Transcendance: A Cosmere FanFic

[Akimikoisthecutest]

Hi everyone! This is a fanfic I am writing and will post some parts of it here on the shard 

Here's the Prologue

Spoiler

Prologue

The power was a scream—not a sound, but a powerful force in the Spiritual Realm that violently bled into the Cognitive and Physical Realms. It had no name or purpose because its Vessel had been killed right after the Shattering of Adonalsium, during the first conflicts between the new gods. Its raw power had been left untouched for thousands of years, a wild and untamed force.

 

Aris, a scholar of Realmatic theory, had spent her life studying this power. She knew that an untended Shard was like a ticking time bomb. It was a force without direction that could warp reality just by existing. The power had already begun to cause strange events: areas where gravity was reversed, moments where time went backward, and bright islands of color that hurt the eyes.

 

She stood at the edge of the power’s physical form, a swirling storm of energy on a long-dead world. The raw power pulsed like a dying heart, feeling lonely and dangerous.

 

"It needs direction," Aris whispered, pulling her simple robes tighter. She didn't want to be a god, but she had a goal: she believed the universe needed order, a guiding hand to stop the other gods from destroying everything with their petty wars.

 

Aris had no natural link to this power. She had no grand destiny pushing her forward like the first Vessels. All she had was her strong will and a lifetime of research into how to create a spiritual link. She took a small, steel cube from her satchel. The cube hummed with energy she had collected over decades. It was an anchor, a tool to connect her mortal spirit to the screaming, infinite power.

 

Aris stepped into the storm.

 

The moment she entered, her mind was hit with a thousand sensations at once. It was like living a million years in a single second. Raw knowledge slammed into her: the birth of stars, the silent cries of dead worlds, and the details of countless magic systems she had only dreamed of. The power tore at her soul, demanding that she act without thought or consequence.

 

Create! Destroy! Build! End! the power screamed, throwing chaotic purposes at her mind, searching for a weak point.

Aris held on, focusing on the steel cube and her single goal: to Transcend.

 

"No," she pushed back. Her mortal voice was lost in the storm, but her will became a sudden, unmoving wall. "We will not be a chaotic force. We will bring order. We will bring Transcendence."

She forced the cube’s connection into the center of the power. 

 

The power fought back, its scream growing louder. Aris felt her skin tear and her bones groan under the pressure of holding infinity. Her blood boiled, turning to mist as the power consumed her physical body.

 

She held tight to her one word, her one purpose: Transcend.

 

The chaos began to calm. The riot of colors faded, and the storm of energy focused, shaped by the unyielding will of the person who refused to be just a Vessel, but a master of her own destiny. The raw power did not consume her; she consumed it, giving it a purpose it had never known.

 

With a final, silent flash, the storm vanished. The energy folded in on itself, drawn into the core of the newly Ascended being.

 

Aris was gone.

 

In her place stood a new force in the Cosmere, a being of structure and purpose, holding a new Intention that gave her clarity instead of warping her mind.

 

She had taken the power.

 

She had Ascended.

PS: Some of you might just so happen to know where some of these characters came from...

[Akimikoisthecutest]

Here's chapter one, please let me know what you think.

Spoiler

They speak of the Shards as gods. Distant, powerful, inevitable forces. But they forget the truth: each was once a person. A mortal with hands, a face, and a heart that beats with fear.

Chapter I

Kaijsa ran down the wet pavement. Today, it was cold and raining in Edöl, the capital city of Altaakanûl. This was not normal. Altaakanûl was a world of three suns and perpetual, warm daylight. 

 

Its people, the Kanûlians, were a sun-worshipping culture whose very essence—their Identity—was tied to light and warmth. Rain was a novelty, a curiosity in the high mountains. A cold, persistent rain in the low-lying capital was a near impossibility, a climatic anomaly that defied the natural order of their world.

