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  1. Greetings Stormlight fans!


    Oh boy, do we have something fun for you today. Brotherwise Games, creators of the Call to Adventure Stormlight Archive game, have given us the exclusive first look at the Jasnah Kholin design for their miniatures Kickstarter coming later this month. Brotherwise have been working hard over the last year putting together designs for 20 of the main characters from the Stormlight Archive series. Working closely with Brandon himself, along with Isaac Stewart and Ben McSweeney, these minis will represent official depictions of nearly every major Stormlight character.

    So, without much further ado, let me present the one and only Jasnah Kholin:

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    We also interviewed Johnny O’Neal, President of Brotherwise Games about the creative process behind this design.


    How did you start working on this miniatures project?
    Since about this time last year, I’ve been working directly with Isaac Stewart, Head of Creative at Dragonsteel. We established a great working relationship on Call to Adventure, and my favorite thing about that project was art directing more than 100 Brandon-approved pieces of Cosmere artwork. I thought this project would be similar.

    Instead, Isaac and Brandon proposed that this project would be an even closer partnership. They saw this as an opportunity to make truly official depictions of almost every major character in the series, as canonical as Ben McSweeney’s illustrations in the books. That really changed the process and made it more involved.


    Did you want to elaborate a bit on the process of creating these models? Were you able to take creative liberties, or was Brandon helping fill in the places you were not sure about? 
    That’s just it. With Call to Adventure, we tried to make every image as accurate as possible, but Dragonsteel mostly made corrections, not suggestions. Brandon’s continuity team, led by Karen Ahlstrom, reviewed every piece of card art, and Brandon had final approval. Ultimately, though, those pieces came with the disclaimer that they were the artists’ interpretations of the characters.
    With this project, Isaac actually initiated the process. Almost every character started with pose sketches or outfit control drawings that he developed with Ben McSweeney. For the lead protagonists, Isaac also commissioned portrait turnarounds from Audrey Hotte. Brandon provided input throughout this process. Then our sculptors took the next step. Even with awesome 2D inputs, characters look different in 3D, and that led to more back and forth. Our sculpting team, led by Leo Pokorny, took things to the next level with some great ideas and interpretations. After multiple rounds of review, we’d arrive at a final character that pleased everyone.
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    So this was a lot more than a miniatures project. In fact, you could say that the miniatures are just our way of funding a major visual development initiative for the IP. I’m excited for people to enjoy the physical products, but I’m even more psyched to know that these are the character designs Brandon can bring into Hollywood or videogame discussions and say, “look how cool these characters are.”


    Which character are you personally most excited for people to see?
    That’s a tough one! I might have to say Eshonai. Before this project, there really wasn’t a single canonical depiction of Parshendi characters. Even the more “official” art out there, like some of the card illustrations I’ve art directed, have conflicting features. While working on Eshonai, I feel like we cracked the code on warform facial structure and carapace, unlocking a visual language we applied to other Listener and Singer characters. Eshonai also has some awesome Shardplate, with tantalizing hints of Singer influence in its design. 


    What can you tell us about the upcoming Kickstarter? 
    We want this to be a Kickstarter that every single Stormlight fan will want to back. This is not just for fans who already collect miniatures, or for people who like painting miniatures. The figures come fully assembled, because I want these sets to be awesome display pieces even if you leave them in the package or set them on your bookshelf. That said, we will offer an official paint set and color turnarounds of every character, so this could be a fun way to learn miniature painting!
    We’ll also offer some painted miniatures at a slightly larger scale. Our standard miniatures are unpainted plastic, and they’re at a “34 mm scale,” just a notch bigger than standard 32 mm D&D miniatures. (We like the extra detail, and people on Roshar are tall!) For example, our unpainted Kaladin miniature is about 1.75 inches (45 mm) tall. It’s basically impossible to mass produce truly high-quality painted miniatures at that scale. So our painted miniatures are almost double that size. That treatment is pricier, so we’re only doing four characters in the painted treatment.
     

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    Any plans for releasing a game that these minis can be used with?
    Yes. We’re not ready to talk about that yet, but we’ll say this: If you enjoy tabletop games and you get these miniatures now, they’ll integrate perfectly into our next big Stormlight project.
    Thanks for taking the time to hear about our miniatures! Working on this project has been an honor, and I’ve set aside a year’s worth of game design work for the chance to be hands-on art director for these character models. I’m still starstruck in every meeting with Brandon, and I feel so lucky to have this opportunity. I hope other Cosmere fans see this project and get a sense of how much love went into it!

    If you want to invite a tiny Jasnah into your home, you're in luck! Brotherwise Games' Kickstarter, set to launch on September 13th, will be offering the brightlady's likeness alongside twenty three other characters. The project preview page just went live, and you can sign up at this link to be notified as soon as it goes live.


    Johnny has signed up to the forum and will be watching this thread in case anyone has any questions!

     

  2. 6 hours ago, Voidspawn said:

    Finally. FINALLY!!! We finally get a look at the Releasers! Non-canon, of course. This was amazing!

    I hope that Brando Sando will give the Releasers a main role in KoW. A look-back on Dalinar's vision in another perspective, like this one, would be perfect, though I'm hoping that we get a modern Releaser take the podium. 

    I must say, it's good to know that some non-Releaser (maybe. What Radiant order are you?) fans of us exist! Thank you so much for making this fic!!!

    Keep up the great work!

    I'm a huge fan of the Dustbringers and believe it's the order I would be (Despite the quiz giving me Windrunner and Lightweaver???). 

    I hope we get more Dustbringer stuff before Ash's novel. Brandon recently said in a livestream that he's still not 100% on how they work which is super interesting to me. So here's my interpretation, not your traditional fire magic, focus on self mastery and controlled release of... Passion, for lack of a better word :D 

    And yes, even though I love Dustbringers, I still use Dustbringer instead of Releaser. There were disagreements in all the Radiant orders on things and I like to think some Dustbringers liked the name/reputation they had, which is kind of what I was trying to portray with Andraya ;) 

  3. 2 hours ago, GoWibble said:

    Tons of assumptions, but it's following the Sanderson rule of magic: err on the side of awesome

    Oh yeah. Most of my fics are "Brandon said it's going to take him decades to get around to writing things so I'm going to write it for him on how I imagine it will play out". There's a lot of assumptions here about how Division works but I'm quite happy with it.

    2 hours ago, GoWibble said:

    I'm confused. What did the surgebinding do?

    She made the end of the axle slick for just a moment to help slide it in place. I tried to think of a better way of putting it but "slick" is an awkward word to use sometimes.

     

    2 hours ago, GoWibble said:

    This was really good! I liked the characterization and the magitech assumptions

    Thanks! :D 

  4. Hi all! I'm back at it again with a stormlight fanfic.

    This one isn't depressing, I promise! It's an idea I've had in my head for a while and really wanted to get down. 

    Spoiler warning: This fic spoils some elements of Rhythm of War. It doesn't actually spoil Rhythm of War but it uses information we learn in RoW in it. 

    Let me know what you think! Enjoy!

     

    Dustbringer

    Spoiler

        “Andraya, you’re needed,” the cloaked figure said from the tunnel entrance.

