Snorkel Posted March 10, 2022 Posted March 10, 2022 Paragraph 5 Quote Damn. What driven that point into my brain so forcefully? should be "What had driven . . . "
Snorkel Posted March 10, 2022 Author Posted March 10, 2022 (edited) Quote I’d thought I might need to wait until morning, and was contemplating demoting another half start from the tree, should be half star Quote I had medical nanites, but that would be difficult show off in an impressive, “Hey, look, I’m a God” sort of way. "would be difficult TO show off"? Quote The man blade connected with my exposed wrist, and his eyes widened as his knife didn’t cut me. MANBLADE! "man's blade" I think? Quote It was an old sand-by for a reason. stand-by Quote Weren’t people in the past were all supposed to be much shorter than modern people or something? Extraneous 'were' Edited March 11, 2022 by Snorkel moar typos 1
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