Tattoo Women’s Script

[Knghtstlker he/him]

Greetings. I’ve vetted as much as I can. It’s time. But I need some final thoughts on this tattoo. Attached are two potential tattoos, I want to know which one seems more correct. 
the original statement to be translated. 
 

I am an American Soldier.

I am a warrior and a member of a team.

I serve the people of the United States, and live the Army Values.

I will always place the mission first.

I will never accept defeat.

I will never quit.

I will never leave a fallen comrade.

I am disciplined, physically and mentally tough, trained and proficient in my warrior tasks and drills.

I always maintain my arms, my equipment and myself.

I am an expert and I am a professional.

I stand ready to deploy, engage, and destroy, the enemies of the United States of America in close combat.

I am a guardian of freedom and the American way of life.

I am an American Soldier.

[Treamayne]

6 hours ago, Knghtstlker said:

Greetings. I’ve vetted as much as I can. It’s time. But I need some final thoughts on this tattoo. Attached are two potential tattoos, I want to know which one seems more correct.

In the second, are you trying to spell "people" as Peepul?
First seems more correct...If you look at Navani's Notebook (Fourth Bridge page example below) you can see that they are not trying to phonetically re-spell English for the official artwork. 

Spoiler

If you want more detailed analysis notes, you can read the old thread where we deciphered the script (semi-inclusive as I worked on glyphs mostly).  

Hope that helps

Edited February 11 by Treamayne
SPAG

[Knghtstlker he/him]

Oh yeah I’m all over that thread, I see you on it too, I’m glad you can find it because I honestly forgot it existed. I did wind up writing out several words. But I’m still unclear as to whether it would be correct to just write English words out. I used the GitHub with the rules and tried to change everything I could to match Alethi. But I’m not sure if I’m correct. It sounds like I’ve got a bit more to proof

[Treamayne]

4 hours ago, Knghtstlker said:

I’m glad you can find it because I honestly forgot it existed.

I have a favorites folder of just Cosmere (Forum, Coppermind, Arcanum and Brandon's site) posts I reference often. Search works well (Please see Sharder FAQ if you need tips) - but why search the same thing month after month?