        Andraya closed her eyes, a spike of annoyance rising in her chest at the interruption. She took a deep breath in and settled it. She rose, placing her most recent project on the workbench and putting her tools in the front pocket of her apron. She took her apron off and hung it on a peg. 

        As she did, she touched the vein of ruby that ran across the walls and roof of her workshop. It glowed with a deep and consistent red, casting Andraya and the room in a bloody light. The ruby felt warm, comforting.

        Andraya had a few options when it came to lighting. A large circle of diamond in the roof provided a white light for reading, and there was a swirl of emerald in one corner. She liked to leave that on when she wasn’t home as houseplants seemed to like it. 

        But when she was working, Andraya liked the red. It was very consistent for her, Ember said. 

        “Sten, could you watch the shop? I’m stepping out for a few days,” Andraya called. Her squire peeked in from behind the curtain that separated the front of the shop from the back. 

        “Sure, Anne,” Sten said, his voice quick and clipped, like he was always in a rush to end a conversation. “You sure you won’t need any help?”

        “Not this time, Sten,” Andraya replied. “I want you to finish this work order for me without any Surges. I feel you’re becoming too reliant on them.” 

        The teen had shown incredible promise since Andraya had taken him in. He’d  somehow ended up homeless in Urithiru with no parents to be found. No orphanage wanted him due to the fights he got in, he’d said. That kind of thing just shouldn’t happen in the Tower, Andraya thought. So she’d taken him in and given him an outlet for his passions. He’d started breathing in Stormlight before his first growth spurt.

        The boy sighed, “Yes, Anne, I’ll make sure it’s done before you get back.” He disappeared, the curtain falling back into place.

        “Thank you, Sten,” Andraya called. She walked over to the entrance where the cloaked figure waited. It was on the opposite end of the workshop to where the front of the shop was, usually hidden as just a section of unused wall. Andraya’s visitor had opened the door from inside the tunnel it hid. A discreet way for her to come and go without raising too many questions. That was how she preferred it. It was how a lot of her Order preferred it. People didn’t like knowing that they lived next door to a Dustbringer.

        The figure handed Andraya a large cloak similar to their own. She took it and threw it over herself, covering her dark shirt and flared trousers. Her blonde hair was already tied up as she had been working, so she flipped the hood up over her head. The rim came to a rest just before her eyes.

        “Hold on a moment,” Andraya said, as the figure turned to leave. She stepped over to the spiral emerald in the corner and stroked a finger across it, willing it to brighten. As she did, she tapped a finger onto the lit ruby and dimmed it. She looked over to her potted vinebud and pointed a single finger at it. She expected the plant's vines to be out when she returned and it knew it.

        “Okay,” she said to the figure, “let’s go.”


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        Andraya and her visitor walked in silence after leaving her workshop. The hidden door had silently closed behind them with a touch of the activation gem recessed into the wall.

        Ember manifested nearby, his flaming presence appearing like a molten crack that ran along the wall of the tunnel. As he traveled beside her, the crack stayed about two feet long, its leading edge splitting the rock before him and the trailing edge closing behind as if he’d never been there.

        “It’s Elibra,” Ember said, speaking voicelessly into her mind. As a Radiant of the fourth Oath, Andraya could communicate silently Ember.

        “That explains the brevity,” Andraya said, “I much prefer Dansek or Trelleb.”

        “As do I, Anne. Simmer is such a bore compared to Flare and Pyre. If he was anymore doused, he’d be a riverspren.” Andraya smiled at that and looked at the other Dustbringer. Their Order expressed self control in a variety of ways. Some, like Andraya, found outlets for their... intense emotions, whilst others, like Elibra, meditated on them instead. 

        “So what’s the mission, Elibra?” Andraya said, her tone chipper in an attempt to try and start the conversation off on a high note.

        “Thunderclast spotted in the Purelake,” Elibra grunted. Silence followed. 

        Thunderclast. Andraya almost stopped walking. The word brought such an intense burst of fear and anger, she had to fight to not swear aloud. 

        Thunderclast. Andraya took a breath and composed her thoughts. One of the enemy's most powerful weapons. In certain situations, they could be devastating to armies and cities. She’d seen good men and women, including Radiants, smashed by the creatures. If they were commissioning a Dustbringer to deal with one, it meant this one had been harassing them for a while. Most combat orientated orders didn’t have an issue taking them down, but it took time. Dustbringers could banish one in moments. Sometimes just the presence of one of their Order was enough to scare off the spren.

        Andraya fought the rising emotion in her throat. The thoughts also led her to the memories of her previous squire, Malan. He had been killed by a Thunderclast years prior. Her fingers went cold and she began clenching and unclenching them out of habit. She closed her eyes for a pair of breaths. Sten was safe at home. It wouldn’t happen again. She banished her fear but kept the anger. She’d need that for the fight.

        “Anything else I need to know? Who’s deployed there now? Am I gating in or being flown?”

        Elibra made a noise halfway between a sigh and a grunt. “Flown. Windrunners will take you. They’re waiting for you at the Sanctuary, ask them,” the man said.

        Better than nothing, Andraya thought. The Sanctuary was the Dustbringers headquarters, a nexus of tunnels hidden within a circle of chambers. With Dustbringers being distrusted by the public, they needed a place they could congregate without others seeing them come and go. It was staffed at all times by the most senior members of their Order, Elibra, Dansek, and Trelleb, along with any squires the three had at the moment. They were in charge of dispatching the Dustbringers when they were requested to battlefronts and warzones. 

        The tunnels within Urithiru allowed them to operate incognito. No one saw them entering or exiting the Sanctuary, except hooded or encased in Plate. Ready for war.

        They continued on silently, climbing and descending stairs seemingly at random. Andraya thought about drawing in a bit of Stormlight to help with the walk, but decided against it. Using Stormlight to climb stairs was such an Edgedancer or Willshaper thing to do. She was better than that. It was a good leg exercise, for what it was worth.

        After nearly an hour of walking, they reached the Sanctuary. They hadn’t run into anyone else in the tunnels, not even whilst moving through the most populated areas. It wasn’t uncommon to find pages or message runners using them for shortcuts, which was why they still wore the cloaks.

        Even so, the hushed atmosphere of the Dustbringer headquarters seemed even quieter than the deserted tunnels. Several squires moved quietly from chamber to chamber, some holding documents, others tools or weapons. One robed figure knelt on the floor, cleaning the floor with a laughably small brush.

        They made their way to a combat preparation chamber where Elibra left her. Andraya filled her black-pouch with a few gems brimming with Stormlight. She then attached a belt of throwing knives to her thigh -- Ember could turn into any sized weapon at a whim but you could never be too careful -- then went to find the mask storage locker by the wall. 

        Within were the masks for the Dustbringers to wear. They didn’t wear them all the time, some Knights were fine with just the hood to hide their face. Others kept their Plate summoned at all times. This was what Andraya usually did, but she wouldn’t be able to keep her Plate summoned if the Windrunners were taking her.

        So she opted for a mask. Most were plain black ovals with a pair of slits for eyes. There were some decorated with inset rubies or filigree, but Andraya didn’t like that sort of ostentation. If she was going to be wearing a mask, she wanted something more personal.

        “Ember, show me what your face looks like again,” Andraya said to the air.

