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I need help!!!

I’m participating in my school’s slam poetry competition and the poem is due tomorrow and I haven’t finished writing it yet! If anyone has any revisions, ideas, thoughts, or suggestions, they would be greatly appreciated!

Here’s the poem, so far:

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One friend is sad

The other hates life

Another is mad

And more are in strife

Then why am I happy?

I’m living on a cloud

I’m always so peppy

And have reasons to be proud

When my friends need rescue

I’m a sympathetic soul

But how can I feel cut in two

When I’ve always been whole?

How am I supposed to empathize

With what I’ve never felt?

Should I maybe deemphasize

The feelings with which I’ve always dwelt?

Do I change nothing

Staying blind to what they feel,

Or do I love nothing

And let gloom take the wheel?

Should I only let darkness in my sight

So I can feel like my friend?

Or to them should I be a light

So they know it’s not the end?

Thus my inner turmoil sings

With pleads to understand

And with which my soul does ring

With yearning to take their hand

I want to say “it’ll all be okay”

But would my friends believe me?

To me, it’s always been this way

So how will I set them free?

This is all so confusing

But maybe I don’t need to revise

Maybe I’m doing enough and improving

So my happiness I won’t need to compromise
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After that, I’m planning on making like a list of actions that good friends take to help friends in need, in a format of like “When my friends ask, I’ll answer  // When they talk, I’ll listen // When they cry, I’ll comfort” etc. so if you have any ideas for more verbs I can use, that would be great.