Question 17

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

For a moment I thought he was simply bummed about Funtimes transforming his hat but didn't David's metaphors teach us that messing with Santa is a bad idea?

They also taught us the importance of not filling an off-kilter washing machine with a hundred epileptic chimpanzees. Be sure your washing machine is well balanced before adding the primates.

[Edgedancer he/him]

They also taught us the importance of not filling an off-kilter washing machine with a hundred epileptic chimpanzees. Be sure your washing machine is well balanced before adding the primates.

Now, if you plan on washing your potatoes so they are all clean for the minefield, then that's a different matter entirely.

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

Now, if you plan on washing your potatoes so they are all clean for the minefield, then that's a different matter entirely.

Just make sure you don't leave your bags full of snakes at the local dance competition. They'll be useless at best.

[Edgedancer he/him]

Just make sure you don't leave your bags full of snakes at the local dance competition. They'll be useless at best.

So you don't even take your snakes to a dance? No wonder your realtionship is only as solid as a brick made out of porridge.

 

Anyway, did anyone hear from Elsa about that post of hers?

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

So you don't even take your snakes to a dance? No wonder your realtionship is only as solid as a brick made out of porridge.

Anyway, did anyone hear from Elsa about that post of hers?

Romance? I don't need any romance. I'm a washing machine at a gun show.

No. I just saw it when I got up this morning; she didn't say anything about it before or after.

[Edgedancer he/him]

Romance? I don't need any romance. I'm a washing machine at a gun show.

No. I just saw it when I got up this morning; she didn't say anything about it before or after.

You don't need to love your snakes, you only need to be their friend.

 

Whelp. That ain't exactly good.

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

You don't need to love your snakes, you only need to be their friend.

Whelp. That ain't exactly good.

Should we send her an Alan letting her know how the Guard is going to react to that?

[Edgedancer he/him]

Should we send her an Alan letting her know how the Guard is going to react to that?

Yeah, I can understand if she wants something to happen with her character but given the situation it would help to talk about it first.

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

I'll loop you in too, since she's in Baxter's clinic and all.

[Edgedancer he/him]

I'll loop you in too, since she's in Baxter's clinic and all.

Right... almost forgot that. And actually totally forgot when arranging Impacts break in.

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

Does Clarence seem too flat or Mary Sue-ish to you?

After talking about his bio with someone, they asked me to identify a fundamental flaw in his character. This is what I came up with : "Clarence has a tendency to take potentially poor actions in single-minded pursuit of a goal, because he sometimes doesn't consider things outside of what he deems important as necessitating consideration."

Wordy, I know. But I don't feel like editing it. So, what do you think?

If his actions lead to sometimes dire consequences as a result of his poor judgment, I'd consider it a character flaw. On the other hand, I've seen impulsiveness played as a nominal sort of flaw--where the character will make rash decisions that turn out to be right or for the best--and it didn't work. That's the main thing about flaws: they need consequences. They don't have to be end-the-world huge, but they do need to exist.

[Kobold King he/him]

Does Clarence seem too flat or Mary Sue-ish to you?

After talking about his bio with someone, they asked me to identify a fundamental flaw in his character. This is what I came up with : "Clarence has a tendency to take potentially poor actions in single-minded pursuit of a goal, because he sometimes doesn't consider things outside of what he deems important as necessitating consideration."

Wordy, I know. But I don't feel like editing it. So, what do you think?

 

 

I think his flaws will reveal themselves as the story progresses. A few of my characters started pretty Sue-ish in my head but developed flaws that impeded their progress as I wrote them. The cool thing about an RP like this one is that our characters are constantly subjected to situations we could not have anticipated, which forces us to flesh out different sides of their personalities and face the consequences of their failures.

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

Okey dokey. I do agree that he will develop as I continue to write him, and hope that he'll become more 3-dimensional and flawed. Twi, I'm definitely not planning on making his tendency to overlook the "unimportant" a nominal flaw. If he makes a mistake, consequences will definitely happen. I still kind of view it as a "proto-trait", though. It's really just the best thing that I could think of that seemed like an organic part of the character. In fact, since he hasn't really exhibited that characteristic in the RP yet, I might retcon it and replace it with something that is more glaringly faulty, something that I discover while writing for him. Above all, I'm looking to make Clarence as real a person as this noob can manage.

It's probably obvious that I'm an inexperienced writer, as far as writing fiction goes. Seeing the quality of many of your RP posts makes me a bit nervous, and all the more aware of my own novice inadequacies. Basically, I'll always love input. At this point, I'm kind of wandering in the dark, and I'd appreciate it if you helped me avoid some of those glaring rookie mistakes.

I can give you a list of glaring rookie mistakes I've seen in inexplicably popular fanfiction, if you like.

[Kobold King he/him]

I can give you a list of glaring rookie mistakes I've seen in inexplicably popular fanfiction, if you like.

 

 

Flaw the first: ship Draco with Hermione.

 

Flaw the second: ship Draco with Harry.

 

Flaw the third: ship Draco with Snape.

 

Flaw the worst: see flaw the third.

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

Flaw the first: ship Draco with Hermione.

Flaw the second: ship Draco with Harry.

Flaw the third: ship Draco with Snape.

Flaw the worst: see flaw the third.

No no no no no. Flaw the worst is Weasley/Weasley shipping, followed closely by Bellatrix/anyone shipping. I do have a soft spot for Umbridge/Avada Kedavra and Rodolphus Lestrange/blind directionless rage at seeing his wife leave him for a guy with no nose, though.

