The Iconar Collective (OUTDATED)

[Channelknight Fadran]

My writing in a nutshell:

 

[Frustration]

8 hours ago, Channelknight Fadran said:

My writing in a nutshell:

 

I feel like that will be me, whenever I get to that.

I have started outlining though.

Edited August 24, 2020 by Frustration

[Channelknight Fadran]

3 minutes ago, Frustration said:

I fell like that will be me, whenever I get to that.

I have started outlining though.

Good for you! I'll read whatever it is you write.

Also, a PSA for everyone regarding my book:

 

Edit: I'll go back and fix that eventually.

Edited August 23, 2020 by Channelknight Fadran

[Frustration]

Thanks @Channelknight FadranFadran same to you.

[Channelknight Fadran]

@Danex you wouldn't believe how much I miss you peer-editing these things.

[dannnex male]

3 hours ago, Channelknight Fadran said:

@Danex you wouldn't believe how much I miss you peer-editing these things.

Ill start doing them again, trust me. It’s just hard to do long messages like that on mobile. Once I have a reliable way to use the shard on a computer I’ll review em all. I’d be happy to offer short insights if there’s something specific you want input on though.

[Channelknight Fadran]

5 minutes ago, Danex said:

Ill start doing them again, trust me. It’s just hard to do long messages like that on mobile. Once I have a reliable way to use the shard on a computer I’ll review em all. I’d be happy to offer short insights if there’s something specific you want input on though.

Thanks a bunch!

[+JesterLavorre she/they]

I love this! The world is so interesting. It feels like a lot of typical tropes blended into something new and much better. So far I’m not super hooked on Corrin, but Lacy and Aurora and their plot is really interesting. I’m excited to see where it goes. 

A few thoughts:

• Your lore drops are done so well. You make me really excited to learn more about the world. I’m especially interested in the relationship between the fey, demons, and humans.
• You wrote Lacy being tired really well. I can really put myself in her state of mind there. I feel like there’s something more to this than meets the eye.
• I like the idea of the d&d style class system, but it leaves me wondering how it works in a larger army, not just smaller units. However, whenever a character uses the word “fighter” it pulls me out of the story a little. It just feels kind of weird to me that it’s an official classification in an army.
• It’s a little strange to me that Charles picked out Lacy and Aurora to bully so quickly. Are they the only commoners here? It just felt like non-nobility were common in the magic school, and that Charles picks on the two so specifically. Just something I feel like I would want more explanation on.
• What going on with Dain? I love this mystery. It hooked me immediately.

• On 7/28/2020 at 2:57 AM, Channelknight Fadran said:

  I wanted to develop the fact that they only really had each other to rely on. I also want to build up a "life is easy" thing for the two of them by having a bunch of helpful people so I can BRUTALLY SHATTER THAT later on with a massive plot twist that I dare not mention here.

  Hype! 

[Channelknight Fadran]

2 hours ago, JesterLavorre said:

I love this! The world is so interesting. It feels like a lot of typical tropes blended into something new and much better. So far I’m not super hooked on Corrin, but Lacy and Aurora and their plot is really interesting. I’m excited to see where it goes.

So you're like me, then (Corrin is secondary; Aurora queen over all).

2 hours ago, JesterLavorre said:

Your lore drops are done so well. You make me really excited to learn more about the world. I’m especially interested in the relationship between the fey, demons, and humans

I'm glad you like them! I was worried that they were a little too forced sometimes. (Also, fey/demon/human relationships are going to get a lot more complicated...)

2 hours ago, JesterLavorre said:

• You wrote Lacy being tired really well. I can really put myself in her state of mind there. I feel like there’s something more to this than meets the eye

Thanks! That was one of the more difficult chapters to write... not because I can't write tired people, but rather because I was exhausted when I was writing it.

2 hours ago, JesterLavorre said:

• I like the idea of the d&d style class system, but it leaves me wondering how it works in a larger army, not just smaller units. However, whenever a character uses the word “fighter” it pulls me out of the story a little. It just feels kind of weird to me that it’s an official classification in an army.

I could probably go back and change that. It's not my favorite term either.

2 hours ago, JesterLavorre said:

• It’s a little strange to me that Charles picked out Lacy and Aurora to bully so quickly. Are they the only commoners here? It just felt like non-nobility were common in the magic school, and that Charles picks on the two so specifically. Just something I feel like I would want more explanation on.

2 hours ago, JesterLavorre said:

• What going on with Dain? I love this mystery. It hooked me immediately.

!!!

2 hours ago, JesterLavorre said:

• Hype! 

It'll be less hype when you read it eventually.

[Bearer of all agonies he/him]

Dain! 

[Channelknight Fadran]

45 minutes ago, Bearer of all agonies said:

Dain! 

You got me to laugh. Have an upvote.