 

Yet, here it was. Kaijsa dodged a sputtering cart, its driver cursing as the metal wheels skidded on the unfamiliar, slick stone. People huddled under awnings, their vibrant, sun-reflecting clothing muted by the heavy, grey sky. The air, usually crisp and warm, clung with a damp chill that seeped into her bones.

More importantly, the rain muted the city's hum. Edöl was usually a vibrant, noisy place, powered by the thousands of Luminaries moving through its streets, their conviction and channeled Investiture radiating a low, constant vibration of being. 

 

Today, the city felt dead.

 

"They're all hiding," she muttered, pulling her thin cloak tighter around herself. "Afraid the sun will forget them if they step out in the wet."

The lack of sunlight didn't just dampen spirits; it seemed to leach the very conviction from the air. For a street performer like Kaijsa, a Mimic still finding her footing in the tiers of power, this was a disaster. 

 

She could feel the familiar 'well' of Investiture within her spiritweb, but accessing it required an effort, a deeper, almost painful focus to adopt even simple roles. The world felt muted, sluggish.

 

She cut sharply into a narrow alley, the rain momentarily lessening under the overhanging second stories. Her destination was the Obelisk, the great, towering crystalline structure at the city's heart, where the Priesthood supposedly communed with the Ascended Sun—the Shard that governed this world. The Priesthood had declared the rain a "trial of faith," but Kaijsa, pragmatic to a fault, smelled a lie. This was not natural weather. This was something wrong. A deliberate blockage.

 

As she reached the end of the alley, she had to stop. The main street leading to the Obelisk plaza was a river, and a small group of the Priesthood's guards, their golden armor tarnished by the moisture, were blocking the way, their spears crossed.

 

"The plaza is closed to all save the initiated," one of the guards said, his voice clipped.

 

Kaijsa looked at the sullen, wet crowd gathering at the makeshift barrier. A desperate energy was building. The sun was their life; the magic, their industry. Without it, the city would grind to a halt. Famine would follow. Chaos.

 

She shifted her weight, testing her connection to her roles. The Athlete? Her conviction was too low; the cold sapped her will to embody 'peak physicality'. The Diplomat? She was too typecast as a cynical street rat.

 

She settled on something simpler, something she knew well: the archetype of the Shadow.

 

"It's a strange trial," she called out, her voice cutting through the growing murmur. "The Sun Ascended values action, does it not? Not hiding behind golden spears."

 

The guard tensed, his helmet turning towards her. "The will of the Ascended is made known through the Priesthood."

 

"Or perhaps through a lack of sun," Kaijsa countered, stepping into the open. She didn't wait for a reply. She began her performance, not with grand gestures, but with the quiet conviction of absence.

 

Internally, she focused on making herself forgettable, channeling the Identity of an insignificant passerby, a smudge in the crowd. She lowered her head, pulling her face into a neutral expression. She performed the Shadow. The conviction flickered, weak in the oppressive damp, but present.

Cognitive Cloak.

 

She slipped through the edge of the crowd while their attention was fixed on the shouting guard. The magic didn't make her invisible; it made her unremarkable. The guards’ eyes slid over her. The crowd parted slightly without noticing her passing.

 

The guards shouted, pointing their spears, but not at her. They were yelling at the spot where she had been standing seconds before. Kaijsa was already moving, scrambling over a low awning. She felt the eyes of the city fail to register her, and for a moment, the heavy air seemed to lift.

 

This was a chase now, a familiar rhythm. She was an anomaly in the perfect system of Altaakanûl, just like the rain. And she was going to find out why her world was breaking. The truth, she suspected, was much colder than the rain.

 

Kaijsa scrambled over the slick rooftops, the sound of the guards' shouts fading behind her as she vaulted over a gap between two buildings. She landed hard, the damp tiles offering poor grip. The momentum sent a jarring pain up her leg, a testament to how tenuous her current performance of the Shadow was. Usually, with strong conviction, the role's subtle physical benefits would make her movement fluid; today, it felt like she was pulling every ounce of power from her own bone and muscle.

