Ode to Feather

[lwd24era he/him]

Ok. So in one of my classes we've had to write poetry, and one of the poems required is an ode. I had no idea what to do for mine so I wrote one about FeatherWriter(please don't hate me after this). It's bad, because I am a horrible poet. This is the rough draft. *ahem* Here goes. *winces*

 

Ode to Feather

 

There is a beautiful writer

Her name is Feather

Her prose can make ones day brighter

It does not matter if she’s describing the weather

Or Renarin, brave and true

She loves him to death

And if you listen to her so will you

She’d argue to her dying breath

That he(and Loki) are the best

In one way the featherblades are like Szeth

Steadfast in our quest

That is, to guard Our Lady, Feather

 

Comments, concerns criticisms and hate-mail all welcome.

*sigh* I'm so, so sorry.

[Lightsworn Panda he/him]

You have really been caught up by the Feathers, haven't you? 

 

I'll notify Feather about this.

[lwd24era he/him]

You have really been caught up by the Feathers, haven't you? 

 

I'll notify Feather about this.

OH GAWD...this is going to hurt.

[Lurthemir he/him]

OH GAWD...this is going to hurt.

I don't know. Feather is unpredictable. She might praise you, be sincerely flattered, be creeped out a little, rant at/about you, or all of them at once.

As for the Featherblades, they probably will make an anthem out of it.

Edited May 19, 2014 by Lurthemir

[lwd24era he/him]

*sigh* I sit here waiting my inevitable doom. 

[FeatherWriter she/her]

...dang I do not deserve the nice things that people do for me. Harmony, I'm so flattered, I don't even know what to say. Thank you, this really is a well-written poem and the fact that it's about me is, just wow. Lwd, you're amazing.

[lwd24era he/him]

...dang I do not deserve the nice things that people do for me. Harmony, I'm so flattered, I don't even know what to say. Thank you, this really is a well-written poem and the fact that it's about me is, just wow. Lwd, you're amazing.

*DIES*

[Lurthemir he/him]

This is going to become a thing now isn't it? Next thing you know there'll be a new section in the forums dedicated to Feather praise.

[FeatherWriter she/her]

Oh harmony, I hope not. I'm already way more "famous" than I have ever wanted to be. I don't know how to do this whole "people liking me and my stuff" sort of thing. I DON'T DESERVE FANS. I DON'T UNDERSTAND WHY YOU THINK I'M COOL. I'M LAAAAAME.

 

*aggressively attempts to slink back into anonymity*

[Lurthemir he/him]

Oh harmony, I hope not. I'm already way more "famous" than I have ever wanted to be. I don't know how to do this whole "people liking me and my stuff" sort of thing. I DON'T DESERVE FANS. I DON'T UNDERSTAND WHY YOU THINK I'M COOL. I'M LAAAAAME.

 

*aggressively attempts to slink back into anonymity*

 

 

Feather, I don't understand why you have fans, but you aren't lame.

[lwd24era he/him]

Oh harmony, I hope not. I'm already way more "famous" than I have ever wanted to be. I don't know how to do this whole "people liking me and my stuff" sort of thing. I DON'T DESERVE FANS. I DON'T UNDERSTAND WHY YOU THINK I'M COOL. I'M LAAAAAME.

 

*aggressively attempts to slink back into anonymity*

 

*COMES BACK FROM THE DEAD* What. No. This is untrue Feather. You ARE awesome. *sighs* You obviously possess the Shard of Humility as well as Awesomeness. 

 

 

Feather, I don't understand why you have fans, but you aren't lame.

 

How can you be blind to her greatness? 

Edited May 19, 2014 by lwd24era

[Lurthemir he/him]

*COMES BACK FROM THE DEAD* What. No. This is untrue Feather. You ARE awesome. *sighs* You obviously possess the Shard of Humility as well as Awesomeness. 

 

 

 

How can you be blind to her greatness? 

 

I do recognize that she has some awesome accomplishments, but seriously, you Featherblades defend her harder than she defends Renarin.

 

EDIT: Nice poem though

Edited May 19, 2014 by Lurthemir

[lwd24era he/him]

To my last Breath. 

[Mailliw73 he/him]

Wow. You have been promoted to Sergeant, lwd24.

This is just a biiit creepy.

[lwd24era he/him]

Oh? No I don't think I'm there yet. I'm a noble.

[Gabriele she/her]

You should be a Feathersquire.

[Quiver he/him]

Quick, someone compose an anthem to Elsa!

 

...Honestly, I'm not good at analyzing poetry. Or writing poetry. Or poetry in general; I know Odes have a particular form and structure their supposed to follow, but frankly I can't remember what that is, so I'm more than a little worried about giving you inappropriate advice.

 

What I will say though is (unless it's stylistically not the case), I think poems are supposed to have punctuation, either commas or full stops, at the end of each line to designate a pause- again, unless there is something about Odes which means they... don't.

 

Besides that, I think it's pretty cool that you've found a muse to inspire your writing; more than that, it does take a lot of courage to post it on a forum for everyone to see. Lurthemir is right in that there's a lot of ways that kind of devotion could be taken, but the fact that you aren't ashamed to admit to liking her is pretty awesome.

 

So... yes. Upvote.

[lwd24era he/him]

Lol.

I'm sure I did it wrong, that's why I added the disclaimer. I'm a REALLY bad poet. But I needed something to write about and I decided on Feather. Liking her?