[Bearer of all agonies he/him]

I just finished reading the first nine chapters-Amazing! They were so interesting. You worldbuilding is awesome and I love your characters. Especially Dain. He acts tough and disciplined, which keeps the squad in check, but he is also kind and helpful. I like how you introduced Aurora and Lacy’s age. Instead of just stating it you brought it into the story by saying:  
‘Aurora looked up at the person standing at the door. Minshyl was probably a year younger than Aurora—thirteen, perhaps; around Lacy’s age’. Your plot line is good so far and all the characters have deep personalities. Wow. This is great. You could easily publish this. 

Edited August 26, 2020 by Bearer of all agonies

[Mat he/him]

1 minute ago, Bearer of all agonies said:

I like how you introduced Aurora and Lacy’s age. Instead of just stating it you brought it into the story by saying:  

Agreed here. I know I always have a somewhat difficult time introducing things like that in a not awkward way, and only partially succeed.

Dain is my favorite as well, by the way. 

1 hour ago, Channelknight Fadran said:

You got me to laugh. Have an upvote.

So I don't know what this means  

[Channelknight Fadran]

15 minutes ago, Bearer of all agonies said:

I just finished reading the first nine chapters-Amazing! They were so interesting. You worldbuilding is awesome and I love your characters. Especially Dain. He acts tough and disciplined, which keeps the squad in check, but he is also kind and helpful. I like how you introduced Aurora and Lacy’s age. Instead of just stating it you brought it into the story by saying:  
‘Aurora looked up at the person standing at the door. Minshyl was probably a year younger than Aurora—thirteen, perhaps; around Lacy’s age’. Your plot line is good so far and all the characters have deep personalities. Wow. This is great. You could easily publish this. 

Thanks a bunch! I've always hated introducing a characters age by telling it (though I kind of did that for Corrin...), probably because I tended to start my first stories by physically describing the main character (like an idiot).

12 minutes ago, Matrim's Dice said:

Agreed here. I know I always have a somewhat difficult time introducing things like that in a not awkward way, and only partially succeed.

Dain is my favorite as well, by the way. 

So I don't know what this means  

I mean that you just yelled "Dain" and it made me laugh, so I upvoted the post.

[Bearer of all agonies he/him]

On 8/22/2020 at 4:43 PM, Channelknight Fadran said:

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Garnell laughed. “Ah, Corrin. Rule-abiding as always. We already found their camp, and we already have a strategy.”

He looked up, shocked. “What? But the rules—”

“Are less rules, and more of guidelines.” Dain interrupted. 
 

 

Which reminded me of this:

Spoiler

Iconar Collective Memes! 

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Corrin clapped his hands together. “Alright. What are we waiting for then?”

In the distance, a bell rang.

Dain thumbed back at Camp Thunder. “That. Let’s get cracking, boys.”

Lol

Edited August 26, 2020 by Bearer of all agonies

[Channelknight Fadran]

1 minute ago, Bearer of all agonies said:

 

 

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Iconar Collective Memes! 

 

In all my daydreams and hopes of being an author... having Iconar Collective memes was never one of them.

[Bearer of all agonies he/him]

Well you are famous now, so you can expect them.

Chapters 10-11 are awesome! Thank you so much for sharing them with us! 

[DramaQueen she/he/neopronouns]

On 7/10/2020 at 5:51 PM, Channelknight Fadran said:

    As they left, she could hear the strange merchant laughing quietly to himself.

    “What do you say, Icona? Channelgirl or no?”

Is this a Fadran I smell?

[Channelknight Fadran]

13 minutes ago, DramaQueen said:

Is this a Fadran I smell?

I don't know what you smell 

[Frustration]

13 minutes ago, Channelknight Fadran said:

I don't know what you smell 

Well it isn't Frustration,

*Cries*

[DramaQueen she/he/neopronouns]

13 minutes ago, Channelknight Fadran said:

I don't know what you smell 

Is that or is that not my main Channelknight man Fadran?

[Channelknight Fadran]

38 minutes ago, Frustration said:

Well it isn't Frustration,

*Cries*

Ace? Are you OK? (Can I call you Ace?)

37 minutes ago, DramaQueen said:

Is that or is that not my main Channelknight man Fadran?

That's a Tier 11 Secret--only the author may know.

[DramaQueen she/he/neopronouns]

4 minutes ago, Channelknight Fadran said:

That's a Tier 11 Secret--only the author may know.

*anger*

 

Edited August 26, 2020 by DramaQueen
...yup

[Mat he/him]

1 minute ago, DramaQueen said:

*amgr*

Pretty sure it is. In his 'About me' section he mentions that Fadran is a bit like Hoid in his book, so the merchant I would say is Fadran, for sure.

[DramaQueen she/he/neopronouns]

My thoughts exactly! Yet, he won't confirm my suspicions.

@Channelknight Fadran, how do you pronounce Geniora?

Edited August 26, 2020 by DramaQueen