4/7/25 - Ace of Hearts - Labyrinth of Birdcages sub 12, 3548 words (V)

[Appol PhD they/he]

Hi everyone,

 

We're starting off a new plot arc this time, the fourth out of five. It changes up the formula a bit, but I also wasn't super confident in it while writing it so I'm curious how it comes across.

 

Thanks!

[ginger_reckoning]

Overall, glad to see that it seems like we will be getting more answers about the labyrinth and why J's foster mom and P were involved, and to what end. I think that shaking up the formula a little bit is good here, especially since as you said its the second to last arc of this book. Overall exciting stuff and I'm excited to see where this goes!

 

 

 

Pg1 I am interested to see where this arc of J being “socially invisible” will go. While he has made friends, I still feel like he views himself as an outsider, which I hope he can have some growth on by the end

 

“Labryrinth can pounce on” it seems like since he had his own arc, it hasn’t really been going for his insecurities, just the other people

 

Pg 3 “acting different” I also kind of hope here that they haven’t been taken by the labyrinth, though that does seem like the next natural step, considering most of the other named characters have been taken before.

 

I also really hope Mx. P isn’t evil. Idk having the one nonbinary character be an evil teacher who is okay with kids being kidnapped would not be my favorite, but I guess I’m about to find out

 

Pg 6 “Silence lingers” sorry this has nothing to do with anything really, just that writing song for silence has altered this word for me and it was like a jump scare seeing this sentence haha

 

“Self aware” okay, so yeah it seems like the being okay with kidnapping kids is because this is a doppleganger version of P?

 

The 2d pigeons are fun too. I’m imagining the rest of the world looks like minecraft with smaller cubes or something, since it’s a 3d space. It's a little hard for me to envision

 

I hope that the real P can provide more information! They seem to know more about this place