Kingdoms of Blood

[Szeth Pancakes he/they]

Here it is!

it’s a story.

yup.

Edited February 2, 2022 by Szeth_Pancakes

[Channelknight Fadran]

*ties papers to a brick, yeets it through your window*

A+!! Excellent story!

But F- for your ATTITUDE, MISTER! I'M CALLING YOUR PARENTS!!! YOU'RE GOING TO SEE THE PRINCIPAL!!! IMMA HAVE YOU ON LUNCH CLEANUP FOR A MONTH, Y'HEAR????

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Oh, and if anyone asks, your window was always broken.

 

[Szeth Pancakes he/they]

2 hours ago, Channelknight Fadran said:

*ties papers to a brick, yeets it through your window*

A+!! Excellent story!

But F- for your ATTITUDE, MISTER! I'M CALLING YOUR PARENTS!!! YOU'RE GOING TO SEE THE PRINCIPAL!!! IMMA HAVE YOU ON LUNCH CLEANUP FOR A MONTH, Y'HEAR????

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Oh, and if anyone asks, your window was always broken.

 

Thanks! The attitude was midnight!Szeth’s fault.

Plus: I forgot to mention in the OP that constructive criticism is very much encouraged. If you’ve got anything negative to say about the story (even “I didn’t like it”), by all means, say it! It’s very much a rough draft right now, apart from a few minor grammatical edits here and there.

Plus plus: If you somehow missed the tags and glaring “1” at the top of the chapter, this is the beginning of a much longer story. All of these characters are being set up for a reason, except maybe some of them who are just there.

Plus plus plus: The post title is the two titles that I’ve narrowed this story down to. I think I’m leaning towards the second, but it sounds kind of forgettable.

Edited January 17, 2022 by Szeth_Pancakes

[Chinkoln he/him]

I approve. I’m bad at critique early in stories. I can critique character arcs and stuff later once it is developed more and expanded upon. But it looks awesome!!!

[Szeth Pancakes he/they]

2 hours ago, Chinkoln said:

I approve. I’m bad at critique early in stories. I can critique character arcs and stuff later once it is developed more and expanded upon. But it looks awesome!!!

Thank you! 

[Szeth Pancakes he/they]

finished chapter 2!

also added epigraphs

ok see ya bye