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6 hours ago, Voidspawn said:
Finally. FINALLY!!! We finally get a look at the Releasers! Non-canon, of course. This was amazing!
I hope that Brando Sando will give the Releasers a main role in KoW. A look-back on Dalinar's vision in another perspective, like this one, would be perfect, though I'm hoping that we get a modern Releaser take the podium.
I must say, it's good to know that some non-Releaser (maybe. What Radiant order are you?) fans of us exist! Thank you so much for making this fic!!!
Keep up the great work!
I'm a huge fan of the Dustbringers and believe it's the order I would be (Despite the quiz giving me Windrunner and Lightweaver???).
I hope we get more Dustbringer stuff before Ash's novel. Brandon recently said in a livestream that he's still not 100% on how they work which is super interesting to me. So here's my interpretation, not your traditional fire magic, focus on self mastery and controlled release of... Passion, for lack of a better word
And yes, even though I love Dustbringers, I still use Dustbringer instead of Releaser. There were disagreements in all the Radiant orders on things and I like to think some Dustbringers liked the name/reputation they had, which is kind of what I was trying to portray with Andraya
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2 hours ago, GoWibble said:
Tons of assumptions, but it's following the Sanderson rule of magic: err on the side of awesome
Oh yeah. Most of my fics are "Brandon said it's going to take him decades to get around to writing things so I'm going to write it for him on how I imagine it will play out". There's a lot of assumptions here about how Division works but I'm quite happy with it.
2 hours ago, GoWibble said:I'm confused. What did the surgebinding do?
She made the end of the axle slick for just a moment to help slide it in place. I tried to think of a better way of putting it but "slick" is an awkward word to use sometimes.
2 hours ago, GoWibble said:This was really good! I liked the characterization and the magitech assumptions
Thanks!
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Hi all! I'm back at it again with a stormlight fanfic.
This one isn't depressing, I promise! It's an idea I've had in my head for a while and really wanted to get down.
Spoiler warning: This fic spoils some elements of Rhythm of War. It doesn't actually spoil Rhythm of War but it uses information we learn in RoW in it.
Let me know what you think! Enjoy!
Dustbringer
Spoiler“Andraya, you’re needed,” the cloaked figure said from the tunnel entrance.
Andraya closed her eyes, a spike of annoyance rising in her chest at the interruption. She took a deep breath in and settled it. She rose, placing her most recent project on the workbench and putting her tools in the front pocket of her apron. She took her apron off and hung it on a peg.
As she did, she touched the vein of ruby that ran across the walls and roof of her workshop. It glowed with a deep and consistent red, casting Andraya and the room in a bloody light. The ruby felt warm, comforting.
Andraya had a few options when it came to lighting. A large circle of diamond in the roof provided a white light for reading, and there was a swirl of emerald in one corner. She liked to leave that on when she wasn’t home as houseplants seemed to like it.
But when she was working, Andraya liked the red. It was very consistent for her, Ember said.
“Sten, could you watch the shop? I’m stepping out for a few days,” Andraya called. Her squire peeked in from behind the curtain that separated the front of the shop from the back.
“Sure, Anne,” Sten said, his voice quick and clipped, like he was always in a rush to end a conversation. “You sure you won’t need any help?”
“Not this time, Sten,” Andraya replied. “I want you to finish this work order for me without any Surges. I feel you’re becoming too reliant on them.”
The teen had shown incredible promise since Andraya had taken him in. He’d somehow ended up homeless in Urithiru with no parents to be found. No orphanage wanted him due to the fights he got in, he’d said. That kind of thing just shouldn’t happen in the Tower, Andraya thought. So she’d taken him in and given him an outlet for his passions. He’d started breathing in Stormlight before his first growth spurt.
The boy sighed, “Yes, Anne, I’ll make sure it’s done before you get back.” He disappeared, the curtain falling back into place.
“Thank you, Sten,” Andraya called. She walked over to the entrance where the cloaked figure waited. It was on the opposite end of the workshop to where the front of the shop was, usually hidden as just a section of unused wall. Andraya’s visitor had opened the door from inside the tunnel it hid. A discreet way for her to come and go without raising too many questions. That was how she preferred it. It was how a lot of her Order preferred it. People didn’t like knowing that they lived next door to a Dustbringer.
The figure handed Andraya a large cloak similar to their own. She took it and threw it over herself, covering her dark shirt and flared trousers. Her blonde hair was already tied up as she had been working, so she flipped the hood up over her head. The rim came to a rest just before her eyes.
“Hold on a moment,” Andraya said, as the figure turned to leave. She stepped over to the spiral emerald in the corner and stroked a finger across it, willing it to brighten. As she did, she tapped a finger onto the lit ruby and dimmed it. She looked over to her potted vinebud and pointed a single finger at it. She expected the plant's vines to be out when she returned and it knew it.
“Okay,” she said to the figure, “let’s go.”
#Andraya and her visitor walked in silence after leaving her workshop. The hidden door had silently closed behind them with a touch of the activation gem recessed into the wall.
Ember manifested nearby, his flaming presence appearing like a molten crack that ran along the wall of the tunnel. As he traveled beside her, the crack stayed about two feet long, its leading edge splitting the rock before him and the trailing edge closing behind as if he’d never been there.
“It’s Elibra,” Ember said, speaking voicelessly into her mind. As a Radiant of the fourth Oath, Andraya could communicate silently Ember.
“That explains the brevity,” Andraya said, “I much prefer Dansek or Trelleb.”
“As do I, Anne. Simmer is such a bore compared to Flare and Pyre. If he was anymore doused, he’d be a riverspren.” Andraya smiled at that and looked at the other Dustbringer. Their Order expressed self control in a variety of ways. Some, like Andraya, found outlets for their... intense emotions, whilst others, like Elibra, meditated on them instead.
“So what’s the mission, Elibra?” Andraya said, her tone chipper in an attempt to try and start the conversation off on a high note.
“Thunderclast spotted in the Purelake,” Elibra grunted. Silence followed.
Thunderclast. Andraya almost stopped walking. The word brought such an intense burst of fear and anger, she had to fight to not swear aloud.
Thunderclast. Andraya took a breath and composed her thoughts. One of the enemy's most powerful weapons. In certain situations, they could be devastating to armies and cities. She’d seen good men and women, including Radiants, smashed by the creatures. If they were commissioning a Dustbringer to deal with one, it meant this one had been harassing them for a while. Most combat orientated orders didn’t have an issue taking them down, but it took time. Dustbringers could banish one in moments. Sometimes just the presence of one of their Order was enough to scare off the spren.
Andraya fought the rising emotion in her throat. The thoughts also led her to the memories of her previous squire, Malan. He had been killed by a Thunderclast years prior. Her fingers went cold and she began clenching and unclenching them out of habit. She closed her eyes for a pair of breaths. Sten was safe at home. It wouldn’t happen again. She banished her fear but kept the anger. She’d need that for the fight.
“Anything else I need to know? Who’s deployed there now? Am I gating in or being flown?”
Elibra made a noise halfway between a sigh and a grunt. “Flown. Windrunners will take you. They’re waiting for you at the Sanctuary, ask them,” the man said.
Better than nothing, Andraya thought. The Sanctuary was the Dustbringers headquarters, a nexus of tunnels hidden within a circle of chambers. With Dustbringers being distrusted by the public, they needed a place they could congregate without others seeing them come and go. It was staffed at all times by the most senior members of their Order, Elibra, Dansek, and Trelleb, along with any squires the three had at the moment. They were in charge of dispatching the Dustbringers when they were requested to battlefronts and warzones.
The tunnels within Urithiru allowed them to operate incognito. No one saw them entering or exiting the Sanctuary, except hooded or encased in Plate. Ready for war.
They continued on silently, climbing and descending stairs seemingly at random. Andraya thought about drawing in a bit of Stormlight to help with the walk, but decided against it. Using Stormlight to climb stairs was such an Edgedancer or Willshaper thing to do. She was better than that. It was a good leg exercise, for what it was worth.
After nearly an hour of walking, they reached the Sanctuary. They hadn’t run into anyone else in the tunnels, not even whilst moving through the most populated areas. It wasn’t uncommon to find pages or message runners using them for shortcuts, which was why they still wore the cloaks.
Even so, the hushed atmosphere of the Dustbringer headquarters seemed even quieter than the deserted tunnels. Several squires moved quietly from chamber to chamber, some holding documents, others tools or weapons. One robed figure knelt on the floor, cleaning the floor with a laughably small brush.
They made their way to a combat preparation chamber where Elibra left her. Andraya filled her black-pouch with a few gems brimming with Stormlight. She then attached a belt of throwing knives to her thigh -- Ember could turn into any sized weapon at a whim but you could never be too careful -- then went to find the mask storage locker by the wall.
Within were the masks for the Dustbringers to wear. They didn’t wear them all the time, some Knights were fine with just the hood to hide their face. Others kept their Plate summoned at all times. This was what Andraya usually did, but she wouldn’t be able to keep her Plate summoned if the Windrunners were taking her.
So she opted for a mask. Most were plain black ovals with a pair of slits for eyes. There were some decorated with inset rubies or filigree, but Andraya didn’t like that sort of ostentation. If she was going to be wearing a mask, she wanted something more personal.
“Ember, show me what your face looks like again,” Andraya said to the air.
“I can do but... why?” Ember replied, appearing on the wall as a series of swirling lines. He twisted and moved until a face began to manifest, outlined by glowing lines of heat in the stone. It coalesced into the face of a young man with wide features. Ember's eyes sat far apart on his face and he had a thick nose, his tight lipped smile stretched too far back towards the ears.
“You’ll see. And not that one. Your true face,” Andraya said.
“Okay...” Ember said, frowning slightly, then smirking, “Oh, I see what you’re doing.”
The face on the wall grinned, showing all of its teeth. Then the lips began burning away showing the whole jawline, the hard points of cheekbones and hollow frame of the eye sockets. Within moments, the face was replaced by the rictus grin of a skull. Ember’s skull. His true face, the one that was left when the ash had cleared.
“Perfect,” Andraya said, selecting a plain black mask. She drew in Stormlight, only the tiniest amount, the perfect amount. She placed one finger on the front of the mask and willed the Stormlight into it, having it follow the pattern that Ember was showing her. The axi in the mask began to divide and produce heat. But she was no novice playing with fire, the black paint flaked off in the pattern she imprinted onto the mask, the lines matching those of Ember.
She ran out of Stormlight just as the pattern had finished burning its way to the top of the mask. “Perfect,” she said.
She shook her hand, getting rid of the flakes of black paint that had fallen onto it, and donned the mask. “Thank you, Ember,” she added.
“No problem, Anne. It looks great!” he replied.
“I hope it does,” Andraya said, putting her hood up, leaving only Ember’s grinpeaking below the rim.
When she walked out of the Sanctuary to meet the Windrunners, Andraya savoured their expressions. Whilst she did wish her Order wasn’t seen as dangerous monsters, she enjoyed playing into the stereotype a little. And as they left for the Purelake, Andraya grinned behind her skull mask.
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“Form up!” Andraya called.
The squires moved to circle her in a defensive ring, the two squads of troops she commanded merging together. The knee-high water of the Purelake sloshed around them as they took their positions. They wore bronze and leather, armour that didn’t come close to comparing to Andraya’s Plate.
“Why did you call us back?” said squadleader Divar. He was an Azish man with messy brown hair that was close to bonding a peakspren. Unfortunately, this gave him a chip on his shoulder ever since he’d been assigned to protect Andraya. These weren’t her squires. They were Connected to the Stoneward that stood in the centre of the other group of squires nearby.
“Caeb thinks he saw something,” Andraya said. “Be alert. Let’s move carefully.”
She looked over to where her fellow Knight stood, ringed by the rest of his squires. The Stoneward was encased in his bulky, rounded Plate that the stonespren preferred. His massive form waded through the water like a boulder inexorably making its way downhill.
Her own Plate couldn’t have been more different. Created by free-spirited flamespren, the Plate was all wicked edges and sharp angles. Her gauntlets swept back past her elbows, ending in points. Her helmet peaked near the edges of her faceplate, giving the impression of horns. Crimson light glowed from its edges, silhouetting her like flames brought to life.
Ordering her troops to move in a perpendicular line to the other groups march, Andraya saw Ember split open the air beside her. The ashspren preferred to manifest across solid objects, but those were hard to find in the middle of the Purelake.
“Ugh, why are we hunting a corrupted spren? I thought we were hunting a Thunderclast?” Ember said.
“Because the Thunderclast hasn’t been spotted for days and we need to do something,” Andraya replied.
“It’s because it knows you’re here, Anne. One whiff of us and they go running!” The glowing molten cracks shifted in the air, creating an arm bent at the elbow, flexing its bicep.
Andraya laughed. “Come on, Ember, we were cooped up in that fortress with nothing to do, hoping they’d make a move. Well, now the enemy has. These guys will almost certainly find Sja-anat’s spy and when they do, we’ll have a little chase on our hands. Better than sitting around splitting ore for smelting.” She could have been holding this conversation mentally through their bond but had opted for speaking aloud. She was concentrating on looking at the ground around her, just in case the troops had missed something.
Ember tutted, then made a movement that gave the impression of an eyeroll despite his lack of eyes, or even a face.
“What if we just...” Ember said, “didn’t find the spren...”
“Ember, I’m not going to intentionally sabotage our own mission just so we get to fight a Thunderclast.”
Ember sighed, “I would just like to be heading home soon, y’know?”
“I know,” Andraya said, thinking of Sten, “I know.”