        “I can do but... why?” Ember replied, appearing on the wall as a series of swirling lines. He twisted and moved until a face began to manifest, outlined by glowing lines of heat in the stone. It coalesced into the face of a young man with wide features. Ember's eyes sat far apart on his face and he had a thick nose, his tight lipped smile stretched too far back towards the ears.

        “You’ll see. And not that one. Your true face,” Andraya said.

        “Okay...” Ember said, frowning slightly, then smirking, “Oh, I see what you’re doing.”

        The face on the wall grinned, showing all of its teeth. Then the lips began burning away showing the whole jawline, the hard points of cheekbones and hollow frame of the eye sockets. Within moments, the face was replaced by the rictus grin of a skull. Ember’s skull. His true face, the one that was left when the ash had cleared.

        “Perfect,” Andraya said, selecting a plain black mask. She drew in Stormlight, only the tiniest amount, the perfect amount. She placed one finger on the front of the mask and willed the Stormlight into it, having it follow the pattern that Ember was showing her. The axi in the mask began to divide and produce heat. But she was no novice playing with fire, the black paint flaked off in the pattern she imprinted onto the mask, the lines matching those of Ember.

        She ran out of Stormlight just as the pattern had finished burning its way to the top of the mask. “Perfect,” she said.

        She shook her hand, getting rid of the flakes of black paint that had fallen onto it, and donned the mask. “Thank you, Ember,” she added.

        “No problem, Anne. It looks great!” he replied.

        “I hope it does,” Andraya said, putting her hood up, leaving only Ember’s grinpeaking below the rim.

        When she walked out of the Sanctuary to meet the Windrunners, Andraya savoured their expressions. Whilst she did wish her Order wasn’t seen as dangerous monsters, she enjoyed playing into the stereotype a little. And as they left for the Purelake, Andraya grinned behind her skull mask.

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        “Form up!” Andraya called.

        The squires moved to circle her in a defensive ring, the two squads of troops she commanded merging together. The knee-high water of the Purelake sloshed around them as they took their positions. They wore bronze and leather, armour that didn’t come close to comparing to Andraya’s Plate.

        “Why did you call us back?” said squadleader Divar. He was an Azish man with messy brown hair that was close to bonding a peakspren. Unfortunately, this gave him a chip on his shoulder ever since he’d been assigned to protect Andraya. These weren’t her squires. They were Connected to the Stoneward that stood in the centre of the other group of squires nearby.

        “Caeb thinks he saw something,” Andraya said. “Be alert. Let’s move carefully.”

        She looked over to where her fellow Knight stood, ringed by the rest of his squires. The Stoneward was encased in his bulky, rounded Plate that the stonespren preferred. His massive form waded through the water like a boulder inexorably making its way downhill.

        Her own Plate couldn’t have been more different. Created by free-spirited flamespren, the Plate was all wicked edges and sharp angles. Her gauntlets swept back past her elbows, ending in points. Her helmet peaked near the edges of her faceplate, giving the impression of horns.  Crimson light glowed from its edges, silhouetting her like flames brought to life.

        Ordering her troops to move in a perpendicular line to the other groups march, Andraya saw Ember split open the air beside her. The ashspren preferred to manifest across solid objects, but those were hard to find in the middle of the Purelake.

        “Ugh, why are we hunting a corrupted spren? I thought we were hunting a Thunderclast?” Ember said.

        “Because the Thunderclast hasn’t been spotted for days and we need to do something,” Andraya replied.

        “It’s because it knows you’re here, Anne. One whiff of us and they go running!” The glowing molten cracks shifted in the air, creating an arm bent at the elbow, flexing its bicep.

        Andraya laughed. “Come on, Ember, we were cooped up in that fortress with nothing to do, hoping they’d make a move. Well, now the enemy has. These guys will almost certainly find Sja-anat’s spy and when they do, we’ll have a little chase on our hands. Better than sitting around splitting ore for smelting.” She could have been holding this conversation mentally through their bond but had opted for speaking aloud. She was concentrating on looking at the ground around her, just in case the troops had missed something.

        Ember tutted, then made a movement that gave the impression of an eyeroll despite his lack of eyes, or even a face.

        “What if we just...” Ember said, “didn’t find the spren...” 

        “Ember, I’m not going to intentionally sabotage our own mission just so we get to fight a Thunderclast.” 

        Ember sighed, “I would just like to be heading home soon, y’know?”

        “I know,” Andraya said, thinking of Sten, “I know.”

        Sten had been looking after the shop whilst she was gone. She didn’t want to be away much longer, it had already been several days. She’d managed to get a letter to him and a response. Business was doing okay, if a little slow, he’d said. Andraya smiled, he was a good kid.

        They walked slowly for a few more moments. Their only accompaniment was the splashing of legs stepping through the lukewarm water. Andraya’s Plate granted her strength enough that she barely noticed the weight of the water on her legs. She could always slick her legs if she needed to. Her Surgebinding would apply to her Plate just as easily as it worked on her skin, but she decided against it. She’d rather feel the water pushing back against her. Life was a struggle, after all, one that should be faced, even if you were in full gleaming Shardplate whilst doing it.

        “There!” someone in the ring around her shouted, “I see somethin’!”

        “Describe it to me, soldier!” Andraya called. 

        “I saw a face, in the water, glowing red eyes!” the same man called out.

        “It’s here, then,” Andraya said. “Sja-anat’s spy. Caeb, run to the checkpoint. The rest of you, keep watching. It won’t be able to go far without a carrier.” She yanked her bag of spheres from around her waist and opened it, breathing the Stormlight in. It raged through her veins. Driving her to move, to act, to destroy. Andraya began her breathing exercises, bringing her body and emotions under her control. When she breathed out, Stormlight filled her helmet, and when she breathed in, she reabsorbed it. 

        In, out, in, out. As she did, she felt the world sharpen, coming into focus. Her shoulders relaxed as she felt something be lifted from them. She was rolling her neck when another shout came from the man who’d spotted the spren.

        “Over there!” the man shouted, pointing. 

        Andraya looked through the line men to see a small red light moving beneath the water. The soldiers surged forward, running with the high knee’d gait that one had to use when trying to run through water. 

        Andraya walked after the group, following the spren with her eyes. She wasn’t in a rush, the squires would be able to surround it and prevent it from escaping, they only needed to-

        Something was wrong. She felt her instincts prick up just before Ember’s voice entered her mind.

        “The Thunderclast!” Ember said. 

        She saw it then, the dark shape swimming next to the red light.  

        “Storms!” Andraya shouted, “it brought an escort!”

        The men slowed to look back at her as she slicked her legs. No time for idle water-wading, she needed to be able to move.

        The dark shape vanished and Andraya knew what would happen next. The men closest to the spren turned and ran back. A sudden crack broke the air. Andraya stood, feet apart, muscles taught, ready to move. She watched as an enormous hand ripped from the stone, followed by an arm, then a shoulder. It slammed down, barely missing the fleeing men before it. Water churned and surged around them as the hole left by the rising creature was filled. A wave crashed against her, but Andraya barely felt it.

        The back of the Thunderclast rose tall under a cacophony of monstrous crashes. Andraya watched it rise up, arch, and reveal the squat head that stood atop the beasts thirty foot tall frame. Red eyes blazed from its misshapen face and the air rumbled as it moved. 