 

They're slow in this weather, she realized, a small, grim sense of triumph flaring in her chest. The Priesthood were powerful Performers, but they were used to a world where conviction was an easily accessible ocean of shared belief. When the shared Identity of a 'sunny world' ran dry, they were just men in heavy, ceremonial armor.

She reached the edge of the residential section, looking down into the sprawling expanse of the Plaza of the Three Suns. The square was vast, paved with polished mirrors designed to focus and reflect sunlight onto the Great Obelisk at its center. Today, the mirrors were dark, covered in a sheen of rainwater, reflecting only the oppressive grey sky above. The Obelisk itself—a hundred-story spire of crystalline white rock—usually blazed with captured solar energy, a beacon of light visible for miles. Now, it stood as a monument to absence, its surface dull and lifeless.

 

A figure stood near the base of the Obelisk, surprisingly alone, staring up at the spire. They wore robes of a deep, midnight blue that seemed to drink the light, a stark contrast to the Priesthood's traditional brilliant gold and white.

 

A chase was one thing; confronting a mysterious figure at the center of the world's anomaly was another. Kaijsa hesitated, focusing her belief to slightly anchor her wet hands to the stone roof tiles, her Cognitive Cloak barely holding her in the 'unseen' role against the wind that had begun to pick up.

The figure turned their head slowly, as if sensing her presence despite the downpour and distance. 

 

Even from this height, Kaijsa could feel an aura of stillness around them, a chilling lack of the familiar vibrance that every living Performer on Altaakanûl usually possessed. They raised a hand, and with a gesture, the rain above the plaza stopped. Not slowed, not paused. It simply cut out, a perfect, invisible dome of dryness over the immediate area, the rain continuing to pour everywhere else around it.

Kaijsa gasped, a cold knot forming in her stomach. That wasn't Ascensionism. That was something else entirely. A deliberate, controlled manipulation of the physical world that didn't rely on role-playing or shared belief. It felt foreign, alien.

 

The figure gestured again, a simple twist of their fingers in the air. A small, dark shard of metal, no bigger than a coin, flew from the ground near the Obelisk and embedded itself into the massive crystal structure with a faint tink.

A ripple went through the Obelisk. It didn't light up; it seemed to darken, the crystalline structure turning a deep, void-like black from the point of contact, as if the light were being actively devoured. The oppressive cold deepened instantly, spreading across the plaza.

 

The figure looked right at her, even though she was half a mile away. There was no way they could see her face. They didn't wave, didn't make another grand gesture. They simply turned and began to walk away, towards the massive, ornamental gates on the far side of the plaza that led to the sea cliffs.

Kaijsa was frozen, the fear momentarily overriding her drive. She had been right. This wasn't a weather anomaly or a trial of faith. It was an attack. The world wasn't just breaking down; it was being actively unmade, its light stolen by this silent figure.

 

She had sought the truth, and now she had it. The question was no longer why the world was cold and wet, but how she was going to stop this. 

 

[Akimikoisthecutest]

Please give me feedback. I could really use it.

[Ink and Embers Any pronouns]

I like it a lot!!! The description of the world is very interesting and not overwhelming. The mysterious figure is absolutely terrifying, and I thought the concept of Cognitive Cloaking was super cool!!

[First of the Tide He/him]

Hey! read some of it, and love it so far.  Once i'm done reading it, i'd love to critique it, but i'd like to know how brutal you want me to be. Obviously I won't tear you down completely, but I'd like to know if I should sugarcoat it. Also, how deep do you want the critique to go? Just over-arching ideas, or nitty gritty grammar? Lastly, are you trying to imitate sanderson's writing style, nuance, etc., or just writing in the same world. 
Not trying to tear you down, just want to make sure i'm giving critique you're comfortable with.