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I Once Knew

By [Well, we're gonna have to redact that, arent we]

[Redacted]

[Also redacted]

[You guessed it. Redacted.]

 I once knew a smile

That lit up the sky 

That coaxed out the starlight 

With heart free to fly

 

She danced through the shadows

She laughed in the rain

Unburdened by whispers

Untouched by the pain.

 

But they called on the thunder 

A storm in the night

They stole all the color and swallowed the light.

 

With merciless blackness

That devoured the dawn 

Until every trace of the morning was gone

 

Now I’ve stood on the edge

Of the chasm so deep

With echoes of

Promises I couldn’t keep

I crave the quiet

The peace of the fall

But I’ve lingered right here—

At the edge of it all

Held back by the memories,

The dreams that she kept

And the hand of a friend

Pulled back before I leapt

 

But the girl I once knew

Has faded away

And I am her vestige

In ashes of grey

Lost to the winds

And forgotten by all

She drifted away

To the shadows that call

I’m held captive by the hole inside,

Haunted by the past

I remember her no longer

She was never meant to last

 

Wandering alone

In my barren world I tread

Through mists of silence

Where all hope is dead

Ashes of dreams

That I cannot renew

I am the shattered remains

Of the girl I once knew

Idk why it bolded everything i just copy/pasted from google docs

wow this uh might be a disaster

advice welcome and probably needed

hey hey I can't be good at everything

Notice how I put 'attempting' in the title

I only put this on here because it's apparently commonplace to write stuff and put it here

Edited by NerdSandwich
Posted
8 minutes ago, NerdSandwich said:

I Once Knew

By [Well, we're gonna have to redact that, arent we]

[Redacted]

[Also redacted]

[You guessed it. Redacted.]

 I once knew a smile

That lit up the sky 

That coaxed out the starlight 

A heart free to fly

 

Danced through the shadows

And laughed in the rain

Unburdened by whispers

Untouched by the pain.

 

They called on the thunder 

A storm in the night

They stole all the color and swallowed the light.

 

Merciless blackness

That devoured the dawn 

Until every trace of the morning was gone

 

Now I’ve stood on the edge

Of the chasm so deep

Almost-forgotten echoes

Of promises I couldn’t keep

I crave the quiet

The peace of the fall

But I’ve lingered right here—

At the edge of it all

Held back by the memories,

The dreams that she kept

And the hand of a friend

Pulled back before I leapt

 

But the girl I once knew

Has faded away

And I am her vestige

In ashes of grey

I’m lost to the winds

And forgotten by all

She drifted away

To the shadows that call

I’m captive by the hole inside,

Haunted by the past

She’s remembered no longer

Never meant to last

 

Completely alone

In my dreadful existence

Wandering through the mist

Ignoring resistance

Ashes of hope

That I cannot renew

I am the shattered remains

Of the girl I once knew

Idk why it bolded everything i just copy/pasted from google docs

wow this uh might be a disaster

advice welcome and probably needed

hey hey I can't be good at everything

Notice how I put 'attempting' in the title

I only put this on here because it's apparently commonplace to write stuff and put it here

That's really good!

Posted
14 minutes ago, NerdSandwich said:

I Once Knew

By [Well, we're gonna have to redact that, arent we]

[Redacted]

[Also redacted]

[You guessed it. Redacted.]

 I once knew a smile

That lit up the sky 

That coaxed out the starlight 

A heart free to fly

 

Danced through the shadows

And laughed in the rain

Unburdened by whispers

Untouched by the pain.

 

They called on the thunder 

A storm in the night

They stole all the color and swallowed the light.

