KingLandy he/him Posted May 29, 2014 Posted May 29, 2014 (edited) Later tonight, after I finish some final editing, I'll be posting a ten page essay I wrote comparing Words of Radiance to Julius Caesar, especially the characters of Brutus and Kaladin. I turn the essay in tomorrow morning during school, so if anyone wants to make suggestions I'd have to see them before I go to bed tonight in order to change them. Just wanted to give everyone a heads up, hopefully you all like it! Posted! See post 4. Edited May 29, 2014 by KingLandy 4
Aether he/him Posted May 29, 2014 Posted May 29, 2014 I'd be interested in reading it, but differences in time regions might make it difficult for me to give you any pointers before you turn it in.
KingLandy he/him Posted May 29, 2014 Author Posted May 29, 2014 Yeah, that's completely fine, I just wanted to put that out there. I should have it done within an hour or two, though.
KingLandy he/him Posted May 29, 2014 Author Posted May 29, 2014 (edited) Alright, here it is! I have yet to tag on a conclusion and should have that finished within a half hour, but I wanted to get this out ASAP. This is written with the assumption that you have read both Julius Caesar and Words of Radiance, but you should be alright even if you haven't. https://drive.google.com/file/d/0BzndKj5AI8V8TjkwUTlWMEsxY0E/edit?usp=sharing Enjoy, and feel free to critique/comment! EDIT: I'm finished! New link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0BzndKj5AI8V8aGJocnlZVDB1SE0/edit?usp=sharing Edited May 29, 2014 by KingLandy 5
Chrono she/her Posted May 29, 2014 Posted May 29, 2014 That is a very well done essay! I love your comparisons to Brutus and Kaladin, and how you highlighted the symbolism of Syl dying and returning to Kaladin. Have my upvote!
KingLandy he/him Posted May 30, 2014 Author Posted May 30, 2014 That is a very well done essay! I love your comparisons to Brutus and Kaladin, and how you highlighted the symbolism of Syl dying and returning to Kaladin. Have my upvote! Thanks! And I figure I might as well include my name here for reference. My name is John Landis.
Gabriele she/her Posted May 30, 2014 Posted May 30, 2014 Well done indeed. Is that a school essay? In that case I'd have some minor suggestions to make it more easy for those who've (had to ) read Julius Caesar but not Sanderson. Explain who Sylphrenia is the first time she's mentioned in the essay. You could also mention that Elhokar is Dalinar's nephew. Love the comparison of Caesar's ghost and Syl. There's a quotation mark missing after 'first we met' on page 6, paragraph 1. 1
kaellok he/him Posted May 31, 2014 Posted May 31, 2014 Although I wish I had seen your essay sooner so that I could offer you suggestions of improvement, it is quite well-done. Most of my suggestions are simply of rearrangement, so that some information occurs first. While Julius Caesar is a well-known work, and one that you can likely expect your target audience to be familiar with, Words of Radiance isn't; I would have suggested front-loading brief descriptions of the characters and themes in WoR, instead of introducing them throughout the essay as you have. (If you were comparing two well-known works, then your current setup would be preferred; it's merely because one is likely not well-known by the audience that I make my comment.) I would also have suggested re-writing your final sentence as a statement, rather than a question. You have done a lot of things really well, though. You found common links between two radically different works of art, and convincingly proved their similarity. If your teacher gives you less than an A, let me know, and I'll file a protest and appeal on your behalf. 1
KingLandy he/him Posted June 1, 2014 Author Posted June 1, 2014 Thanks for the praise and suggestions! My teacher has read both Words of Radiance and Julius Caesar, so she told me I didn't have to describe the characters in an introduction; otherwise, I certainly would have. The final sentence probably should have been a statement, though, you're right. I was really surprised how well the two works fit together, and really enjoyed writing the essay. If your teacher gives you less than an A, let me know, and I'll file a protest and appeal on your behalf. Haha, I'll be sure to post my grade, then.
Gabriele she/her Posted June 1, 2014 Posted June 1, 2014 Now that's a teacher worth having. Not many of those teaching literature and stuff read Fantasy (it's more common among the natural science people as I see on my commute to the North Campus).
Guest Posted June 1, 2014 Posted June 1, 2014 Now that's a teacher worth having. Not many of those teaching literature and stuff read Fantasy (it's more common among the natural science people as I see on my commute to the North Campus). Agree. Wheel of Time and Harry Potter were popular reads at engineering school a decade ago. Game of Thrones is a popular one too among my colleges, well among the ones that do read and the ones that do not read are at least watching the show (or downloading illegally the show). One of our new interns has the absolute "I read fantasy look" Albeit, I confirm reading fantasy and science fiction is very popular among geeky engineers. Some of my friends have swords on their wall.... Think A Big Bang Theory
Gabriele she/her Posted June 1, 2014 Posted June 1, 2014 Yep, the North Campus houses all the faculties like Maths and IT, Physic and Astrophysics, Chemistry, Biology, Geology (where I'm working), Forestry and Agrarian Sciences. And people inte the commute bus from the station read GRRM, Abercrombie, Rothfuss, the occasional Mark Lawrence, Erikson and Bernard Cornwell, and sometimes SciFi stuff like Hamilton or Scalzi. It's fun.
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