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Hi Goat,

Thanks for your comments.

I had never noticed how often I use the words "abruptly" and "suddenly" and now that you pointed it out, it sticks out like a sore thumb. So, thanks for that . That, and my tendency for redundancies... I am definitely going to look out for these things in revisions and in my other writings!

Andyk and Mandamon, thanks for your comments! I appreciate the honesty in your critiques.

Submitting this story, I knew it needed work but I couldn't identify exactly what needed to be fixed. Your comments helped considerably! 

Hi everyone,

This is a short story that I recently wrote. This is only the second short story I have written, so I am open to any and all feedback that might help me improve (i.e. what works, what doesn't work, what's unclear, if anything is boring, the structure of the story, etc.)!

Hello,

I'd like to submit something this Monday.

Thanks!

Thanks everyone for your thoughtful critiques. I appreciate the frankness and specificity in what you said, it has made me think about things that I had previously been unaware of. I will definitely take into consideration everything that was said when I get to the editing stage and as I continue to write.

Hello,

This is my first submission to Reading Excuses. It the the first chapter of my novel tentatively titled "The Swords of Essence". It is the first novel I have tried writing, so I do not doubt it will be horrible - so bring on the critiques so that I can learn how to improve!

Thanks so much!