[Kobold King he/him]

No no no no no. Flaw the worst is Weasley/Weasley shipping, followed closely by Bellatrix/anyone shipping. I do have a soft spot for Umbridge/Avada Kedavra and Rodolphus Lestrange/blind directionless rage at seeing his wife leave him for a guy with no nose, though.

 

 

As usual, shipping is a more dangerous realm than I am aware of.

 

I support your ships, though.

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

As usual, shipping is a more dangerous realm than I am aware of.

I support your ships, though.

You have no idea.

Though I think the worst character-related rookie mistake I ever saw in a Potterfic was having the main character be in mortal danger because she was so darn special that Voldemort would recruit her for sure if he only knew about her specialness. Somehow this made her the black sheep of her family.

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

Oh, arbitrary specialness, how you burn my literary tastebuds.

Did I mention this same fic had the Carrows (aka "one brain cell shy of being Crabbe and Goyle") using words like "indignation" correctly? And this special girl of specialness sassed them to her heart's content without raising suspicion, even though they're established as hardcases in canon and she was supposed to be laying low that year.

[Kobold King he/him]

By the way guys, I wanted to introduce a new Portland character named Marilyn Susanson. She's a teenage girl who was at the top of her class before Calamity and her father taught her all about guns but she's still pretty idealistic despite the world she's in. Calamity's trying to make her an Epic because he think she is awesome enough to be his ultimate champion, so she has to team up with a quiet nice guy she grew up with and a handsome anti-hero she finds herself strangely attracted to in order to stop him once and for all!

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

By the way guys, I wanted to introduce a new Portland character named Marilyn Susanson. She's a teenage girl who was at the top of her class before Calamity and her father taught her all about guns but she's still pretty idealistic despite the world she's in. Calamity's trying to make her an Epic because he think she is awesome enough to be his ultimate champion, so she has to team up with a quiet nice guy she grew up with and a handsome anti-hero she finds herself strangely attracted to in order to stop him once and for all!

Nathan and Remington seem to fit those roles nicely. Nathan will have her cowering in a corner when he tells her how he and Funtimes met, and Remington can knock her down a peg or two in the gun department. And he's not over Laurie, so Marilyn's shipping plans might not work out.

[Kobold King he/him]

Nathan and Remington seem to fit those roles nicely. Nathan will have her cowering in a corner when he tells her how he and Funtimes met, and Remington can knock her down a peg or two in the gun department. And he's not over Laurie, so Marilyn's shipping plans might not work out.

 

 

BUT YOU DON'T UNDERSTAND HOW SPECIAL SHE IS

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

BUT YOU DON'T UNDERSTAND HOW SPECIAL SHE IS

Oooohhhh, you know who she should try the whole redemption-romance thing with? Reader. That'd be fun.

[Kobold King he/him]

Oooohhhh, you know who she should try the whole redemption-romance thing with? Reader. That'd be fun.

 

 

"Are you having a heart attack, Mr. Reader?"

 

"Ack... I just saw that you have never failed at anything in your... I can't figure out what to attack you over... agh..."

 

"Don't worry, sir! My uncle who was a doctor taught me how to save a heart attack victim before he was hit by an ambulance driven by a mysterious driver!"

 

"Oh, of course he did..."

[Edgedancer he/him]

Does Clarence seem too flat or Mary Sue-ish to you?

After talking about his bio with someone, they asked me to identify a fundamental flaw in his character. This is what I came up with : "Clarence has a tendency to take potentially poor actions in single-minded pursuit of a goal, because he sometimes doesn't consider things outside of what he deems important as necessitating consideration."

Wordy, I know. But I don't feel like editing it. So, what do you think?

I can only chime in with the other ones here, only time will tell. Although, from my expirience the people in this RP make writing a Mary Sue pretty much impossible, because they won't exactly hesistate to knock your character down a peck.

 

You have no idea.

Though I think the worst character-related rookie mistake I ever saw in a Potterfic was having the main character be in mortal danger because she was so darn special that Voldemort would recruit her for sure if he only knew about her specialness. Somehow this made her the black sheep of her family.

This character may or may not be a weird AU version of Lucentia that has possesed the mind of a poor suethor.

 

Imagine an Epic who can create romantic bonds between any beings that he desires. 

 

Now we know who actually destroyed Oregon… The Shipper!

The Ship that sailed in the night.

 

By the way guys, I wanted to introduce a new Portland character named Marilyn Susanson. She's a teenage girl who was at the top of her class before Calamity and her father taught her all about guns but she's still pretty idealistic despite the world she's in. Calamity's trying to make her an Epic because he think she is awesome enough to be his ultimate champion, so she has to team up with a quiet nice guy she grew up with and a handsome anti-hero she finds herself strangely attracted to in order to stop him once and for all!

So... she's Sam evil sueish  long lost twin sister? She won't manage to redeem nighthound through the power of love, will she?

Edited December 24, 2015 by Edgedancer

[TwiLyghtSansSparkles she/her]

"Are you having a heart attack, Mr. Reader?"

"Ack... I just saw that you have never failed at anything in your... I can't figure out what to attack you over... agh..."

"Don't worry, sir! My uncle who was a doctor taught me how to save a heart attack victim before he was hit by an ambulance driven by a mysterious driver!"

"Oh, of course he did..."

I considered suggesting Shiny....and then I imagined the two of them competing over who has the most amazing cleavage.

Not sure how I feel about that.