The Experiment

[Through The Living Glass She/They]

6 minutes ago, Ookla the Irreplaceable said:

I like the idea for the prisoner. I'll just call him Ferran for rn. 

another idea, it would be cool for Anna and Ferren to have clashing ideals, him valuing laws and her freedom maybe?

I kinda like that, actually

[The Bookwyrm he/him]

OOH GUYS WAIT

What if Ferran is a turncoat? Like, he was an officer for the empire, decided to change sides for whatever reason, but got captured before the smaller nation (we're calling it Hearth, by the way) managed to get to him?

And they're sending Anna to save him?

And whatever clash they have comes from that?

This doesn't work if we want them to vaugley know each other but, I think it could add some interesting depth to their interaction, depending on how their loyalties and ideaologies are.

[Through The Living Glass She/They]

2 minutes ago, The Bookwyrm said:

OOH GUYS WAIT

What if Ferran is a turncoat? Like, he was an officer for the empire, decided to change sides for whatever reason, but got captured before the smaller nation (we're calling it Hearth, by the way) managed to get to him?

And they're sending Anna to save him?

And whatever clash they have comes from that?

This doesn't work if we want them to vaugley know each other but, I think it could add some interesting depth to their interaction, depending on how their loyalties and ideaologies are.

OO that'd be cool too

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lol in case y'all couldn't tell, I don't really care what happens

[The Bookwyrm he/him]

By the way, here's the rough draft map I made:

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[Through The Living Glass She/They]

Just now, The Bookwyrm said:

By the way, here's the rough draft map I made:

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Ah, yes. The other nation. Let us not forget the other other nation.

Beautiful map, btw. *applause*

[Through the Living Wrath he/him]

8 hours ago, The Bookwyrm said:

By the way, here's the rough draft map I made:

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8 hours ago, Through The Living Glass said:

Ah, yes. The other nation. Let us not forget the other other nation.

Beautiful map, btw. *applause*

I’m going to work “other nation” into my writing now.

@The Bookwyrm

wait wait wait

i can’t quote u but I have ideas.

What if, instead of Ferran being a turncoat, he instead refuses to fight? Like, “I’m tired of this war, and so are the people of both sides,” sorta stuff?

Edited January 5, 2025 by SpiritOfWrath

[Bird Furious she/her/un/important]

2 hours ago, SpiritOfWrath said:

 

I’m going to work “other nation” into my writing now.

@The Bookwyrm

wait wait wait

i can’t quote u but I have ideas.

What if, instead of Ferran being a turncoat, he instead refuses to fight? Like, “I’m tired of this war, and so are the people of both sides,” sorta stuff?

Ooooh, I really like that 

[Through the Living Wrath he/him]

3 minutes ago, Halcyon The Only said:

Ooooh, I really like that 

Mmmmhhmmmmm

but I forgot to put everything from that idea

The rest was that the one who saves him was an extremist.

[Bird Furious she/her/un/important]

10 minutes ago, SpiritOfWrath said:

Mmmmhhmmmmm

but I forgot to put everything from that idea

The rest was that the one who saves him was an extremist.

Naturally! I’d say nationalistic but I think that got debunked. Which personally I think is sad. 

[The Bookwyrm he/him]

4 hours ago, SpiritOfWrath said:

 

I’m going to work “other nation” into my writing now.

@The Bookwyrm

wait wait wait

i can’t quote u but I have ideas.

What if, instead of Ferran being a turncoat, he instead refuses to fight? Like, “I’m tired of this war, and so are the people of both sides,” sorta stuff?

In my mind the reason Anna is rescuing him - regardless of his previous allegiance - is because he provides an advantage to her side. So if you do fit it in you still have to explain why it is that she's saving him.

I might also get rid of the "other" nations for simplicity's sake; we all have to go off the exact same worldbuilding for the experiment to work and I don't want to overcomplicate it.

[Bird Furious she/her/un/important]

51 minutes ago, The Bookwyrm said:

In my mind the reason Anna is rescuing him - regardless of his previous allegiance - is because he provides an advantage to her side. So if you do fit it in you still have to explain why it is that she's saving him.