        It twisted around, eyes locking on Andraya just as Ember dropped into an outstretched hand. He took the form of a huge Shardblade, its edge easily six feet in length with curling ridges around the hilt. Glowing lines shined from the blade, mimicking the form Ember usually took.

        Andraya’s heart froze in her chest. Her thoughts returned to her last encounter with a Thunderclast. To Malan. 

        She accepted the wave of emotion. Felt it rise up and pass through her. Her fingers tightened around Ember’s hilt. She would not let her fear control her. A moment passed between her and the Thunderclast. 

        Just as the monster’s expression changed, Andraya exploded forwards.

        Her legs and feet were slick, all except for the tips of her boots. She kicked off and went sailing through the water like it wasn’t there. The speed of her passage kicked up a plume behind her, as the water was parted with a speed it wasn’t used to. Her wake followed her as she closed distance with the Thunderclast in moments.

        It brought a hand down towards her, looking to smash her before she got close.

        She dodged to the side, moving with a grace that the Thunderclast couldn’t even dream of.

        Breathe in.

        She leapt towards the arm as it rose back out of the water and sailed through the air. A slice downwards cut the stone at the forearm. She felt Ember elate in her mind.

        Breathe out.

        She landed and rolled, making her whole body slick against the water. Her Plate clattered against the stone but the flamespren were barely disturbed. She released the Surgebinding on one gauntlet and gripped a stone as she rolled past, using it as an anchor to spin, maintaining her momentum but changing her direction.

        In.

        She was on her feet again, running at the Thunderclast. It recoiled from the lost arm as if it still felt pain through its stone body. Andraya gritted her teeth.

        Out.

        She scanned it for structural weaknesses. The Thunderclast’s body was made up of bedrock and so would be scored with different types of stone. Its torso was a thick, triangular plate with a stony ribcage for a chest. The colours of stone criss-crossed it and... There.

        In.

        She leapt, water streaming off her. Ember rejoiced in her hand as she slammed him deep into the Thunderclast’s chest. With an outstretched hand that shone with Stormlight, she struck a weak point in the stone and poured Stormlight into the creature.

        Out.

        She Divided. She felt the rock shriek beneath her touch. Not just the Thunderclast that commanded it but the stone itself was pained by her Surgebinding. 

        She held. The Stormlight burned through regolith and clay deposits. Harder stones were dislodged and shifted within the Thunderclast itself as it was burned away from the inside. It thrashed, trying to shake Andraya free. With its intact arm, it tried to grab at her, but the beast's own ribcage protected her.

        In.

        The Stormlight raged out of her. Given her Intent to destroy, it wanted to keep going. It pulled at her. It wanted to break those harder rocks, burst out, crack the stone below, boil the water, set the very air aflame.

        It was Andraya’s job to make sure that didn’t happen. She kept pouring Stormlight into the creature until the moment she felt she was about to lose control. In that moment, she dismissed Ember and pushed against the beast’s chest with her legs. 

        She flew backwards through the air. She had broken contact with the Thunderclast and now her Surgebinding was free within its body.  She pirouetted through the air and the Division ravaged the creature from the inside.

        Limbs spasming, the beast cracked and broke as the sound of stones snapping and splitting reverberated the air. Light shone from within, angry and red, flashing with Stormlight followed by heat. 

        Andraya landed. The Thunderclast exploded.

        Molten rock burst outwards from where the creature stood. Large chunks rolled past Andraya, hissing as they hit the water. They rolled, throwing up clouds of steam before coming to a rest with their superheated glow fading. Smaller stones travelled further, landing among the soldiers stood nearby. They ran, throwing their arms up to cover themselves, glowing with Stormlight. They’d complain about the dangerous, reckless Dustbringer later, ignoring the fact she’d saved their lives.

        Andraya sighed, feeling her heart in her chest. It continued to beat to a serene rhythm. This was just another day, another job. Combat was just something she did, with utter calm and composure, because she wanted to help people. This was just one half of how she did so.

        The chaos of the Thunderclast’s death eventually subsided. It wasn’t really dead. The spren couldn’t be killed, but it would be hurt. Dying was an unpleasant experience for all and, now that it knew a Dustbringer was in the area, it would be less likely to manifest unless it absolutely had to. In all likelihood, it would leave, searching for another battlefield to wreak havoc upon.

        And so the Desolation continued onward, as they always did.

        Andraya walked over to the squires, dismissing the Surgebinding on her Plate and reabsorbing the Stormlight. “What are you all doing standing around?” she barked. “I thought we were looking for a spren, weren’t we!”


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        Andraya slid the hidden door to her workshop open. It was mostly how she’d left it, though some crates had been moved and her tools were strewn across the workbench with a number of half finished projects pushed to the side. A few bowls with scraps of food left in them were stacked on one counter. White light bathed the room -- that was how Sten liked it -- and she could hear the sound of a customer with the boy in the front of the shop. 

        She walked over to her vinebud, a few lazy vines drooped over the sides of the pot. “Got you,” she said, tickling one of the vines with a finger. The bud slowly closed, pulling its vines back inwards. Andraya grinned.

        She walked over to where her apron was hung on a peg and put it back on, its comforting weight settling back on her neck. There was an item in the middle of the workbench with its ticket next to it. Andraya brushed a hand against the ruby and the diamond veins on the wall, switching the brightly lit room into a deep red. She read the ticket as she sat before the workbench.

        ‘Legs don’t move’ it read, with a dropoff date from the day before and a pickup date today. It was a simple fix, and so Sten had only asked the customer to wait a day. From the looks of the other projects on the workbench, he was falling behind on his work and hadn’t gotten around to it. 

        Andraya turned the item in her hands. It was a hand-sized, six-legged figure made of painted metal plates in the shape of an axehound. The legs were separate items that poked out of holes in the bottom. A small peg on one side could be twisted, which turned the gears within the figure and wound a small spring. When you let go of the peg, the legs were supposed to move back and forth.

        The ticket was right. The legs weren’t moving despite being the gears inside clearly ticking away. “An easy fix”, Ember said, appearing as a glowing crack in the workbench. “I can’t believe Sten even asked them to wait a day!”

        “He’s not got you helping him,” Andraya said with a wink.

        Breathing in a tiny amount of Stormlight, Andraya donned an eyeglass and flipped down a magnification lense. Running one finger down the seam at the bottom of the figure, she parted the metal plates easily. With the mechanism exposed, she quickly found the tiny axle that had fallen loose from its housing. Using a pair of tweezers, Andraya picked the axle up and, with a quick flash of Surgebinding, slotted it into the housing it had fallen out of. Once she recalled her Stormlight, the little bar of metal stayed where it was, held in place by the pressure of the rest of the mechanism. 

        Andraya closed the metal plates again and used a tiny amount of Stormlight to heat the metal up just a touch and rejoin it at the seam. She stood, removing the eyeglass and checking the mechanism. Twist, twist, twist, and the axehound’s legs were now moving. Andraya grinned and gave it a satisfied nod.

        She made her way through the curtain to the front of the shop. It was a small space with a counter on one side and a large window on the other. Outside the window, the hustle and bustle of one of Urithiru’s internal marketplaces moved back and forth. Inside the shop, shelves were dotted with brightly coloured items of various shapes and sizes. A wooden horse whose legs could canter if you shook it from side to side, a miniature windwheel like you’d find at festivals. More wind-up toys like the one she held. She even had a strange shin toy that looked like a tall chicken that would dip its head in water periodically.

