“The Bringer of Death”

[Ookla-son-son-Ventyl]

Okay, to be begin with, I’ve thought of this world with two magic systems. They are Chronomagery and Deulchemy. If it isn’t obvious Chronomagery deals with time control, and other time related things, whereas Deulchemy is a bit more random. I got a lot of inspiration for some parts of the world from Era 2 of Mistborn and from Max Gladstone’s Craft Sequence, because those are two of my favorite series. And if you have read either of them you’ll definitely see the inspirations from them. 

Anyways, so far I’ve thought of the world, and I’m already spinning ideas about world building in my head. This is my strong suit, I’m great at building up the world, but I’m not good at setting up an interesting conflict using the world. As of right now, all I have is just a rough draft of the prologue, and considering I’m only a sophmore in highschool who didn’t pay a lot of attention in English classes. Please, if you notice anything that is incorrect grammar wise, make a comment of the Doc and I’ll fix it! Also, writing tips would be much appreciated. 

Now without further ado, here is the link to the draft of “The Bringer of Death”

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DffCteLp4mW40oMvdiLW4CRSVjhp6gJD_Nlnpa7rUyA/edit

 

Edited September 26, 2020 by Ventyl

[Channelknight Fadran]

I just pulled it up, but my peer-editing mode is kind of off right now, so I'll read through it later and give you some tips.

[Ookla-son-son-Ventyl]

12 minutes ago, Channelknight Fadran said:

I just pulled it up, but my peer-editing mode is kind of off right now, so I'll read through it later and give you some tips.

Alright, I’m also having my brother @StrikerEZ look over it too, and he’s already pointed out some problems.

[Vapor she/her]

Uh...

[Experience he/him]

That's what it said for me as well.

[Ookla-son-son-Ventyl]

Ooooops, I made a new draft and deleted the old one, that’s my bad.....

Here is a new link, I’ll be writing in this doc, so if you want you can check in and see if anything as changed every now and then!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DffCteLp4mW40oMvdiLW4CRSVjhp6gJD_Nlnpa7rUyA/edit