I might also get rid of the "other" nations for simplicity's sake; we all have to go off the exact same worldbuilding for the experiment to work and I don't want to overcomplicate it.

I think it wouod be good if they’re both from the same nation— 

or we could have him be someone important to the opposite side she knows of by reputation, but when she meets him she finds out hes someone who betrayed her country and she knew him before. 

[Through the Living Hope]

On 1/4/2025 at 10:09 PM, The Bookwyrm said:

OOH GUYS WAIT

What if Ferran is a turncoat? Like, he was an officer for the empire, decided to change sides for whatever reason, but got captured before the smaller nation (we're calling it Hearth, by the way) managed to get to him?

And they're sending Anna to save him?

And whatever clash they have comes from that?

This doesn't work if we want them to vaugley know each other but, I think it could add some interesting depth to their interaction, depending on how their loyalties and ideaologies are.

(Just read through everything so I'm caught up)

Funny time to mention that in my internal "cinematic" universe the city/base where the good army (the Bonfire) operates from is called the Hearth

[The Bookwyrm he/him]

Okay, let's not let this die...

@Halcyon The Only @Through The Living Glass any more character ideas? Or is there anything you need from me before you start hammering down character ideas?

[Bird Furious she/her/un/important]

2 minutes ago, The Bookwyrm said:

Okay, let's not let this die...

@Halcyon The Only @Through The Living Glass any more character ideas? Or is there anything you need from me before you start hammering down character ideas?

I think I’m good. What we have here is cool  

As long as we have basic motivations and personalities that’s good 

[Through The Living Glass She/They]

23 minutes ago, The Bookwyrm said:

Okay, let's not let this die...

@Halcyon The Only @Through The Living Glass any more character ideas? Or is there anything you need from me before you start hammering down character ideas?

I agree with Haly! I like where it's at right now.

[Through the Living Wrath he/him]

I like everything I've heard, but I'll need a summary

Also, my writing style will highly depend on whether or not I am listening to metal.

[The Bookwyrm he/him]

31 minutes ago, SpiritOfWrath said:

I like everything I've heard, but I'll need a summary

Also, my writing style will highly depend on whether or not I am listening to metal.

Once we have all the details down I'll probably go edit the original post to include the outline for the scene.

[The Bookwyrm he/him]

Okay, this is dying. I don't know if each of us have the focus and interest left in this project to worldbuild a world, design characters, and plan a scene, and then meticulously write a scene based on that outline. If we want to keep doing it, we can, but I would like to propose an entirely NEW experiment:

Each participant writes a scene that is the ending of a story. Then they give the ending to another writer, and that writer has to write a scene that is the beginning of said story.

[Through The Living Glass She/They]

5 minutes ago, The Bookwyrm said:

Okay, this is dying. I don't know if each of us have the focus and interest left in this project to worldbuild a world, design characters, and plan a scene, and then meticulously write a scene based on that outline. If we want to keep doing it, we can, but I would like to propose an entirely NEW experiment:

Each participant writes a scene that is the ending of a story. Then they give the ending to another writer, and that writer has to write a scene that is the beginning of said story.

I'm still interested in the original plan, but that new one does sounds like fun

[Mags she/they]

27 minutes ago, The Bookwyrm said:

Okay, this is dying. I don't know if each of us have the focus and interest left in this project to worldbuild a world, design characters, and plan a scene, and then meticulously write a scene based on that outline. If we want to keep doing it, we can, but I would like to propose an entirely NEW experiment:

Each participant writes a scene that is the ending of a story. Then they give the ending to another writer, and that writer has to write a scene that is the beginning of said story.

I think we can still do the first plan (I'd rather it, really), but instead of planning every detail so they're as close as possible, we should just come up with a good summary of what we already have and then let everyone write a scene based on it.

Yes, the differences will be bigger then just personal style, but I think it could be fun to see how each person decides to do the same points differently.