Sten had been looking after the shop whilst she was gone. She didn’t want to be away much longer, it had already been several days. She’d managed to get a letter to him and a response. Business was doing okay, if a little slow, he’d said. Andraya smiled, he was a good kid.
They walked slowly for a few more moments. Their only accompaniment was the splashing of legs stepping through the lukewarm water. Andraya’s Plate granted her strength enough that she barely noticed the weight of the water on her legs. She could always slick her legs if she needed to. Her Surgebinding would apply to her Plate just as easily as it worked on her skin, but she decided against it. She’d rather feel the water pushing back against her. Life was a struggle, after all, one that should be faced, even if you were in full gleaming Shardplate whilst doing it.
“There!” someone in the ring around her shouted, “I see somethin’!”
“Describe it to me, soldier!” Andraya called.
“I saw a face, in the water, glowing red eyes!” the same man called out.
“It’s here, then,” Andraya said. “Sja-anat’s spy. Caeb, run to the checkpoint. The rest of you, keep watching. It won’t be able to go far without a carrier.” She yanked her bag of spheres from around her waist and opened it, breathing the Stormlight in. It raged through her veins. Driving her to move, to act, to destroy. Andraya began her breathing exercises, bringing her body and emotions under her control. When she breathed out, Stormlight filled her helmet, and when she breathed in, she reabsorbed it.
In, out, in, out. As she did, she felt the world sharpen, coming into focus. Her shoulders relaxed as she felt something be lifted from them. She was rolling her neck when another shout came from the man who’d spotted the spren.
“Over there!” the man shouted, pointing.
Andraya looked through the line men to see a small red light moving beneath the water. The soldiers surged forward, running with the high knee’d gait that one had to use when trying to run through water.
Andraya walked after the group, following the spren with her eyes. She wasn’t in a rush, the squires would be able to surround it and prevent it from escaping, they only needed to-
Something was wrong. She felt her instincts prick up just before Ember’s voice entered her mind.
“The Thunderclast!” Ember said.
She saw it then, the dark shape swimming next to the red light.
“Storms!” Andraya shouted, “it brought an escort!”
The men slowed to look back at her as she slicked her legs. No time for idle water-wading, she needed to be able to move.
The dark shape vanished and Andraya knew what would happen next. The men closest to the spren turned and ran back. A sudden crack broke the air. Andraya stood, feet apart, muscles taught, ready to move. She watched as an enormous hand ripped from the stone, followed by an arm, then a shoulder. It slammed down, barely missing the fleeing men before it. Water churned and surged around them as the hole left by the rising creature was filled. A wave crashed against her, but Andraya barely felt it.
The back of the Thunderclast rose tall under a cacophony of monstrous crashes. Andraya watched it rise up, arch, and reveal the squat head that stood atop the beasts thirty foot tall frame. Red eyes blazed from its misshapen face and the air rumbled as it moved.
It twisted around, eyes locking on Andraya just as Ember dropped into an outstretched hand. He took the form of a huge Shardblade, its edge easily six feet in length with curling ridges around the hilt. Glowing lines shined from the blade, mimicking the form Ember usually took.
Andraya’s heart froze in her chest. Her thoughts returned to her last encounter with a Thunderclast. To Malan.
She accepted the wave of emotion. Felt it rise up and pass through her. Her fingers tightened around Ember’s hilt. She would not let her fear control her. A moment passed between her and the Thunderclast.
Just as the monster’s expression changed, Andraya exploded forwards.
Her legs and feet were slick, all except for the tips of her boots. She kicked off and went sailing through the water like it wasn’t there. The speed of her passage kicked up a plume behind her, as the water was parted with a speed it wasn’t used to. Her wake followed her as she closed distance with the Thunderclast in moments.
It brought a hand down towards her, looking to smash her before she got close.
She dodged to the side, moving with a grace that the Thunderclast couldn’t even dream of.
Breathe in.
She leapt towards the arm as it rose back out of the water and sailed through the air. A slice downwards cut the stone at the forearm. She felt Ember elate in her mind.
Breathe out.
She landed and rolled, making her whole body slick against the water. Her Plate clattered against the stone but the flamespren were barely disturbed. She released the Surgebinding on one gauntlet and gripped a stone as she rolled past, using it as an anchor to spin, maintaining her momentum but changing her direction.
In.
She was on her feet again, running at the Thunderclast. It recoiled from the lost arm as if it still felt pain through its stone body. Andraya gritted her teeth.
Out.
She scanned it for structural weaknesses. The Thunderclast’s body was made up of bedrock and so would be scored with different types of stone. Its torso was a thick, triangular plate with a stony ribcage for a chest. The colours of stone criss-crossed it and... There.
In.
She leapt, water streaming off her. Ember rejoiced in her hand as she slammed him deep into the Thunderclast’s chest. With an outstretched hand that shone with Stormlight, she struck a weak point in the stone and poured Stormlight into the creature.
Out.
She Divided. She felt the rock shriek beneath her touch. Not just the Thunderclast that commanded it but the stone itself was pained by her Surgebinding.
She held. The Stormlight burned through regolith and clay deposits. Harder stones were dislodged and shifted within the Thunderclast itself as it was burned away from the inside. It thrashed, trying to shake Andraya free. With its intact arm, it tried to grab at her, but the beast's own ribcage protected her.
In.
The Stormlight raged out of her. Given her Intent to destroy, it wanted to keep going. It pulled at her. It wanted to break those harder rocks, burst out, crack the stone below, boil the water, set the very air aflame.
It was Andraya’s job to make sure that didn’t happen. She kept pouring Stormlight into the creature until the moment she felt she was about to lose control. In that moment, she dismissed Ember and pushed against the beast’s chest with her legs.
She flew backwards through the air. She had broken contact with the Thunderclast and now her Surgebinding was free within its body. She pirouetted through the air and the Division ravaged the creature from the inside.
Limbs spasming, the beast cracked and broke as the sound of stones snapping and splitting reverberated the air. Light shone from within, angry and red, flashing with Stormlight followed by heat.
Andraya landed. The Thunderclast exploded.
Molten rock burst outwards from where the creature stood. Large chunks rolled past Andraya, hissing as they hit the water. They rolled, throwing up clouds of steam before coming to a rest with their superheated glow fading. Smaller stones travelled further, landing among the soldiers stood nearby. They ran, throwing their arms up to cover themselves, glowing with Stormlight. They’d complain about the dangerous, reckless Dustbringer later, ignoring the fact she’d saved their lives.
Andraya sighed, feeling her heart in her chest. It continued to beat to a serene rhythm. This was just another day, another job. Combat was just something she did, with utter calm and composure, because she wanted to help people. This was just one half of how she did so.
The chaos of the Thunderclast’s death eventually subsided. It wasn’t really dead. The spren couldn’t be killed, but it would be hurt. Dying was an unpleasant experience for all and, now that it knew a Dustbringer was in the area, it would be less likely to manifest unless it absolutely had to. In all likelihood, it would leave, searching for another battlefield to wreak havoc upon.
And so the Desolation continued onward, as they always did.
Andraya walked over to the squires, dismissing the Surgebinding on her Plate and reabsorbing the Stormlight. “What are you all doing standing around?” she barked. “I thought we were looking for a spren, weren’t we!”
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Andraya slid the hidden door to her workshop open. It was mostly how she’d left it, though some crates had been moved and her tools were strewn across the workbench with a number of half finished projects pushed to the side. A few bowls with scraps of food left in them were stacked on one counter. White light bathed the room -- that was how Sten liked it -- and she could hear the sound of a customer with the boy in the front of the shop.She walked over to her vinebud, a few lazy vines drooped over the sides of the pot. “Got you,” she said, tickling one of the vines with a finger. The bud slowly closed, pulling its vines back inwards. Andraya grinned.
She walked over to where her apron was hung on a peg and put it back on, its comforting weight settling back on her neck. There was an item in the middle of the workbench with its ticket next to it. Andraya brushed a hand against the ruby and the diamond veins on the wall, switching the brightly lit room into a deep red. She read the ticket as she sat before the workbench.
‘Legs don’t move’ it read, with a dropoff date from the day before and a pickup date today. It was a simple fix, and so Sten had only asked the customer to wait a day. From the looks of the other projects on the workbench, he was falling behind on his work and hadn’t gotten around to it.
Andraya turned the item in her hands. It was a hand-sized, six-legged figure made of painted metal plates in the shape of an axehound. The legs were separate items that poked out of holes in the bottom. A small peg on one side could be twisted, which turned the gears within the figure and wound a small spring. When you let go of the peg, the legs were supposed to move back and forth.
The ticket was right. The legs weren’t moving despite being the gears inside clearly ticking away. “An easy fix”, Ember said, appearing as a glowing crack in the workbench. “I can’t believe Sten even asked them to wait a day!”
“He’s not got you helping him,” Andraya said with a wink.
Breathing in a tiny amount of Stormlight, Andraya donned an eyeglass and flipped down a magnification lense. Running one finger down the seam at the bottom of the figure, she parted the metal plates easily. With the mechanism exposed, she quickly found the tiny axle that had fallen loose from its housing. Using a pair of tweezers, Andraya picked the axle up and, with a quick flash of Surgebinding, slotted it into the housing it had fallen out of. Once she recalled her Stormlight, the little bar of metal stayed where it was, held in place by the pressure of the rest of the mechanism.
Andraya closed the metal plates again and used a tiny amount of Stormlight to heat the metal up just a touch and rejoin it at the seam. She stood, removing the eyeglass and checking the mechanism. Twist, twist, twist, and the axehound’s legs were now moving. Andraya grinned and gave it a satisfied nod.
She made her way through the curtain to the front of the shop. It was a small space with a counter on one side and a large window on the other. Outside the window, the hustle and bustle of one of Urithiru’s internal marketplaces moved back and forth. Inside the shop, shelves were dotted with brightly coloured items of various shapes and sizes. A wooden horse whose legs could canter if you shook it from side to side, a miniature windwheel like you’d find at festivals. More wind-up toys like the one she held. She even had a strange shin toy that looked like a tall chicken that would dip its head in water periodically.
A rocking horse sat in one corner that was currently being enjoyed by a small girl. Next to her was a wooden doll nearly as big as she was. A woman, presumably the child’s mother, looked exasperated as she talked with Sten. The teen looked very red in the face.
“But you said it would be ready today?” the woman said. She wasn’t shouting, but she was definitely annoyed. “I paid you extra to make sure!”
“I’m sorry,” Sten said, “I just...”
“Excuse me, is this the toy you were picking up today?” Andraya said, holding up the axehound.
“Craggy!” the small child shouted and jumped up from the rocking horse, running over to Andraya.
“Ah, finally. I don’t know why I had to even wait this long!” the woman snapped, glaring at Sten. Blood had drained from the boy's face as he looked at Andraya.
“My sincerest apologies to you for the delay,” Andraya said, crouching down to the child's height and winding the toy. She placed it on the ground before them and let go of the winding peg. The little toy stuttered to life, ambling across the ground with a stilted grace that was only somewhat like an actual axehound’s walk.
The little girl burst into giggles and pointed at the toy. “Craggy’s walking again! Look ma, she’s walking!” She clapped her hands together.
“I can see that darling,” the mother said, her expression melting at the girl's joy.
“Don’t drop it this time, okay?” Andraya said, ruffling the girl’s hair. The girl nodded and picked up the toy, hugging it close to her chest. Her mother took her by the hand and they left the shop. Andraya sighed and her heart did a little flip.
“Now,” she said, turning to Sten, “I think we have some cleaning to do, don’t you?”
Shout out to @Greywatch for betaing!
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8 hours ago, Coda said:
Is this posted to AO3? I searched for The Tragedy of Thaylen Field and Oathbreaker, but to no avail. If it is not, I humbly request that you post it immediately.
I haven't yet. My plan was always to give it another redrafting before putting it on AO3 (There's some glaring things it's missing and things I want to rewrite) but I was waiting to finish other projects before going back to this. Those projects stalled and I just never got back around to it.
Buuuut if there's demand for it on there, I'll bump it up the list! Thank you for reminding me to do this
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Excellent post my dude. We've spoken on Ancient Roshar and the nature of the magics a few times and this is a great summary.
The two bits I particularly like are regarding Nale never drawing on Stormlight from spheres (How have I never noticed this?). I've always strongly suspected fifth level Radiants would not leak, but being able to use Stormlight like the Fused use Voidlight would definitely be a big bonus.
Second is regarding Voidbinding. It would make sense that whatever magic system was used on Ashyn, it would be related to Odium. He may not have been the original source but he may have corrupted something like he has with Roshar. I really really like the idea of "giving in" to Odium causes him to take something from you (Your guilt, your pain, your whatever) and this creates a void in you that he fills with Investiture to grant powers. I like this. It may not work like this anymore (I don't think this is what happened with Amaram) but I like it a lot.
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Some facts about Costco memberships:
Some warehouses allow you to enter with guest pass to browse and not purchase. Someone can call the warehouse and verify if this is the case.
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Hi! Good to hear you're interested in sending in a WTCC!
To answer your questions, there isn't a list of already used characters. We don't mind if people send in repeat suggestions, we've had quite a few characters sent in multiple times. Most people don't send in the same clues so as long as you are creative, you should be fine. Plus, if we started limiting it to only one entry per character, that'd give the guys on the podcast an extra clue (it's a character that has not appeared in a previous WTCC ).
I'm regards to a style guide, nothing solid. As long as it includes all 5 clues (you can number these if you want but if I think they might be better in a different order, I might switch them around) and who the character is (You'd be surprised at how many people send in clues and no answer).
