Kered he/him Posted August 27, 2017 Report Share Posted August 27, 2017 So, this is another exercise my English Comp. professor came up with and has us practice every week on Friday. It's pretty simple. Sometimes a writers biggest weaknesses to place powerful, poetic sentences in their stories in order to cause max emotional impact to the reader. So, instead of writing whole stories around impact sentences, my professor has us just make individual impact sentences in order to get practice. I thought this would be cool concept to add on here and have peeps write their own impact sentences and read others. I'll start it off with a few of mine that I came up with for my finals paper. "I was a witness of the First Creation, child. I was on there on the day of no yesterday. I will be there on the day of no tomorrow". "I am the totality of forces. I am the Creator, seer of all known, knower of all seen. Nothing came before, I was the First". "I am not a demon, boy. I am something your mind cannot conceive or comprehend. I am the first and last evil. Every being, every thought, every drop of hate and malice belongs to me. I am Ludax. I am the Primordial, shaper of evil as it is known by humans". 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nathrangking he/him Posted August 27, 2017 Report Share Posted August 27, 2017 "I am the king of a place which resides everywhere and nowhere. My power shatters worlds and forges entire realities in the blink of an eye. 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ryshadium90 Posted August 28, 2017 Report Share Posted August 28, 2017 (edited) @Kered That first one is so good! That's a pretty cool professor by the way. I need to practice. "Go ahead. Walk. You'll never get there. The world you dream of may be limitless and without boundaries; yet you will never know where you are, where you can stop; no victory for your struggles." Edited August 28, 2017 by ryshadium90 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kered he/him Posted August 28, 2017 Author Report Share Posted August 28, 2017 (edited) 2 hours ago, ryshadium90 said: @Kered That first one is so good! That's a pretty cool professor by the way. I need to practice. "Go ahead. Walk. You'll never get there. The world you dream of may be limitless and without boundaries; yet you will never know where you are, where you can stop; no victory for your struggles." Thanks! "The bones of the world shook when the tears of blood and fire poured down her face". "Life, love and compassion were in her eyes, but death and madness were on her tongue". "I wield creation and destruction in my hands as a solider holds his blades. I tread paths and know of things the Gods fear, I am chaos unchecked and unchained". . Edited August 28, 2017 by Kered 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kered he/him Posted August 28, 2017 Author Report Share Posted August 28, 2017 (edited) 22 hours ago, Nathrangking said: "I am the king of a place which resides everywhere and nowhere. My power shatters worlds and forges entire realities in the blink of an eye. The "I am the king of a place which resides everywhere and nowhere" line is epic. EDIT*** Sorry for the double post! Computer glitched up when I went to add a quote. Edited August 28, 2017 by Kered 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ryshadium90 Posted August 28, 2017 Report Share Posted August 28, 2017 I am the beat you danced life through, but she will only hear the song you sang. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taravangian'sDayOff Posted August 28, 2017 Report Share Posted August 28, 2017 (edited) WARNING: Might be offensive. When the void became a canvas the lord abandoned us. Every thread met the same end. When all else fails and all that's left is faith it's just in time And all I've known that lives outside it's just not worth the lines When all's been said and all that's left is read between the lies When all's been seen for certain; some say that's when reason dies I've been trying something similar with poetry and found a balance by making intentionally terrible poetry alongside the overly gradiose; Sternum Gradiently dissipate Gradually loose your state Your mind your kind of thought Yoke your head when it's taught Unwind the lines tied intertwined And find the thread that's not Fasten to a windowframe and climb Down to earth Catch a glimpse of the plateau in time To wind through words Recall the fall in all its detail The horizon blocks our vision For all our talk of mountaintops We've settled with the fishes Concrete shoes and rebar bones Neon tombs and three-barred tomes Freon blood in crazy straw veins Hearts of balled up cellophane Skin of stretched out plastic bags Muscles dried elastic bands Pulp