Part of your Cosmere

[Oudeis he/him]

The dangers of pondering the Cosmere while otherwise bored on the train, and listening to your playlist on random.

Now I can't get out of my head the image of Mraize, amidst his Cosmere-wide collection, singing a modified version of The Little Mermaid's "Part of the World".

I've got Aons and Fabrials aplenty.

I've got aviars and mistwraiths galore.

You want Lifeless? I've got twenty.

I wanna be where the metalbirn are. I wanna see, wanna see 'em tapping, drawing out health from their... What do they call them? Oh. Goldminds.

I wanna know what the Ministry knows... Asking my questions, and get some answers. What is pewter and how do you- what's the word? BURN!

[ParadoxicalZen he/him]

Hahaha, I can see this parodying Richard the Warlock from LFG webcomic (all i can sing whenever i hear this song)

[Oudeis he/him]

A shower later I've come up with a few more lyrics. I've also decided it's Mraize singing about everywhere he's been, but still wishing to see the fantastic World Reborn, where one man wields two Shards... Scadrial...

(Work in Progress)

I wanna be where the metalborn are.

I wanna see, wanna see them tapping,

Drawing out health from their... which metal is that? Oh, gold.

Heightenings don't really do that much.

Brass is required for spiking, Soothing,

Keeping yourself never... what's it store again? Cold.

Where steel can fly,

Where tin can see,

Where folks are born with allomancy,

Somewhere past Sel,

To Scadrial,

To that Shardworld.

Who would I stab,

If I could nab,

All of their traits? Some of their spirit?

What would I store,

Then compound more,

Infinitely?

If Harmony,

Would give to me,

If I had tin, and you dropped a pin,

Even rooms away, I'd hear it.

And ready to know what the Mistings know,

Eat their metals, and use their powers,

Which one's pewter, and how do you...

..what's the word? BURN!

When it's my turn,

To leave Roshar,

Past the expanses of Shadesmar...

Leave through the Well,

On Scadrial...

To that Shardworld...

Edited September 15, 2015 by Oudeis

[Canton of Unorthodoxy he/him]

Alright, I've just read this with the instrumental of the original "Part of your world" playing in a different tab, and I've just gotta say; I freakin' love this!

 

One little nit-picky thing, though, if I may? In the first verse of your version, you have copper as storing 'cold'. I get that you're rhyming with 'gold', and I can understand how that works. Might I suggest something more along the lines of 'what's it stop again?'. Probably not exactly a huge concern, but I figured it may be worth mentioning...

 

Anyhow, great work! Really find it entertaining

[Oudeis he/him]

1. I correctly say brass, not copper.

2. In my head, the entire bit in the middle is, as per her song, an insert, so the original sentence should read as though the bit in the middle wasn't said. "Keeping yourself never (what's it store again?) cold". I fully concede this line is a stretch. I don't think I can fix it, so if I finish the song I will prolly go back and find some different metal to restructure the whole thing, possibly to the extent of changing the metal in the previous line to rhyme.

 

And thank you for the compliment! It means a lot to know the thing I think in my head is cool is also cool in other people's heads. And I very much appreciate your constructive criticism; this particular time it happens to be something I am aware of and it's on my to-do list of fixes, but nice to know this is the one you pick up on, and not all the other times I thought my lyrics were weak.