If you don't want me to read your name, put your username in the email and we'll read that instead. You can put multiple entries into one email but we recommend you send them in multiple emails.
Hope this helps!
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2 minutes ago, Alderant said:
I think the discussion of this thread should stick to its intended purpose--a place for people to be able to discuss why they don't like Adolin, without needing to defend their views from those who think he's a good character. And vice versa.
I see your point, Alderant. Why don't we let the OP decide what they want their thread to be about before we jump to conclusions. For all we know, @Kadalmight be looking forward to discussing Adolin with people who don't agree with them. This is their first post after all, so they may be unaware of the history behind this discussion. I know I try to ignore it as it doesn't really interest me, I just disagreed with their application of Mary Sue phrase.
So instead of turning this thread into an argument about what can and cannot be said in threads, why don't we continue discussing Adolin?
If you would like to discuss this matter further, you are welcome to PM me.
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Most of what you said was subjective so I can't disagree with that.
However, saying he's a Mary Sue because he's good at fighting is kind of not how that works.
Dude was born into wealth in one of the most warlike countries on Roshar, with a Plate and Blade waiting for him. His calling is Duelling and he takes it very seriously. Him being good at fighting makes sense because it really should be the only thing he was good at. And it is. He has basically no other skills beyond fighting. He didn't know how to handle Sadeas so he did the only thing he's good at, he killed him.
Dislike him for being a jock, dislike him for how Shadolin played out, dislike him for being privileged and for his personality and such. Those are fine, they are your opinions.
But he is not a Mary Sue. He's pretty much only good at fighting because he's been trained to do that for the majority of his life. He's naive, ignorant of others feelings and self doubting. He has flaws, not on the level of other characters but he is far from perfect at everything.
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Cracks knuckles
I think it's about time I immortalised this somewhere other than discord:
I really love The Emperor's Soul. It's my favourite Cosmere book. It's such a matchless work of art that, when I finished it, I closed my copy and dropped it into the fireplace.
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@Agent34 The atium metalliser provided the ability to tap an metalmind that stored Allomantic atium (Essentially, reverse compounding). I'm glad you picked up on that Noon is basically a mixture of every fan theory and headcanon possibility I could think of.
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@Marzipan, I'm not planning on writing more with Noon but I quite liked the ideas here so I might return! I am planning other little projects
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9 hours ago, Ark1002 said:
Oh, completely missed that.
If I wasn't in a library, I'd be screaming. That is an amazing sequel. I had an idea, recently, and I think it would be cool. I'd need your approval though.
Could we make an RP, based directly after this, where members choose a character and continue the story?
You absolutely have my approval for this! Please go ahead! I'd be honoured
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21 minutes ago, Agent34 said:
That title's something of a misleading pun. Connection allowing for telepathic communication is certainly interesting, was it inspired by paired fabrials?
Yeah, that's the basic idea! These would actually be extremely powerful medallions since the only example we've seen of telepathic communication is around third/fourth Oathed spren bonds. If you imagine two items Connected as strongly as a Radiant and their spren, you're on the right track.
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Hello people!
Riding on the coat tails of my writing binge with Tragedy, I decided to keep up the momentum and jump straight into my next project. This is a nice short one off piece because I was tired of waiting for Brandon to write something like it.
Showdown at Noon
SpoilerHazer Noon made his way through Elendel Grand Station as inconspicuously as he could. The station was busy, as always, with bustling crowds of comers and goers from all over the Basin. The midday traffic wasn’t too bad, and moving through the crowds was relatively easy. It also limited the amount of potential victims.
The large open space, topped with a dome of glass and metal, held many places a person could hide. The ground floor was ringed by pillars supporting the mezzanine above. The crowd flowed through the clumps of people that stood about, staring up at the clock and the announcement board. Noon joined the masses, standing near the base of a pillar. It was covered with people who were lucky enough to find a place to sit rather than stand.
Noon pulled his sleeve back and checked his watch. It was a plain wristwatch with metal studs along the band. Each stud was a different metal — some were metalminds, others metallisers. A little further up his arm, the dark shadow of a Hemalurgic implant was visible just beneath the skin.
Noon was a few minutes early. His team members, Hazers Dawn and Lumin, would be in position very soon.
Scanning the crowd, Noon burned copper and steel. His Allomancy was weak, the blue lines pointing to watches, wallets, and purses, only reaching a few meters, but he wasn’t going to take any chances. Plus, Dawn was the team’s only Copperpiercer. If their target was what Noon suspected, she’d most likely be the first to detect them. After that, Lumin and Noon would move in to apprehend as quickly and quietly as possible.
One of the “incoming” displays ticked over from “Pending” to “Platform 3”, and there was a general movement among the crowd. Blue steel-lines shifted as people made their way towards the platform.
Noon took the opportunity to hop up onto a newly opened spot at the base of a nearby pillar, granting him a great view of the board and, not exactly coincidentally, the slightly raised vantage of the rest of the station. In about a minute’s time, Lumin should appear on the mezzanine level on the opposite side of the station.
He was a good lad, Lumin was. A natural Coinshot, he was useful despite his lack of implants. About as green as they come, he was freshly married and new to the Hazers. The boy had aced the Allomancy Aptitude tests, despite never using his powers during his time as a beat cop. He must have a hobby that keeps him sharp, Noon thought.
Noon himself was a born Augur. He hadn’t even noticed until he was nearly eighteen. Most people don’t have bits of gold lying around the house for their kids to lick and since neither of his parents were Mistings, they’d never thought to get him tested.
By the time he’d realised, his parents were dead and he’d already made the decision to join the force. Noon didn’t think his gold ability would change things much. It might make him a bit more introspective but it wasn’t like ads were posted looking for gold burners, proclaiming “Do you question all your life choices? Then we need you!”
As it turned out, the Hazer unit was always on the lookout for gold Mistings and Ferrings. They didn’t talk about it much, it raised too many questions. Hemalurgy still had a stigma against it after all, despite advances in technology. Noon hadn’t really cared. If he was given the choice of spending the rest of his life in agony in a hospital bed, or being pumped full of drugs, given a lovely final day surrounded by friends and family before being put under and having a spike driven through your heart, he knew what he’d pick. He’d signed his donor form with barely a thought.
Plus, the implant he’d been given was second hand anyway. Or third hand, or fourth. He had decided he wasn’t too interested in the full history of the gold implant nestled in his heart, only that it made him a Bloodmaker. Chief Colms had told him he’d be virtually unkillable, and that was enough for him. The idea of open heart surgery being a job requirement was a little daunting for the young Noon, but once an implant became available, there was no turning back.
Another group cleared out as the board chimed to announce another train’s arrival. The space next to Noon became free, and was quickly filled.
His healing wasn’t exactly top of the line. That was just the nature of implants. But it didn’t matter too much. The department liked to get someone with at least one natural gold ability for a reason. Once he’d awoken after his operation, he’d been walked through storing health, burning the gold to get more health, then using that to fill up more metalminds. He’d left the hospital less than a week later, feeling better than he had in his entire life.
From that point on, Noon had risen through the ranks quickly. His healing allowed him to have new implants added and removed without much worry. None of his abilities were very strong, unfortunately. That was why they still needed specialists like Dawn on the squad. He didn’t need to be strong to be effective, though. As his old captain had been fond of telling him, “With a bit of ay-pewter here, bit of eff-steel there, most people won’t know what hit ‘em.”
Noon checked his watch again, it was time for Lumin to appear. Noon looked at the upper railing on the opposite side of the station. No Lumin in sight.
Noon’s brow creased. The kid was green, but he wasn’t stupid. He knew how to get into position on time. Dawn should be in position near the center of the station, but it was hard to see from where Noon was. He had to assume she was there.
Noon returned his gaze to the announcement board and waited another minute.
He checked again.
Still no Lumin.
He tapped a little sight, making his vision more precise. Lumin was definitely not where he was supposed to be.
Another arrival chimed from the board, causing another rush of people. As the area cleared, he noticed the next person who sat beside him had left a distinct space between them.
Noon looked down.
Next to him sat a thick brown envelope. Hastily scribbled on it were the words ‘For Noon’.
Years as an officer of the law had taught him to notice when something was wrong. Even if it weren’t for those years of training, this envelope was like a tin-flare that something was very, very wrong.
“Oh, Rusts,” he said to himself. He grabbed the envelope and tore it open. It was heavy, with something metal inside. How had he missed that?
Noon shook the metal object out of the envelope. A large metal disk, around the size of his palm, fell into his hand. He turned the medallion over, looking at the engravings. One side was embossed with a language Noon didn’t recognise, while the other side depicted a head with a single spike going through his eye. He thought the design looked vaguely southern, but he wasn’t sure.
It took him a moment before he realised that there wasn’t a blue line pointing at the medallion. It didn’t feel like aluminum, but it certainly seemed like a metal. That could only mean...
“Invested. Rusts and Ruin...” Noon whispered, cursing under his breath.
Noon closed his eyes and felt the metal of the coin. Really felt it.
There, like a candle in the dark, he felt the power within the metal. It felt like one of the metalliser primer studs on his wrist. Not quite a normal metalmind, but something else.
Opening his eyes, and checking the area around him, he tapped the coin.
He felt something change, the power inside beginning to flow into him. It was strange, he felt nothing new. The medallion seemed to be doing something, but Noon couldn’t work out what.
He held the coin up before him, as if looking at it in a better light might reveal something previously unseen.
Hello, Hazer Noon.
“Mists!” Noon hissed, nearly dropping the coin. The voice sounded like it came from inside of his head, right between his ears.
Don’t worry, Hazer, you haven’t gone mad, it chuckled. I’m talking to you through the medallion. The voice was calm, authoritative.
“What? How?” Noon said, looking around him. The person sat next to him looked at him strange.
It’s an ancient southerner device. Very rare, you see. I found it along with a few other... Interesting items.
Noon thought on this for a moment.
“Can you hear me?” He said into the medallion.
Oh yes, this works both ways. I have the other half. And you don’t need to talk directly into the thing. They’re connected, you see. The voice put special emphasis on the word “connected”.
“I’m not sure I understand.”
That’s okay. You don’t have to.
Noon pushed himself off the plinth, deciding it was time to check on Dawn.
“So who are you exactly?” Noon said, making his way through the crowd. He had a very good idea who was talking to him, but he wasn’t about to let them know that.
Oh come now, that would be cheating! I’m who you’re here to see, Hazer. I can tell you that much.
“So why don’t you come see me?”
You really are trying your darndest to make this easy for yourself, aren’t you? I’m not about to just push myself over to you and let you arrest me. That wouldn’t be any fun!
Noon was quickly becoming rather annoyed. The voice was smug, tinged with an air of superiority. Give Noon a dozen blue-blood Thugs who didn’t say much and hit hard, and he was happy. He didn’t like these rusting mind games.
Keep him talking, though, Noon thought. Keep him talking, and who knows what he’ll give away.
“If that’s the case, then how about this. Want to tell me why you killed all those people?” Noon said, almost conversationally.
They had been tracking their target for weeks. It had started as a string of unexplained murders. A family found dead in their fifth floor apartment, the only unlocked entrypoint being a window with no fire escape. A triple homicide involving an iron bar, bent in a way that only pewter’s strength could explain. Once word got out that the police had started linking the crimes and Noon started showing up at every crime scene, the killer had started to leave clues behind. Little messages.
That’s when they’d started telling Noon he was being paranoid. A serial killer they could accept. A serial killer with every metalborn ability under the hood that had started sending coded messages to the police officer tracking him? That was a tough alloy to swallow.
And that’s why he was here with only Dawn and Lumin. They’d agreed to follow him and the clues, despite not quite believing him.
Now that’s more like it, Hazer. Tell me, what do you know of the Mistborn?
Noon was a little rusty on his history. He reached the middle of the stations main hall. A square in the middle of the room, slightly lowered, surrounded by benches and large potted plants. Light streamed down from the dome below.
Dawn was supposed to be sitting on one of these benches, using her own implants to pierce any nearby copperclouds.
She wasn’t.
A heavy weight dropped in Noon’s stomach.
He dropped his coppercloud, instead burning bronze. As he started to weave through the crowds, he let his instincts take over, trusting them to know what to do before he did.
“Mistborn, like the Ascendant Warrior and the Lord Mistborn? Born with every metal’s power running through their blood?” Noon said.
Oh yes, that kind of thing, although the Lord wasn’t born with his powers. Back then, they weren’t merely myths. The entire noble class was based on who was Mistborn! Sure, you had Mistings, like we have today, but the Mistborn! Ohhh, the Mistborn!
The man was getting excited. Good.
“You’re a fan, then?” Noon said, passing the medallion from one hand to the other, his bronze thrumming within him.
Ha! A fan. Something like that. We should be above them, you know, these... these skaa. They should bow before the Metalborn, as they had before. The Lord Ruler had it right. We’re not born equal, so why should we act equal? A few mewling welps don’t mean anything in the scheme of things.
“That doesn’t mean you had the right to kill them,” Noon said, snarling.
What right did I have to let them live?
There was silence after that. Noon wasn’t quite sure how to respond to that. He had read interviews with other serial killers. He knew reasoning with the man wouldn’t work.
But then, Hazer Captain, you should know something about that.
Noon’s brow creased. “What do you mean?” He said.
Those “implants” in your body. A more civilised tool, for a more civilised world, we are told. You think everyone goes quietly into the dark? No. They don’t. But because the city needs killers, the people need to make sacrifices. Once you’ve signed your life away, there’s no turning back, whether you want it or not.
“I don’t see how men and women donating their abilities for the good of the people is anything close to your butchery.” Noon hissed quietly. He put his hands in his coat pocket, medallion held tight.
