think the characters should get to know Zikar better, so it’ll have a greater impact when he gets killed. It doesn’t have to be much, just enough to make a reader care. I agree that more action for Hbelu would be nice. I liked: Kisare vs Hbelu Kisare struggling with the idea of being free. The magic fruit (I really like the magic system. Though I’m not sure if apple/orange/etc should be capitalized.)

My random thoughts as I was reading this. This is the first chapter I’ve read so I’m likely missing some things. She and the warrior looked nothing alike, yet were similar in intent. Zikar seemed to look everywhere at once, his saber held loosely but at the ready, though Kisa couldn't imagine anything sneaking up on them out here in the middle of nowhere. Is “the warrior’ supposed to refer to Zikar? Maybe have an action or piece of dialogue that brings him to Kisare’s attention. Or something as simple as: “Zikar walked beside her. The two looked nothing alike, yet were similar in intent.” Or something like that. In the beginning maybe have more action than just walking. Maybe have Kisare start up a conversation with Nidintu or Zikar--they seem kind of quiet. "When will we take a rest?" Bel called out behind her. Kisare rolled her eyes. Like a pampered noble. This reads kind of awkwardly. Maybe change “like a pampered noble” into an in character thought like: She sounds just like a pampered noble. Or something like that. The beginning is a bit slow. More action/dialogue would be nice. The descriptions themselves are well written but they could flow better. I was much more interested in the second half, after they stop walking. I like Bel’s character and the conflict between her and Kisare. I really like how Kisare stops herself from helping at first (at the camp). Nidintu and Zikar seem like very quiet people. I’d like to get to know them better. How is Hbelu pronounced?