rhythm of war New fanfic-romantic story for Kaladin

[BethG]

1 hour ago, Xandra Stormblessed said:

@BethG I read your other fanfic and I really enjoyed it! I honestly don't know which one I liked more. Like I said before I think you have a really good handle on Kaladin's personality; I feel like the longer version depicts him a bit more in line with how I personally think he would act in that situation, with denying his feelings, coming up with reasons why they wouldn't work (denying himself the right to be happy). The complicatedness of it made it rather exciting to read:) I also liked that it gave more time for their relationship to develop. However I do think it would have been more profound if Elebet could have accepted first that she was still worthy of love even if she couldn't have children, before magic just solved the problem without her believing that. Maybe Kal could have convinced her and shown her- before they knew the Stormlight healed her. Either way, it was beautiful and I really enjoyed reading it, well done! 

Thank you for reading them both!  I liked the first one for taking the time to develop more.  I agree with you on the end needing him to connivance her she was worthy, but it was getting long and I was afraid people wouldn’t want to read such a long fanfic, so I did the deus ex machina thing.  And he was telling her she was worthy when Jon chimed in.  Kaladin was in a better mental place in the second one (after RoW), and that took away from the romantic tension from him.  I based that on more my husband and I doing the love at first sight thing—one heart, one soul.  I knew the night I met him he was the one, and we’ve been married over 47 years!

2 minutes ago, BethG said:

connivance—convince  stupid spell check

 

[XaliaStormblessed she/her]

16 minutes ago, BethG said:

Thank you for reading them both!  I liked the first one for taking the time to develop more.  I agree with you on the end needing him to connivance her she was worthy, but it was getting long and I was afraid people wouldn’t want to read such a long fanfic, so I did the deus ex machina thing.  And he was telling her she was worthy when Jon chimed in.  Kaladin was in a better mental place in the second one (after RoW), and that took away from the romantic tension from him.  I based that on more my husband and I doing the love at first sight thing—one heart, one soul.  I knew the night I met him he was the one, and we’ve been married over 47 years!

 

That totally makes sense! I get why you would choose to do that; I would have loved it to be longer though, more Kaladin for me to read about

You're right, I hadn't thought about his mental health being a factor for the differences in your stories. Such a good point that you incorporated!

And aww that's such a cute story of you and your husband, you sound like you're really happy together! My husband and I have been married nearly four years now. 

[BethG]

27 minutes ago, Xandra Stormblessed said:

That totally makes sense! I get why you would choose to do that; I would have loved it to be longer though, more Kaladin for me to read about

You're right, I hadn't thought about his mental health being a factor for the differences in your stories. Such a good point that you incorporated!

And aww that's such a cute story of you and your husband, you sound like you're really happy together! My husband and I have been married nearly four years now. 

May you have many happy years together!

[XaliaStormblessed she/her]

6 minutes ago, BethG said:

May you have many happy years together!

Thank you!!