Comatose he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 Comatose, who is Reflection? I thought he was Malevolence, Although i may be wrong. I haven't studied the thread as much as i should have, i just happened to notice that. Right! I'll add that to my list of edits! Also, thanks for the comments. Like I said, I'm fine with this canon stuff (it's important to me that my post fits), it was just a lot of it, after a lot of no commenting, and I kind of let it get to me. I'll figure out hogwarts houses when I get the chance. Right now I need to go make pizza!!
Blackhoof Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 I really liked the post Coma just the weakness thing mainly is a tiny issue
Comatose he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 It's a rather big issue actually, and I'll freely admit it, I just wanted to know what people thought about the rest. Glad you enjoyed it!
Voidus Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 On the houses front:PP would be in all of the houses of course Impact is probably in Ravenclaw, MV in SlytherinScribbler would be a GryffindorI don't really know that the Adventurer would fit in any houseBioterror would probably go for SlytherinI don't think I've ironed Cornucopia out enough to really tell but probably slytherin or HufflepuffSoulcaster would be a RavenclawAnd Metronome would of course be the headmaster 1
Edgedancer he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 First of all the answer from the AMA question I asked (I also added something about Obliteration's usual MO) It is possible for him to have named himself that. He does not destroy every town. More in book 3. So apparently Epics can really name themselves anything they want, even if it's actuially the name of a pony completely opposite to their powers. Also Obliteration confirmed for book 3. In that Case, I'm definitely Slytherin. And so is Rainbow Dash come to think. Corpsemaker: Try to recruit him, then try to kill him, then <REDACTED> Interestingly enough, Corpsemaker has a pretty decent chance of killing Obliteration, assuming he knows how to best choke people. Well, I regretted having to do this, but I have to withdraw from the RP. It's not like I've done anything anyway, but I still felt that I should let you guys know. RL stuff is getting crazy right now, and I don't really have the passion for this anymore. Sorry.Ozymandias: Feel free to have him killed by Arsenal or something. Whoever wants to kill him, just PM me and we can work out a battle or something.Nightshade and Midnight Tears: I'll PM Aonar with the weaknesses and other relevant info and he can go from there.Chef: (my favorite character ) Totally irrelevant to the story. Shouldn't matter a bit. Good bye, you shall be missed.
Mailliw73 he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 So, for final critique, the edits I will be adding to my next post are as follows (please chime in if you have anything to add): 1. Rainmaker's Segment: Hypno gets in a single command "Stop." Perhaps see Insight hesitate for half a second as he fights the command before going fully immaterial. Maybe tighten up the time frame a little bit. 2. Euphoria's Segment: Mention Insight barely escaping from Hypno's grasp, and establish that they have fled the immediate area and are out of earshot. 3. Flashback Sequence - Add in some time for Euphoria to figure out her weakness, establish that she did not know it automatically. I think that's the sum of all the issues with it, but again, please let me know if anyone has something to add, or if I still need to split the post or anything. I guess I got a bit ahead of myself, I was just really excited to get writing I guess. Also, as a side note, if people have time and feel up to it, I would really like some thoughts and some more general feed back on the post if possible (beyond continuity issues). I felt really good writing it, but the spending the rest of the day in silence on here, and then doing all this revision work (which I'm fine with doing!) has killed my confidence a little. I understand that I'm being self-indulgent here, and that there are a lot of other posts and things to talk about, but I would really appreciate it. The thoughts and feed-back doesn't have to be positive either, I'd just like to have more of an idea of what people think of it. I also get that it was pretty long, and understand if some people have not had time to read it all yet. Thanks for this, and for all the help with revisions! I'll try to get those done today or tomorrow, and get a morning post up (including Princess GOOD's debut) tomorrow. That all sounds good to me. Like I said before, I really enjoyed the post. Insight and Euphoria are two of my favorites to read because I love getting the backstory slowly and seeing it build up to the present confrontation. This helped clarify that a lot. I'll sort my characters tomorrow probably, it'll take a good bit of time for all the kens I've ever POVd for. 1
Tyson Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 It's a rather big issue actually, and I'll freely admit it, I just wanted to know what people thought about the rest. Glad you enjoyed it! Thought the writing was brilliant. Especially the flashbacks. Dont beat yourself up, I've read through all of the Oregon threads and that was one of the best posts. Right up there with Kochei the Deathless, Backtrack and a few others.