Oh it’s only “murder” if it’s me who kills them, is it? Do it quickly with a knife to the heart or a snap of the neck and it’s “uncivilised”. Pump them full of drugs and do it in a hospital, and suddenly it’s a donation!
Noon was about to reply in anger, but paused. How did he know about that? The Hazers kept that element of the force... Well, their use of Hemalurgy wasn’t exactly secret, but they didn’t talk about it much with outsiders.
Noon fingered the metalliser studs on his watch.
They had a name for you, you know. They were the most feared servants in all of The Final Empire. They took what they needed and didn’t think twice. Why should they? It was for the good of the people. You’re just an old idea with a new coat of paint.
“Who are you?” Noon said, incredulously.
The voice laughed. All in due time, Hazer. I have another question for you. This one’s easy. Do you know what a Feruchemist is? A Feruchemist, I mean, not any old Ferring.
That one, Noon did know.
“Someone that can use all the Feruchemical metals. Like the Hero.”
Like. The. Hero. Each word was enunciated. Our so called God on high. Balancing two powers that can create and end worlds. Hmph. Seems he was just following the theme.
“What do you mean?”
The Lord Ruler was able to use all Allomantic and Feruchemical metals. He was God before Harmony took up the title.
Noon vaguely remembered this. He didn’t pay much attention to religion, but he understood enough. Someone able to use the full suite of Allomantic and Feruchemical abilities? No wonder they called him a god.
“Is that how you see yourself then? Like a god?”
Oh no, no, no. Not at all, the voice said, unconvincingly. Not yet, anyway. There are things I will accomplish, and if others wish to name me The Lord Reborn or whatever nonsense goes through the minds of lesser men, then so be it.
“What are you going to do?” Noon said. He’d almost finished a loop of the station. He’d felt tin burning in the crowd but it had gone out of range before he could work out where the pulse had come from.
In time, Hazer, in time. For now, I want to show you what I can do. I want you to activate your newest metalliser. That fancy new stud you’ve been fingering on your watch.
Rusts, Noon thought. How did he know about that?
The metalliser was something new that the screwheads down in The Pit had cooked up. The metal it was made from was apparently exceedingly rare, and the power it contained was even harder to obtain. He’d been told to only use it in absolutely dire circumstances. It would let him take down any target, get out of any situation. He was told he’d be able to dodge bullets if he needed to.
“And why should I do that?” Noon said. He had started making his way back to the center. He had been so wrapped up in the killer’s monologue that he had almost forgotten the absence of Dawn and Lumin.
I want to show you something, the voice said, turning harsh. Just do it!
Noon hesitated, but pressed down on the metalliser on his watch. To anyone nearby, it simply looked like he was adjusting his shirt cuff.
The stud clicked softly, and power flowed through him.
Around him, the hundreds of people burst forth into hundreds of shadows. Noon watched them. As people walked, they moved into the place left behind by a shadow that telegraphed their every move. He felt like he should be overwhelmed by the barrage of information, but it all just made sense to him. Every person followed a trail of shadows of themselves, showing where they’d be one step, two steps, five steps from where they were now. The chaos of the disorganised crowd was transformed into a beautiful work of art, where every step was made as though it knew exactly where it needed to go. Almost instinctively, Noon found himself able to navigate the shifting crowd with ease.
Good, the voice purred into his mind.
The scene changed.
The people around him exploded with dozens of images. Noon stumbled. It was too much. People stopped following their tracks. They became chaos, spilling out around him so quickly he struggled to see where the shadows came from.
And that’s when he noticed the bodies.
The shadows started to fall. All around him, every shadow began to drop. Noon tried his best to follow them back to their source, but there were too many.
They were all joined by a single figure.
A man. He wore a coat with a hood to hide his face. He would drop down from the air, swoop in from nearby or simply push aside other shadows. He’d slit throats, spill guts, snap necks. The methods of murder numbered almost as many as the shadows, the man with the hood seeming to come from every direction. There was no tracing it back to where it came from. One by one, he watched as the people around him died.
Eyes wide, Noon turned off the atium metalliser.
“What in Harmony’s name was that?” he said, too loud. The people around Noon looked at him. He looked back at them, not moments before having watched them die a thousand deaths. Embarrassed and confused, he shoved his hands in his pockets and made his way back to the center of the station.
Did they not train you in that? They probably thought they were the sole proprietors of atium.
“Of course I was trained. I’ve seen the images before, just never... like that,” Noon said, reaching the middle of the station and sitting in an open seat. He rubbed his eyes with the balls of his hands.
When two people see the future, the shadows conflict. You see what I’m going to do, and that changes what you’re going to do. That changes what I am going to do, and so on until the shadows are as numerous as possibility.
“But what was that?” Noon hissed. “Why was it showing me everyone dying?”
Because that is what I wanted to show you, the voice said, very calm and quiet. That I am ready, willing, and able to kill every single person in this room, and there isn’t a single damned thing you could do to stop me.
Noon stopped rubbing his eyes. He slowly lowered his hands to his knees and sat up straight. The lead weight in his stomach seemed to double.
I’m leaving now. You were a fine opponent, Hazer Noon. I liked this chase. I hope you get the opportunity to grow old, surrounded by loved ones and friends. Never come after me again.
“Wait!” Noon said. He stood and looked around frantically, trying to see someone, something amiss.
In that moment, his steel-lines warned him of metal dropping from above. They were faint, but moving fast. The bits of metal dropped down in front of him, clattering on the marble floor.
Before him lay several bloody lengths of metal, about the size of large hair pins, and a pristine gold wedding ring.
Noon looked up at the glass dome above, just in time to see a figure disappearing through one of the windows and out of sight.
Scooping up the metal and the ring, Noon turned and ran for the door.
Huge thank you to @WireSegal and @ladymxdnight for their help on this!
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Thank you all for your kinds words!
On 06/02/2019 at 10:01 PM, Bigmikey357 said:The song for this story: look up the song All's Hell that Ends Well. It's on YouTube.
I did this! I see what you mean haha
16 hours ago, Firerust said:Anyway, I gotta say, other than the fact that there are many typos I would love to point out,
Hey, please point them out. I'm gonna upload this to AO3 soonish and if I can fix a few typos before I do that, I would really appreciate it!
16 hours ago, Firerust said:A couple tiny nitpicks: I found "Oathbreaker" to be kind of tongue-in-cheek. Cheesy. Contrived. Despite that, it was kind of cool, working as a huge all-encompassing version of Vyre's knife. Also, Amaram seemed out of character to me. In OB, he showed moments of mirth and did a big character change, but still took his situation pretty seriously overall. In this version, he seems playful, immature, even childlike. Like: "Whee, I'm gonna fly around and kill Shardbearers with a grin on my face!" It was a total character turnaround. Sure, it was a turnaround in Oathbringer, but this is much more extreme.
Yeah, you're not wrong with Oathbreaker being very cheesy. I agree. @WireSegal had the amazing idea to have Odium corrupt Oathbringer and turn that into Oathbreaker and I wish I'd done that.
Amaram is a good point. My idea was that Yelig-nar had pretty much entirely consumed Amaram at that point and so there wasn't much Amaram left by that point. I didn't go back and reread the Amaram battle section and I probably should have. Glad you "enjoyed" anyway!
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Here's a little post-word for those interested:
SpoilerHi everyone!
I hope you’ve enjoyed The Tragedy of Thaylen Fields. This is by far the largest writing project I’ve ever completed and I’ve thoroughly enjoyed it.
First things first, I’d like to thank @Alyssum314for their continuous efforts to make sure my apostrophes and commas were in the right place. Turns out I absolutely suck at knowing when to end speech with a full stop or a comma and Lyss helped me a lot with this. I’d also like to thank @ladymxdnight for helping me with plotting, structure and another general grammar checker. If it weren’t for her, you’d have had Amaram using the Destruction sure and would have more than a few sections end on duds. Lastly, thank you to Jaffa6 on discord for his help with grammar and wording.
Now, if you’d indulge me, here’s some fun facts about the writing of Tragedy:
● The entire reason I wrote this fic was the scene where Nightblood kills Pattern. For years, people have asked what would happen if NB and a Shardblade clashed. My answer, since before OB came out, was that NB would eat the Shardblade immediately. Ever since NB turned up in WoR, I’ve hoped we’d see this in the books but until then, I wanted to write my interpretation of it. I wanted it to be Syl originally but I foolishly killed Kal in the first chapter so couldn’t use him! I liked how it turned out anyway.
● Something that surprised me was that Shallan was the hardest character for me to write, by a long shot. I almost didn’t write any PoV’s for her because I struggled so much with her. By contrast, Jasnah came to me as the easiest by far. I don’t know if it’s just because we don’t see anywhere near as much of her internal thoughts so it makes it easier to fill in those gaps with my own interpretation of the character or because I’m just more like her irl than I am Shallan. Either way, this is why we got a lot of Jasnah PoV’s.
● Another inspiration of this fic is a sequence known as the Eclipse from the manga Berserk. If you’ve read it, I hope this makes sense. If you haven’t, I highly recommend Berserk under the warning that you’re going to see some crem in it that makes my fic look likes a kids book. I tried to emulate the feelings I had during the Eclipse in this fic. Of horror and disgust and just a brutal emotional ride. I hope I succeeded.
● For the Dalinar chapters, I went back and read the Marsh chapters from HoA. Those were heavily influential in those parts, with Dalinar both moving on his own within the orders that Odium had given him and other times completely controlled by Odium.
Anyway, I hope you enjoyed this terrible, awful ride. Thank you to everyone for reading and your feedback. I appreciate every single comment I get on these. Never forget, if you ever want to do something like this yourself, all you have got to do is write.
I doubt this will be the last thing I ever write, and hopefully this won’t be the last thing you ever read of mine.
Thank you all, and see you around.
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SpoilerLunamor guided a pair of Thaylens through the garden.
Shallan and Bridge Four had been sending people his way and it was up to him and Huio to make sure they had a place to go. There was plenty of room in the statue garden that sat upon the Thaylen Oathgate platform, lots of seating for the evacuees.
Most sat where he placed them, some just wanted to stand about.
These people were broken. Something had infested their minds and caused them to act in ways no civilised person would. Lunamor could help them up here, on the platform. He couldn’t face the carpet of corpses that lay at the front of the Oathgate.
At least the Fused were leaving them alone for now. They’d chased off the group that were holding guard over the Oathgate and so far they’d not returned. Though smoke blocked them from seeing too far into the city, they could still make out the dark shapes moving through the air. There was no doubt they’d be regrouping.
“Here you go,” Lunamor said to the man and woman as he set them down on a bench. The man simply stared at the ground, clothes torn and bloody. The woman simply held her hands over her face. She had been that way since she’d entered the garden.
So much death, he thought, So much pain. He wished he could stay. Comfort these people more. But he didn’t know what he would say, even if he had the time.
Standing, Lunamor moved to make his way back to the entrance to help the next group of people.
He stopped before leaving this section of garden. Nearby, he noticed a faint glow from behind a nearby statue, like someone had left a diamond chip behind it. The statue itself depicted a soldier, a spearman, thrusting his weapon high, a rippling stone cloth wrapped around the spearhead, frozen in the wind.
Making his way over to the statue, Lunamor peaked around the stone base.
The source of the light lay curled in a tiny ball on the ground.
Oh no, he thought. A heavy weight sank to the bottom of his gut.
Lunamor squatted and scooped the tiny person up into his hands. They didn’t weigh a thing. It felt like he was holding a leaf, ready at any moment to be swept away in a gust of wind.
“Hello, little god,” He said.
Syl stirred, her head was buried in her knees, her arms pulling them close. She didn’t reply.
Lunamor felt a swelling in his chest. There’d only be one reason for her to be here alone.
He made a one handed gesture of grief and respect. “Oh, mafah’liki...” he said.
“So much is wrong,” Syl said, barely a whisper, “so much is out of place,”
Her dim light faded further, pulling herself closer. “I don’t know what to do, where to go, who I am...” She trailed off.
“It is okay, mafah'liki, you are here now. You are exactly where you need to be,” he said, looking down at her. Tears fell around her onto his massive palms.
Syl looked up at him, at the smile across his face. Her form seemed to solidify a little.
“Rock, it’s too late, I couldn’t help when... when he needed me most.” Syl said.
Lunamor shook his head. “No,” he said, wiping his eyes “We can carry on. You are here, little one. Your journey continues. Kaladin taught us...”
Lunamor swallowed.
“He taught us that we can carry on, even when we think we cannot. What matters is not where or when our journey ends. What matters is what we do on our way there.”
Syl smiled, understanding. “Journey before destination.” She said.
“Journey before destination, little god.” Lunamor replied.
He felt something stir within him. He knew exactly what to say next.
The words flowed out of him in the Unkalaki tongue, as if they had always been there and he was finally setting them free.
“Come now little god, we must go protect those that cannot protect themselves.”
A burst of light exploded around them.
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Jasnah ran through the swirling red and black smoke that filled the city. Embers fell lazily around her. Stormlight thrummed within her, keeping her legs moving, her heart pumping. It was a heady feel, Jasnah wasn’t one to partake in the vices of life but she imagined Stormlight was as close as she was going to get.Jasnah, to the left, Ivory said as they approached a junction.
Jasnah turned to see soldiers in the colors of Thaylen City in the throes of madness. This wasn’t the first group she’d come across. The streets had opened up again as she left the Royal Ward, becoming more vacant. Bodies still littered the streets, though there seemed to be less active fighting down here. At least, from the civilians.
