Anyone willing to read 4 pages and tear them apart?

[Silva]

This basically is exactly what it sounds like.

I’ve got the start of a story, but I need someone to just read it and write a list of everything they now know about the few characters they meet and the world.

It does sound overwhelming, but no one in my life really works because they’ve seen the previous attempts at this story and would infer things.

So if anyone has lots of time on their hands and is willing to read 4 pages, just let me know.

 

Edit: I added a small section, so now it’s at 8 pages.

Edited September 2, 2018 by Silva

[Sherlock Holmes he/him]

I HAVE LOADS OF TIME! Join the Writer's Guild if you like writing, all you need do is ask!

[Kidpen he/him]

I enjoy reading four pages.

[+Sorana she/her]

@Silva I could also read through your pages. Although I won't be able to take a look at them until Monday next week.

[Life&Death]

I would like to read them as well.

[Silva]

I’ll send the link to you all. Be warned, I haven’t done any editing-this is my work at its worst.

[I think I am here. he/him]

I'd be happy to take a look 

[Guest]

Looks like I'm a bit late to jump on the hype train but I'd be more than happy to read anything