Voidus Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 (edited) A day in the life of the Amputee: Greetings reader, statistically speaking you are probably a regular human, living in a world ruled by chaotic despots with superpowers who annihilate entire city blocks when they're feeling a bit grouchy and entire cities when they're annoyed. This is the diary of someone who has it much worse than you. I am the Amputee and this is my day...My day began typically enough, I rose from my bead and climbed through the pile of twenty or so corpses that had been generated during the night as I lost a few hairs and skin flakes. Struggling through the room to the door I examined the days clothing choices, tutus featured prominently as they usually did, 10 of the 20 cloned bodies were wearing tutus of assorted colours with a wide variety of tops, although one of the clones seemed to have forgone a top entirely in favour of a bib with the words 'daddy's little princess' emblazoned across it.I began the arduous task of moving the bodies out of my room and into the shed where I kept them. Thankfully the bodies seemed to vanish after a few days or else I'd have a problem with storing my dead clones.Spending a morning shoving dead copies of yourself wearing ridiculous clothing into a shed filled with yet more dead clones of yourself is the stuff of nightmares for some people. For me it was a tuesday. And for that matter, wednesday, thursday and friday too. But today was a tuesday.Finishing the days corpse shifting I had a quick breakfast of toast, accidentally scraping my elbow on the table as I ate spawned another clone wearing nothing but a thong, cowboy hat and some truly outrageous glasses.Sighing I picked up the glasses, which at least seemed like they might sell, within seconds another pair had formed on the body, which served to keep my clone corpses constantly embarassing but at least I had an infinite source of clothing. After stockpiling a few pairs of the sunglasses I finished my breakfast and went to open my shop.Yes that's right, I'm an Epic who has to run a shop to make ends meet, what did you expect from someone who spends an hour every day shoveling his own corpse twenty times?Opening Amputees discount clothing store I sat behind the counter and waited for my first customer, I got few customers but enough to get by, a few regulars who mostly just liked the novelty of an Epic working for them for a change. A few teenagers inevitably came in to try and mock me, which forced me to choose between the humiliation of an Epic being teased by teenagers and doing nothing about it or the greater humiliation of fighting off those teenagers by throwing dead clones of myself dressed in a leotard at them.Eventually I'd opted to buy a shotgun instead which had thankfully minimised their disruptions although not completely eliminated them.The sunglasses from this morning sold out pretty quickly, people enjoying the novel look of bright green sunglasses with feathers around the rim. Most people who still made things these days focussed mostly on practicality so the novel nature of some of my wares did attract some interest. Making a note to grab a few more boxes worth of those sunglasses before that clone disappeared I closed up shop to go get lunch.Unlucky's cafe was just around the corner, something of a joke after the first three stores he'd named lucky's cafe had been destroyed during Epic fights this cafe had survived a remarkable 6 months with no damage, practically a miracle these days. I grabbed my usual pie and coke and sat outside to eat it when a shadow loomed over my table. A man in an orange cape and some strange tophat stood there glaring at me.Oh Calamity, not again."You must be the one known as the Amputee, the High Epic whose healing is said to be so great that it can heal even a single hair off his head!"How do they always find me? Why do they always find me?I already knew the answer, after I'd deprived them of their fun making fun of me in person the teenagers who had formerly harassed my store had started spreading rumours that I was some kind of super powerful High Epic. Inevitably a storm of weirdos like this had challenged me to duels, forcing me to either publicly declare how useless I was, or else try to actually fight with my incredibly useless powers."Look, I don't want to fight I'm just trying to eat my lunch here." I began."The Tangerine Crusader cares not for your lunch!" The Epic declared before sweeping off his top hat, reaching inside it and producing a large tangerine which he proceeded to throw at me. I almost didn't bother dodging it but luckily my reflexes kicked in before I'd fully registered what it was because the tangerine promptly incinerated the table behind me as well as a decent chunk of ground.Explosive citrus fruits conjuring? What the hell kind of a power is that!? I thought wildly as I dived out from my table, leaving my half-eaten pie behind.The kind that's better than making stupid looking dead clones I suppose.Sure that this guy wouldn't take no for an answer I darted around the cafe, narrowly missing several dangerous tangerines as the crazed Epic chased after me calling me a coward.I ran back to my shop and entered through the side door, just as a tangerine blew a hole in the front wall