Fan story brainstorm

[Lesser spren]

I'm creating a story that takes place on scadrial Era 2, It won't use any of the pre-established character, but maybe a few cameos (it also may reference the Set),  I have the outline here:

If you could ask questions about this mess, thus giving me the oppurtunity expound on the idea in a relevant way to my projected audience, that would be appreciated. (think of it like real time audience testing)

if you could critque my ideas that would also be nice

Background: The main character (Working name: Caduel) lost his arm as a child while working in the factory. Despite the tragedy of the event he did gain two things from the experience, the ability to burn iron and a mysterious slug like creature that shape shifted into his new arm.

Six years later Cad works for "Travin's Allomantic Services", sketchy for-hire buisness that rents out a variety of allomancers for both legal and less-than-legal jobs. It is only when several of the hired allomancers go mysteriously go missing that Cad's curiousity gets the better of him cause him to get wrapped up in a web of conspiracy, politics, and hemalurgy. It is up to Cad to use his power, his wit and boundless luck, stop the atrocity or lose everything he's ever known, and perhaps a friend he didn't.

 

Edited March 8, 2021 by Lesser spren
better wording

[TheOneEyedFox]

I’m sorry, I would like to see what you have done but I cannot read it. Any chance you could recreate your brainstorming types out on a computer?

[Lesser spren]

 

51 minutes ago, TheOneEyedFox said:

I’m sorry, I would like to see what you have done but I cannot read it. Any chance you could recreate your brainstorming types out on a computer?

I'm actually doing it right now, I'l post it in creators corner.