Ben Moore

Thanks for all the great feedback guys, it's very much appreciated. I'm writing this relatively quickly and so was expecting to have to do some heavy editing. I think I've also managed to write myself into a historic and cultural minefield, I guess I'm going to have to immerse myself in all things Southern for the next six months. I don't know whether getting it down then getting it right will work for me or against me, but I'm going to give it a go.

Hi guys, this is my first submission on Reading Excuses and I'm looking forward to reading your feedback. Please note that this is written in British English.

Could I submit a chapter this coming Monday?

Rather than repeat points others have already made, I'll just give my take on the characters. Hal: A gravedigger who just wants to be left alone, his visitor though won't leave alone Hal and insists on him coming away with him, I have no idea what sort of pay off is going to come at the end but I assume supernatural action in a 19th century setting. The dog: Unloved, wants to be fed/loved, will most likely be killed by Hal in the morning and (personally) I'd love for him to become a faithful companion by the end of the story. Dogs have lots of myths associated with the dead and so could be a source of material. Also if the character is on his own a lot, having the dog along might be useful for character development as treating the dog better could be a way of showing us Hal's recovery from his trauma. The visitor: Spectral presence, wants Hal for something he probably won't enjoy, I assume that he will be the guide into the story and world.