and the other Epic stood before me."Cornered at last my foe! Feel no fear though, thou ending shall be verily so swift as a thousand eagles!"Learn what words mean before you say them you idiot. And why would a thousand eagles be any swifter than one!?Resigning myself to an inevitable duel with the psychopath I put on my best 'angry Epic' face and slowly walked towards him.The Epic reached into his hat as I reached onto my head, plucking a hair out and throwing it straight at him, the clone that rapidly formed from the hair collided with the tangerine and exploded mid way between us."Ah! Most excellently blocked my wise foe, and your shield already reforms itself I-" The Epic choked off his sentence as he saw what exactly my 'shield' reformed into.A clone of me wearing high heels, denim mini-shorts and a red tube-top."What hast thou created! It is more displeasing to thine eyes than a thousand daggers!"So distracted was he that he didn't even notice me pulling a second hair from my head and flinging it at him.Surprised by the attack, the Tangerine Crusader was stuck under yet another clone, this one thankfully wearing nothing more embarassing than a full body whinnie the pooh costume."Firstly" I said, walking over and pulling out my shotgun from under the counter. "Thine means your, not my and you don't know what's displeasing to my eyes, secondly daggers are painful, not displeasing and thirdly..."I pulled the trigger, a spray of bullets entering the horrified face of the Epic and spraying blood all over my floor."Thirdly, you have terrible fashion sense." Will the Tangerine Crusader make it? Will the Amputee be able to finish his pie? Find out next time in the next installment of 'a day in the life of the Amputee' Edited July 6, 2015 by Voidus 5
Edgedancer he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 I actually found a Tumblr page that defines the Houses better than Rowling ever did. Basically…. Gryffindor: Value right and wrong, believe morality is largely instinctive and that acting on that morality is essential Ravenclaw: Also value right and wrong, but believe the truth is something you find, often disturb Gryffindors by questioning beliefs Gryffindors believe to be beyond question Hufflepuff: Value community and treating all people with respect and kindness in an effort to build a bigger and better community Slytherin: Value smaller, more tight-knit communities than Hufflepuffs, and will do anything for the people they consider "theirs" Alright, let me try this. Nighthound: Lemme see, first instinct would be Slytherin, still because villain but he lacks that whole loyality and care for loved ones, seeing as he's a complete monster and neither does he have any grand ambitions. Does complete amorality count as an instinctive morality? If so, Nighthound might actually fit more into Gryffindor. Voidgaze: Well, given her past she's still in a somewhat immature mindset, so I'm hesistant to make absolute judgement just yet but I'd say that she tends most towards Hufflepuff Lucentia: This one's easy, Slytherin, do I even need to explain? Ray: I genuinely don't know, it's not that she lacks a personality but none of the houses really fit it. Jack would fit most with Gryffinor, given that it's his strong moral code that keept him from killing most of the Dalles by now but he also needs some Ravenclaw in there, not because he questiones his morals but because he can't full trust himself not to have his judgment clouded by the corruption. Baxter: Cares about his patients and even shows care towards Epics, so that seems like a clear Hufflepuff. Shiny Sparkle: She's clearly a Slytherin and even for the "right" reasons and not simply the villain default. Deathgale:...I have no clue, again. Bloody mary: Again an easy Slytherin. The Metal is above such simple things as the fan interpretation of the Hogwarts houses. Right! I'll add that to my list of edits! Also, thanks for the comments. Like I said, I'm fine with this canon stuff (it's important to me that my post fits), it was just a lot of it, after a lot of no commenting, and I kind of let it get to me. I'll figure out hogwarts houses when I get the chance. Right now I need to go make pizza!! It's a well written post. Granted the prose isn't as artistic as something like Rothfuss' but neither is Brandon's for example, so that's hardly a problem. If I had to pick one big problem for the post I'd say it's the discrepancy between what Euphoria/Leila should know and what she knows in the post. Most of all the deal about the weakness, not only knowing it instantly but the fact that all Epics have weaknesses wasn't even common knowledge after the lorists figured it out, which was years after Steelheart's rise to power. Similair to that the concept of Rendings is completely unknow, even to David, who may be the number one Epic expert, so she really shouldn't know the term and probably more confused about what happened to her just then. 1
Voidus Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 I was sure David did know about Rendings when they were mentioned in Firefight. I could be wrong but I also think it would at least be pretty commonly believed even as just an urban legend. Rendings of Epics like Steelheart and Obliteration for example would have been pretty big news.