There were half a dozen of the soldiers. Two of them stalked down the road, watching for people whilst another pair kicked in doors and pulled storm shutters from their housings. The final two were laying into a corpse with their swords. There wasn’t much left of the body but that didn’t seem to matter.
The two watching the street noticed Jasnah with shouts. All six ran at her.
She was surprised the first time a handful of soldiers had charged her. She’d heard stories of battles with full Shardbearers involved. The civilians seemed to realise they shouldn’t attack but the soldiers, they seemed to truly hate seeing her.
By now, she’d learned how to deal with them.
Walking down the street, Jasnah waited until the soldiers were upon her. The first two had spears lowered. Filled with Stormlight, strengthened by her Plate, Jasnah simply grabbed the two spears and yanked them hard. As she did, she imbued the spear with a small amount of Stormlight. She Soulcast the whole entity into wood. Not just the spear, but the whole soldier. The idea of a spearman. The hafts already being wood made it easy for the rest to turn with it. A moment later, two wooden spearman clattered to the ground behind her.
The two looting soldiers reached her next. One had drawn a knife, the other simple ran at her. She wasn’t sure what his plan was, so she span around the knife wielder and grabbed the unarmed Thaylen by his cuirass. He grasped at her, trying to find purchase on her Shardplate. Jasnah willed his soul to smoke and he vanished into the air, his essence joining that of the dying city.
The man with the knife came at Jasnah again from behind. Her Stormlight and Shardplate granted her speed and reactions beyond that of normal men. As he came at her, she spun on him and struck him around the face. With an awful crack, the man fell to the ground, his head twisted too far around.
Turning to face the final two soldier, she saw their bloody and broken swords raised in preparation to strike. They didn’t even get close.
Jasnah began to run down the street, waving her hand at the two soldiers and turning them both into smoke. As she continued down the street, she ran through the expanding cloud.
The enemy is too strong here, Ivory said. We must leave, we cannot fight him alone
Jasnah took another turn, she was trying to find the way out of the Loft Ward and into the Ancient Ward. She had tried to travel by rooftop as she had last time but fires and collapsing buildings had prevented her from making much progress.
“We aren’t going yet,” Jasnah replied “not until I’ve found out more. We can always activate the Oathgate ourselves.”
Dead radiants cannot activate Oathgates, Ivory said, in a tone as close to concern as she’d ever heard from him.
Another turn and Jasnah found it. Before her stretched a large open courtyard. A huge archway representing the divide between the wealthy Loft Ward and the middling Ancient Ward. Through the archway, the black of the smoke and the red mist of the Unmade swirled and mixed. It obscured what lay on the other side of the stone portal.
She heard them first. The shouts and screams of men, lost to bloodlust. They came out of the archway in a disorganised mess. Soldiers. But not Thaylen soldiers. Alethi troops, dressed in the livery of House Sadeas.
Behind them emerged a figure in Shardplate.The Plate looked familiar to Jasnah, though it had changed to almost unrecognizability. It seemed warped and broken, strange crystal protrusions broke through the surface of the Plate and seemed to fuse with it. The figure was shrouded in Voidlight, like the Fused. It floated a few inches above the floor, the darkness falling from it and spilling across the ground.
The faceplate of the helm was up. It seemed the wearer couldn’t close it anymore due to crystal growths that stuck out of their cheek and jaw.
Even through the disfigurements, Jasnah recognised the man.
Meridas Amaram grinned through a broken mouth at Jasnah and launched in her direction.
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Shallan stood before the Oathgate platform, atop the steps that led down to the street, and wove Stormlight around the survivors.Once Bridge Four awakened the people in the streets from their violent rages, she would escort them up the steps on the platform. She’d throw Stormlight to them, pools of light that would rise up into one version of herself or another. The many faces of Shallan then walked in front or to the side of the various individuals and small groups. Pattern hummed to himself from somewhere nearby. Above, a dozen Windrunner squires hung, keeping watch for the Fused.
They weren’t much, the copies. They were simply drawings of herself she’d made in the past. She saw herself in havahs of various cuts and colours, her hair free in some and tied back in others. There were dozens now, shepherding the lost and broken towards the Oathgate.
Concentrating on individual illusions, she was able to talk through them, giving words of encouragement. She even found she could place a comforting hand on a shoulder, actually touch them with the illusion if she gave it enough Stormlight. One illusion, a younger Shallan from her childhood, pulled on the hem of a Thaylen woman’s dress.
The broken people didn’t react much. They seemed dazed. Shallan couldn’t work out if it was a side effect of snapping out of the Unmade’s control or shock over what it had made them do. Either way, it seemed just the presence of the Radiants helped keep them sane. She’d noticed that the areas cleared by the bridgeman were free of the red mist, like the very presence of the glowing Radiant and his squires warded it away.
Shallan found maintaining this many illusions exhausting. Rock was doing what he could, grabbing people as soon as he was able from the care of the various Shallans but she felt herself straining as her Stormlight drained. She felt both Veil and Radiant pushing into her mind. She didn’t know which could help, she didn’t even know if either of them could help. Stress made them blur together.
She had to be Shallan for now, she was the Lightweaver. The artist, the illusionist, the kind one. She didn’t need a thief or a liar or a warrior right now, she just needed to be her. She just needed to be all of her. Just for a bit.
Squeezing her hands tight, Shallan took a deep breath in. Opening her palms, arms outstretched before her, Shallan breathed out and helped people.
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Jasnah summoned Ivory in an instant and swung upwards as Amaram fell towards her. He crossed the square that made up the entrance to the Loft Ward in a few seconds. His eyes were ablaze and his mouth open with a rictus grin. She hit the man in the breastplate and sent him flying upwards. It sounded like the man actually cheered as he flew in a loop away from her, coming to a slow stop a few feet before Jasnah.Jasnah looked at Amaram’s disfigured face in disgust.
“I didn’t think you could get much uglier, Meridas,” she said to the floating man. Jasnah brought Ivory up in one of the base stances she knew.
The ten Blade stances as taught by the Ardents generally had roots in a few base stances. They were taught in the katas, the sequence of movements and stretches for getting your body ready for battle. Jasnah hadn’t gotten much further than learning the katas. It wasn’t much, but it was all she had for now.
Behind Amaram, his troops were spilling out into the courtyard. They didn’t seem to pay any notice to Jasnah, groups split off into side streets from the square they were in. A moment of concern for the people at the Oathgate had Jasnah throw some Stormlight down behind her. The stone floor turned slick with oil, several inches thick. Jasnah snapped her fingers, igniting the oil with a spark. The street behind her was covered with a thick wall of flame. No soldiers would be taking the direct route towards the Oathgate. Jasnah wasn’t worried about the fire. The city was already ablaze.
Amaram began slowly floating towards Jasnah. A small trail of fire followed his gently swaying path.
Amaram placed a hand on his chest. “Is that Jasnah Kholin in that pretty Shardplate?” Amaram said, voice dripping with smugness. “Wherever did you get that?”
“I didn’t have to murder any innocent men to get it, if that’s what you’re wondering, traitor,” Jasnah retorted.
Amaram threw his head back in laughter. “The heretic names me traitor! You stand here, fighting an Alethi highprince and name me traitor? The exiled daughter of the king, whose uncle names himself king of us all, who calls herself Radiant,” Amaram spat to the side, the liquid sizzled the stone where it landed. “Don’t talk to me about betrayal.”
Amaram was getting close now. Jasnah relaxed her arms, calming her breathing. Amaram always had a way of putting her on edge. Ever since they were young, he’d always fouled her mood.
“You turn on our allies, Amaram. You’ve gone too far. The world is on the brink of ending and you do... This to yourself. For what? Personal glory? Pathetic.”
Amaram barked out a short laugh. “What I’ve done is gained the power to finally take my rightful place in Alethkar,” he said. His lifted his arms up, palms facing upwards. To Jasnah’s surprise, two Shardblades materialised above him and fell into each hand. One was Amaram's stolen Shardblade, the other Oathbringer. He looked down at Jasnah, his disjointed grin widening even more, his eyes widening. Then he was on her.
He came with a flurry of Blade strikes. Jasnah flung out Ivory in defense, but she was fighting a swordsman of much greater skill than herself with not just one Blade, but two.
She managed to defend against a few attacks, but for every one she blocked, another hit her Plate with enough force that, even with Plate and Stormlight enhancing her physical abilities, she was unable to mount any sort of defense.
After only a few seconds, Jasnah decided to put some distance between her and Amaram. Her Plate was barely holding together. She Soulcast the ground beneath them into pitch black smoke. It bloomed upwards, immediately obscuring their vision.
Jasnah leapt backwards.
She convinced a pocket of smoke before her to change to a diffuse cloud of charcoal. This was a trick she’d learnt many years ago but had rarely to found a reason to use it. Luckily, it was exactly what she needed.
With a thought, she created a spark within the cloud of charcoal. The combustible material ignited with ferocity, The dust explosion swept over her, bathing her in heat. The pressure wave wasn’t too strong but enough to boost her leap several meters backwards. She sailed through the air, assaulted by heat from her Soulcasting, then by the heat of the burning street she’d closed off. She landed on the other side of the Soulcast flame. The skin around her eyes burned with intense pain. Jasnah assumed it must have burned in the heat but the Stormlight seemed to be healing it quickly.
Getting to her feet, she took a few steps back, trying to see Amaram through smoke and flame. She dismissed Ivory, raising her hands before her. Her Plate felt sluggish, both her arms and legs getting heavier.
“Ivory, thoughts?” Jasnah said.
He seems to be using a form of Gravitation and Division but they are unstable, Ivory said straight into her mind. I would suspect a Skybreaker but he does not seem to exhibit their values. However, I am not the best judge of character.
“Unfortunately, neither am I. Could one of the Blades be an Honorblade? I recognised one as my Uncle’s.”
That is a possibility. However, that doesn’t explain the gems in his flesh, nor how he is using surges within Plate.
“That makes sense.” Jasnah said.
The smoke beyond the flames had dispersed now, the pressure from being transformed from a solid to a gas causing rapid dissipation.
Before her, she saw Amaram float towards the flames. He was laughing.
With a wave of his arms, both Blades swinging wide arcs, Amaram seemed to split the flame in two. It parted down the middle, like a Blade slicing through stone. The burning oil on the ground moved, gathering at the sides of the street. Once it had pooled against the walls, the fire sharply intensified, then exploded upwards. Firespren danced in the air, swept away in the torrent of flame.
The stone walls of the buildings around them glowed with heat. Nothing stood between Amaram and Jasnah now. His laughter carried down the street.
“Ivory, did he just Soulcast?”
That is three surges by my count.
Amaram floated casually towards Jasnah. Before him, the ground began to draw in light around it, taking on the hue of Voidlight. Slowly, like droplets of liquid falling from a ceiling, blobs of liquid rock fell upwards from the ground. They rose to about chest height with the cackling Shardbearer. In all, about a dozen chunks of liquid rock floated before Amaram.
With a movement of his arm, the liquid balls shifted quickly. They changed from amorphous shapes to sharp spines of stone. Their sharp points aimed directly at Jasnah.
Jasnah, this man is not a Radiant, Ivory said, urgent in her mind.
“No,” she whispered back. The ability Amaram had just displayed seemed something more in line as the powers held by the Stonewards. Shaping stone itself into whatever they needed.
The spines of stone flew towards Jasnah. Reaching out with Stormlight, Jasnah attempted to cast them to air. There was some resistance, more than Jasnah had expected. The Voidlight fought the influence of her Stormlight and several of the spines refused to change. Lifting Ivory, she managed to block a couple of spines with the flat of the Blade. The stones hit with tremendous force. One managed to get through and struck her left arm hard.
Jasnah reeled back, the force of the blow knocking her off balance. Her left arm felt heavy, the spren weak from the encounter with the thunderclast. She dared not dismiss it though. Not when facing an expert swordsman with two Blades.
“Ivory, Yelig-Nar was said to grant the powers of all surges, correct?” Jasnah said, recovering her balance.
Yes, at the expense of the soul of the one they possessed, Ivory replied.
Jasnah looked at Amaram again, he’d stopped laughing but the terrible broken grin had returned. Had the crystals in his face grown?
Jasnah looked into his eyes and saw through them. They seemed aflame, as if a fire burned within Amarams skull. She noticed the skin around his eyes seemed to be turning black, like the eyes of someone killed by a Shardblade, only much slower.
“I don’t think we’re fighting Amaram anymore.”
With that, she reached into Shadesmar.
The spren of a human was surprisingly pliable. It had wants and needs, conscious and unconscious. People were in constant motion, constant change. To overcome the spren of a human being, you simply needed to tip the balance of desire one way or another. Once you got over the inherent interference within the soul, it was shockingly easy to cast a living human.
Jasnah reached out to touch Amarams spren, a simple light touch that would give her access to everything that made him who he was.
With delicate care, she made contact.
And was overwhelmed in darkness.
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Shallan helped people.She sat atop the Oathgate steps, cross legged with eyes closed. She listened and felt and weaved her light around the people near her.
She’d had lost count of the amount of Shallans that she’d created. So many walked among the dazed Thaylens now, playing out pre-scripted roles, repeating phrases of encouragement when needed. So many complex illusions of light and sound required constant attention. Even with her eyes squeezed shut, Shallan could feel them. She knew when to smooth out a dress that had started to fuzz, when to tidy hair that fell through shoulders instead of onto them. She felt Pattern moving among them.
They’d gathered hundreds now. It was still slow work but they were almost ready to send the first lot of Thaylens to Urithiru.
A shout sounded from above.