and sap and dust and resin We have a hierarchy Built on higher trees We've found our peace in white noise Vision in focus and straining our eyes Beat the beasts with ignorance And distance Drummed with every hit efficient Hunted in our reach Starved out our backyards Moved to the beaches Over-fished and hopeless wished For bottomless wells And clear tells U-Bend Behold The expanse Try to Keep it your pants Flyin through The Stratosphere Cause these rhymes are Just the baddest here I am your all And it tears you apart Reaching for my toes But they're a bit too far Loving all my leavings Shape them into hearts String around your neck Leaves it hovering at eye level I'm the gargoyle And you're just the shovel The potato bug scuttling through cracks I'm the golden scarab grown wings With a thick thorax I'm the crown on the king You're a baby crowning I'm what's left You're a pleb I'm your uncle You're a muggle Having tuggles At my selfies Your longing Sustains me Bologna With mayonnaise I'm the egg You're hollandaise You're the week I'm holidays I'm the roof You're the chaise I'm the cow You're the cheese I'm the big dog You're the fleas Sliced bread is dead I'm the biggest thing Since my head I'm the cremhole You're the toilet bowl I'm the pipes You're the fluid I'm what's right You're what you're doing I'm twelve o' clock You're a second hand stuck I'm the pharaoh You're a storm Sorry this is so long, but as you can see I tried to fill both poems/ songs with power sentences and U-Bend came out beautifully. I didn't realize it would alter the cuss words. cremhole and storm were changed, maybe for the best. Edited August 28, 2017 by Taravangian'sDayOff 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Modal Seoul he/him Posted August 28, 2017 Report Share Posted August 28, 2017 I am not the man I was. I am a creature. I have seen death. I have felt suffering. I have known weakness. I am....dead. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ryshadium90 Posted August 29, 2017 Report Share Posted August 29, 2017 (edited) @Taravangian'sDayOff I love how those all turned out! It kind of sounds like slam poetry. Staring me down is a silence. It's the horror that came from the things I've done; the caution at the things I will do; the helplessness at the things my hands carry out today. Inspired by Rothfuss's silence of three parts. Frankly, that whole series is so full of power sentences. And I love it! Edited August 29, 2017 by ryshadium90 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Faceless Mist-Wraith he/him Posted August 30, 2017 Report Share Posted August 30, 2017 I am not a good man. Perhaps once there was a time, but that time has long since passed. Everyday is a lie, an act I put on for those around me, an effort to forget the horrors I wrought. Please do not mistake this for kindness or mercy. I am a monster, a broken thing that hides behind a gentle mask. 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkness Ascendant he/him Posted August 30, 2017 Report Share Posted August 30, 2017 There is a time to weep and cry, to lament those lost, the ones who died. This is not one of those times, for this time we have something the enemy never had, we can bring them back. We can bring them back to fight alongside us once more. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ryshadium90 Posted August 30, 2017 Report Share Posted August 30, 2017 It came as a wave, a rush; the fear that clouded the skies, that seeped into my skin. I scarce could feel the hands grasping at my limbs. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nathrangking he/him Posted August 30, 2017 Report Share Posted August 30, 2017 (edited) It was a sound. No a visceral wave that rent apart the earth. It shook reality itself and changed the laws by which all lived. A king rose that day wearing a wreath of emerald fire and began a new era upon the earthen plain. Edited August 30, 2017 by Nathrangking 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lindel he/him Posted September 2, 2017 Report Share Posted September 2, 2017 (edited) "Why do we fight? ...Once, I might have said we were fighting to protect the Light. Not this time. Maybe this time, there isn't any light left to defend. Maybe the sun doesn't come up tomorrow. Still, we will fight. We will fight—yes, even for the last, dim memory of that Light." Edited September 2, 2017 by Lindel 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Unlicensed Hemalurgist he/him Posted November 21, 2017 Report Share Posted November 21, 2017 "All power comes from sacrifice, young one. If you wish to be a storm, your bones must taste lightning." 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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