Blackhoof Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 Most of all the deal about the weakness, not only knowing it instantly but the fact that all Epics have weaknesses wasn't even common knowledge after the lorists figured it out, which was years after Steelheart's rise to power. yeah that is a good point as well. She would still be confused and scared that her powers didn't work on him, which would still compel her to get rid of him somehow, but i don't think she would use terminology like "weakness" or even "rending" yet. I was sure David did know about Rendings when they were mentioned in Firefight. I could be wrong but I also think it would at least be pretty commonly believed even as just an urban legend. Rendings of Epics like Steelheart and Obliteration for example would have been pretty big news. David did know about Rendings, he was the one who told us about them in Firefight. Although I don't think that the concept of a Rending would be well-known yet. In that first year of Epics transforming, how do you distinguish between what we know as a Rending and any other Epic massacre? Epics did a lot of indiscriminate massacres. For all people knew, Epics were all crazy killing machines. People probably wouldn't have connected Rendings with Epics even manifesting, they might think the Epic manifested earlier and the Rending was just their first open display of power. It wasn't until things settled down (relatively) that the uncontrolled and dream-like nature of Rendings would have become common knowledge, imo.
Edgedancer he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 I was sure David did know about Rendings when they were mentioned in Firefight. I could be wrong but I also think it would at least be pretty commonly believed even as just an urban legend. Rendings of Epics like Steelheart and Obliteration for example would have been pretty big news. Yes and no, I may have worded that a bit badly. He does know about Epics often going a bit mad after reciving their powers. What I meant more specifically is both the name and how it's about a day (at least that's the length Regalia estimated for David so it might vary with power and she went from Waterlog's) of loosing control which is then mostly forgotten once the Epic snaps out of it after which the Epic actually has a chance of not being a complete villain, aka the finer details.
