Here is my first line - please rate it!
In the distance, one could see the shadowy Nightveil, though in the heavily falling snow it was barely indistinguishable from the general landscape.
And my first paragraph -
In the distance, one could see the shadowy Nightveil, though in the heavily falling snow it was barely indistinguishable from the general landscape. It's presence brought nothing but more desperation to the woman, who was afraid, not for herself but for her unborn son. "Of all the places to give birth in" said the irritated woman to herself, running for her life "it HAD to be during a battle... and in the snow."