 

Merciless blackness

That devoured the dawn 

Until every trace of the morning was gone

 

Now I’ve stood on the edge

Of the chasm so deep

Almost-forgotten echoes

Of promises I couldn’t keep

I crave the quiet

The peace of the fall

But I’ve lingered right here—

At the edge of it all

Held back by the memories,

The dreams that she kept

And the hand of a friend

Pulled back before I leapt

 

But the girl I once knew

Has faded away

And I am her vestige

In ashes of grey

I’m lost to the winds

And forgotten by all

She drifted away

To the shadows that call

I’m captive by the hole inside,

Haunted by the past

She’s remembered no longer

Never meant to last

 

Completely alone

In my dreadful existence

Wandering through the mist

Ignoring resistance

Ashes of hope

That I cannot renew

I am the shattered remains

Of the girl I once knew

Idk why it bolded everything i just copy/pasted from google docs

wow this uh might be a disaster

advice welcome and probably needed

hey hey I can't be good at everything

Notice how I put 'attempting' in the title

I only put this on here because it's apparently commonplace to write stuff and put it here

das good

ill formulate better advice when i find what happened to my brain cells

Posted (edited)

  

2 minutes ago, CoderDrag0n8 said:

das good

ill formulate better advice when i find what happened to my brain cells

 

I eated them. I eated them all.

Edited by NerdSandwich
Posted

I live this! Amazing job!

(i meant to write i love this but mistyped and both are true :3 )

Posted
11 hours ago, NerdSandwich said:

I Once Knew

By [Well, we're gonna have to redact that, arent we]

[Redacted]

[Also redacted]

[You guessed it. Redacted.]

 I once knew a smile

That lit up the sky 

That coaxed out the starlight 

With heart free to fly

 

She danced through the shadows

She laughed in the rain

Unburdened by whispers

Untouched by the pain.

 

But they called on the thunder 

A storm in the night

They stole all the color and swallowed the light.

 

With merciless blackness

That devoured the dawn 

Until every trace of the morning was gone

 

Now I’ve stood on the edge

Of the chasm so deep

With echoes of

Promises I couldn’t keep

I crave the quiet

The peace of the fall

But I’ve lingered right here—

At the edge of it all

Held back by the memories,

The dreams that she kept

And the hand of a friend

Pulled back before I leapt

 

But the girl I once knew

Has faded away

And I am her vestige

In ashes of grey

Lost to the winds

And forgotten by all

She drifted away

To the shadows that call

I’m held captive by the hole inside,

Haunted by the past

I remember her no longer

She was never meant to last

 

Wandering alone

In my barren world I tread

Through mists of silence

Where all hope is dead

Ashes of dreams

That I cannot renew

I am the shattered remains

Of the girl I once knew

Idk why it bolded everything i just copy/pasted from google docs

wow this uh might be a disaster

advice welcome and probably needed

hey hey I can't be good at everything

Notice how I put 'attempting' in the title

I only put this on here because it's apparently commonplace to write stuff and put it here

This is really really cool!!! I really like all the colour imagery 

It's also really, really sad. How are you doing?

Posted

I really love how it induces a sense of wistfulness and loss. The feelings are strong but the narrative is incomplete, and that drives me wishing you continue after the last line. Who's the girl? Who's "they"? The questions I have makes me wondering if your poem is a first act.

Posted
  On 5/16/2026 at 1:52 AM, Ink and Embers said:

This is really really cool!!! I really like all the colour imagery 

It's also really, really sad. How are you doing?

I'm...okay

Better than last year at least

Just...yeah

  On 5/16/2026 at 8:51 AM, Lord Stormer said:

I really love how it induces a sense of wistfulness and loss. The feelings are strong but the narrative is incomplete, and that drives me wishing you continue after the last line. Who's the girl? Who's "they"? The questions I have makes me wondering if your poem is a first act.

The girl is past me.

The 'they' is uhm everyone else

...I uhm hope it's the first act

  11 hours ago, Through The Living Ketek said:

THIS IS SO GOOD!

Thanks!!!

Posted
2 hours ago, NerdSandwich said:
  On 5/16/2026 at 1:52 AM, Ink and Embers said:

This is really really cool!!! I really like all the colour imagery 

It's also really, really sad. How are you doing?

I'm...okay

Better than last year at least

Just...yeah

  On 5/16/2026 at 8:51 AM, Lord Stormer said:

I really love how it induces a sense of wistfulness and loss. The feelings are strong but the narrative is incomplete, and that drives me wishing you continue after the last line. Who's the girl? Who's "they"? The questions I have makes me wondering if your poem is a first act.