Edited January 10, 2025 by Magi

[TwinStorm He/Him]

34 minutes ago, The Bookwyrm said:

Okay, this is dying. I don't know if each of us have the focus and interest left in this project to worldbuild a world, design characters, and plan a scene, and then meticulously write a scene based on that outline. If we want to keep doing it, we can, but I would like to propose an entirely NEW experiment:

Each participant writes a scene that is the ending of a story. Then they give the ending to another writer, and that writer has to write a scene that is the beginning of said story.

I'm still interested in the old one, and I think we're ready to start writing it

that being said, I'd love to write the end of a novel and let somebody unscramble it 

[Bird Furious she/her/un/important]

58 minutes ago, Magi said:

I think we can still do the first plan (I'd rather it, really), but instead of planning every detail so they're as close as possible, we should just come up with a good summary of what we already have and then let everyone write a scene based on it.

Yes, the differences will be bigger then just personal style, but I think it could be fun to see how each person decides to do the same points differently.

 

1 hour ago, The Bookwyrm said:

Okay, this is dying. I don't know if each of us have the focus and interest left in this project to worldbuild a world, design characters, and plan a scene, and then meticulously write a scene based on that outline. If we want to keep doing it, we can, but I would like to propose an entirely NEW experiment:

Each participant writes a scene that is the ending of a story. Then they give the ending to another writer, and that writer has to write a scene that is the beginning of said story.

 

1 hour ago, Through The Living Glass said:

I'm still interested in the original plan, but that new one does sounds like fun

I'm with Magi. Let's just let each person fill in the gaps for themselves. If you want, I can write the scene summary and we can get started on that sometime today. 

The second thing does sound kinda fun though. I don't think we need to scrap the original. 

[The Bookwyrm he/him]

1 minute ago, Halcyon The Only said:

 

 

I'm with Magi. Let's just let each person fill in the gaps for themselves. If you want, I can write the scene summary and we can get started on that sometime today. 

The second thing does sound kinda fun though. I don't think we need to scrap the original. 

 

1 hour ago, Through The Living Glass said:

I'm still interested in the original plan, but that new one does sounds like fun

 

1 hour ago, Magi said:

I think we can still do the first plan (I'd rather it, really), but instead of planning every detail so they're as close as possible, we should just come up with a good summary of what we already have and then let everyone write a scene based on it.

Yes, the differences will be bigger then just personal style, but I think it could be fun to see how each person decides to do the same points differently.

 

53 minutes ago, Ookla the Irreplaceable said:

I'm still interested in the old one, and I think we're ready to start writing it

that being said, I'd love to write the end of a novel and let somebody unscramble it 

Unanimously, I have misinterpreted the situation, it appears.

Haly, if you think you're ready for it, go ahead.

[Bird Furious she/her/un/important]

5 minutes ago, The Bookwyrm said:

 

 

 

Unanimously, I have misinterpreted the situation, it appears.

Haly, if you think you're ready for it, go ahead.

Alr. Also, for the two characters featured, she's a sneaky assassin person trying to save the nerdy smart one. Except he's betrayed his country 1. because it's a lost cause 2. in exchange for promises that the people he cares about won't be hurt 3. because he's a nerdy science dude and they have a lot of cool science stuff. 

Does that sound okay before I write up the quick summary?

[The Bookwyrm he/him]

30 minutes ago, Halcyon The Only said:

Alr. Also, for the two characters featured, she's a sneaky assassin person trying to save the nerdy smart one. Except he's betrayed his country 1. because it's a lost cause 2. in exchange for promises that the people he cares about won't be hurt 3. because he's a nerdy science dude and they have a lot of cool science stuff. 

Does that sound okay before I write up the quick summary?

Betrayed which country? The one the assassin is from, or the Empire her nation is fighting?

ALSO I FORGOT TO MENTION THE MAGIC SYSTEM SHE USES

She has the power to solidify and manipulate shadows, using them kind of as tentacles, but overusing the power causes her vision to fade, which can cause temporary blindness. If she uses her powers too much, it causes permanent blindness. So there's a limit.

The shadowy magic system is kind of frowned upon in society, which is why she's a sneaking assassin instead of a soldier.