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From the hardcover: Page 83 (fifth line from the top): "Until you know it ain't true, treat every woman like she has an older brother what is stronger than you are?" - Should be "that" (or... actually, shouldn't it be "who"?) Page 212 (third paragraph): "He strolled down the lane and nodded to the temple guard, who wore a cap and overalls for his uniform and bore a ceremonial stick what seemed to have bits of hair sticking out of the end..." - Should be "that". Page 321 (the newspaper page, "The Sinister Soiree" continued, second column, second paragraph): "My enhanced senses found Mustache's gazelle-quick heartbeat..." - Should be Mustaches' (the character's name is Mustaches; same page, third column, last line uses "Mustaches'" for the possessive). Page 368 (second paragraph): "Wayne sauntered over on crutches" but yet (same page, second last paragraph) "Then he shook his head, grabbing his crutch and getting to his feet." - Is Wayne using one crutch or two? Page 182-4: So Milan/MeLaan shows up to help Wax, and she's only referred to as "the woman" for a page (though the line "The woman from the party, the one who had tried flirting with him" does indicate Milan without naming her). Wax doesn't seem to remember her name, which is fine. He even asks (bottom of 182) "Who are you?" so we know she's not who she seems, though she's still referred to as "the woman". But then, middle of 183, we get "Wax grabbed Milan by the arm, yanking her to the side...". All of a sudden, she's Milan and not "the woman" anymore. - Nothing major, but it just seemed so odd and abrupt that "the woman" suddenly became Milan a page after she first appeared in the scene. I thought I had missed a line where Wax remembered her name. Is there any way that Milan's name can be put in before the "Wax grabbed Milan" line so it's not as abrupt/out of (almost) nowhere? Like "the woman from the party, Milan, who had tried flirting with him"? Maybe that's just me, but I was a bit confused with "the woman"/Milan switch (I had to re-read the scene a few times to see if I'd missed her being introduced/named).