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Seems fine to me. "Practice" is a noun here; "scouting" modifies it. Perhaps this structure is relatively uncommon, but I could also say "Kaladin has a lot of experience fighting with a spear," for instance.
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Do the Alethi and Shin calculate ages differently? If not, there seems to be a discrepancy: (US hardcover) Chapter 7, page 104: Shallan says, "He [Gavinor] is only a boy, not yet six." Chapter 54, page 665: Dalinar thinks, "What five-year-old wanted to go to bed?" Interlude 7, page 831: "Dalinar knelt down, showing Gavinor––a child not yet five––how to hold his practice sword." (Szeth's POV)
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Either is acceptable, but Brandon usually uses "leaped" (including later on the same page).
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US hardcover edition: Ch. 5, p. 80, paragraph 10: In "his hands, arms and the contours of his body", either the arms are not specifically his or Kaladin is using "his the contours of his body". I think I'd add another "his" before "arms". Ch. 9, p. 132, first paragraph: In "Spren manifested as larger, or more complete versions", the comma should be removed. Ch. 13, p. 178, paragraph 2: "she was feeling better by the time she finished meetings with her accountants and ministers." I think "meetings" may be an error for "meeting". Ch. 37, p. 471, paragraph 8: "It had proved the listeners for generations" I can't make sense of "proved" here. Is it perhaps meant to be "provided for", or "proved itself to", or something else? Ch. 43, p. 535, paragraph 2: "bleary eyed" should be hyphenated. Ch. 48, p. 615, paragraph 7: "didn't bestow the humans with a glance" One might bestow a glance upon someone, but not bestow a person with a glance. So perhaps "didn't bestow upon the humans a glance"? (The word I can think of that comes closest to what "bestow" is being used for here is actually "honor", but that would call to mind the Shard of Honor, so it may or may not be a good replacement.) Ch. 53, p. 659, paragraph 12: "Timbre pulsed worryingly." I wonder if this was meant to say "worriedly". Ch. 64, p. 758, paragraph 5: "it is no more unfair when the most skilled swordsman on the battlefield falls to a stray arrow." Is there meant to be a "than" after "unfair" here? Ch. 71, p. 823, paragraph 15: "here the highstorm would still be hours away from this region." "Here" and "from this region" are redundant. Ch. 92, p. 1009, paragraph 6: "human femalen writing system" I think this should say "female" rather than "femalen", since it's in reference to humans. Ch. 97, p. 1046, paragraph 5: I think "undo" should be "redo" instead. Earlier Navani "undid" the clasps in order to connect the side chambers of the vacuum tube to the center; here Raboniel is doing the opposite. Ch. 103, p. 1107, paragraph 3: "leapt" should be "leaped". Ch. 111, p. 1158, paragraph 2: "wide eyed" should be hyphenated. Ch. 117, p. 1212, paragraph 4: In "How do you think You survived that long", "You" should not be capitalized (other than small caps). Chapter 117 also has a possible example of this (page 1211, paragraph 7): "A song for a singer who could fight, but also for a soldier who wanted to lay down her sword."
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Kindle location 5701 (page 517): "But I can't turn if off". 'If' should be 'it'.
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Being dummies, I should think they are heedless of everything, but specifically of the arrangement of chairs in front of them.
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Lopen tells a two-armed Herdazian joke in chapter 35:
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Is there significance to the text color on the references doc? I also can't seem to add rows to it for whatever reason, so is it OK if I add stuff on to the bottom? (I added one reference there already.)
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US hardcover: Chapter 37, p. 384, last paragraph: "Lunamor sad" should be "Lunamor said". Chapter 37, p. 394, first paragraph: "It glowed fiercely": "It" is referring to "riches", which is plural, so it should be "they" instead. (Though that could lead to confusion as it could seem to refer to the bridgemen.) Chapter 51, p. 511, paragraph 10: "Shallan left the room carrying—tucked into her safepouch—a formal royal request" but then in the next paragraph "She tucked Elhokar's request into her safepouch" – wasn't it already there? Chapter 52, p. 513, last paragraph: "These borderlands were expansive, hilly, and the Vedens had better generals than the Herdazians." The last isn't something the borderlands are, so I think it should say "expansive and hilly" instead. Chapter 52, p. 514. paragraph 9: "He leapt to his feet." I personally prefer "leapt" to "leaped", but the latter is consistently used elsewhere in the book, so it probably should be here, too. Alethi Glyphs Page 1, p. 519: "Alethi glyphs were adopted from older scripts": "Adapted" seems like it would make more sense than "adopted" here. Chapter 53, p. 521, paragraph 2: "The text sounded almost delighted when she'd explained": "Sounded" and "[had] explained" should agree in tense. Chapter 69, p. 691 paragraph 9: "by lighteyed standard" should have "standards". Chapter 72, p. 712, paragraph 11: "mulling about" should be "milling about" maybe? Chapter 79, p. 777, paragraph 11: "Kaladin twisted, putting the corpse beneath him and the wall walk" should have "between" rather than "beneath" Chapter 103, p. 967, paragraph 14: "Nohadon touched it with its own" should have "his" rather than "its". Chapter 103, p. 968, paragraph 4: "one thing that without which there can be no journey" should be "one thing without which there can be no journey" About the Author, p. 1243: "the Alcatraz vs. the Evil Librarians series middle-grade readers" should be "for middle-grade readers". Also, I noticed a lot of compound adjectives that were not hyphenated (e.g. p. 1225 "round faced" rather than "round-faced" as I would prefer it) – is this deliberate? Edit: One more. In WoR and AU, "Slick" is capitalized, but in OB it isn't: p. 1114 paragraph 9: "She kept her legs slick, but her hands not slick" p. 1118 paragraph 3: "slicked the bottoms of her feet"
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Results: Allomancy - Champion! Surgebinding - lasted 146 votes Feruchemy - 145 Awakening - 126 Aviar - 117 Hemalurgy - 109 Forging - 87 Sand Mastery - 69 AonDor - 40 Dakhor - 33 I completely ignored Aviar since it's the one magic here I'm not familiar with yet. Might have hurt it later, but by that time it had been bandwagoned to death already.
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Hurt Allomancy; heal Feruchemy. Allomancy - 5 HP Feruchemy - 4 HP Surgebinding - 5 HP
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Hurt Allomancy; heal Feruchemy. Allomancy - 5 HP Feruchemy - 9 HP Surgebinding - 8 HP
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Hurt Awakening; heal Feruchemy. Allomancy - 7 HP Feruchemy - 13 HP Surgebinding -6 HP Awakening - 2 HP
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Hurt Hemalurgy; heal Feruchemy. Allomancy - 7 HP Feruchemy - 12 HP Hemalurgy - 2HP Surgebinding - 7 HP Awakening - 8 HP Aviar - 10 HP
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Hurt Hemalurgy; heal Surgebinding. Allomancy - 6 HP Feruchemy - 16 HP Hemalurgy - 4HP Surgebinding - 7 HP Awakening - 8 HP Aviar - 13 HP It's kind of surprising to realize that we're nearly two-thirds of the way through even though less than half of the magics have been eliminated.