The sound broke Shallan’s trance. Her eyes snapped open.
Looking up towards the sounds above, she saw the dozen Bridge Four members that were keeping guard scattering, all seemingly trying to get away from an expanding cloud of pitch black smoke. It stood out against the red hue in the air, billowing out as if something had just been Soulcast.
Confused, Shallan looked from bridgeman to bridgeman. They were shouting to each other, some pointing off to one side. Shallan followed their gaze.
Initially she couldn’t see anything. The sky was a swirling mass of smoke and the red haze of the Unmade.
Then she saw it.
A streak of black and white flashed through the air. It passed by one of the bridgeman, one who seemed to be lost in the confusion. A moment later, the bridgeman exploded into a black smoke.
Shallan gasped.
The other Windrunner squires in the air reacted quickly, most forming into a wedge shape and chasing after the assailant. One dashed into the cloud of smoke, searching frantically for their comrade.
Shallan felt her link to her illusions falter. She looked down at the street, her illusions were starting to fuzz and fade. Her job seemed to have finished though, the people seemed aware to head to the Oathgate now.
“Mmm Shallan, I do not like this,” Pattern said, sliding up across the fabric of her dress.
“I don’t either, Pattern, but I think the bridgeman can handle it,” Shallan said, looking down.
“Yes, but... mmm, there is something wrong here.”
Shallan watched as half the bridgemen on the ground took to the air, nearly another dozen in a organised V shape. “You can say that again,” Shallan replied.
She watched as the second wedge took off after the first formation. Shallan couldn’t see their target anymore, the first formation had risen to quite some height in their pursuit. Shallan squinted, she noticed the white dot in the sky just as it hit the windrunner formation head on.
In the centre of the V, the lead two squires disappeared into smoke, their forms swirling in with the rest of the smoke laden air.
Shallan watched, eyes wide, as the white shape curved its trajectory and headed towards the second formation. Leading their group was Teft, his huge Shardblade distinct from the spears held by the squires.
As it approached, the white shape resolved as a man in white robes. He held a pitch black Shardblade in his hand that trailed the same black smoke that it turned its victims into. The man was ablaze with Stormlight.
“Pattern, is that...” Shallan said, fearspren boiling around her feet.
Instead of cutting through the middle of the second formation, the man shifted at the last moment. He diverted, following the line of the formation and swiping at the man at the end of the line. Shallan could see as the spears of the bridgeman lashed out. Some hit home, cutting red streaks across the white robes of the man.
“Mmm, yes Shallan, I think that is the Assassin in White!” Pattern said, the vibrations in his voice conveying his panic.
The man at the end of the second formation burst into black smoke.
“Storms! We have to help them!” Shallan said, pacing across garden entryway to keep the Assassin in White in view.
The few stragglers still hovering above her took off after the Assassin in a disorganised clump.
“Mmm, this seems like a job better suited to the flying Radiants,” Pattern replied.
Shallan paused for a moment. “There is something else we can do,” she said.
With that, Shallan threw Stormlight up at the bridgemen trailing the Assassin. Drawing on the memory of sketching the Windrunners training, the light coalesced into the forms of bridgemen, flying side by side with their living comrades. The illusions flew alongside them, presenting the Assassin with many more targets than he was actually facing.
The memory stung Shallan inside. Kaladin had trained these men, they were his. She hadn’t been able to save him, but she could save his men.
The Assassin abruptly changed direction, moving directly toward the ragged group of men and illusions. As he met them, Shallan directed the illusions to head straight for their target, spears held before them.
They passed in a moment.
The bridgemen survived the encounter but several illusions had vanished. It seemed illusions didn’t billow into clouds of black smoke like the squires had, they simply dissipated into a dark haze.
The Assassin was heading towards the ground now, streaks of red peppered his robes. With how much he was glowing, Shallan knew he would be healing quickly, but every strike took a little more out of him.
As he spun in the air to gain height, Teft’s group caught up to him. The bridgemen surrounded him, keeping the Assassin at a distance so not to be caught in the swings of his Blade. As they climbed, the Assassin’s movements became erratic, weaving and dodging away and towards various bridgemen. He would feint towards one bridgeman then dodge away just as he got in striking range. He spun and flipped around the group, obviously far more skilled with the Lashings than any Bridge Four member.
Without warning, another bridgeman vanished into a cloud of black smoke. The Assassin had followed through with one of his feints.
“Storms!” Shallan cursed to herself.
The fighting group was far above now, a white streak in the air surrounded by trail of blue. It was hard to judge distances but she did her best. Resummoning her illusions, Shallan tried again.
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Jasnah was consumed in darkness.Amaram’s spren was something massive. Something ancient. Something hungry.
There was no will to this spren, any sense of Amaram’s being was lost in an all-consuming hunger. It was ravenous. A being of pure intent.
Even the briefest moment of contact threatened to consume Jasnah.
She broke off immediately. The snap back of her awareness to the physical realm hit her hard, the smells of the burning city, the heat of the air, the screams and shouts that hung like a chorus in the air.
Jasnah stumbled, placing a hand to her chest in an attempt to compose herself.
“That,” Jasnah breathed, “Was not Amaram.”
Ivory groaned in assent. It seemed the encounter had exhausted him too.
Jasnah looked up in time to see Amaram come at her again, both Shardblades swinging. Jasnah Soulcast the ground beneath her, turning a thin layer to smoke to obscure them. Jumping backwards out of the way of the path of Amaram’s Blades, Jasnah swept out with Ivory in desperation.
Her Blade struck something hard and bounced off with a jarring hit that reverberated up her arm.
Jasnah landed a few steps back from where Amaram was. She was exhausted. Her Plate felt heavy on her shoulders. She still had plenty of Stormlight left so she let that guide her.
Amaram came at her from the smoke swinging. His first hit knocked her Blade aside, the strength behind the blow easily overpowering her beleaguered Plate. The second Blade followed quickly, striking hard against Jasnah’s left vambrace.
The force shook her arm. Jasnah moved downwards with the blow, dismissing Ivory and diving into a roll to the side. She turned, summoning Ivory again who reformed just in time to block another strike from Amaram. He brought both of his Blades down from above. Jasnah, holding the hilt in her safehand, grabbed the blade of Ivory and blocked both strikes.
Storms! Jasnah thought, his strength was immense. She was down on one knee, her Plate cracking the ground beneath her.
Jasnah strained against Amaram. Her Plate was granting her strength and fortitude but it was nowhere near prime condition. The fight with the thunderclast had left the spren weary.
Amaram laughed.
He lifted his right hand, the one holding his own Shardblade. Oathbringer still pressed down heavily against Ivory. With a whipping crack, he struck Jasnah’s left vambrace again.
She was launched into the air with a deep booming sound. The sudden rush of sensation against her left arm told her it was now open to the air. Amaram had broken her Plate.
She fell through the air for what felt like way too long.
Jasnah landed hard. She rolled awkwardly. She felt her weight press her now exposed arm against the ground and felt the sharp pain of her bones snapping.
Once she’d come to a stop, she lay still for a moment. The Stormlight thrumming though her veins seemed to surge down her arm. The immediate pain faded but nothing could dull the uncomfortable feeling of her bones resetting and reknitting.
What options did she have left? She had no chance of beating him with the Blade. She couldn’t Soulcast him. If she tried encasing him in stone or metal, he’d just Soulcast it away himself...
Taking a deep breath in, Jasnah decided to try one last option. She had one more trick in her safepouch, one more secret she believed that Amaram, or whatever it was that was wearing his skin, wouldn’t know.
She stood, initially wary to place weight against her newly healed arm. Amaram floated a few meters before her, Shardblades held low by his sides. His face was nearly unrecognisable with crystalline growths. They seemed to ripple under his skin, alive.
Even then, he continued to laugh.
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The Assassin quickly worked out what was happening.He weaved around the real members of Bridge Four, deftly hitting illusion after illusion. Shallan tried to keep up but they were so high now, she had never tried to make illusions at this distance before.
Once again, the Assassin quickly changed direction, heading straight down. He fell through the trailing Windrunners. Some didn’t react quickly enough to the Assassin’s change in direction and with a pain through her chest, Shallan noticed another puff of black smoke.
Shallan reached for more Stormlight, ready to produce more illusions once the Assassin came back in range, when she felt a chill run down her. Her attention was drawn to that instinct that prey feel when they sense a predator about to attack. That tingle in your spine when you feel you are being watched.
Shallan looked up at the Assassin, who was currently speeding headfirst towards the ground through a group of Windrunners, and met his eyes.
The Assassin in White was looking straight at Shallan.
Swinging the smoking black sword around him to ward off his pursuers, the Assassin came in low to the ground, almost hitting it, and changed direction to head directly for where Shallan stood. He fell towards her, over the street before the Oathgate, over the corpses of the people whose lives had been lost senselessly, his eyes never leaving Shallan’s.
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Jasnah felt the Stormlight flowing through her. She still held plenty within her, she just hoped it would be enough. She was going to need a lot.Amaram continued his laughter. He wasn’t even trying anymore. He was clearly enjoying himself. His two Blades hung low, cutting into the ground as he floated towards her.
A secret had been shared with her by someone who had raised far more questions than he’d answered. But he had given her answers. And wisdom.
Jasnah threw her arms before her, the warm air of the burning city swirling around her exposed arm.
The ground beneath Amaram exploded in a billow of smoke. It expanded quickly upwards, the large amount of solid mass turning into a high pressure plume of gas.
The black cloud quickly enveloped Amaram. The man was completely unaffected. He knew she couldn’t do anything to stop him. At least, he thought so.
Remember, the memory of Wit said in her mind Once something is cast into this, it can never be changed back.
Before the smoke cloud had time to spread too far, Jasnah offered up a huge amount of Stormlight and commanded the smoke into the immutable metal.
The smoke snapped back towards Amaram. It gripped him, clung to his skin, a black film that hung to every jagged piece of his body. The gas then shifted, almost instantaneously turning into a dull silver metal.
Amaram’s laugh was cut off by the seal of metal over his mouth. He immediately fell from the air, his Lashings now blocked.
As he hit the bottom of the hole created by Jasnah’s initial Soulcast, Jasnah noticed his limbs shift as he hit the ground. Wit had warned her about this. The metal blocked Stormlight usage, as well as Voidlight as she had hoped, but was physically not very strong.
She saw Amaram slowly start to move under his metal coat. A normal human wouldn’t have been able to survive this but, with the power of the Shardplate and whatever Damnation-born abilities the Unmade was granting him, this wasn’t enough.
Jasnah stood at the lip of the crater of her own making and threw yet more Stormlight down at Amaram. It swirled around him, the silver coating grew thicker as the air around Jasnah was pulled in towards him.
What started as a breeze grew in intensity quickly. The air rushed in from around them. A burning building nearby found itself starved as its air and smoke were pulled in. Smoke and dust and Stormlight swirled around Amaram in a hurricane of light. Jasnah poured more Stormlight into it.
Jasnah! Ivory snapped at her, admonishingly.
Air hated to be trapped like this. She felt a pang of regret for the spren. They’d never know freedom again. To a spren, you simply were what you were. Soulcasting asked them to be something else and no spren liked to change, that’s what the Stormlight was for. But Soulcasting came with a implied promise that the spren might one day become what it wanted to be again. Nothing lasted forever — wood burnt, rock eroded, air was breathed, water drunk or frozen or boiled. The world was a constant cycle of change where spren hopped from one existence to the next.
But now, they’d never be free again. The metal wasn’t natural to Roshar, it was an ancient, alien thing. In fact, she wasn’t even sure if it had a spren.
Jasnah didn’t let her concentration waiver. More and more Stormlight was offered up. She was done with Amaram. She’d hated that her father had tried to set them up. She’d done her research, she knew that the face Amaram showed to the world was a lie. He was a snake in a man’s body and not dealing with him earlier would always be a regret of hers.
How much of this was because of him? She’d seen his troops, they were attacking the city voraciously. Amaram had been left to help rebuild this city and instead he turned to the enemy and burned it to the ground.
Would Renarin still be about if she had dealt with him sooner?
Would Adolin?
Would her father?
Jasnah Kholin was done.
Her Stormlight ran out.
The wind stopped abruptly. Fires crackled nearby. No soldiers were present in the street. Jasnah didn’t know if they had decided to just stay away or if they’d gotten caught in the maelstrom. Jasnah cursed herself for not keeping some emergency Stormlight back but found she didn’t really care.
Jasnah breathed a sigh of relief, the Stormlight drag hitting her with a wave of exhaustion. Ivory manifested on her shoulder, his ink-like figure stood, hands behind his back.
“Whilst I do not agree with this method, I do believe that should be enough,” he said.
“I hope so,” Jasnah replied.
Nestled in the bottom of the crater was a sphere, about two metres in diameter, of aluminium.
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“Shallan! Mmmm, I do not like this!” Pattern buzzed urgently from nearby.The Assassin had nearly reached her. It had happened so quickly, she barely had time to react.
No, Shallan thought, now is not the time to panic.
Now was the time to be a warrior.
Shallan brought her Stormlight to bear and became Radiant. Her image and mindset changed. She stood straighter than Shallan. Taller.
Instinctively, Radiant fell into the sword stance that she had been taught. Shallan would have struggled to do so without thinking about the one who had taught her these stances, but Radiant was stronger than that. Pushing memories of the past away, Radiant raised Pattern.
Shallan! I do not like this at all! Pattern hummed into her mind.
“Don’t worry Pattern, it’s going to be okay,” Radiant replied.