        A rocking horse sat in one corner that was currently being enjoyed by a small girl. Next to her was a wooden doll nearly as big as she was. A woman, presumably the child’s mother, looked exasperated as she talked with Sten. The teen looked very red in the face.

        “But you said it would be ready today?” the woman said. She wasn’t shouting, but she was definitely annoyed. “I paid you extra to make sure!”

        “I’m sorry,” Sten said, “I just...”

        “Excuse me, is this the toy you were picking up today?” Andraya said, holding up the axehound.

        “Craggy!” the small child shouted and jumped up from the rocking horse, running over to Andraya. 

        “Ah, finally. I don’t know why I had to even wait this long!” the woman snapped, glaring at Sten. Blood had drained from the boy's face as he looked at Andraya.

        “My sincerest apologies to you for the delay,” Andraya said, crouching down to the child's height and winding the toy. She placed it on the ground before them and let go of the winding peg. The little toy stuttered to life, ambling across the ground with a stilted grace that was only somewhat like an actual axehound’s walk.

        The little girl burst into giggles and pointed at the toy. “Craggy’s walking again! Look ma, she’s walking!” She clapped her hands together.

        “I can see that darling,” the mother said, her expression melting at the girl's joy.

        “Don’t drop it this time, okay?” Andraya said, ruffling the girl’s hair. The girl nodded and picked up the toy, hugging it close to her chest. Her mother took her by the hand and they left the shop. Andraya sighed and her heart did a little flip.

        “Now,” she said, turning to Sten, “I think we have some cleaning to do, don’t you?”

    Shout out to @Greywatch for betaing! 

  5. I'll get us started with an easy one!

    The two large glyphs near the middle are the glpyhs kalad and zeras, the two symbols that represent the Everstorm!

    The numbers below translate to 1173100804 which is the date of the final Highstorm before the Everstorm.

     

     

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  6. 8 hours ago, Coda said:

    Is this posted to AO3? I searched for The Tragedy of Thaylen Field and Oathbreaker, but to no avail. If it is not, I humbly request that you post it immediately.

    I haven't yet. My plan was always to give it another redrafting before putting it on AO3 (There's some glaring things it's missing and things I want to rewrite) but I was waiting to finish other projects before going back to this. Those projects stalled and I just never got back around to it.

     

    Buuuut if there's demand for it on there, I'll bump it up the list! Thank you for reminding me to do this :lol:

  7. Excellent post my dude. We've spoken on Ancient Roshar and the nature of the magics a few times and this is a great summary. 

    The two bits I particularly like are regarding Nale never drawing on Stormlight from spheres (How have I never noticed this?). I've always strongly suspected fifth level Radiants would not leak, but being able to use Stormlight like the Fused use Voidlight would definitely be a big bonus.

    Second is regarding Voidbinding. It would make sense that whatever magic system was used on Ashyn, it would be related to Odium. He may not have been the original source but he may have corrupted something like he has with Roshar. I really really like the idea of "giving in" to Odium causes him to take something from you (Your guilt, your pain, your whatever) and this creates a void in you that he fills with Investiture to grant powers. I like this. It may not work like this anymore (I don't think this is what happened with Amaram) but I like it a lot.

  8. Some facts about Costco memberships:

    Some warehouses allow you to enter with guest pass to browse and not purchase. Someone can call the warehouse and verify if this is the case. 

    Costco also allows you to get a full refund on your membership for any reason at any time. If you want to just sign up for a card beforehand then cancel it on your way out, you can do this.

  9. Hi! Good to hear you're interested in sending in a WTCC!

    To answer your questions, there isn't a list of already used characters. We don't mind if people send in repeat suggestions, we've had quite a few characters sent in multiple times. Most people don't send in the same clues so as long as you are creative, you should be fine. Plus, if we started limiting it to only one entry per character, that'd give the guys on the podcast an extra clue (it's a character that has not appeared in a previous WTCC ;)). 

    I'm regards to a style guide, nothing solid. As long as it includes all 5 clues (you can number these if you want but if I think they might be better in a different order, I might switch them around) and who the character is (You'd be surprised at how many people send in clues and no answer). 

    If you don't want me to read your name, put your username in the email and we'll read that instead. You can put multiple entries into one email but we recommend you send them in multiple emails. 

    Hope this helps! 

  10. 2 minutes ago, Alderant said:

    I think the discussion of this thread should stick to its intended purpose--a place for people to be able to discuss why they don't like Adolin, without needing to defend their views from those who think he's a good character. And vice versa.

    I see your point, Alderant. Why don't we let the OP decide what they want their thread to be about before we jump to conclusions. For all we know, @Kadalmight be looking forward to discussing Adolin with people who don't agree with them. This is their first post after all, so they may be unaware of the history behind this discussion. I know I try to ignore it as it doesn't really interest me, I just disagreed with their application of Mary Sue phrase.

    So instead of turning this thread into an argument about what can and cannot be said in threads, why don't we continue discussing Adolin?

    If you would like to discuss this matter further, you are welcome to PM me.

  11. 9 hours ago, Ark1002 said:

    Oh, completely missed that.

    If I wasn't in a library, I'd be screaming. That is an amazing sequel. I had an idea, recently, and I think it would be cool. I'd need your approval though.

    Could we make an RP, based directly after this, where members choose a character and continue the story?

    You absolutely have my approval for this! Please go ahead! I'd be honoured :D 

  12. 21 minutes ago, Agent34 said:

    That title's something of a misleading pun. Connection allowing for telepathic communication is certainly interesting, was it inspired by paired fabrials?

    Yeah, that's the basic idea! These would actually be extremely powerful medallions since the only example we've seen of telepathic communication is around third/fourth Oathed spren bonds. If you imagine two items Connected as strongly as a Radiant and their spren, you're on the right track.

  13. Hello people!

    Riding on the coat tails of my writing binge with Tragedy, I decided to keep up the momentum and jump straight into my next project. This is a nice short one off piece because I was tired of waiting for Brandon to write something like it.

     

    Showdown at Noon

    Spoiler

    Hazer Noon made his way through Elendel Grand Station as inconspicuously as he could. The station was busy, as always, with bustling crowds of comers and goers from all over the Basin. The midday traffic wasn’t too bad, and moving through the crowds was relatively easy. It also limited the amount of potential victims.

    The large open space, topped with a dome of glass and metal, held many places a person could hide. The ground floor was ringed by pillars supporting the mezzanine above. The crowd flowed through the clumps of people that stood about, staring up at the clock and the announcement board. Noon joined the masses, standing near the base of a pillar. It was covered with people who were lucky enough to find a place to sit rather than stand.

    Noon pulled his sleeve back and checked his watch. It was a plain wristwatch with metal studs along the band. Each stud was a different metal — some were metalminds, others metallisers. A little further up his arm, the dark shadow of a Hemalurgic implant was visible just beneath the skin. 

    Noon was a few minutes early. His team members, Hazers Dawn and Lumin, would be in position very soon. 

