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"Well crap." He looks to Clay and Weaver. "Wanna give us a hand?"
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Penn helps, using his longsword.
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Penn walks over. "Hello, we're gonna wake you, if yah don't mind."
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"Maybe . . ." He said, turning Sharon's body over to see if he could find any evidence of it. "I'm not an expert on poisons . . ."
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"Alright," He whispered back. "Just point to the guy we gotta wake."
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The word 'destination' having 4 syllables is absolutely outrageous and infuriating.
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I actually tried to use destiny and I couldn't cause it was too long lol,
I'm finding myself using really short and basic words because it lets me say more, it's difficult to balance things . . .
also I've got a good paragraph down now, but I'm thinking that the story should have a different opening scene, so I might have to start over
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"I- I'm not surprised." Sharp'i sat on the carpet. "Whoever it was likely had beef with more than one of us." He wished he felt sad, but instead he felt nothing but a dull ache. His mother had been gentle and loving a long time ago, when he had been young. But the years-- and Sharp'i's generally messed up family, hadn't been kind to her. She'd slowly hardened into something unrecognizable. Now, he could barely remember those times when she'd loved him. "That's odd . . ." He said, coming out of a bit of a daze. "She doesn't have any wounds at all, but father had been stabbed."
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There was silence on the other side. "Maybe she's not in here?" Sharp'i asked. He pushed the door open to check anyway. The room was one of the most decorated in the house. It didn't have windows, but lamps brightened the room, and nice furniture sat around the edges. Sharon was lying on the floor. Sharp'i carefully moved over, and after a quick check-- "Oh . . . I think she's gone too."
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"Yeah . . . perhaps we can corner her when she gets back," Sharp'i said. "Mother's probably in the sitting room." This room is closer to the front of the house, and the guest room that Kandy stayed in. It was much better kept here, and the dust was almost ignorable. A neat pair of doors sat at the entrance. Sharp'i knocked, but there wasn't an answer.
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"I don't need . . ." Her voice started to loose it's nervousness and became more frustrated. "I go to the market on my own all the time." She tossed the cleaning rag she had been using into a hamper, and quickly moved over to the door. "Now, if y-you'll excuse me, I do have a job to do." She opened the door, but hesitated on the way out. "Sharon's the one who coordinates my chores, maybe she'll know something." And with that, she slipped away.
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"N-no . . . look, I really should be going." She gets up and starts putting a jacket on.
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Penn readies the airhorn.
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"No . . . well, there was that knife missing but I didn't think much of it, he takes them down to clean them sometimes . . ." "What about the extra tea?" Sharp'i asked, "Sharvil said you made tea for me last night, but I didn't ask for it or receive." She immediately tenses up at the mention of this. "He must have . . . l-lied about it then . . ."
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(writing my thoughts here as I figure this hiaku story thing out)
Okay, I've started, and the main problem I'm running into is I'm not sure what the specific rules should be.
5,7,5 is a given, but that can't be the only rule because any piece of writing can be split into 5,7,5 increments, but that doesn't mean it's made of hiaku's:
ex:
into 5,7,5
increments, it doesn't need
to be a Haiku
I know for sure I want each Haiku to focus on one idea, and not have any unfinished sentences inside (like the example above)
The main issue is grammar, in a traditional Haiku, each line should portray and independent idea, but that causes issues with sentence building. For example, if each line were sectioned off as one sentence, then I think the writing itself would become really redundant out of the Haiku context-- which is the point of the project. I want the story to be able to work in both formats perfectly, the novelty being that it can switch back and forth.
Good and natural sounding paragraph structure needs variation in sentence length to give the writing good flow. I want it to sound nice lol.
I think for sure, I want to make sure that I don't have grammar in the center of a line, because as I said above, then anything can be turned into a haiku. However, I also don't know if I can really pull off each line being and independent clause, once again for the redundancy issue.
I'm thinking that I can allow lines to consist of dependent clauses, but punction should have to go at the end of each line (excluding commas, in some circumstances).
We'll see how it goes . . .
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The real question is, most every line line end in punction? Or, if the next line finishes the sentence, than it's alright if the previous doesn't finish it's thought . . . I'm thinking I'll allow it for simplicity's sake.
My current method has been using two docs, one with the haiku version, and one with the narrative version side by side, so I can edit one to fit the format of the other.
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What if--someone wrote like, an entire short story that if sectioned up correctly would make a perfect number of independently working hiakus
why do I keep having ideas that my brain isn't big enough to execute . . . now I really wanna try this
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but- but what about the- “For sale. Baby shoes. Never used” short story? (I’m sorry if I got the wording wrong)
I've never heard of that before . . . but after a google . . .
that would probably count as flash fiction, but do keep in mind that the lengths are general and there's no hard and fast rules. It's just good to know what to call your story depending on the length
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"Great!!" He pulls one out of his coat, ready to go.
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"Can I still bring an airhorn cause it'll be more fun with one."
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"We'll bring an airhorn then."
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"Oh, nice. Doesn't sound too bad."
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"I just . . . I finished cleaning up dinner, and then I took Sharvil his tea, and after that I went to bed, and the next morning Mr. Sharp III was-was . . ."
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"O-oh," She looks nervous immediately, "That was such a scary day . . ." "I-I don't know anything, the body was just there and-" Her eyes fill tears. "I didn't do anything I promise." "I'm sure you didn't Sharlee, but we want to know if you noticed anything strange the night before." Sharp'i said, trying to calm her down. "I didn't- there w-wasn't anything."
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"Okay." He leads her downstairs, using the small servant staircase they had gone through on Kandy's first day here. They soon arrive in the kitchen, where Sharlee is clearing some things up off the counter. "Oh! Hello," She says, shily. "Are you hungry? I was just going to the market to get some fresh things for lunch if you can wait."
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"I . . ." He glances at Sharp'i. "My sister in law and I started an . . . organization that worked on improving societal issues."
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I just found out meme generators are a thing, and normal people don't just cobble them together in google slides.
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"It should look like the others there." They're all silvery looking, with a small divots on the hilt, perhaps where gems could be set. "I'm sure it's not important though."