The Assassin came in low, black sword trailing smoke. Shallan had just watched him murder several members of Bridge Four. Radiant had no doubt he would dispatch her with just as much ease. She had to be quick, she would only get one chance.
The Assassin drew closer.
She took a deep breath.
Radiant followed the path of his terrible black Shardblade. At the last moment, she leapt to the side, raising Pattern in an arc to parry the Assassin’s blow.
She fell to the side, Pattern rising.
The Blades clashed.
Radiant felt the force of the blow through her arms.
In a moment that seemed to stretch into eternity, she watched as the black Blade bit into her own.
Shallan watched as the Assassin’s Blade passed through Pattern, slicing through the metal with ease.
The Assassin passed. As she fell to the ground, Shallan was met with the horrifying sight of her Blade cut in two.
A heart-wrenching, blistering pain screamed through her as Pattern’s presence in her vanished. In that moment, her Blade, her spren, her friend, exploded into black smoke. Inside, something at the core of her being shattered like glass. Pain bloomed inside of her as the shards trying to rip themselves free.
A moment later, the Stormlight she was holding exploded outwards, forced away from her as if in revulsion. It mixed with the rapidly dissipating cloud before her.
Shallan fell to the ground, mouth stretched open, a scream climbing out of her throat. Her mind, her soul, her very being spasmed as they were ripped and torn asunder.
She grasped at her head. Clawed at it. Her back arched and legs kicked as she tried to reach into herself for something that just no longer there. The muscles in her jaw strained against her.
Shallan’s mind reeled. She tried to reach inside for help but there was nothing. There was no Radiant. There was no Veil. No Pattern. Just Shallan. Shallan, the murderer. Shallan, the orphan. Shallan, the quiet and the meek and the prim and proper. Shallan, the nobody.
She begged for the void to stop, to leave. She wanted so desperately for what was no longer there to be there again. It was like trying to see through eyes after they had been gouged out, move a limb that had been severed. Every impulse she had used to talk to her spren, to create illusions or summon her Shardblade was met with nothing. Nothing.
All she could feel was an impenetrable absence.
Shallan rolled onto her front, retching. She scraped her nails against the cold stone beneath her. Her mind rebelled against her. She threw her head against the ground, slamming it down hard. The pain that flashed through her almost felt real. It cut through the crowd of thoughts that clouded her mind. But not enough. Not enough.
This must be a horrible dream, this couldn’t be happening, she wanted it to stop. Needed it to stop.
Shallan ground her forehead against the stone, desperate to feel something, anything, in response to her pleas. Her screams had turned to sobs. She retched again.
Greyness clouded her vision, like a cloud.
Shallan fell to the floor limp, her consciousness fading.
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Jasnah stood, breathing heavily, looking at the tomb she’d creating for Amaram.“Jasnah!” Ivory suddenly shouted.
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Dalinar had raged across the city.After letting the second Herald’s corpse drop to the ground, he’d descended upon the city like an avatar of damnation itself.
He’d wiped out pockets of soldiers keeping the Sadeas troops at bay. No Thaylen stood a chance. He’d hunted down each of the Thaylen Shardbearers. The fools kept their Plates and Blades separate and each had been wiped out with ease.
Dalinar had lost himself in the slaughter. People hid in buildings that offered no defense against him. Walls crumbled before him. Restraints vanished to smoke at a thought.
Some he killed with Blade. Some with fist. Others he simply burnt.
Dalinar had stood surrounded by a city which he had killed as surely as he had killed any enemy he’d faced in his life.
A single thought passed through his mind, like a whisper on the wind. Not a word, more of a concept. It dripped with hatred, of millenia of frustration. Its touch was soft. It wasn’t enough to cut through the miasma of emotions that overwhelmed Dalinar’s mind. Instead, it redirected his rage.
No, it wasn’t just a word.
It was a target.
Radiant.
Dalinar Lashed himself upwards.
Through smoke and flame, he rose above the burning city, leaving the heat of the streets behind. The Ancient Ward lay before him, barely a building stood that wasn’t at least touched by flames. Soldiers stalked through the streets, killing any who tried to flee the firestorm. There had been the corpses too. Burning, beaten, broken, the city was dying. Dalinar had felt elation rise up inside of him at the sight of such beautiful and absolute destruction.
Then Dalinar looked to the east, towards the Loft Ward and the hill that held the Oathgate platform.
There, he saw it through the chaos.
Just on the precipice between the two Wards of the city, the red haze thinned. Within the swirling chaos of red and black, a beacon shone brightly.
Dalinar started falling towards it.
It was small, a diamond chip in a stormwall. A bright light that pulled the darkness in from around it and left nothing but the hope of a new dawn.
As he got closer, he could make out the shapes.
The light itself was a sphere of swirling Stormlight. It drew in the very air around it, the smoke from nearby buildings, the dust and debris from the ground.
Before the glowing sphere, arms outstretched, was a figure in stunning Shardplate.
Dalinar couldn’t hold back the torrent of emotions that came next. His mind thrummed with an appreciation for the beauty, for joy that such a thing could exist in the word. His heart elated. Within that, hatred, jealousy and envy bloomed. The Shardplate was like none he had ever seen before. It was angular, its shape made up of many flat shapes that were filigreed with a mesmerizing pattern of bright white lines. The Plate represented the hope of humanity against the oncoming storm, defending against the terrors that asail them. Even with one arm bare, the Plate was still a sight to behold.
A Knight Radiant.
The glow before the figure faded. They lowered their arms, sagging their shoulders in exhaustion.
Dalinar struck the figure like a highstorm.
Any normal human would have been completely pulverised by the force of the blow.
Instead, the two armored figures collided and continued onwards. Dalinar drove the figure into the ground, eventually coming to a stop at the end of a twenty foot trench left by their passing.
Dalinar sat astride the figure in deep violet Shardplate and rage carried his fists. He struck the helm of the warrior. The figures armored arm came up to defend them but Dalinar slapped it away. A Shardblade appeared in the unarmored hand and the Knight tried to swipe it up at Dalinar.
Before they got the chance, Dalinar’s arm shot forward and grabbed the forearm of the Knight and he squeezed.
Under the immense strength of his gauntleted hand, the arm broke with ease. Bones shattered and splintered and the warrior screamed. Dalinar barely even registered that the voice was female.
Dropping the ruined arm, Dalinar continued his assault. Another fist driven into the helm. The metal started to crack. A two handed blow caused it to split.
Dalinar leant forward, placing a hand on the ground just above the Knight’s shoulder. He smashed his fist against the helm and this time it exploded in a shower of molten metal.
A mane of jet black hair fell out.
Dalinar saw the face of his victim.
His mind quieted briefly as he gazed upon the face of his niece, twisted in horror. A woman who he’d seen grow through many trials in her life. Someone he’d come to trust and rely on, who always seemed so strong. A Radiant that, at one point, Dalinar had utterly respected as an individual that could survive anything.
His body relaxed for a moment. His body ached to move. He looked down at his niece.
Shamespren fell around him, a soft fall of white petals.
He gritted his teeth. He breathed in quick, short breaths.
I’m sorry, Jasnah, he wanted to say, his fist rising.
It’s not my fault, looking down at the fearspren pooling around his brother’s daughter.
I don’t have a choice.
Dalinar brought his fist down again and smashed Jasnah’s skull against the stone.
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Lunamor rushed out of the garden.“Rock, there!” Syl yelled, her small blue form flying over to where Shallan lay.
He ran over to the crumpled form on the stone. Lunamor rolled her over onto her front. Her face was a mess, a bloody wound covered her forehead and it looked like something had clawed flesh from scalp.
“She still breathes, I do not know what happened to her,” Lunamor said, picking up the girl. She was so light in his arms.
“It’s okay Rock, we’ll get her back, get her some Stormlight,” Syl said, looking around intently. “I don’t see Pattern.”
“I am sure he is around somewhere. Tell Teft to activate the gate. There’s nothing more we can do here,” Lunamor said, looking over the city. Syl nodded and disappeared back into the gardens.
From atop the Royal Ward, Lunamor took one last look at the dying city. The battle was lost. They’d lost almost a third of Bridge Four before Teft had called the retreat. The red mist seemed to be fading, the damage it had wrought was done.
Wary of the Assassin who still patrolled above, Lunamor turned and carried Shallan back onto the Oathgate platform, just as the swirling light of transition enveloped it.
The Battle for Thaylen City had been lost.
Epilogue
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Szeth-son-son-Vallano, Truthless of Shinovar, admired the mosaics in the Oathgate control room and listened to the screams.They’d been gone for so long, he found he’d missed them. Running a hand along a grand depiction of Urithiru, Szeth took comfort that those he’d killed were still with him.
After so long of them being his only companion as he’d slaughtered his way across Roshar, they’d returned.
New voices joined the old, the people he’d killed in the city. His new master had set him upon the Radiants of the city and whilst some still lived, he’d taken a good number.
Sword-nimi sat on his hip in its scabbard. It had gone quiet after the Windrunners had left, occasionally sighing contentedly to itself or humming gently.
Szeth smiled up at the mosaic. His world was finally making sense. He’d sworn himself to Dalinar Kholin who had given him purpose. The voices in his head that had tortured him whilst he was sworn to the Oathstone felt different now. He knew they weren’t screaming at him, they were screaming with him. They didn’t hate him, how could they? It wasn’t his fault. His new Shardblade was unlike anyone he had met before. He was excited to show it the greatest city on Roshar.
He even enjoyed the presence of the silent spren that followed him around. The Highspren shimmered in the air behind him. Together, they’d cleanse Shinovar.
He knew now. He wasn’t Truthless. The Voidbringers had returned. He had never been wrong. Those that had died had died because the Shamanate had lied. They were guilty of the atrocities Szeth had committed. Whatever Szeth did now, he was justified in bringing justice to them.
Szeth reached the smooth stone of the activation slot. His smile became a grin. Tears filled his eyes. For the first time in too long, Szeth felt happy.
Throwing his head back, he screamed along with the dead.
It was liberating.
The scream became a laugh. A joyous laugh, how wonderful his life had become.
The room darkened as a massive figure entered the doorway.
Leaning down to fit through the doorway, Dalinar Kholin entered the control chamber. He was still wrapped in his pitch black Shardplate, drawing in the light around him. His presence dominated the round chamber. Szeth knelt before the man he had sworn his life to.
Behind Dalinar, Alethi troops gathered and organised onto the outer platform. The thousands of Parshendi that had arrived via boat had started moving into the city after the troops had cleared the city. They’d begun the process of putting out fires and rebuilding whilst the soldiers had prepared for immediate departure. It seemed they were to assault Urithiru immediately.
Several Fused followed Dalinar into the chamber. Mostly the flying forms that, even in this confined space, still floated a few inches from the ground. Their long robes dragged along the ground. They were followed by a tall, slender Parshendi who didn’t seem to have the dark glow of Voidlight around it. Finally, one of the hulking, heavily armored Fused entered too. Its huge arms were on the shoulders of a young teenage girl.
Szeth’s eyes widened. He recognised the girl, she’d saved his life from the Fused before Dalinar had joined and ordered Szeth to join them. He looked from the girl to Dalinar then back again, looking for answers.
The girl’s eyes were downcast, her long hair dirty and matted.
Dalinar moved in front of Szeth.
“Stand.” he growled through gritted teeth.
Szeth stood.
“Move.”
Szeth moved to the side, giving Dalinar access to the activation slot.
Dalinar stood before it, then turned to the centre of the room. Szeth had noticed the Fused had mostly moved to the edges of the room too, waiting for something.
A man stepped into the centre of the room. A moment before, there had been nothing. Now, as if from an unseen doorway, a man simply stood. The tall Parshendi seemed to balk at his presence.
Szeth didn’t recognise him. He stood supported by a golden sceptre. He was dressed in the white and gold robes, his kindly old face framed by a neatly cut beard.
He looked Shin, to Szeth’s surprise. He looked at the others, noting that no one else seemed to be too shocked the man had appeared from nowhere.
It seemed whomever they had been waiting for had arrived.
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Venli’s eyes recovered slowly from the blinding light of Odium’s appearance. Her skin prickled with pain from the heat that had washed over her.As her eyes adjusted, she looked at the ancient being. His face was marbled with white and gold, framed with smooth carapace. He tucked his scepter under his arm and began clapping his hands.
“Well done everyone, the city is ours.”
The words sounded odd to Venli initially. It took her a moment to realise he’d said them in both the ancient singer tongue and Alethi simultaneously. She wondered if the others had heard it.
Odium turned in place looking at each person in the room in turn, eventually turning on Turash.
“Turash, how are the troops?” he said.
The Fused bowed his head. “They are well, master, eager for their next conquest. I do worry about their loyalty though. Even with the voidspren, they grow suspicious of us,” he said.
“Yes, the loss of their leader was unfortunate. How long will it take to release Yelig-nar?”
“Several hours master. The metal is thick.”
Odium waved a hand. “Unfortunate. The troops here will do their jobs, do not worry. Nergaoul is already on his way to Urithiru, all they need to do is keep the fight going until his arrival.”
Turash nodded.
“And what of Yushah, master?”
Venli had been so focused Odium that she hadn’t noticed the Fused around her were staring at the man in bloody robes. Dalinar still stood unmoving, his helm looking straight forward. Odium turned to face the robed man.
“Ah yes, our newest Skybreaker. Yes, Yushah is gone.”
There was murmuring among the Fused as Odium walked over to the man.
“I would very much like to find out how you were able to do that, Szeth-son-son-Vallano,” Odium said in Shin.
Szeth looked at Odium, confusion on his face.
“Do what?” he said.