    Scanning the crowd, Noon burned copper and steel. His Allomancy was weak, the blue lines pointing to watches, wallets, and purses, only reaching a few meters, but he wasn’t going to take any chances. Plus, Dawn was the team’s only Copperpiercer. If their target was what Noon suspected, she’d most likely be the first to detect them. After that, Lumin and Noon would move in to apprehend as quickly and quietly as possible.

    One of the “incoming” displays ticked over from “Pending” to “Platform 3”, and there was a general movement among the crowd. Blue steel-lines shifted as people made their way towards the platform.

    Noon took the opportunity to hop up onto a newly opened spot at the base of a nearby pillar, granting him a great view of the board and, not exactly coincidentally, the slightly raised vantage of the rest of the station. In about a minute’s time, Lumin should appear on the mezzanine level on the opposite side of the station.

    He was a good lad, Lumin was. A natural Coinshot, he was useful despite his lack of implants. About as green as they come, he was freshly married and new to the Hazers. The boy had aced the Allomancy Aptitude tests, despite never using his powers during his time as a beat cop. He must have a hobby that keeps him sharp, Noon thought.

    Noon himself was a born Augur. He hadn’t even noticed until he was nearly eighteen. Most people don’t have bits of gold lying around the house for their kids to lick and since neither of his parents were Mistings, they’d never thought to get him tested. 

    By the time he’d realised, his parents were dead and he’d already made the decision to join the force. Noon didn’t think his gold ability would change things much. It might make him a bit more introspective but it wasn’t like ads were posted looking for gold burners, proclaiming “Do you question all your life choices? Then we need you!” 

    As it turned out, the Hazer unit was always on the lookout for gold Mistings and Ferrings. They didn’t talk about it much, it raised too many questions. Hemalurgy still had a stigma against it after all, despite advances in technology. Noon hadn’t really cared. If he was given the choice of spending the rest of his life in agony in a hospital bed, or being pumped full of drugs, given a lovely final day surrounded by friends and family before being put under and having a spike driven through your heart, he knew what he’d pick. He’d signed his donor form with barely a thought.

    Plus, the implant he’d been given was second hand anyway. Or third hand, or fourth. He had decided he wasn’t too interested in the full history of the gold implant nestled in his heart, only that it made him a Bloodmaker. Chief Colms had told him he’d be virtually unkillable, and that was enough for him. The idea of open heart surgery being a job requirement was a little daunting for the young Noon, but once an implant became available, there was no turning back. 

    Another group cleared out as the board chimed to announce another train’s arrival. The space next to Noon became free, and was quickly filled.

    His healing wasn’t exactly top of the line. That was just the nature of implants. But it didn’t matter too much. The department liked to get someone with at least one natural gold ability for a reason. Once he’d awoken after his operation, he’d been walked through storing health, burning the gold to get more health, then using that to fill up more metalminds. He’d left the hospital less than a week later, feeling better than he had in his entire life.

    From that point on, Noon had risen through the ranks quickly. His healing allowed him to have new implants added and removed without much worry. None of his abilities were very strong, unfortunately. That was why they still needed specialists like Dawn on the squad. He didn’t need to be strong to be effective, though. As his old captain had been fond of telling him, “With a bit of ay-pewter here, bit of eff-steel there, most people won’t know what hit ‘em.”

    Noon checked his watch again, it was time for Lumin to appear. Noon looked at the upper railing on the opposite side of the station. No Lumin in sight. 

    Noon’s brow creased. The kid was green, but he wasn’t stupid. He knew how to get into position on time. Dawn should be in position near the center of the station, but it was hard to see from where Noon was. He had to assume she was there.

    Noon returned his gaze to the announcement board and waited another minute.

    He checked again.

    Still no Lumin.

    He tapped a little sight, making his vision more precise. Lumin was definitely not where he was supposed to be.

    Another arrival chimed from the board, causing another rush of people. As the area cleared, he noticed the next person who sat beside him had left a distinct space between them.

    Noon looked down.

    Next to him sat a thick brown envelope. Hastily scribbled on it were the words ‘For Noon’.

    Years as an officer of the law had taught him to notice when something was wrong. Even if it weren’t for those years of training, this envelope was like a tin-flare that something was very, very wrong.

    “Oh, Rusts,” he said to himself. He grabbed the envelope and tore it open. It was heavy, with something metal inside. How had he missed that?

    Noon shook the metal object out of the envelope. A large metal disk, around the size of his palm, fell into his hand. He turned the medallion over, looking at the engravings. One side was embossed with a language Noon didn’t recognise, while the other side depicted a head with a single spike going through his eye. He thought the design looked vaguely southern, but he wasn’t sure.

    It took him a moment before he realised that there wasn’t a blue line pointing at the medallion. It didn’t feel like aluminum, but it certainly seemed like a metal. That could only mean...

    “Invested. Rusts and Ruin...” Noon whispered, cursing under his breath.

    Noon closed his eyes and felt the metal of the coin. Really felt it.

    There, like a candle in the dark, he felt the power within the metal. It felt like one of the metalliser primer studs on his wrist. Not quite a normal metalmind, but something else.

    Opening his eyes, and checking the area around him, he tapped the coin.

    He felt something change, the power inside beginning to flow into him. It was strange, he felt nothing new. The medallion seemed to be doing something, but Noon couldn’t work out what.

    He held the coin up before him, as if looking at it in a better light might reveal something previously unseen.

    Hello, Hazer Noon.

    “Mists!” Noon hissed, nearly dropping the coin. The voice sounded like it came from inside of his head, right between his ears.

    Don’t worry, Hazer, you haven’t gone mad, it chuckled. I’m talking to you through the medallion. The voice was calm, authoritative. 

    “What? How?” Noon said, looking around him. The person sat next to him looked at him strange.

    It’s an ancient southerner device. Very rare, you see. I found it along with a few other... Interesting items.

    Noon thought on this for a moment. 

    “Can you hear me?” He said into the medallion.

    Oh yes, this works both ways. I have the other half. And you don’t need to talk directly into the thing. They’re connected, you see. The voice put special emphasis on the word “connected”.

    “I’m not sure I understand.”

    That’s okay. You don’t have to.

    Noon pushed himself off the plinth, deciding it was time to check on Dawn. 

    “So who are you exactly?” Noon said, making his way through the crowd. He had a very good idea who was talking to him, but he wasn’t about to let them know that.

    Oh come now, that would be cheating! I’m who you’re here to see, Hazer. I can tell you that much.

    “So why don’t you come see me?”

    You really are trying your darndest to make this easy for yourself, aren’t you? I’m not about to just push myself over to you and let you arrest me. That wouldn’t be any fun!

    Noon was quickly becoming rather annoyed. The voice was smug, tinged with an air of superiority. Give Noon a dozen blue-blood Thugs who didn’t say much and hit hard, and he was happy. He didn’t like these rusting mind games.

    Keep him talking, though, Noon thought. Keep him talking, and who knows what he’ll give away.

    “If that’s the case, then how about this. Want to tell me why you killed all those people?” Noon said, almost conversationally.

    They had been tracking their target for weeks. It had started as a string of unexplained murders. A family found dead in their fifth floor apartment, the only unlocked entrypoint being a window with no fire escape. A triple homicide involving an iron bar, bent in a way that only pewter’s strength could explain. Once word got out that the police had started linking the crimes and Noon started showing up at every crime scene, the killer had started to leave clues behind. Little messages.