The girl is past me.

The 'they' is uhm everyone else

...I uhm hope it's the first act

  11 hours ago, Through The Living Ketek said:

THIS IS SO GOOD!

Thanks!!!

Alright. If you ever want to talk to someone, I'm always happy to listen!

Posted
23 hours ago, Ink and Embers said:

Alright. If you ever want to talk to someone, I'm always happy to listen!

Thanks for caring that means a lot!

I'm hopefully gonna get a break in the summer. School is just...not fun.

Posted
56 minutes ago, NerdSandwich said:

Thanks for caring that means a lot!

I'm hopefully gonna get a break in the summer. School is just...not fun.

Oof

Your school ends soon, right? (Now I think I might be completely wrong) Get some sleep! Go for a walk! Scream into a pillow! *hugs a lot* We love you!!!

Posted
8 minutes ago, Ink and Embers said:

Oof

Your school ends soon, right? (Now I think I might be completely wrong) Get some sleep! Go for a walk! Scream into a pillow! *hugs a lot* We love you!!!

My school ends...eventually. Before July.

Get some sleep? Why, when you have Sanderson??!!!

Scream into a pillow? I do that, when my sisters' heads are under it. (They think they can surprise me. Wrong.) Speaking of sisters I got one of them to read the first 3 chapters of Mistborn---we'll see if it becomes more.

999 comments Ink!

 

Posted
47 minutes ago, NerdSandwich said:

My school ends...eventually. Before July.

Get some sleep? Why, when you have Sanderson??!!!

Scream into a pillow? I do that, when my sisters' heads are under it. (They think they can surprise me. Wrong.) Speaking of sisters I got one of them to read the first 3 chapters of Mistborn---we'll see if it becomes more.

999 comments Ink!

 

Well ... about a month left, I guess? Take care! And good luck converting your sister to Sanderson, she has no idea what she's in for....

1001!!! Awesome!!!! Thanks for pointing it out; I wouldn't have noticed otherwise!!!!

Posted

I've been here for longer than you and I don't even have 1000 lol

Although most of my posts are in the forum games.
Update: Bribed her to read the entirety of Mistborn 

I ignore her during swim team which I'm apparently doing

I pulled a Chips

(ooh something random that I totally have time for sign me up)

Posted
2 hours ago, NerdSandwich said:

I've been here for longer than you and I don't even have 1000 lol

Although most of my posts are in the forum games.
Update: Bribed her to read the entirety of Mistborn 

I ignore her during swim team which I'm apparently doing

I pulled a Chips

(ooh something random that I totally have time for sign me up)

I

What

I understood maybe 50% of that

Congratulations on recruiting another cultist; what's pulling a Chips? (I assume it's a reference to ChipsAHoid? Disappearing?)

Posted

Doing something random that I totally have time for.

Chips signs up for whatever he sees

Well that's what it feels like anyway

Plus, I'm a terrible swimmer

Posted
On 5/22/2026 at 6:08 PM, NerdSandwich said:

Doing something random that I totally have time for.

Chips signs up for whatever he sees

Well that's what it feels like anyway

Plus, I'm a terrible swimmer

Well, good luck? Try not to drown, literally and metaphorically?

Posted
46 minutes ago, NerdSandwich said:

No promises.

I swallow the pool when I attempt butterfly

Ah yes, butterfly *shudders*

I can go along swimming butterfly but also always go down (I'm not a very good swimmer). What's your favourite stroke?

Posted

Breastroke probably because I swallow the least water.
I think I'm technically best at freestyle though.
Although just not good in general

EXCEPT AT KICKING

I cream everyone

Posted
32 minutes ago, NerdSandwich said:

Breastroke probably because I swallow the least water.
I think I'm technically best at freestyle though.
Although just not good in general

EXCEPT AT KICKING

I cream everyone

Lol neat!! I'm awful at breastroke (and general swimming) but marginally better at front crawl. I cannot tread water for the life of me though.

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