Odium placed a hand on Szeth’s shoulder and the man cried out in pain. Falling to one knee, Szeth strained as Odium held him in place.
Venli knew that pain. The cold fire that burnt through you, laid you bare. She squeezed her eyes shut and tried not to focus on the man’s cries. She found herself gently humming to Anxiety.
After a few moments, Odium released the man. Venli opened her eyes to see Odium looking at the sheathed Shardblade the man had been using. Odium contemplated it for a moment before turning back to face the Fused.
“It’s the blade. Ralesh, watch that human. If he falls in battle, do not let that blade fall into enemy hands. I will need it once the battle is done,” He said, switching back to the ancient singer tongue. Venli looked to Szeth. He still crouched on one knee, breathing heavily. Stormlight coiled gently off his skin.
“Yes, master,” said Ralesh, one of the floating Fused.
Odium then addressed the rest of the Fused. “Do not try to exact vengeance against him. He is our ally now. I’m sure the prospect of facing someone who is able to send you Beyond before our work here is done doesn’t appeal to many of you anyway.”
Odium turned to face Dalinar.
“Now, time for a little treat!” Odium said, throwing the arm not holding the scepter wide and indicating towards the little Reshi girl.
Dalinar stood unmoving. The bulky Fused holding the girl marched her forward.
“Dalinar, you recognise Lift, right?”
With the mention of Dalinar’s name, Lift looked up.
“What? Dalinar?” She said, her voice weak.
“Dalinar, my champion. It seems the lovely lady of this world has been grooming her own little backup plan. You were her and Tanavast’s plan A, ” Odium said, sweeping a hand between Dalinar and Lift. “Plan A, meet plan B.”
There was a moment of silence.
Dalinar walked forward towards the girl.
Placing one hand on her shoulder and the other atop her head, Dalinar twisted sharply.
A snap broke through the air.
Lift’s body fell to the ground.
“Thank you kindly, Dalinar. You’ve been a huge help,” said Odium, a warm smile on his face.
Dalinar walked back to his position before the activation slot. The large Fused moved back to edge of the room. Odium turned back to the Fused.
“Now, Urithiru lies ahead. The battle will be hard. Reinforcements should come from Kholinar but you will be the first to attack. Most of their troops stand ready so let my champion take the lead and follow behind. Nergaoul will join eventually. No other Unmade are positioned to assist but you shouldn’t need them. Once Urithiru has fallen, we may not even need to free Ba-Ado-Mishram,” Odium said, turning to Szeth. “You will find and kill the rest of the Radiants. I will come find you when you are done.”
“Excuse me, uhm...” Szeth said, rising.
“You may simply call me Odium,” Odium said.
“I am sorry, Odium, but I do not follow you. I am sworn to Dalinar,” he said, gesturing to huge figure next to him.
Odium did not reply. There was a pause before Dalinar turned to Szeth.
“Kill Radiants. Don’t die,” Dalinar said. His tone was strained, as if he were under great stress. Dalinar returned to looking straight forward.
Odium cleared his throat.
“Right, now, Dalinar. If you would be so kind...” He said, gesturing towards his champion.
Dalinar summoned Oathbreaker, turned, and slammed the Blade into the activation slot.
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“There once was a terrible king who loved art,” Wit said.He shuffled in line — along with a couple hundred other people — one dreary step.
“His love for art was matched only by his hatred of disappointment. His beautiful castle, made by the kingdoms greatest architect, stood on a hill. Before it was the most perfect garden you can imagine, curated by the kingdoms greatest gardeners.”
Weeks after the fall of Kholinar, the place still smelled like smoke. Though the city’s new masters had moved tens of thousands of humans out to work farms, complete resettlement would take months, if not years.
Wit turned to the man behind him. “His castle was filled with glorious tapestries and paintings. His meals, cooked by chefs who were all masters in their arts, were eaten to the backdrop of full orchestras playing masterpieces. His nights with his beautiful wife were spent looking out through a grand window of gold and jewels, looking over the ocean that stood behind his castle.”
Wit turned back to face the front.
“He only asked for perfection. His coffers were always full, his kingdom always drawing in gold selling the best products the world had ever seen. He paid his artists well. He knew they were the best, he’d killed everyone else.”
They shuffled forward another step.
“The king was always looking for a new project. One night, he stood in his bed chambers and looked at the ocean. At the beautiful natural beach that covered the shore.”
Wit paused a moment, tapping the man in front of him.
“Do you have beaches here? I never thought to check.”
Without waiting for a reply, Wit continued.
“The king turned to the queen and told her, ‘I shall have the most beautiful ocean in all the world!’” Wit proclaimed, throwing his arms wide. The man in front of him took another step forward. Wit stepped forward again. The people around continued to expertly ignore him.
“So he called his architect and told him ‘Build me an ocean that the whole world will want to come and see!’
The architect, not wanting to disappoint his master, ran off and spent many month putting together a plan that would turn the coast into a marvel. Great blocks of stone were carved, great mechanisms constructed. A year after the request, the new ocean was ready. The kings window had been covered with a great tarp to stop him seeing the imperfect construction process.
Unfortunately, that night a great storm struck the kingdom. It was the strongest storm anyone had ever seen!”
Wit leaned over to the man in the queue next to him. Nudging him with an elbow and giving the man a wink, he said, “you guys know a bit about storms, right?”
The man looked at him, his face bright with apathy. Wit returned to his place in his own queue.
“So, the architect couldn’t sleep at all, he hadn’t planned for such a strong weather, would his creation survive?”
Another step forward.
“In the morning, the king immediately summoned the architect to his bedchamber, eagerly awaiting his new ocean. With nervous hands, the architect pulled back the curtain. The king gasped!”
Wit paused dramatically. No one cared.
“The new ocean was gone, washed away. Do you know what the king did after that?” Wit said, looking at his audience who were intently focused on not looking at him.
“He had the architect killed, obviously.
So he tried again. With his gardener. Once again, a storm came along and wrecked the beautiful undersea garden that had been built. So he had his florists, his chefs, his painters, his musicians, all were told to make the ocean perfect!
They all failed, and so, they were all killed.”
They were nearing the front of the queue now.
“The kingdom fell to ruin. There was no one left to create art. No one left to cook splendid meals. No one to compose perfect music for perfect musicians to play on perfectly constructed instruments.”
The man in front of Wit reached the front of the queue and was handed a cup of water and a bread roll.
As the man left, Wit stepped up to the front of the queue.
“Do you know why the king failed?”
The man giving out the rations looked up at Wit. “What?” he said, his eyes hard.
“He didn’t realise that even with the best people at your disposal, sometimes things out of your control will ruin everything.”
The man, a cup of water in one hand and a bread roll in the other, looked at Wit quizzically. Wit took the water and bread, bowing his head in thanks and turned to the man behind him. He handed him the rations.
“Which is why I must take my leave. I’m sorry,” he said.
And with that, Wit left.
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Moved to Fanworks at the request of Firerust
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I so thoroughly enjoyed this. You have an art for dialogue and character Matt. damnation you for using the "There's always another secret" line, well done. Also hot damnation this moment:
9 hours ago, Comatose said:“Do you love him?”
“Who?”
Sazed shrugged.
You KILLED it here. Loved it.
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8 minutes ago, TousenShadowForged said:
was he aware of those worlds? cause so far didn't seem like him or sazed/harmony are aware
He was one of the original 16 Shards so he would have been aware of at least one other planet for sure and knew more were out there.
Harmony doesn't know because Sazed doesn't know.
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On 29/11/2018 at 6:45 PM, Ookla the Drunk said:
So, Do you want to join?
Oh I didn't realise I was being propositioned for a specific guild! Maybe some other time
On 29/11/2018 at 10:47 PM, ladymxdnight said:Happy to help, Jebus! I really enjoyed this chapter. It's so interesting to see this exploration of how things could have gone (though admittedly, I am very displeased by Taln's and Renarin's deaths). Eager to see what's next for Jasnah and Ash since right now I'm anxious for their safety. Also, Szeth.
EDIT: I still have hope for Ash okay, you can't murderate two Heralds even if you're psycho!Dalinar
If I was you, I'd be worried for everyones safety.
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5 hours ago, Ookla the Ookla said:
Thanks a lot for this! And I really like the bit with Rock saying Kaladin would be back. This is probably the most masterful one so far.
Also, how did they help with the chapter?
Hey, @Ooklalord Jebus, any interest in joining a writer's guild? Cause I think you'd fit right in.
Glad you liked it!
Alyssum helped me a lot with grammer and capitlisation (I'm really bad at remembering 's and punctuation around speech marks, they're good at them). Ladymxdnight helped with the plotting and pacing of a lot of it. For example, I originally had them appear inside the Oathgate building until Lady pointed out that the platform is a wide open space that, in Thaylen City, had been converted into a statue garden so I had to rewrite that whole section.
And I've never thought about it really. This is my first time writing something this long and complex. Most of my writing projects never break 5k (Tragedy is now up to 13k).
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First look at the Jasnah miniature!
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Greetings Stormlight fans!
Oh boy, do we have something fun for you today. Brotherwise Games, creators of the Call to Adventure Stormlight Archive game, have given us the exclusive first look at the Jasnah Kholin design for their miniatures Kickstarter coming later this month. Brotherwise have been working hard over the last year putting together designs for 20 of the main characters from the Stormlight Archive series. Working closely with Brandon himself, along with Isaac Stewart and Ben McSweeney, these minis will represent official depictions of nearly every major Stormlight character.
So, without much further ado, let me present the one and only Jasnah Kholin:
We also interviewed Johnny O’Neal, President of Brotherwise Games about the creative process behind this design.
How did you start working on this miniatures project?
Since about this time last year, I’ve been working directly with Isaac Stewart, Head of Creative at Dragonsteel. We established a great working relationship on Call to Adventure, and my favorite thing about that project was art directing more than 100 Brandon-approved pieces of Cosmere artwork. I thought this project would be similar.
Instead, Isaac and Brandon proposed that this project would be an even closer partnership. They saw this as an opportunity to make truly official depictions of almost every major character in the series, as canonical as Ben McSweeney’s illustrations in the books. That really changed the process and made it more involved.
Did you want to elaborate a bit on the process of creating these models? Were you able to take creative liberties, or was Brandon helping fill in the places you were not sure about?
That’s just it. With Call to Adventure, we tried to make every image as accurate as possible, but Dragonsteel mostly made corrections, not suggestions. Brandon’s continuity team, led by Karen Ahlstrom, reviewed every piece of card art, and Brandon had final approval. Ultimately, though, those pieces came with the disclaimer that they were the artists’ interpretations of the characters.
With this project, Isaac actually initiated the process. Almost every character started with pose sketches or outfit control drawings that he developed with Ben McSweeney. For the lead protagonists, Isaac also commissioned portrait turnarounds from Audrey Hotte. Brandon provided input throughout this process. Then our sculptors took the next step. Even with awesome 2D inputs, characters look different in 3D, and that led to more back and forth. Our sculpting team, led by Leo Pokorny, took things to the next level with some great ideas and interpretations. After multiple rounds of review, we’d arrive at a final character that pleased everyone.
So this was a lot more than a miniatures project. In fact, you could say that the miniatures are just our way of funding a major visual development initiative for the IP. I’m excited for people to enjoy the physical products, but I’m even more psyched to know that these are the character designs Brandon can bring into Hollywood or videogame discussions and say, “look how cool these characters are.”
Which character are you personally most excited for people to see?
That’s a tough one! I might have to say Eshonai. Before this project, there really wasn’t a single canonical depiction of Parshendi characters. Even the more “official” art out there, like some of the card illustrations I’ve art directed, have conflicting features. While working on Eshonai, I feel like we cracked the code on warform facial structure and carapace, unlocking a visual language we applied to other Listener and Singer characters. Eshonai also has some awesome Shardplate, with tantalizing hints of Singer influence in its design.
What can you tell us about the upcoming Kickstarter?
We want this to be a Kickstarter that every single Stormlight fan will want to back. This is not just for fans who already collect miniatures, or for people who like painting miniatures. The figures come fully assembled, because I want these sets to be awesome display pieces even if you leave them in the package or set them on your bookshelf. That said, we will offer an official paint set and color turnarounds of every character, so this could be a fun way to learn miniature painting!
We’ll also offer some painted miniatures at a slightly larger scale. Our standard miniatures are unpainted plastic, and they’re at a “34 mm scale,” just a notch bigger than standard 32 mm D&D miniatures. (We like the extra detail, and people on Roshar are tall!) For example, our unpainted Kaladin miniature is about 1.75 inches (45 mm) tall. It’s basically impossible to mass produce truly high-quality painted miniatures at that scale. So our painted miniatures are almost double that size. That treatment is pricier, so we’re only doing four characters in the painted treatment.
Any plans for releasing a game that these minis can be used with?
Yes. We’re not ready to talk about that yet, but we’ll say this: If you enjoy tabletop games and you get these miniatures now, they’ll integrate perfectly into our next big Stormlight project.
Thanks for taking the time to hear about our miniatures! Working on this project has been an honor, and I’ve set aside a year’s worth of game design work for the chance to be hands-on art director for these character models. I’m still starstruck in every meeting with Brandon, and I feel so lucky to have this opportunity. I hope other Cosmere fans see this project and get a sense of how much love went into it!
If you want to invite a tiny Jasnah into your home, you're in luck! Brotherwise Games' Kickstarter, set to launch on September 13th, will be offering the brightlady's likeness alongside twenty three other characters. The project preview page just went live, and you can sign up at this link to be notified as soon as it goes live.
Johnny has signed up to the forum and will be watching this thread in case anyone has any questions!