    That’s when they’d started telling Noon he was being paranoid. A serial killer they could accept. A serial killer with every metalborn ability under the hood that had started sending coded messages to the police officer tracking him? That was a tough alloy to swallow.

    And that’s why he was here with only Dawn and Lumin. They’d agreed to follow him and the clues, despite not quite believing him.

    Now that’s more like it, Hazer. Tell me, what do you know of the Mistborn?

    Noon was a little rusty on his history. He reached the middle of the stations main hall. A square in the middle of the room, slightly lowered, surrounded by benches and large potted plants. Light streamed down from the dome below.

    Dawn was supposed to be sitting on one of these benches, using her own implants to pierce any nearby copperclouds.

    She wasn’t.

    A heavy weight dropped in Noon’s stomach.

    He dropped his coppercloud, instead burning bronze. As he started to weave through the crowds, he let his instincts take over, trusting them to know what to do before he did.

    “Mistborn, like the Ascendant Warrior and the Lord Mistborn? Born with every metal’s power running through their blood?” Noon said.

    Oh yes, that kind of thing, although the Lord wasn’t born with his powers. Back then, they weren’t merely myths. The entire noble class was based on who was Mistborn! Sure, you had Mistings, like we have today, but the Mistborn! Ohhh, the Mistborn!

    The man was getting excited. Good. 

    “You’re a fan, then?” Noon said, passing the medallion from one hand to the other, his bronze thrumming within him.

    Ha! A fan. Something like that. We should be above them, you know, these... these skaa. They should bow before the Metalborn, as they had before. The Lord Ruler had it right. We’re not born equal, so why should we act equal? A few mewling welps don’t mean anything in the scheme of things.

    “That doesn’t mean you had the right to kill them,” Noon said, snarling.

    What right did I have to let them live?

    There was silence after that. Noon wasn’t quite sure how to respond to that. He had read interviews with other serial killers. He knew reasoning with the man wouldn’t work.

    But then, Hazer Captain, you should know something about that.

    Noon’s brow creased. “What do you mean?” He said.

    Those “implants” in your body. A more civilised tool, for a more civilised world, we are told. You think everyone goes quietly into the dark? No. They don’t. But because the city needs killers, the people need to make sacrifices. Once you’ve signed your life away, there’s no turning back, whether you want it or not.

    “I don’t see how men and women donating their abilities for the good of the people is anything close to your butchery.” Noon hissed quietly. He put his hands in his coat pocket, medallion held tight.

    Oh it’s only “murder” if it’s me who kills them, is it? Do it quickly with a knife to the heart or a snap of the neck and it’s “uncivilised”. Pump them full of drugs and do it in a hospital, and suddenly it’s a donation!

    Noon was about to reply in anger, but paused. How did he know about that? The Hazers kept that element of the force... Well, their use of Hemalurgy wasn’t exactly secret, but they didn’t talk about it much with outsiders.

    Noon fingered the metalliser studs on his watch.

    They had a name for you, you know. They were the most feared servants in all of The Final Empire. They took what they needed and didn’t think twice. Why should they? It was for the good of the people. You’re just an old idea with a new coat of paint.

    “Who are you?” Noon said, incredulously.

    The voice laughed. All in due time, Hazer. I have another question for you. This one’s easy. Do you know what a Feruchemist is? A Feruchemist, I mean, not any old Ferring.

    That one, Noon did know.

    “Someone that can use all the Feruchemical metals. Like the Hero.”

    Like. The. Hero. Each word was enunciated. Our so called God on high. Balancing two powers that can create and end worlds. Hmph. Seems he was just following the theme.

    What do you mean?”

    The Lord Ruler was able to use all Allomantic and Feruchemical metals. He was God before Harmony took up the title.

    Noon vaguely remembered this. He didn’t pay much attention to religion, but he understood enough. Someone able to use the full suite of Allomantic and Feruchemical abilities? No wonder they called him a god.

    “Is that how you see yourself then? Like a god?”

    Oh no, no, no. Not at all, the voice said, unconvincingly. Not yet, anyway. There are things I will accomplish, and if others wish to name me The Lord Reborn or whatever nonsense goes through the minds of lesser men, then so be it.

    “What are you going to do?” Noon said. He’d almost finished a loop of the station. He’d felt tin burning in the crowd but it had gone out of range before he could work out where the pulse had come from.

    In time, Hazer, in time. For now, I want to show you what I can do. I want you to activate your newest metalliser. That fancy new stud you’ve been fingering on your watch.

    Rusts, Noon thought. How did he know about that?

    The metalliser was something new that the screwheads down in The Pit had cooked up. The metal it was made from was apparently exceedingly rare, and the power it contained was even harder to obtain. He’d been told to only use it in absolutely dire circumstances. It would let him take down any target, get out of any situation. He was told he’d be able to dodge bullets if he needed to.

    “And why should I do that?” Noon said. He had started making his way back to the center. He had been so wrapped up in the killer’s monologue that he had almost forgotten the absence of Dawn and Lumin.

    I want to show you something, the voice said, turning harsh. Just do it!

    Noon hesitated, but pressed down on the metalliser on his watch. To anyone nearby, it simply looked like he was adjusting his shirt cuff. 

    The stud clicked softly, and power flowed through him.

    Around him, the hundreds of people burst forth into hundreds of shadows. Noon watched them. As people walked, they moved into the place left behind by a shadow that telegraphed their every move. He felt like he should be overwhelmed by the barrage of information, but it all just made sense to him. Every person followed a trail of shadows of themselves, showing where they’d be one step, two steps, five steps from where they were now. The chaos of the disorganised crowd was transformed into a beautiful work of art, where every step was made as though it knew exactly where it needed to go. Almost instinctively, Noon found himself able to navigate the shifting crowd with ease.

    Good, the voice purred into his mind.

    The scene changed.

    The people around him exploded with dozens of images. Noon stumbled. It was too much. People stopped following their tracks. They became chaos, spilling out around him so quickly he struggled to see where the shadows came from.

    And that’s when he noticed the bodies.

    The shadows started to fall. All around him, every shadow began to drop. Noon tried his best to follow them back to their source, but there were too many.

    They were all joined by a single figure.

    A man. He wore a coat with a hood to hide his face. He would drop down from the air, swoop in from nearby or simply push aside other shadows. He’d slit throats, spill guts, snap necks. The methods of murder numbered almost as many as the shadows, the man with the hood seeming to come from every direction. There was no tracing it back to where it came from. One by one, he watched as the people around him died.

    Eyes wide, Noon turned off the atium metalliser.

    “What in Harmony’s name was that?” he said, too loud. The people around Noon looked at him. He looked back at them, not moments before having watched them die a thousand deaths. Embarrassed and confused, he shoved his hands in his pockets and made his way back to the center of the station.

    Did they not train you in that? They probably thought they were the sole proprietors of atium.

    Of course I was trained. I’ve seen the images before, just never... like that,” Noon said, reaching the middle of the station and sitting in an open seat. He rubbed his eyes with the balls of his hands.

    When two people see the future, the shadows conflict. You see what I’m going to do, and that changes what you’re going to do. That changes what I am going to do, and so on until the shadows are as numerous as possibility.

