TheSurvivorofDeath

I have some suggestions, if you don’t mind. 1: Make it universal. Everyone has the power to generate electricity based on the food they consume. Having it nutrition based keeps the true power in the hands of the rich, however, as the poor can’t buy as much food. 2: It could be illegal simply because the government doesn’t want its citizens to have free, unregulated electricity. The governments of the world would likely enslave people to generate power for cities or countries, as that’s the most efficient way to make electricity. It could also obviously allow for large burst of electricity that could cause damage to infrastructure and possible high death tolls. In general the basic ability to produce electricity is extremely wide-ranging and doesn’t actually need anything additional to improve it. It’s simply a matter of fitting it to the world to get the best result. 3. Setting it in the 18th century in North America would be great. If you have the power be ancient, which I think you should, industrialization would have started with electricity, making for a wonderful almost sci-fi setting. Colonial culture, Cold War government, modern or post modern technology/technological themes? Sounds pretty cool to me.

You could maybe burn someone if you had enough stored heat and tapped it fast enough, but it probably wouldn’t be that efficient. As for frostbite I believe storing that much heat that quickly would probably kill you. There aren’t that many crazy things you can do, even if you have compounding. Burning people would be made easier if you could compound, but I can’t think of any super interesting things can be done with brass in particular.

Okay does the blood have to be inside of you? Because that makes it harder. However, if you can use any blood as long as it’s your own, you can just store your blood into a stockpile until you need it. Then you can make effects with far more power than you would with your own blood volume, and can even avoid negative effects from depleted blood. It’s an interesting idea.

Shallan has a general lack in soul casting, but it is possible she was combining her surges. Both these surges manifest in ways that aren’t as tangible as gravitation and adhesion, so it’s less visible if there is a combination between them. Lightweavers are different from other orders, so it’s not guaranteed they have this combined ability. There’s no guarantee that any orders have this combination, apart from Windrunners. Bondsmiths manifest something similar, with their repair of solid objects, but Bondsmiths are also a special case. I have no idea what combined ability might manifest from gravitation and division, if one were to manifest at all. It’s possible that the production of lightning is what they can do, but we haven’t seen that for sure. There’s still so much we don’t know about Surgebinding, so we can’t do anything but speculate.

I suppose that makes sense. I do feel like it would be more reasonable to have this Storyteller cite some other fictional creation that isn’t from a real-world fictional story, as that makes this multiverse separate from our world. You could use real literature to explain things but I feel like that would be jarring as a reader. At the very least just say cuts like a Shardblade and cut out the “from the Cosmere” part, since if the Storyteller is just citing things he’s seen out of habit he wouldn’t say where it was from. Just saying. I do like this story idea, my only real issues are the sentence structure and immersion.

Even if it’s set in the real world it still draws away from the immersion. It’s generally advisable not to compare things to other fictional things. There’s no guarantee a reader has seen that thing and it’s better to just describe the thing with real description. Describe it as cutting the soul, not as being like a Shardblade. Just my two cents

Well there’s no evidence that’s what she was doing. Jasnah says Stormlight has mass in itself, and she wasn’t actually sure if Shallan was soulcasting her illusions. Besides, I don’t think the combined ability of Lightweavers would be something that basic. Just using one surge in the other surge, soulcasting an illusion, isn’t very creative. I suspect it’s something different that the Lightweavers can do, if they can do anything at all.

Would the magic be just magic glass or the manipulation of glass for magical purposes. Because if it’s just magical types of glass you could use special sands or colorings/dyes, the color distinguishing the kind of glass. The magic glass could have all kinds of possibilities, which you could get inspiration for from Alcatraz vs Evil Librarians. You could also throw in the shaping of the glass to adjust the effect the type gives. That could make containers do different things than windows or mirrors or glass knives or whatever else. On the other hand, if it’s the manipulation of glass to produce magical effects, you can go even crazier. The magic user could instill an ability into blown glass as they blow it, making anything possible as long as they know what they’re doing. The limitations and possibilities would need some consideration, but it’s a good idea. The glass objects could maybe even produce greater effects after being made when the magic user uses them.

I see no real similarity to breaths in this magic system. It is an interesting one, and could be quite good, but it’s not like breaths or awakening, not really. There are some sentence structure and flow errors in the writing, and mentioning Shardblades just ruins the immersion, but otherwise this is a pretty good read.

Epic Name: Patriot Powers: Bulletproof/invincible Superstrength Super speed Flight Invisibility Concussive and explosive blasts Doesn’t need to breath Immunity to starvation, disease, and dehydration Regeneration (not that he needs it) Super senses Super reflexes Costume: White and gold with red and blue accents, American flag cape (picture it as you will I cannot imagine it right now) Weakness: Ice skates. If they’re on his feet he loses all powers. If you hit him with one you can hurt him. Evilness: Flies around the world destroying entire cities just for kicks. His kill count has grown to 8 million in the time since calamity appeared. He is feared and hated by just about every person on the planet, even powerful epics. This guy is crazy overpowered. Like, made overpowered simply because this is in no way a serious character build, since this guy is practically unbeatable. He has like four prime invincibilities. But, you know, you can totally get him with ice skates before he blows you up.

Tension seems very useful, but only if you know what you’re doing. You can turn anything completely rigid or entirely rubbery. I do believe that liquids would be hard to use the surge on, especially flowing liquids. You could manipulate surface tension of standing water probably, and turn any liquid solid if you know what you’re doing. Air would be even harder to swing and you probably wouldn’t be able to do floating solid platforms at all, if you could do anything with air. Lightning and fire are basically energy, so no dice on tension there. We haven’t seen tension be used to any real extent, so we can’t tell what we might see from it in the future. It is a very interesting surge that has the possibility to be very exciting.

See the problem is we don’t actually know quite how gold works. It may show the past of the user or it may show the present had choices been different in the past. We don’t actually know. But it does seem like this ability is very much within the spiritual, as it is a Fortune ability. Of all the temporal metals it seems the most dependent on the cognitive, but gold is still a spiritual metal. I don’t think it would show an iriali the one because it works based on the users spiritweb and should only show things related to the user. Now, if the user is actually made of pieces of the one, and they use a very large amount of gold with duralumin, they may be able to see the one. Only if the one is actually part of their past and they are actually able to see the past with gold. It’s a very interesting question but rather unanswerable.

This is pretty good. I’d like to see some of the world building behind this, if you’d like to share.

First of all, this is Sanderson. There is no way it’s just a symbol made up to fill space. It could be a planetary symbol for a world we’ve already heard of, or one for a new world. I personally think it could be Yolen, since it looks like the general Cosmere symbol, which one might associate with Yolen. Either that or it’s a symbol for Silverlight or something, since the symbol does look like the Cosmere symbol as part of a key, and silverlight is sort of the key to the Cosmere. I really have no idea though.

Honorblades are pure Honor. Modern Shardblades are a combination of Honor and Cultivation because modern spren are made of both shards. When Honor forged the oathpact, he used pieces of himself to form the blades for the Heralds. This gave the Heralds a direct conduit to Honor while he was alive. I do not believe the original method of forging Stormlight would work, since I don’t believe you can properly forge raw investiture in the first place, much less the gaseous form. I’m sure there is some method to consolidate investiture into its solid form, as we know that is a natural manifestation. That seems to be the only way one could accomplish this, and even then I’m not sure it would grant surges without even more tricking the system. You could consolidate warlight or life light or tower light or any other combined light into a blade as well, but I also doubt those could grant surges. Maybe the blades could gain sentience, but that might take time. It’s an interesting possibility, but difficult to manage if possible at all.