RandomRevival he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 (edited) A day in the life of the Amputee: Greetings reader, statistically speaking you are probably a regular human, living in a world ruled by chaotic despots with superpowers who annihilate entire city blocks when they're feeling a bit grouchy and entire cities when they're annoyed. This is the diary of someone who has it much worse than you. I am the Amputee and this is my day... My day began typically enough, I rose from my bead and climbed through the pile of twenty or so corpses that had been generated during the night as I lost a few hairs and skin flakes. Struggling through the room to the door I examined the days clothing choices, tutus featured prominently as they usually did, 10 of the 20 cloned bodies were wearing tutus of assorted colours with a wide variety of tops, although one of the clones seemed to have forgone a top entirely in favour of a bib with the words 'daddy's little princess' emblazoned across it. I began the arduous task of moving the bodies out of my room and into the shed where I kept them. Thankfully the bodies seemed to vanish after a few days or else I'd have a problem with storing my dead clones. Spending a morning shoving dead copies of yourself wearing ridiculous clothing into a shed filled with yet more dead clones of yourself is the stuff of nightmares for some people. For me it was a tuesday. And for that matter, wednesday, thursday and friday too. But today was a tuesday. Finishing the days corpse shifting I had a quick breakfast of toast, accidentally scraping my elbow on the table as I ate spawned another clone wearing nothing but a thong, cowboy hat and some truly outrageous glasses. Sighing I picked up the glasses, which at least seemed like they might sell, within seconds another pair had formed on the body, which served to keep my clone corpses constantly embarassing but at least I had an infinite source of clothing. After stockpiling a few pairs of the sunglasses I finished my breakfast and went to open my shop. Yes that's right, I'm an Epic who has to run a shop to make ends meet, what did you expect from someone who spends an hour every day shoveling his own corpse twenty times? Opening Amputees discount clothing store I sat behind the counter and waited for my first customer, I got few customers but enough to get by, a few regulars who mostly just liked the novelty of an Epic working for them for a change. A few teenagers inevitably came in to try and mock me, which forced me to choose between the humiliation of an Epic being teased by teenagers and doing nothing about it or the greater humiliation of fighting off those teenagers by throwing dead clones of myself dressed in a leotard at them. Eventually I'd opted to buy a shotgun instead which had thankfully minimised their disruptions although not completely eliminated them. The sunglasses from this morning sold out pretty quickly, people enjoying the novel look of bright green sunglasses with feathers around the rim. Most people who still made things these days focussed mostly on practicality so the novel nature of some of my wares did attract some interest. Making a note to grab a few more boxes worth of those sunglasses before that clone disappeared I closed up shop to go get lunch. Unlucky's cafe was just around the corner, something of a joke after the first three stores he'd named lucky's cafe had been destroyed during Epic fights this cafe had survived a remarkable 6 months with no damage, practically a miracle these days. I grabbed my usual pie and coke and sat outside to eat it when a shadow loomed over my table. A man in an orange cape and some strange tophat stood there glaring at me.Oh Calamity, not again. "You must be the one known as the Amputee, the High Epic whose healing is said to be so great that it can heal even a single hair off his head!" How do they always find me? Why do they always find me? I already knew the answer, after I'd deprived them of their fun making fun of me in person the teenagers who had formerly harassed my store had started spreading rumours that I was some kind of super powerful High Epic. Inevitably a storm of weirdos like this had challenged me to duels, forcing me to either publicly declare how useless I was, or else try to actually fight with my incredibly useless powers. "Look, I don't want to fight I'm just trying to eat my lunch here." I began. "The Tangerine Crusader cares not for your lunch!" The Epic declared before sweeping off his top hat, reaching inside it and producing a large tangerine which he proceeded to throw at me. I almost didn't bother dodging it but luckily my reflexes kicked in before I'd fully registered what it was because the tangerine promptly incinerated the table behind me as well as a decent chunk of ground.Explosive citrus fruits conjuring? What the hell kind of a power is that!? I thought wildly as I dived out from my table, leaving my half-eaten pie behind.The kind that's better than making stupid looking dead clones I suppose. Sure that this guy wouldn't take no for an answer I darted around the cafe, narrowly missing several dangerous tangerines as the crazed Epic chased after me calling me a coward. I ran back to my shop and entered through the side door, just as a tangerine blew a hole in the front wall and the other Epic stood before me. "Cornered at last my foe! Feel no fear though, thou ending shall be verily so swift as a thousand eagles!"Learn what words mean before you say them you idiot. And why would a thousand eagles be any swifter than one!? Resigning myself to an inevitable duel