    “But what was that?” Noon hissed. “Why was it showing me everyone dying?”

    Because that is what I wanted to show you, the voice said, very calm and quiet. That I am ready, willing, and able to kill every single person in this room, and there isn’t a single damned thing you could do to stop me.

    Noon stopped rubbing his eyes. He slowly lowered his hands to his knees and sat up straight. The lead weight in his stomach seemed to double. 

    I’m leaving now. You were a fine opponent, Hazer Noon. I liked this chase. I hope you get the opportunity to grow old, surrounded by loved ones and friends. Never come after me again.

    “Wait!” Noon said. He stood and looked around frantically, trying to see someone, something amiss.

    In that moment, his steel-lines warned him of metal dropping from above. They were faint, but moving fast. The bits of metal dropped down in front of him, clattering on the marble floor.

    Before him lay several bloody lengths of metal, about the size of large hair pins, and a pristine gold wedding ring. 

    Noon looked up at the glass dome above, just in time to see a figure disappearing through one of the windows and out of sight.

    Scooping up the metal and the ring, Noon turned and ran for the door.
     

     

    Huge thank you to @WireSegal and @ladymxdnight for their help on this!

  14. Thank you all for your kinds words! :lol:

    On 06/02/2019 at 10:01 PM, Bigmikey357 said:

    The song for this story: look up the song All's Hell that Ends Well.  It's on YouTube.

    I did this! I see what you mean haha

    16 hours ago, Firerust said:

    Anyway, I gotta say, other than the fact that there are many typos I would love to point out,

    Hey, please point them out. I'm gonna upload this to AO3 soonish and if I can fix a few typos before I do that, I would really appreciate it!

     

    16 hours ago, Firerust said:

    A couple tiny nitpicks: I found "Oathbreaker" to be kind of tongue-in-cheek. Cheesy. Contrived. Despite that, it was kind of cool, working as a huge all-encompassing version of Vyre's knife. Also, Amaram seemed out of character to me. In OB, he showed moments of mirth and did a big character change, but still took his situation pretty seriously overall. In this version, he seems playful, immature, even childlike. Like: "Whee, I'm gonna fly around and kill Shardbearers with a grin on my face!" It was a total character turnaround. Sure, it was a turnaround in Oathbringer, but this is much more extreme.

    Yeah, you're not wrong with Oathbreaker being very cheesy. I agree. @WireSegal had the amazing idea to have Odium corrupt Oathbringer and turn that into Oathbreaker and I wish I'd done that.

    Amaram is a good point. My idea was that Yelig-nar had pretty much entirely consumed Amaram at that point and so there wasn't much Amaram left by that point. I didn't go back and reread the Amaram battle section and I probably should have. Glad you "enjoyed" anyway! :lol:

     

     

  15. Here's a little post-word for those interested:

    Spoiler

     

    Hi everyone!

    I hope you’ve enjoyed The Tragedy of Thaylen Fields. This is by far the largest writing project I’ve ever completed and I’ve thoroughly enjoyed it.

    First things first, I’d like to thank @Alyssum314for their continuous efforts to make sure my apostrophes and commas were in the right place. Turns out I absolutely suck at knowing when to end speech with a full stop or a comma and Lyss helped me a lot with this. I’d also like to thank @ladymxdnight for helping me with plotting, structure and another general grammar checker. If it weren’t for her, you’d have had Amaram using the Destruction sure and would have more than a few sections end on duds. Lastly, thank you to Jaffa6 on discord for his help with grammar and wording.

    Now, if you’d indulge me, here’s some fun facts about the writing of Tragedy:

    ● The entire reason I wrote this fic was the scene where Nightblood kills Pattern. For years, people have asked what would happen if NB and a Shardblade clashed. My answer, since before OB came out, was that NB would eat the Shardblade immediately. Ever since NB turned up in WoR, I’ve hoped we’d see this in the books but until then, I wanted to write my interpretation of it. I wanted it to be Syl originally but I foolishly killed Kal in the first chapter so couldn’t use him! I liked how it turned out anyway.

    ● Something that surprised me was that Shallan was the hardest character for me to write, by a long shot. I almost didn’t write any PoV’s for her because I struggled so much with her. By contrast, Jasnah came to me as the easiest by far. I don’t know if it’s just because we don’t see anywhere near as much of her internal thoughts so it makes it easier to fill in those gaps with my own interpretation of the character or because I’m just more like her irl than I am Shallan. Either way, this is why we got a lot of Jasnah PoV’s.

    ● Another inspiration of this fic is a sequence known as the Eclipse from the manga Berserk. If you’ve read it, I hope this makes sense. If you haven’t, I highly recommend Berserk under the warning that you’re going to see some crem in it that makes my fic look likes a kids book. I tried to emulate the feelings I had during the Eclipse in this fic. Of horror and disgust and just a brutal emotional ride. I hope I succeeded.

    ● For the Dalinar chapters, I went back and read the Marsh chapters from HoA. Those were heavily influential in those parts, with Dalinar both moving on his own within the orders that Odium had given him and other times completely controlled by Odium.

    Anyway, I hope you enjoyed this terrible, awful ride. Thank you to everyone for reading and your feedback. I appreciate every single comment I get on these. Never forget, if you ever want to do something like this yourself, all you have got to do is write.

    I doubt this will be the last thing I ever write, and hopefully this won’t be the last thing you ever read of mine.

    Thank you all, and see you around.

     

  16. 8 minutes ago, TousenShadowForged said:

    was he aware of those worlds?  cause so far didn't seem like him or sazed/harmony are aware

    He was one of the original 16 Shards so he would have been aware of at least one other planet for sure and knew more were out there.

    Harmony doesn't know because Sazed doesn't know.

  17. On 29/11/2018 at 6:45 PM, Ookla the Drunk said:

    So, Do you want to join?

    Oh I didn't realise I was being propositioned for a specific guild! Maybe some other time :D

    On 29/11/2018 at 10:47 PM, ladymxdnight said:

    Happy to help, Jebus! I really enjoyed this chapter. It's so interesting to see this exploration of how things could have gone (though admittedly, I am very displeased by Taln's and Renarin's deaths). Eager to see what's next for Jasnah and Ash since right now I'm anxious for their safety. Also, Szeth

    EDIT: I still have hope for Ash okay, you can't murderate two Heralds even if you're psycho!Dalinar

    If I was you, I'd be worried for everyones safety.

  18. 5 hours ago, Ookla the Ookla said:

    Thanks a lot for this! And I really like the bit with Rock saying Kaladin would be back. This is probably the most masterful one so far.

    Also, how did they help with the chapter?

    Hey, @Ooklalord Jebus, any interest in joining a writer's guild? Cause I think you'd fit right in.

    Glad you liked it!

    Alyssum helped me a lot with grammer and capitlisation (I'm really bad at remembering 's and punctuation around speech marks, they're good at them). Ladymxdnight helped with the plotting and pacing of a lot of it. For example, I originally had them appear inside the Oathgate building until Lady pointed out that the platform is a wide open space that, in Thaylen City, had been converted into a statue garden so I had to rewrite that whole section.

    And I've never thought about it really. This is my first time writing something this long and complex. Most of my writing projects never break 5k (Tragedy is now up to 13k).

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