As requested, here is some feedback. I think this time around, I have two main points of feedback.
1. There isn't really a sense of time passing. Things just... happen one after the other and it's hard to tell how much time passes between each thing happening and the next. You tell the reader that time has passed by saying that the sun rose or set, but nothing else in the text suggests that to the reader. One example would be at the start of the chapter, you have around 2 sentences that cover the entire night. You say they moved from branch to branch many times, that Peter was slow and then the sun rises as they reach the camp. You could add small things that could suggest the passage of time to the reader. Maybe mentioning that Peter started feeling sore after a while for example. Or that his shirt was soaked with sweat. Just small things that can ground the reader into the scene and make it feel like time is passing. And the same throughout the chapter. Try to add more cues that show how much time passes. Maybe people fidgeting during a conversation if it takes a long time. Or starting to feel hungry or cold or hot or whatever.
1.2 This one is kind of a sub-point of the first one. It's also really hard to understand where things and people are in space. I think this partially has to do with the lack of feeling of time passing. Because it feels like everything just happens one after the other, it's really hard to keep track of who and what is where, because the reader is not really grounded in the scene in terms of time and space. You give a lot of information about so and so being in one place or the other, sometimes very specific information, but it's just hard to follow. Try to take some time to ground the reader in the scene, both in terms of time and space.
2. We get no internal monologue from Peter. I have no idea what he thinks or feels about any of this. This means that there is just no personality to the prose. It's just a chronicle saying "this happened then this happened then this happened". Peter is not really relevant in a way, and there's nothing to make the reader connect with him as a character. Another consequence of this is that it's a bit unclear what Peter knows and what he doesn't know. For example, they say they're being followed by an Ugna. I'm getting the impression that whatever an Ugna is, peter has heard of them and it's something scary. But we don't really see that from his internal monologue. For example if he, upon hearing of the Ugna, felt his stomach clench in fear and maybe even recall some scary fact he's heard about them like perhaps his grandmother told him stories of them eating souls when he was a child, or something. Then the reader would a) get the information that ugnas are scary and b) would feel more engaged with the fact that an ugna is chasing them because you've created some tension. Similarly, when you mention that some Kians are chasing them, it's unclear to me if Peter has any idea what they're talking about. If he has no idea what or who Kians are, he could maybe have some internal monologue expressing his bemusement or confusion. If he does know, then some internal monologue indicating that. Same with the campfire thing. It's clear that you're trying to make a point of that, but Peter's lack of internal monologue just makes it hard to care.
So to summarise:
1. Make sure to ground the reader in your scenes in both time and space. Give cues to indicate the passage of time and not just that a certain point in time has been reached (e.g. sunrise or sunset), and the movement in through space (either from point A to B, or in place such as fidgeting, looking around, gesturing etc).
2. Give the PoV character internal monologue. You can use this to give the reader some information as well as make the PoV character more relatable.