with the psychopath I put on my best 'angry Epic' face and slowly walked towards him. The Epic reached into his hat as I reached onto my head, plucking a hair out and throwing it straight at him, the clone that rapidly formed from the hair collided with the tangerine and exploded mid way between us. "Ah! Most excellently blocked my wise foe, and your shield already reforms itself I-" The Epic choked off his sentence as he saw what exactly my 'shield' reformed into. A clone of me wearing high heels, denim mini-shorts and a red tube-top. "What hast thou created! It is more displeasing to thine eyes than a thousand daggers!" So distracted was he that he didn't even notice me pulling a second hair from my head and flinging it at him. Surprised by the attack, the Tangerine Crusader was stuck under yet another clone, this one thankfully wearing nothing more embarassing than a full body whinnie the pooh costume. "Firstly" I said, walking over and pulling out my shotgun from under the counter. "Thine means your, not my and you don't know what's displeasing to my eyes, secondly daggers are painful, not displeasing and thirdly..." I pulled the trigger, a spray of bullets entering the horrified face of the Epic and spraying blood all over my floor. "Thirdly, you have terrible fashion sense." Will the Tangerine Crusader make it? Will the Amputee be able to finish his pie? Find out next time in the next installment of 'a day in the life of the Amputee' :mellow: :mellow: :mellow: :mellow: If that is his power I don't even want to know what is his weakness, or what traumatic effect triggered It. Edited July 6, 2015 by Random_illuminati
Voidus Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 (edited) :mellow: :mellow: :mellow: He tends to have that effect on people He received some character development when I mentioned him a few threads back so I thought since I'm unlikely to introduce him in any of the current WHI's I might as well let everyone know what his day's been like. If that is his power I don't even want to know what is his weakness, or what traumatic effect triggered It. Probably not, although details of his Rending are far more disturbing. The astute reader may have noticed that I have revealed a weakness in this thread though. Edited July 6, 2015 by Voidus
RandomRevival he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 (edited) Im guessing It was the Nightmares part? I would hate to see the epic who's weakness is stockpiling clones in his shed. Edited July 6, 2015 by Random_illuminati
Voidus Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 Im guessing It was the Nightmares part? I would hate to see the epic who's weakness is stockpiling clones in his shed. I would dearly love to see the backstory of whichever Epic that is but no It was in one of the earlier 'day in the life of's. (That being said I am now scrambling to make an Epic who has that as their weakness)
Edgedancer he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 I would dearly love to see the backstory of whichever Epic that is but no It was in one of the earlier 'day in the life of's. (That being said I am now scrambling to make an Epic who has that as their weakness) The reverse Necromancer, who can only be killed when he has a skeleton in his closet (literally)?
Voidus Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 The reverse Necromancer, who can only be killed when he has a skeleton in his closet (literally)? Eerily close to the broad outline I already have going which is a necromancer who can reanimate humans but when he brings them back they have his face and act more like zombies than anything, he murdered his identical twin and is terrified of anyone ever discovering the body to the point that if anyone sees him with a dead body it activates his weakness. 1
Blackhoof Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 what an interesting idea. annoying for the Epic though.
TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her Posted July 6, 2015 Author Posted July 6, 2015 I think the Tangerine Crusader is every person who shops around noon ever. They care not for your lunch. 2
Voidus Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 I think the Tangerine Crusader is every person who shops around noon ever. They care not for your lunch. Loud and annoying? Check Interrupting the one moment you're trying to do something? Check Breaks a bunch of stuff and doesn't pay for it? Check. Irritating noon-day shopper confirmed. 1
Edgedancer he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 Loud and annoying? Check Interrupting the one moment you're trying to do something? Check Breaks a bunch of stuff and doesn't pay for it? Check. Irritating noon-day shopper confirmed. Don't forget the explosive tendencies at the tip of the hat. 1
RandomRevival he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 (edited) Eerily close to the broad outline I already have going which is a necromancer who can reanimate humans but when he brings them back they have his face and act more like zombies than anything, he murdered his identical twin and is terrified of anyone ever discovering the body to the point that if anyone sees him with a dead body it activates his weakness.Ohh that seems like the kind of nightmare-feeling character who would end up in the calamityville thread....Um...are we talking about Purple phoenix here? Edited July 6, 2015 by Random_illuminati
RandomRevival he/him Posted July 6, 2015 Posted July 6, 2015 Twist, for the Reverse necromancer, let his name be Cain. (For more creepiness)
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